Comments received on poems by Demar Desu
I love my wife
sorenbarrett said:
A clever use of language to make an important point. Language quietly colors the way we see the world and my does imply ownership, a concept that shouldn\'t apply in relationships. Nicely written
December 30th, 2024 04:42
sorenbarrett said:
A clever use of language to make an important point. Language quietly colors the way we see the world and my does imply ownership, a concept that shouldn\'t apply in relationships. Nicely written
December 30th, 2024 04:42
beauty in front of me
sorenbarrett said:
A guy is a dog and it would not be normal not to look. A fun read
December 27th, 2024 12:02
sorenbarrett said:
A guy is a dog and it would not be normal not to look. A fun read
December 27th, 2024 12:02
The Problem of Monogamy
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Very thought-provoking write, my friend...and I see what you did in terms of juxtaposition...a poem on the problem of polyamory and a follow up on the problem of monogamy. It makes for a neat dialogue between the two poems and the issues that may arise in the two forms of marital relations and customs. Brilliantly done, my friend! 🌹👏
December 26th, 2024 16:48
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Very thought-provoking write, my friend...and I see what you did in terms of juxtaposition...a poem on the problem of polyamory and a follow up on the problem of monogamy. It makes for a neat dialogue between the two poems and the issues that may arise in the two forms of marital relations and customs. Brilliantly done, my friend! 🌹👏
December 26th, 2024 16:48
The Problem of Monogamy
sorenbarrett said:
A very poignant, write Humans were not meant to be monogamous. This was forced upon a by society, religion and personal need for domination. It is a beautiful thing when given freely but ugly when demanded.
December 26th, 2024 14:31
sorenbarrett said:
A very poignant, write Humans were not meant to be monogamous. This was forced upon a by society, religion and personal need for domination. It is a beautiful thing when given freely but ugly when demanded.
December 26th, 2024 14:31
The Problem of Monogamy
Cassie58 said:
Ah love, the many facets of it. You raise some interesting points here in your lines about monogamy Demar Desu. All I can say is that infidelity causes massive heartbreak. All the best.
December 26th, 2024 13:25
Cassie58 said:
Ah love, the many facets of it. You raise some interesting points here in your lines about monogamy Demar Desu. All I can say is that infidelity causes massive heartbreak. All the best.
December 26th, 2024 13:25
washing dishes
arqios said:
no wash, no eat,
no wash, no cook
no wash, no sanitise
yin-yang indeed
December 26th, 2024 03:57
arqios said:
no wash, no eat,
no wash, no cook
no wash, no sanitise
yin-yang indeed
December 26th, 2024 03:57
The Problem of Polyamory
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Of course, this is my own cultural opinion I am throwing out there, but me too, brother! One is more than enough! Well written and Merry Christmas, you’re not married 10 times over! 🤣🎄🎁
December 25th, 2024 08:03
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Of course, this is my own cultural opinion I am throwing out there, but me too, brother! One is more than enough! Well written and Merry Christmas, you’re not married 10 times over! 🤣🎄🎁
December 25th, 2024 08:03
The Problem of Polyamory
sorenbarrett said:
Clever write and fun read. Well done
December 25th, 2024 03:28
sorenbarrett said:
Clever write and fun read. Well done
December 25th, 2024 03:28
washing dishes
Tristan Robert Lange said:
The metaphor works! Very well! Another brilliant poem in its brevity, bro!
December 24th, 2024 11:14
Tristan Robert Lange said:
The metaphor works! Very well! Another brilliant poem in its brevity, bro!
December 24th, 2024 11:14
washing dishes
sorenbarrett said:
And so it is in all things the good the bad and the ugly. A fun read
December 24th, 2024 10:22
sorenbarrett said:
And so it is in all things the good the bad and the ugly. A fun read
December 24th, 2024 10:22
United Health Death
sorenbarrett said:
It is difficult to stop the machinery of society and not even death can get in its way. A poignant write
December 23rd, 2024 11:28
sorenbarrett said:
It is difficult to stop the machinery of society and not even death can get in its way. A poignant write
December 23rd, 2024 11:28
United Health Death
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Spot on, friend. Spot on! The freshest take on this tragic event yet! Wake up people! 🌹👏
December 23rd, 2024 10:16
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Spot on, friend. Spot on! The freshest take on this tragic event yet! Wake up people! 🌹👏
December 23rd, 2024 10:16
words unsaid
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Totally get this! Hear hear! Well done! 🌹👏
December 23rd, 2024 09:44
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Totally get this! Hear hear! Well done! 🌹👏
December 23rd, 2024 09:44
words unsaid
sorenbarrett said:
I thought for sure that the last line would not rhyme. A fun poem of philisophical questions that provoke thought. Lovely
December 23rd, 2024 03:55
sorenbarrett said:
I thought for sure that the last line would not rhyme. A fun poem of philisophical questions that provoke thought. Lovely
December 23rd, 2024 03:55
words unsaid
arqios said:
sigh. Totally get you…. Got a rising pile of poems that await their opportunity, among other things. Best of luck on your journeys!
December 23rd, 2024 02:58
arqios said:
sigh. Totally get you…. Got a rising pile of poems that await their opportunity, among other things. Best of luck on your journeys!
December 23rd, 2024 02:58
ignorance among ignorance
Tristan Robert Lange said:
This is so Socratic, it makes me smile. */Nervously looks around for hemlock/* Whew, all in the clear! LOL! Seriously, this is ABSOLUTELY the first sign of wisdom! 💯 Well done, bro! 🌹👏
December 22nd, 2024 07:15
Tristan Robert Lange said:
This is so Socratic, it makes me smile. */Nervously looks around for hemlock/* Whew, all in the clear! LOL! Seriously, this is ABSOLUTELY the first sign of wisdom! 💯 Well done, bro! 🌹👏
December 22nd, 2024 07:15
ignorance among ignorance
sorenbarrett said:
A wise statement put in senryu form with so much said in so few words. Lovely!
December 22nd, 2024 03:34
sorenbarrett said:
A wise statement put in senryu form with so much said in so few words. Lovely!
December 22nd, 2024 03:34
Poverty & Peace
TobaniNataiella said:
Poverty heightens resentment, wealth reduces opposition, enjoyed the read
December 21st, 2024 01:54
TobaniNataiella said:
Poverty heightens resentment, wealth reduces opposition, enjoyed the read
December 21st, 2024 01:54
Poverty & Peace
sorenbarrett said:
A true statement put in plain words, Well written,
December 20th, 2024 19:58
sorenbarrett said:
A true statement put in plain words, Well written,
December 20th, 2024 19:58
Poverty & Peace
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Ah...yes...how power affords the privilege of \"peace\". Not a lasting peace of course...and it is only ever a \"peace\" for some, always maintained by force or the threat of force...but yeah. Your poem here, bro 🤯 Well done! 🌹👏
December 20th, 2024 18:31
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Ah...yes...how power affords the privilege of \"peace\". Not a lasting peace of course...and it is only ever a \"peace\" for some, always maintained by force or the threat of force...but yeah. Your poem here, bro 🤯 Well done! 🌹👏
December 20th, 2024 18:31
conservation of momentum
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hahaha! You know the rules...and of course...rules are made to be broken! Love that spirit bro! I also love this haiku and agree with your assessment that nothing is outside of nature. Just because something is beyond our understanding does not mean it is unnatural. So yeah...💯 Well put. Now, keep breaking those fucking rules! LOL!
December 19th, 2024 16:15
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hahaha! You know the rules...and of course...rules are made to be broken! Love that spirit bro! I also love this haiku and agree with your assessment that nothing is outside of nature. Just because something is beyond our understanding does not mean it is unnatural. So yeah...💯 Well put. Now, keep breaking those fucking rules! LOL!
December 19th, 2024 16:15
conservation of momentum
TobaniNataiella said:
Interesting read, we should behave as we are all one, but do we?, enjoyed the read
December 19th, 2024 14:37
TobaniNataiella said:
Interesting read, we should behave as we are all one, but do we?, enjoyed the read
December 19th, 2024 14:37
conservation of momentum
sorenbarrett said:
You have a good point and I agree categories are made by man and to be broken. A marvelous Haiku
December 19th, 2024 14:25
sorenbarrett said:
You have a good point and I agree categories are made by man and to be broken. A marvelous Haiku
December 19th, 2024 14:25
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