Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
Regeneration
dusk arising said:
Excellent choice of picture to accompany your words. Yes, slowly read a peace descends just as it would in the woodland pictured.
You really have captured the healing presence there is in the calm natural peace of such environs.
Into my favourites - that my mind shall be taken to the spirit place of inner peace and be refreshed.
June 14th, 2022 05:41
dusk arising said:
Excellent choice of picture to accompany your words. Yes, slowly read a peace descends just as it would in the woodland pictured.
You really have captured the healing presence there is in the calm natural peace of such environs.
Into my favourites - that my mind shall be taken to the spirit place of inner peace and be refreshed.
June 14th, 2022 05:41
Regeneration
L. B. Mek said:
(well, dear fay
you\'ve bestowed upon me
more inspiration and thus
these words below, blossomed
into existence
I\'ll thank you for the millionth time
with the same passion and humility
I had, when I thanked you
the very first time
as-ever, I bow
to your far - far, Superior
Guiding, talent
oh, most cherished Poet!)
\'induced to feel, faint
innate
our endless lament, of
cruel fate
as our journey\'s end;
serendipitous
mercy, of happenstance
destiny
as our self-tripping, mistakes
bereft
alone on our knees, before
wilderness
as callous as those, who
inflicted
our bruises and thus
unknowingly
freed us, gifted us
ethereal
rainbows of sunlight, delight
as Aurora
after life\'s blindsided, flash storms
delivering
us yield for our survival and belief
in a better
somewhere, existing beneath
trees
of rooted potential, in each and every
breath
we sip in defiance - in, hope
in choosing
to fight, to strive and Bravely
live...!\'
June 14th, 2022 05:20
L. B. Mek said:
(well, dear fay
you\'ve bestowed upon me
more inspiration and thus
these words below, blossomed
into existence
I\'ll thank you for the millionth time
with the same passion and humility
I had, when I thanked you
the very first time
as-ever, I bow
to your far - far, Superior
Guiding, talent
oh, most cherished Poet!)
\'induced to feel, faint
innate
our endless lament, of
cruel fate
as our journey\'s end;
serendipitous
mercy, of happenstance
destiny
as our self-tripping, mistakes
bereft
alone on our knees, before
wilderness
as callous as those, who
inflicted
our bruises and thus
unknowingly
freed us, gifted us
ethereal
rainbows of sunlight, delight
as Aurora
after life\'s blindsided, flash storms
delivering
us yield for our survival and belief
in a better
somewhere, existing beneath
trees
of rooted potential, in each and every
breath
we sip in defiance - in, hope
in choosing
to fight, to strive and Bravely
live...!\'
June 14th, 2022 05:20
Scaled
MendedFences27 said:
Love can conquer many things, and walls are the least to fall. Walls are inherently evil, when constructed through hate. None have ever accomplished their intended purpose, not Hadrian\'s Wall, nor the Great Walls of China, not the Berlin Wall.
Your poem suggests exactly why they failed. Love. - Phil A,
June 11th, 2022 19:03
MendedFences27 said:
Love can conquer many things, and walls are the least to fall. Walls are inherently evil, when constructed through hate. None have ever accomplished their intended purpose, not Hadrian\'s Wall, nor the Great Walls of China, not the Berlin Wall.
Your poem suggests exactly why they failed. Love. - Phil A,
June 11th, 2022 19:03
Scaled
orchidee said:
Good write Fay.
The \'scale\' - font size, or rather spacing, of my poems has gone funny. Not fixed it yet.
June 11th, 2022 12:43
orchidee said:
Good write Fay.
The \'scale\' - font size, or rather spacing, of my poems has gone funny. Not fixed it yet.
June 11th, 2022 12:43
Scaled
Neville said:
ah\' but ya can\'t keep a good man down ...................................... x
June 11th, 2022 06:52
Neville said:
ah\' but ya can\'t keep a good man down ...................................... x
June 11th, 2022 06:52
Scaled
dusk arising said:
\"Too true\" he shouted over a wall thick and high, long overgrown with brambles of neglect.
June 11th, 2022 06:20
dusk arising said:
\"Too true\" he shouted over a wall thick and high, long overgrown with brambles of neglect.
June 11th, 2022 06:20
Scaled
Morwenna said:
I love this use of the ambiguity in the concept of alteration - yours is a challenge to Shakespeare\'s. I like the fortress allegory and the idea that the castle falling can be a very good thing.
June 11th, 2022 06:06
Morwenna said:
I love this use of the ambiguity in the concept of alteration - yours is a challenge to Shakespeare\'s. I like the fortress allegory and the idea that the castle falling can be a very good thing.
June 11th, 2022 06:06
Yield
L. B. Mek said:
or at least we hope, so
but
even in that hope, their
is yield
and as for debt, until
acknowledged
only exists, in our
rear view mirror realities
while we
were gifted our own two feet
to traverse our fates...
(wise words, dear Fay
and I\'m drawn to that image
especially its horizontal, significance
\'equality\' as a life policy
to love\'s empowering
shared-independence, mentality)
thank you!
June 10th, 2022 06:01
L. B. Mek said:
or at least we hope, so
but
even in that hope, their
is yield
and as for debt, until
acknowledged
only exists, in our
rear view mirror realities
while we
were gifted our own two feet
to traverse our fates...
(wise words, dear Fay
and I\'m drawn to that image
especially its horizontal, significance
\'equality\' as a life policy
to love\'s empowering
shared-independence, mentality)
thank you!
June 10th, 2022 06:01
Yield
Morwenna said:
Some sweet memories here - especially when there was no promised dependence and so no bitter after-taste!
June 10th, 2022 05:01
Morwenna said:
Some sweet memories here - especially when there was no promised dependence and so no bitter after-taste!
June 10th, 2022 05:01
Yield
Neville said:
I bow before thy mighty pen dear Lady Fay .............. and true .... x
June 10th, 2022 04:30
Neville said:
I bow before thy mighty pen dear Lady Fay .............. and true .... x
June 10th, 2022 04:30
Yield
orchidee said:
I yield, and give in, surrender, lay down my life (no need to go that far, you\'re just being a drama queen, says Fido!) and say:
Good write Fay. Not that anything was stopping me saying that in the first place. lol.
June 10th, 2022 03:10
orchidee said:
I yield, and give in, surrender, lay down my life (no need to go that far, you\'re just being a drama queen, says Fido!) and say:
Good write Fay. Not that anything was stopping me saying that in the first place. lol.
June 10th, 2022 03:10
Awayness
MendedFences27 said:
I too have experienced \"Awayness,\" and with it the pain. Mine, occurred at an airport. Same pain, different train. I knew mine was right and pursued it. Now, for the happy ending, going on 52 years of Love. Your poem brought back memories of those early days. Thank you for posting. A new Fav for me. - Phil A.
June 9th, 2022 17:32
MendedFences27 said:
I too have experienced \"Awayness,\" and with it the pain. Mine, occurred at an airport. Same pain, different train. I knew mine was right and pursued it. Now, for the happy ending, going on 52 years of Love. Your poem brought back memories of those early days. Thank you for posting. A new Fav for me. - Phil A.
June 9th, 2022 17:32
Awayness
dusk arising said:
As a youngster I was crazy about trains and spent a lot of time on railway stations. Your words evoke memories of scenes so often seen when I was too young to understand the feelings. Seeing the aftermath of that disappearing train.
June 9th, 2022 09:26
dusk arising said:
As a youngster I was crazy about trains and spent a lot of time on railway stations. Your words evoke memories of scenes so often seen when I was too young to understand the feelings. Seeing the aftermath of that disappearing train.
June 9th, 2022 09:26
Awayness
arqios said:
That platform, in any town and any country… that moment of parting stains. Poignant and raw. Thanks Fay for sharing. /Rik.
June 9th, 2022 08:45
arqios said:
That platform, in any town and any country… that moment of parting stains. Poignant and raw. Thanks Fay for sharing. /Rik.
June 9th, 2022 08:45
Awayness
Neville said:
I can see & feel myself standing on that platform Fay and more than just once or twice .. minus the floppy hat, shoulder bag and pink skirt, of course ... x
June 9th, 2022 08:25
Neville said:
I can see & feel myself standing on that platform Fay and more than just once or twice .. minus the floppy hat, shoulder bag and pink skirt, of course ... x
June 9th, 2022 08:25
Awayness
L. B. Mek said:
\'Love blurs by acceptance of tear-filling eyes.\'
I could spend a day, meditating
and contemplating
the everyday utility and wisdom
of this line
and it would still, be a useful day
an investment
to the future me, I yearn to cultivate
eventually..
\'Seared straws of comfort clutch need\'s dying spark.\'
again n again
you awe me, with your Poetry
dear Fay..
I read and learn, gratefully
June 9th, 2022 06:09
L. B. Mek said:
\'Love blurs by acceptance of tear-filling eyes.\'
I could spend a day, meditating
and contemplating
the everyday utility and wisdom
of this line
and it would still, be a useful day
an investment
to the future me, I yearn to cultivate
eventually..
\'Seared straws of comfort clutch need\'s dying spark.\'
again n again
you awe me, with your Poetry
dear Fay..
I read and learn, gratefully
June 9th, 2022 06:09
Awayness
orchidee said:
I have come back-ness to this site (that\'s not a word, Orchi. lol) to say a fine poem Fay.
June 9th, 2022 05:41
orchidee said:
I have come back-ness to this site (that\'s not a word, Orchi. lol) to say a fine poem Fay.
June 9th, 2022 05:41
Gone
MendedFences27 said:
A sad but true image and allegory, of receding tides and love lost. Loved, \"her thoughts tun to gone embraces, \"As life\'s rollers drag mood heedlessly.\" The sea is such a massive force it\'s no wonder it can remind one of a lost love, which often times is a massive loss. The pain will also be of great magnitude. Just a lovely poem, Fay. - Phil A.
June 8th, 2022 14:10
MendedFences27 said:
A sad but true image and allegory, of receding tides and love lost. Loved, \"her thoughts tun to gone embraces, \"As life\'s rollers drag mood heedlessly.\" The sea is such a massive force it\'s no wonder it can remind one of a lost love, which often times is a massive loss. The pain will also be of great magnitude. Just a lovely poem, Fay. - Phil A.
June 8th, 2022 14:10
Gone
orchidee said:
I\'m glad this fine poem\'s not gone!
Where do poems go when \'archived\'? Into some dark abyss?! lol.
June 8th, 2022 10:16
orchidee said:
I\'m glad this fine poem\'s not gone!
Where do poems go when \'archived\'? Into some dark abyss?! lol.
June 8th, 2022 10:16
Gone
dusk arising said:
The rattling bones cry of pebbles neath retiring waves mock the death of shared fulfillment as the unceasing ocean crash tells \"life must go on\".
Once again your words took me to a lonely place in time upon a beach... such a grand place to come to terms with our lives.
A place I\'d like to be taken to again and again, what better reason for including in my favourites.
June 8th, 2022 05:17
dusk arising said:
The rattling bones cry of pebbles neath retiring waves mock the death of shared fulfillment as the unceasing ocean crash tells \"life must go on\".
Once again your words took me to a lonely place in time upon a beach... such a grand place to come to terms with our lives.
A place I\'d like to be taken to again and again, what better reason for including in my favourites.
June 8th, 2022 05:17
Gone
Neville said:
the title say\'s it all .. and what follows in the massive wake that trails behind it is .. as far as poetry is concerned, awesome ........................... Neville
June 8th, 2022 04:05
Neville said:
the title say\'s it all .. and what follows in the massive wake that trails behind it is .. as far as poetry is concerned, awesome ........................... Neville
June 8th, 2022 04:05
Performance.
Goldfinch60 said:
Each days performance ends with such wonderful beauty as shown in your words Fay.
Andy
June 8th, 2022 00:15
Goldfinch60 said:
Each days performance ends with such wonderful beauty as shown in your words Fay.
Andy
June 8th, 2022 00:15
Performance.
MendedFences27 said:
I think Sunset is the most beautiful part of a day. The Sun can play many a different \"Performance\" and create lots of unusual skylines, and when it plays over water it becomes more mysterious.
A wonderful poem Fay. I liked \"lights lacy fingers.\" The Sun setting brings color variations and paints some lovely and sometimes spooky images as it brings on the night. - Phil A.
June 7th, 2022 21:01
MendedFences27 said:
I think Sunset is the most beautiful part of a day. The Sun can play many a different \"Performance\" and create lots of unusual skylines, and when it plays over water it becomes more mysterious.
A wonderful poem Fay. I liked \"lights lacy fingers.\" The Sun setting brings color variations and paints some lovely and sometimes spooky images as it brings on the night. - Phil A.
June 7th, 2022 21:01
Performance.
L. B. Mek said:
\'Glow drifts and unreal entrances\'
such a vivid reading experience
so beautifully worded, yet again..
thank you! dear Fay
June 7th, 2022 04:57
L. B. Mek said:
\'Glow drifts and unreal entrances\'
such a vivid reading experience
so beautifully worded, yet again..
thank you! dear Fay
June 7th, 2022 04:57
Performance.
Neville said:
outa worldly .. that\'s wot this is dear lady Fay and nothing short of it .. seriously disorientating in the nicest and most pleasurable of ways .. well almost .. I\'ve not long had my breakfast porridge and I already feel ready to go to bed again ..... x
June 7th, 2022 03:36
Neville said:
outa worldly .. that\'s wot this is dear lady Fay and nothing short of it .. seriously disorientating in the nicest and most pleasurable of ways .. well almost .. I\'ve not long had my breakfast porridge and I already feel ready to go to bed again ..... x
June 7th, 2022 03:36
Performance.
dusk arising said:
I felt the end of day mood and recalled the sounds of sunset through into twilight as the dusk lifts from the land. Singular bird cries and furtive shufflings befor the night bids me leave.
June 7th, 2022 03:30
dusk arising said:
I felt the end of day mood and recalled the sounds of sunset through into twilight as the dusk lifts from the land. Singular bird cries and furtive shufflings befor the night bids me leave.
June 7th, 2022 03:30
Recalling
Neville said:
Like I have said, and so many times before, you have such a way with words our Fay .. I shall never tire of them I\'m sure .................... Neville x
June 6th, 2022 10:58
Neville said:
Like I have said, and so many times before, you have such a way with words our Fay .. I shall never tire of them I\'m sure .................... Neville x
June 6th, 2022 10:58
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