Comments received on poems by Tristan Robert Lange
The Dastardly Dell of Death
Neville said:
an image captured perfectly in words .. I had an idea write from the off .. from the very first introductory two lines in fact .. Neville
March 12th, 2025 04:29
Neville said:
an image captured perfectly in words .. I had an idea write from the off .. from the very first introductory two lines in fact .. Neville
March 12th, 2025 04:29
Bed Dread
Cheeky Missy said:
No.... that\'s actually NOT quite true, but I\'m a woman and shouldn\'t \"teach\" a man. Let me leave it at that. Most superbly rendered in sheer perfection with excellent imagery and a fitly haunting, yes damning, poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
March 11th, 2025 23:20
Cheeky Missy said:
No.... that\'s actually NOT quite true, but I\'m a woman and shouldn\'t \"teach\" a man. Let me leave it at that. Most superbly rendered in sheer perfection with excellent imagery and a fitly haunting, yes damning, poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
March 11th, 2025 23:20
Adoration\'s Eyes
Cheeky Missy said:
Whoa! You literally had me reeling thanks to using the same image yet paring it so deliciously with a more apt delineation than initially. Cull a low whistle, will you?! Well. Gorgeously rendered with superb imagery and an exquisite poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
March 11th, 2025 23:17
Cheeky Missy said:
Whoa! You literally had me reeling thanks to using the same image yet paring it so deliciously with a more apt delineation than initially. Cull a low whistle, will you?! Well. Gorgeously rendered with superb imagery and an exquisite poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
March 11th, 2025 23:17
The Dastardly Dell of Death
Cassie58 said:
I read this poem, researched the Holbein painting and reread the poem Tristan. You have truly excelled here. Such detail in the description, the imagery is graphic and your choice of language and the alliteration top notch. An exceptional write which left me in thought for sometime afterwards at the cruelty of our species, the suffering we cause and the fact that we are all going to die anyway. Haunting and masterful.
March 11th, 2025 14:13
Cassie58 said:
I read this poem, researched the Holbein painting and reread the poem Tristan. You have truly excelled here. Such detail in the description, the imagery is graphic and your choice of language and the alliteration top notch. An exceptional write which left me in thought for sometime afterwards at the cruelty of our species, the suffering we cause and the fact that we are all going to die anyway. Haunting and masterful.
March 11th, 2025 14:13
The Dastardly Dell of Death
orchidee said:
A description of KP there! Ohh, I love to \'hate\' her. Well, not hate exactly, just bring her down a peg or two. lol.
Hey, I avoided death. I was gonna end it all, but the train was cancelled. Doh! Behave, says Fido to me.
March 11th, 2025 11:40
orchidee said:
A description of KP there! Ohh, I love to \'hate\' her. Well, not hate exactly, just bring her down a peg or two. lol.
Hey, I avoided death. I was gonna end it all, but the train was cancelled. Doh! Behave, says Fido to me.
March 11th, 2025 11:40
The Dastardly Dell of Death
Poetic Licence said:
Dark, disturbing, haunting and very graphic imagery, and the conclusion rightly nothing or no one can avoid death, a brilliant write
March 11th, 2025 11:22
Poetic Licence said:
Dark, disturbing, haunting and very graphic imagery, and the conclusion rightly nothing or no one can avoid death, a brilliant write
March 11th, 2025 11:22
The Dastardly Dell of Death
sorenbarrett said:
Vivid and graphic this poem appears so literal and dark, Cold as a corpse and dark as rotting flesh in metaphor it sings out a dirge of lacrimosa for all living to hear. The last lines are masterful:
The Christ
Though worshipped as
God,
A dead man stiff as if artificially aborted from the womb
By a species dying to mercilessly mangle its own,
This boxed tomb a king’s throne,
Rotting flesh over bruised bone while lying stiff—alone—
A bed fit for a mocked king.
Who will join in on this kind of hymn
Devoid of the pomp and pomposity that Easter brings,
Where one must face the cold, stark
Truth
And in metaphor it is not just God that we make eternal but truth (our truth) Yet in the tomb it is as dead and the God.
March 11th, 2025 06:57
sorenbarrett said:
Vivid and graphic this poem appears so literal and dark, Cold as a corpse and dark as rotting flesh in metaphor it sings out a dirge of lacrimosa for all living to hear. The last lines are masterful:
The Christ
Though worshipped as
God,
A dead man stiff as if artificially aborted from the womb
By a species dying to mercilessly mangle its own,
This boxed tomb a king’s throne,
Rotting flesh over bruised bone while lying stiff—alone—
A bed fit for a mocked king.
Who will join in on this kind of hymn
Devoid of the pomp and pomposity that Easter brings,
Where one must face the cold, stark
Truth
And in metaphor it is not just God that we make eternal but truth (our truth) Yet in the tomb it is as dead and the God.
March 11th, 2025 06:57
The Withered Garden
Doggerel Dave said:
\'Give up - wasted too much time hunting the skull: not a good start for a promising alliance....lol
March 11th, 2025 01:15
Doggerel Dave said:
\'Give up - wasted too much time hunting the skull: not a good start for a promising alliance....lol
March 11th, 2025 01:15
Adoration\'s Eyes
Doggerel Dave said:
Still think it\'s Lust rather than Love........ if my memory serves me right....😅😂
March 11th, 2025 00:49
Doggerel Dave said:
Still think it\'s Lust rather than Love........ if my memory serves me right....😅😂
March 11th, 2025 00:49
Adoration\'s Eyes
Cassie58 said:
Well done you Tristan. The first time I think I have challenged a poet about a particular subject, and probably the last :) The painting by Pierre Auguste Cot, is beautiful. You have certainly achieved, as your earlier poem ending in a most sinister way. Now this has been penned in a most loving and sensual style without a trace of dark or sinister in which you excel. I enjoyed and appreciate this lovely composition and thank you kindly for taking up and delivering the challenge. All good wishes.
March 10th, 2025 20:56
Cassie58 said:
Well done you Tristan. The first time I think I have challenged a poet about a particular subject, and probably the last :) The painting by Pierre Auguste Cot, is beautiful. You have certainly achieved, as your earlier poem ending in a most sinister way. Now this has been penned in a most loving and sensual style without a trace of dark or sinister in which you excel. I enjoyed and appreciate this lovely composition and thank you kindly for taking up and delivering the challenge. All good wishes.
March 10th, 2025 20:56
Adoration\'s Eyes
Neville said:
Ticks all the write boxes for me .. and if I was you Tristan I would be feeling mighty pleased with myself and my pen had I poemed such a gem in a model of my own making .. I subsequently and unashamedly tug my forelock sir .. Neville
March 10th, 2025 14:21
Neville said:
Ticks all the write boxes for me .. and if I was you Tristan I would be feeling mighty pleased with myself and my pen had I poemed such a gem in a model of my own making .. I subsequently and unashamedly tug my forelock sir .. Neville
March 10th, 2025 14:21
Adoration\'s Eyes
orchidee said:
Ahh, glad you got time for \'tingles\' though - hopefully! heehee.
March 10th, 2025 11:29
orchidee said:
Ahh, glad you got time for \'tingles\' though - hopefully! heehee.
March 10th, 2025 11:29
Adoration\'s Eyes
Poetic Licence said:
Not sure i am old enough to read things like this!!!,very sensual and loving and enjoyable
March 10th, 2025 10:31
Poetic Licence said:
Not sure i am old enough to read things like this!!!,very sensual and loving and enjoyable
March 10th, 2025 10:31
Adoration\'s Eyes
sorenbarrett said:
Romantic, sensuous, erotic and loving. A most lovely love poem.
March 10th, 2025 08:09
sorenbarrett said:
Romantic, sensuous, erotic and loving. A most lovely love poem.
March 10th, 2025 08:09
anvil clouds and phantom corridors
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Dark, haunting and beautiful. Thoroughly enjoyed the read 🙏
March 9th, 2025 05:38
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Dark, haunting and beautiful. Thoroughly enjoyed the read 🙏
March 9th, 2025 05:38
Bed Dread
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Poetic exploration of absolute truth. Outstanding write🙏
March 7th, 2025 08:14
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Poetic exploration of absolute truth. Outstanding write🙏
March 7th, 2025 08:14
Bed Dread
Thomas W Case said:
Excellent. The meter and rhyme do the theme well.
March 5th, 2025 13:23
Thomas W Case said:
Excellent. The meter and rhyme do the theme well.
March 5th, 2025 13:23
Bed Dread
arqios said:
This spoke to me and brings that occasional visitor that will be called ‘night terror.’ So it isn’t insomnia, really… love it being called “bed dread.” 🙏🏻🕊
March 5th, 2025 07:44
arqios said:
This spoke to me and brings that occasional visitor that will be called ‘night terror.’ So it isn’t insomnia, really… love it being called “bed dread.” 🙏🏻🕊
March 5th, 2025 07:44
Bed Dread
orchidee said:
A comedy film says to a person who was presumed missing for some time, \'How did you find out you were not dead?\' The reply was, \'Well, I saw my picture in the newspaper\'. lol. The question is daft to start with, then comes the humorous reply.
March 5th, 2025 03:20
orchidee said:
A comedy film says to a person who was presumed missing for some time, \'How did you find out you were not dead?\' The reply was, \'Well, I saw my picture in the newspaper\'. lol. The question is daft to start with, then comes the humorous reply.
March 5th, 2025 03:20
Swinger\'s Springtime Surprise
Cassie58 said:
You have woven a wonderful story around a beautiful painting Tristan. You have an amazing talent. So much variety in your work. This form works so well here and your poem reads beautifully recited out loud. Fab poetry with great imagery, much enjoyed my friend.
March 5th, 2025 01:09
Cassie58 said:
You have woven a wonderful story around a beautiful painting Tristan. You have an amazing talent. So much variety in your work. This form works so well here and your poem reads beautifully recited out loud. Fab poetry with great imagery, much enjoyed my friend.
March 5th, 2025 01:09
Bed Dread
Doggerel Dave said:
Don\'t be like that, Tristan. Just say Stuffit more often - or \'Why should I care? why should I let it touch me?\' Archie Roach,(Lawrence Oliver) I think, in The Entertainer.
I read it three times because I was fascinated by the rhyme.... I know your message, but I\'ve reached the point where I\'m past caring...
Also endorse Soren\'s response here.
March 5th, 2025 00:41
Doggerel Dave said:
Don\'t be like that, Tristan. Just say Stuffit more often - or \'Why should I care? why should I let it touch me?\' Archie Roach,(Lawrence Oliver) I think, in The Entertainer.
I read it three times because I was fascinated by the rhyme.... I know your message, but I\'ve reached the point where I\'m past caring...
Also endorse Soren\'s response here.
March 5th, 2025 00:41
Bed Dread
Poetic Licence said:
This goes so many ways,certain people to certain things and feeling\'s are dead, the dreading of the end of the day and going to bed, because then the mind and demons come alive, enjoyed the read
March 4th, 2025 13:20
Poetic Licence said:
This goes so many ways,certain people to certain things and feeling\'s are dead, the dreading of the end of the day and going to bed, because then the mind and demons come alive, enjoyed the read
March 4th, 2025 13:20
Bed Dread
NinjaGirl said:
I love the rhyme aspect, and also your personal story that really shines through here! I personally get in bed to avoid existential dread--sleeping all my problems away--but I also understand the idea of reluctance, and not wanting to face the end of the day.
March 4th, 2025 12:57
NinjaGirl said:
I love the rhyme aspect, and also your personal story that really shines through here! I personally get in bed to avoid existential dread--sleeping all my problems away--but I also understand the idea of reluctance, and not wanting to face the end of the day.
March 4th, 2025 12:57
Bed Dread
sorenbarrett said:
So true peace only comes when one is dead but remember there are many walking that are dead. Dead to what goes on around them, dead to new ideas, dead to what is going on inside them, dead to morals and compassion. A fun but at the same time most mind provoking poem that hopefully awaken some that are sleeping and arouses from the dead some departed. Very nicely written my friend.
March 4th, 2025 11:20
sorenbarrett said:
So true peace only comes when one is dead but remember there are many walking that are dead. Dead to what goes on around them, dead to new ideas, dead to what is going on inside them, dead to morals and compassion. A fun but at the same time most mind provoking poem that hopefully awaken some that are sleeping and arouses from the dead some departed. Very nicely written my friend.
March 4th, 2025 11:20
Swinger\'s Springtime Surprise
Neville said:
Incredible skill and patience must surely be required to have completed this little beauty .. I am mighty impressed my friend and truly .. Neville
March 4th, 2025 04:15
Neville said:
Incredible skill and patience must surely be required to have completed this little beauty .. I am mighty impressed my friend and truly .. Neville
March 4th, 2025 04:15
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