Comments received on poems by Nicholas Browning
Not Too Sure Which One I\'ll Be
Night Owl said:
Yes, some days I feel purposeful and others, I want to run screaming into the woods... Either way here we all are-- and I really like your write...
March 13th, 2019 20:26
Night Owl said:
Yes, some days I feel purposeful and others, I want to run screaming into the woods... Either way here we all are-- and I really like your write...
March 13th, 2019 20:26
Ruins of the Phantasm
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
RUINS OF THE ILLUSION ~ IT HAPPENS EVERY DAY !
WOW NICK ~ This is a real SAGA ! Most Poems on MPS are very short ~ so this is refreshing ! Technically MPS is a Poetry Site so I prefer it when a STORY is presented in Free Verse (little or no rhyme) Poetic Form (finite lines & verses !). Love the PICTURE which complements the Story. It reminded me of Machu Picchu (Peru) which we have visited ~ AWESOME ~ A City lost in the Jungle ! Stanzas 1 - 5 Lead us to the Ruins of Neviltis ~ and they (The Sheep ?) start to excavate ! S 6&7. The find the KEY S 8. They (The Sheep ?) find the DOOR ! S 9. Walter dies S 10. JARED opens the DOOR ! S 11 & 12 JARED enters the DOOR and vanishes ! S 13 SF shift through SPACE & TIME ~ The Flock of Sheep are back in Place ! S 16. The appearance of the Hooded Brgrimed Figure wih Radient Eyes ! S 17. The CHIEF can only watch as the Swine fell one by one (Is this ANIMAL FARM ?) S 18 & 19 Death prevails !
Because we are both Scientists we love SF & Fantasy !
Thanks for sharing ~ much food for thought !
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA
March 13th, 2019 18:41
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
RUINS OF THE ILLUSION ~ IT HAPPENS EVERY DAY !
WOW NICK ~ This is a real SAGA ! Most Poems on MPS are very short ~ so this is refreshing ! Technically MPS is a Poetry Site so I prefer it when a STORY is presented in Free Verse (little or no rhyme) Poetic Form (finite lines & verses !). Love the PICTURE which complements the Story. It reminded me of Machu Picchu (Peru) which we have visited ~ AWESOME ~ A City lost in the Jungle ! Stanzas 1 - 5 Lead us to the Ruins of Neviltis ~ and they (The Sheep ?) start to excavate ! S 6&7. The find the KEY S 8. They (The Sheep ?) find the DOOR ! S 9. Walter dies S 10. JARED opens the DOOR ! S 11 & 12 JARED enters the DOOR and vanishes ! S 13 SF shift through SPACE & TIME ~ The Flock of Sheep are back in Place ! S 16. The appearance of the Hooded Brgrimed Figure wih Radient Eyes ! S 17. The CHIEF can only watch as the Swine fell one by one (Is this ANIMAL FARM ?) S 18 & 19 Death prevails !
Because we are both Scientists we love SF & Fantasy !
Thanks for sharing ~ much food for thought !
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA
March 13th, 2019 18:41
Ruins of the Phantasm
Nicholas Browning said:
Thanks very much! I\'m glad you read it through. And yeah, pretty much a bad hair day Haha
March 13th, 2019 14:28
Nicholas Browning said:
Thanks very much! I\'m glad you read it through. And yeah, pretty much a bad hair day Haha
March 13th, 2019 14:28
Ruins of the Phantasm
orchidee said:
A fine write NB. Now for my paraphrase of it: \'Having a bad-hair day?\' subtitled: \'They were not the happiest of bunnies!\' lol. Though it was an interesting day (or night) out for them.
March 13th, 2019 11:02
orchidee said:
A fine write NB. Now for my paraphrase of it: \'Having a bad-hair day?\' subtitled: \'They were not the happiest of bunnies!\' lol. Though it was an interesting day (or night) out for them.
March 13th, 2019 11:02
Festival of Lights
Neville said:
these words are indeed worth sharing and certainly worthy of more attention.... a little gift for everyone methinks... Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:44
Neville said:
these words are indeed worth sharing and certainly worthy of more attention.... a little gift for everyone methinks... Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:44
Sunlight
Neville said:
this is what I would call a wandering song or poem.. it should be taken slowly not hurried and should be glimpsed rather than stared at...rather like its namesake really.... enjoyed muchly.. Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:35
Neville said:
this is what I would call a wandering song or poem.. it should be taken slowly not hurried and should be glimpsed rather than stared at...rather like its namesake really.... enjoyed muchly.. Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:35
Ruins of the Phantasm
Michael Edwards said:
I\'ve dipped into it and from what I\'ve read thus far it\'s an engaging read - will certainly return when I have a little more time to spare to give it full justice.
March 13th, 2019 03:41
Michael Edwards said:
I\'ve dipped into it and from what I\'ve read thus far it\'s an engaging read - will certainly return when I have a little more time to spare to give it full justice.
March 13th, 2019 03:41
Ruins of the Phantasm
orchidee said:
I shall have to come back to this, when I have bit more time....
March 13th, 2019 02:33
orchidee said:
I shall have to come back to this, when I have bit more time....
March 13th, 2019 02:33
Festival of Lights
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING NICK ~ BRIAN here thanks for sharing your Poem ! Thanks for your comment on my response to Diamond about STRUCTURED & UNSTRUCTURED Poetry. Poetry is emotional and therefore ~ in a sense the SUBJECT is more important than the STRUCTURE ! In essence POETIC FORMS like SONNETS & HAIKU etc evolved to ameliorate the SUBJECT of the Poem. This led to the importance of Rhyme & Rhythm bcause early Poetry was Oral rather than written. Sagas would be repeated and memorised round the camp fire. We used to practice this when I was in the Scouts making up and reciting verses without ever writing them down. Limerics and folk poetry is a bit like this Simon & Garfunkel & Bob Dylan & John Denver are good examples of folk Poetry also Johnny Cash ~ Dolly Parton etc & Blue Grass & Country & Gospel it all starts out as reciable Poetry ! All those I have cited are excellent Poets as were the Beatles in the UK.
I like your Poem ~ which is (as you say) about finding meaning. Every stanza is essentially a QUATRIAN (even S 3.) which has a long first line ! There is a consistent Rhyme Pattern. S 1. xaxa S 2. xbxb S 3. (split first line) xcxc S 4. Is two doublets ddee S 5. xfxf S 6. xgxg Some of your Rhymes Stanzas 4 5 6 are half-rhymes (like PATH & GRASP) but this is good because a Good Poet should never sacrifice REASON for RHYME ! There is some underlying Rhythm making it easy to read ~ BUT more difficult to recite ! Look at Shakespeare or Longfellow or John Betjaman or Dylan or Robbie Burnes etc and you will see what I mean ! I do teach Poetry to Seniors so I am used to analysing Poetry & Blank Verse and I don\'t always PRACTICE what I PREACH. I am a Science Lecturer in a College. Shakespeare wrote naturally in IAMBIC PENTAMETER which is why his Plays are easy to learn & to recite and also sound so melodious !
You live in an interesting State ~ We like Bill Bryson who now lives in the UK. I have visited INDEPENDENCE with my Folks who knew People who moved to Tampa ~ to escape the SNOW !
Sorry to ramble on hope that all helps ~ keep posting ~ Please check our site. Angela is my Fiancee now in New Zealand on WORK EXCHANGE.
Blessings through Poetry ~ BRIAN (UK)
March 12th, 2019 19:09
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING NICK ~ BRIAN here thanks for sharing your Poem ! Thanks for your comment on my response to Diamond about STRUCTURED & UNSTRUCTURED Poetry. Poetry is emotional and therefore ~ in a sense the SUBJECT is more important than the STRUCTURE ! In essence POETIC FORMS like SONNETS & HAIKU etc evolved to ameliorate the SUBJECT of the Poem. This led to the importance of Rhyme & Rhythm bcause early Poetry was Oral rather than written. Sagas would be repeated and memorised round the camp fire. We used to practice this when I was in the Scouts making up and reciting verses without ever writing them down. Limerics and folk poetry is a bit like this Simon & Garfunkel & Bob Dylan & John Denver are good examples of folk Poetry also Johnny Cash ~ Dolly Parton etc & Blue Grass & Country & Gospel it all starts out as reciable Poetry ! All those I have cited are excellent Poets as were the Beatles in the UK.
I like your Poem ~ which is (as you say) about finding meaning. Every stanza is essentially a QUATRIAN (even S 3.) which has a long first line ! There is a consistent Rhyme Pattern. S 1. xaxa S 2. xbxb S 3. (split first line) xcxc S 4. Is two doublets ddee S 5. xfxf S 6. xgxg Some of your Rhymes Stanzas 4 5 6 are half-rhymes (like PATH & GRASP) but this is good because a Good Poet should never sacrifice REASON for RHYME ! There is some underlying Rhythm making it easy to read ~ BUT more difficult to recite ! Look at Shakespeare or Longfellow or John Betjaman or Dylan or Robbie Burnes etc and you will see what I mean ! I do teach Poetry to Seniors so I am used to analysing Poetry & Blank Verse and I don\'t always PRACTICE what I PREACH. I am a Science Lecturer in a College. Shakespeare wrote naturally in IAMBIC PENTAMETER which is why his Plays are easy to learn & to recite and also sound so melodious !
You live in an interesting State ~ We like Bill Bryson who now lives in the UK. I have visited INDEPENDENCE with my Folks who knew People who moved to Tampa ~ to escape the SNOW !
Sorry to ramble on hope that all helps ~ keep posting ~ Please check our site. Angela is my Fiancee now in New Zealand on WORK EXCHANGE.
Blessings through Poetry ~ BRIAN (UK)
March 12th, 2019 19:09
Sunlight
Neville said:
If truth is what you are seeking, as far as I am concerned.. the meaning can not be found elsewhere.. well writ young sir.. N
March 12th, 2019 17:43
Neville said:
If truth is what you are seeking, as far as I am concerned.. the meaning can not be found elsewhere.. well writ young sir.. N
March 12th, 2019 17:43
Not Too Sure Which One I\'ll Be
orchidee said:
And now you wrote a fine poem - so not entirely useless! (heehee).
February 28th, 2019 03:08
orchidee said:
And now you wrote a fine poem - so not entirely useless! (heehee).
February 28th, 2019 03:08
\"Pet Project\"
Neville said:
a certain melancholia weaves its way throughout this poem... yet it still feels comfortable here.. I dont mind admitting that I enjoyed the ride my friend... N
December 13th, 2018 17:39
Neville said:
a certain melancholia weaves its way throughout this poem... yet it still feels comfortable here.. I dont mind admitting that I enjoyed the ride my friend... N
December 13th, 2018 17:39
Telltale Signs of a Journey Undone
Michael Edwards said:
The message accompanying this is the saddest read of the day. Don\'t give up - you have a great pen as this posting shows - and if you do leave at least write the occasional piece as the mood takes you and post here to keep in touch.
September 19th, 2018 09:34
Michael Edwards said:
The message accompanying this is the saddest read of the day. Don\'t give up - you have a great pen as this posting shows - and if you do leave at least write the occasional piece as the mood takes you and post here to keep in touch.
September 19th, 2018 09:34
\"Pet Project\"
orchidee said:
I\'m an old spoilsport, ruining the heaviness of dark poems, by some daft (crass?) comment, such as: \'Oohh, sit down and we\'ll have a nice cuppa tea and slice of cake, and sort things out, if ya having a bad-hair day!\' heehee
September 11th, 2018 07:15
orchidee said:
I\'m an old spoilsport, ruining the heaviness of dark poems, by some daft (crass?) comment, such as: \'Oohh, sit down and we\'ll have a nice cuppa tea and slice of cake, and sort things out, if ya having a bad-hair day!\' heehee
September 11th, 2018 07:15
The Pariah
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A sublime abstract muse written in an interesting evocative style. Kudos.
So nice to read from your ink again, Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too.
September 6th, 2018 06:07
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A sublime abstract muse written in an interesting evocative style. Kudos.
So nice to read from your ink again, Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too.
September 6th, 2018 06:07
The Pariah
orchidee said:
Oops, this has appeared as a fine Greek poem. Be with ya in a couple of hours, after I\'ve translated it. I can, ya know. It need not stay \'all Greek\' to me! lol.
August 22nd, 2018 03:04
orchidee said:
Oops, this has appeared as a fine Greek poem. Be with ya in a couple of hours, after I\'ve translated it. I can, ya know. It need not stay \'all Greek\' to me! lol.
August 22nd, 2018 03:04
Sunlight
orchidee said:
You staying a while? You not popping your clogs yet?!
August 21st, 2018 01:23
orchidee said:
You staying a while? You not popping your clogs yet?!
August 21st, 2018 01:23
Irregular
onepauly said:
the first and second lines, and that word trance. I smoked a six inch joint sitting in the sand, and watch the waves crash into the rocks below.
it was very transcending.
July 20th, 2018 12:13
onepauly said:
the first and second lines, and that word trance. I smoked a six inch joint sitting in the sand, and watch the waves crash into the rocks below.
it was very transcending.
July 20th, 2018 12:13
Irregular
Stan Rodriguez said:
nicely written - nice imagery - strong - enjoyed your poem thanks for sharing. get them coming.
July 20th, 2018 10:47
Stan Rodriguez said:
nicely written - nice imagery - strong - enjoyed your poem thanks for sharing. get them coming.
July 20th, 2018 10:47
Irregular
orchidee said:
Coeee, that you in the pic, or some other guy?! A fine write N.
July 20th, 2018 09:42
orchidee said:
Coeee, that you in the pic, or some other guy?! A fine write N.
July 20th, 2018 09:42
Astral Days and Sunlit Nights
ZIGGY said:
hi no doubt your prowess in this piece it is easy to see the value of your thoughts read and enjoyed great write ,,,,zigs
June 18th, 2018 13:23
ZIGGY said:
hi no doubt your prowess in this piece it is easy to see the value of your thoughts read and enjoyed great write ,,,,zigs
June 18th, 2018 13:23
Put a Face to the Name
Goldfinch60 said:
very good write. It is amazing what the pen will write when put onto the page.
June 1st, 2018 00:52
Goldfinch60 said:
very good write. It is amazing what the pen will write when put onto the page.
June 1st, 2018 00:52
Put a Face to the Name
poetboy123 said:
A brilliant thought-provoking write, and it\'s nice to see you back as well!
May 31st, 2018 10:06
poetboy123 said:
A brilliant thought-provoking write, and it\'s nice to see you back as well!
May 31st, 2018 10:06
Ghost
Fay Slimm. said:
I was walking that pathway with you so clear your description of life in a typical city - thanks for sharing it Nicholas.
May 10th, 2018 16:43
Fay Slimm. said:
I was walking that pathway with you so clear your description of life in a typical city - thanks for sharing it Nicholas.
May 10th, 2018 16:43
Ghost
orchidee said:
Aww, did I say ya was dead?! But a shocker - a friend said to someone I know: \'Not seen ya for ages; thought ya was dead!\' Oohh. A fine write N.
May 10th, 2018 11:39
orchidee said:
Aww, did I say ya was dead?! But a shocker - a friend said to someone I know: \'Not seen ya for ages; thought ya was dead!\' Oohh. A fine write N.
May 10th, 2018 11:39
Ghost
Michael Edwards said:
So pleased you\'re not dead - I would miss your super work. A great bit of narrative poetry.
May 10th, 2018 11:12
Michael Edwards said:
So pleased you\'re not dead - I would miss your super work. A great bit of narrative poetry.
May 10th, 2018 11:12
Ghost
Lorna said:
This is very powerful Nicholas. I love the story it tells although a bit sad........
May 10th, 2018 07:39
Lorna said:
This is very powerful Nicholas. I love the story it tells although a bit sad........
May 10th, 2018 07:39
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