Falling, Failing
arqios said:

Hearing “Falling, Failing” as a song changes the feel completely. It’s not just a confession in ink, it’s a lived moment in sound.
The steady, blues‑tinged groove gives the verses a weary sway, like someone nursing a drink at closing time, while the chorus lands like a release: raw, simple, and aching in its repetition. The bridge, with “Your silence shocks me, like a violent shove”, cuts through the smoothness with a jolt, and in performance it feels like the emotional peak before sliding back into that resigned, late‑night refrain. It’s the kind of song you can imagine echoing in a dim bar, where the audience feels every drop of that slow fall.

September 5th, 2025 23:58

Falling, Failing
NinjaGirl said:

This is so lovely. I find it difficult to separate music from poetry...they were meant to be together it seems. Well done!

September 5th, 2025 14:20

Falling, Failing
Friendship said:

The poem explores themes of heartbreak, longing, and emotional turmoil in the context of a romantic relationship that is fading. It conveys a sense of desperation and a yearning for reconnection, highlighting the pain that often accompanies love. Yet it deals with feelings of loneliness and sadness, as the speaker grapples with the decline of a once-strong relationship. It reflects on the struggle to cope with love\'s challenges and the desire to rekindle a lost connection.

September 5th, 2025 10:51

Falling, Failing
sorenbarrett said:

Another good song I would love to hear. Well done Tristan

September 5th, 2025 08:13

To Death I Am Bound
Friendship said:

This poem conveys a profound emotional drain and a sense of isolation in their struggles, leaving them feeling that there are no solutions to their pain. The poet includes themes of existential crisis, the burden of unanswered questions, and a disconnection from faith and spiritual support, as represented by the \"angels,\" \"saints,\" and \"the church.\" very heavy on my heart. Well written my friend,

September 4th, 2025 18:43

To Death I Am Bound
NinjaGirl said:

Death is so imminent, and we know its destiny. That often either brings hope or despair. Well-written poem from many years ago!

September 4th, 2025 11:04

To Death I Am Bound
Priya Tomar said:

Well woven ....
Very nice...

September 4th, 2025 09:17

Bird\'s Eye View
rebellion_in_sanity said:

At times those not said become vivid with those that are said. Perhaps, I didn\'t make sense.

Loved it!

September 4th, 2025 03:33

Bird\'s Eye View
NinjaGirl said:

Seems like a good spot for inspiration, love it!

September 3rd, 2025 12:10

Bird\'s Eye View
sorenbarrett said:

Beautiful and scenic and I am left wondering if those vultures circling have a meaning. Gettysburg the battlefield and a cemetary come to mind.

September 3rd, 2025 09:04

The Obscuration of Salvation
Jerry Reynolds said:

A fine write, Tristan. Mountains and large rocks will make you feel like something is there other than you.

September 2nd, 2025 15:55

The Obscuration of Salvation
Teddy.15 said:

I visit places like this in the Casentino mountains and forests close to Florence, there is a very strange oura in some places. A wonderful powerful write. 🌹

September 2nd, 2025 12:07

The Obscuration of Salvation
sorenbarrett said:

So much history in rocks that have seen with blind eyes more still. Some see as evil others see as nature all one and the same beauty and virtue. Nicely done my friend

September 2nd, 2025 08:45

The Window
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September 2nd, 2025 01:16

Unknown
Neville said:



probably my greatest fear .. I think its one of the main reasons I write & always carry a notepad with me and my name scrawled all over the front .. 🖤🐦‍⬛🐈‍⬛👍

September 2nd, 2025 00:20