Comments received on poems by Nicholas Browning
Ruins of the Phantasm
Michael Edwards said:
I\'ve dipped into it and from what I\'ve read thus far it\'s an engaging read - will certainly return when I have a little more time to spare to give it full justice.
March 13th, 2019 03:41
Michael Edwards said:
I\'ve dipped into it and from what I\'ve read thus far it\'s an engaging read - will certainly return when I have a little more time to spare to give it full justice.
March 13th, 2019 03:41
Ruins of the Phantasm
orchidee said:
I shall have to come back to this, when I have bit more time....
March 13th, 2019 02:33
orchidee said:
I shall have to come back to this, when I have bit more time....
March 13th, 2019 02:33
Festival of Lights
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING NICK ~ BRIAN here thanks for sharing your Poem ! Thanks for your comment on my response to Diamond about STRUCTURED & UNSTRUCTURED Poetry. Poetry is emotional and therefore ~ in a sense the SUBJECT is more important than the STRUCTURE ! In essence POETIC FORMS like SONNETS & HAIKU etc evolved to ameliorate the SUBJECT of the Poem. This led to the importance of Rhyme & Rhythm bcause early Poetry was Oral rather than written. Sagas would be repeated and memorised round the camp fire. We used to practice this when I was in the Scouts making up and reciting verses without ever writing them down. Limerics and folk poetry is a bit like this Simon & Garfunkel & Bob Dylan & John Denver are good examples of folk Poetry also Johnny Cash ~ Dolly Parton etc & Blue Grass & Country & Gospel it all starts out as reciable Poetry ! All those I have cited are excellent Poets as were the Beatles in the UK.
I like your Poem ~ which is (as you say) about finding meaning. Every stanza is essentially a QUATRIAN (even S 3.) which has a long first line ! There is a consistent Rhyme Pattern. S 1. xaxa S 2. xbxb S 3. (split first line) xcxc S 4. Is two doublets ddee S 5. xfxf S 6. xgxg Some of your Rhymes Stanzas 4 5 6 are half-rhymes (like PATH & GRASP) but this is good because a Good Poet should never sacrifice REASON for RHYME ! There is some underlying Rhythm making it easy to read ~ BUT more difficult to recite ! Look at Shakespeare or Longfellow or John Betjaman or Dylan or Robbie Burnes etc and you will see what I mean ! I do teach Poetry to Seniors so I am used to analysing Poetry & Blank Verse and I don\'t always PRACTICE what I PREACH. I am a Science Lecturer in a College. Shakespeare wrote naturally in IAMBIC PENTAMETER which is why his Plays are easy to learn & to recite and also sound so melodious !
You live in an interesting State ~ We like Bill Bryson who now lives in the UK. I have visited INDEPENDENCE with my Folks who knew People who moved to Tampa ~ to escape the SNOW !
Sorry to ramble on hope that all helps ~ keep posting ~ Please check our site. Angela is my Fiancee now in New Zealand on WORK EXCHANGE.
Blessings through Poetry ~ BRIAN (UK)
March 12th, 2019 19:09
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING NICK ~ BRIAN here thanks for sharing your Poem ! Thanks for your comment on my response to Diamond about STRUCTURED & UNSTRUCTURED Poetry. Poetry is emotional and therefore ~ in a sense the SUBJECT is more important than the STRUCTURE ! In essence POETIC FORMS like SONNETS & HAIKU etc evolved to ameliorate the SUBJECT of the Poem. This led to the importance of Rhyme & Rhythm bcause early Poetry was Oral rather than written. Sagas would be repeated and memorised round the camp fire. We used to practice this when I was in the Scouts making up and reciting verses without ever writing them down. Limerics and folk poetry is a bit like this Simon & Garfunkel & Bob Dylan & John Denver are good examples of folk Poetry also Johnny Cash ~ Dolly Parton etc & Blue Grass & Country & Gospel it all starts out as reciable Poetry ! All those I have cited are excellent Poets as were the Beatles in the UK.
I like your Poem ~ which is (as you say) about finding meaning. Every stanza is essentially a QUATRIAN (even S 3.) which has a long first line ! There is a consistent Rhyme Pattern. S 1. xaxa S 2. xbxb S 3. (split first line) xcxc S 4. Is two doublets ddee S 5. xfxf S 6. xgxg Some of your Rhymes Stanzas 4 5 6 are half-rhymes (like PATH & GRASP) but this is good because a Good Poet should never sacrifice REASON for RHYME ! There is some underlying Rhythm making it easy to read ~ BUT more difficult to recite ! Look at Shakespeare or Longfellow or John Betjaman or Dylan or Robbie Burnes etc and you will see what I mean ! I do teach Poetry to Seniors so I am used to analysing Poetry & Blank Verse and I don\'t always PRACTICE what I PREACH. I am a Science Lecturer in a College. Shakespeare wrote naturally in IAMBIC PENTAMETER which is why his Plays are easy to learn & to recite and also sound so melodious !
You live in an interesting State ~ We like Bill Bryson who now lives in the UK. I have visited INDEPENDENCE with my Folks who knew People who moved to Tampa ~ to escape the SNOW !
Sorry to ramble on hope that all helps ~ keep posting ~ Please check our site. Angela is my Fiancee now in New Zealand on WORK EXCHANGE.
Blessings through Poetry ~ BRIAN (UK)
March 12th, 2019 19:09
Sunlight
Neville said:
If truth is what you are seeking, as far as I am concerned.. the meaning can not be found elsewhere.. well writ young sir.. N
March 12th, 2019 17:43
Neville said:
If truth is what you are seeking, as far as I am concerned.. the meaning can not be found elsewhere.. well writ young sir.. N
March 12th, 2019 17:43
Not Too Sure Which One I\'ll Be
orchidee said:
And now you wrote a fine poem - so not entirely useless! (heehee).
February 28th, 2019 03:08
orchidee said:
And now you wrote a fine poem - so not entirely useless! (heehee).
February 28th, 2019 03:08
\"Pet Project\"
Neville said:
a certain melancholia weaves its way throughout this poem... yet it still feels comfortable here.. I dont mind admitting that I enjoyed the ride my friend... N
December 13th, 2018 17:39
Neville said:
a certain melancholia weaves its way throughout this poem... yet it still feels comfortable here.. I dont mind admitting that I enjoyed the ride my friend... N
December 13th, 2018 17:39
Tabula Rasa
Fay Slimm. said:
Truths abound in this honest verse - - a false step is certainly not a failure
- - trying again is the answer to
the fact that \"everything changes\" - - thanks for this well-written reminder Nicolas --
December 13th, 2018 16:06
Fay Slimm. said:
Truths abound in this honest verse - - a false step is certainly not a failure
- - trying again is the answer to
the fact that \"everything changes\" - - thanks for this well-written reminder Nicolas --
December 13th, 2018 16:06
Tabula Rasa
Michael Edwards said:
A great read and so well written - much enjoyed.
December 13th, 2018 11:44
Michael Edwards said:
A great read and so well written - much enjoyed.
December 13th, 2018 11:44
Tabula Rasa
orchidee said:
A fine write N. Erm, someone tried to see what was in my head (let alone my heart). The answer was \'nothing\', or \'air\', maybe \'hot air\' of me waffling! heehee.
December 13th, 2018 02:46
orchidee said:
A fine write N. Erm, someone tried to see what was in my head (let alone my heart). The answer was \'nothing\', or \'air\', maybe \'hot air\' of me waffling! heehee.
December 13th, 2018 02:46
Telltale Signs of a Journey Undone
Michael Edwards said:
The message accompanying this is the saddest read of the day. Don\'t give up - you have a great pen as this posting shows - and if you do leave at least write the occasional piece as the mood takes you and post here to keep in touch.
September 19th, 2018 09:34
Michael Edwards said:
The message accompanying this is the saddest read of the day. Don\'t give up - you have a great pen as this posting shows - and if you do leave at least write the occasional piece as the mood takes you and post here to keep in touch.
September 19th, 2018 09:34
\"Pet Project\"
orchidee said:
I\'m an old spoilsport, ruining the heaviness of dark poems, by some daft (crass?) comment, such as: \'Oohh, sit down and we\'ll have a nice cuppa tea and slice of cake, and sort things out, if ya having a bad-hair day!\' heehee
September 11th, 2018 07:15
orchidee said:
I\'m an old spoilsport, ruining the heaviness of dark poems, by some daft (crass?) comment, such as: \'Oohh, sit down and we\'ll have a nice cuppa tea and slice of cake, and sort things out, if ya having a bad-hair day!\' heehee
September 11th, 2018 07:15
The Pariah
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A sublime abstract muse written in an interesting evocative style. Kudos.
So nice to read from your ink again, Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too.
September 6th, 2018 06:07
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A sublime abstract muse written in an interesting evocative style. Kudos.
So nice to read from your ink again, Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too.
September 6th, 2018 06:07
The Pariah
orchidee said:
Oops, this has appeared as a fine Greek poem. Be with ya in a couple of hours, after I\'ve translated it. I can, ya know. It need not stay \'all Greek\' to me! lol.
August 22nd, 2018 03:04
orchidee said:
Oops, this has appeared as a fine Greek poem. Be with ya in a couple of hours, after I\'ve translated it. I can, ya know. It need not stay \'all Greek\' to me! lol.
August 22nd, 2018 03:04
Sunlight
orchidee said:
You staying a while? You not popping your clogs yet?!
August 21st, 2018 01:23
orchidee said:
You staying a while? You not popping your clogs yet?!
August 21st, 2018 01:23
Irregular
onepauly said:
the first and second lines, and that word trance. I smoked a six inch joint sitting in the sand, and watch the waves crash into the rocks below.
it was very transcending.
July 20th, 2018 12:13
onepauly said:
the first and second lines, and that word trance. I smoked a six inch joint sitting in the sand, and watch the waves crash into the rocks below.
it was very transcending.
July 20th, 2018 12:13
Irregular
Stan Rodriguez said:
nicely written - nice imagery - strong - enjoyed your poem thanks for sharing. get them coming.
July 20th, 2018 10:47
Stan Rodriguez said:
nicely written - nice imagery - strong - enjoyed your poem thanks for sharing. get them coming.
July 20th, 2018 10:47
Irregular
orchidee said:
Coeee, that you in the pic, or some other guy?! A fine write N.
July 20th, 2018 09:42
orchidee said:
Coeee, that you in the pic, or some other guy?! A fine write N.
July 20th, 2018 09:42
Astral Days and Sunlit Nights
ZIGGY said:
hi no doubt your prowess in this piece it is easy to see the value of your thoughts read and enjoyed great write ,,,,zigs
June 18th, 2018 13:23
ZIGGY said:
hi no doubt your prowess in this piece it is easy to see the value of your thoughts read and enjoyed great write ,,,,zigs
June 18th, 2018 13:23
Put a Face to the Name
Goldfinch60 said:
very good write. It is amazing what the pen will write when put onto the page.
June 1st, 2018 00:52
Goldfinch60 said:
very good write. It is amazing what the pen will write when put onto the page.
June 1st, 2018 00:52
Put a Face to the Name
poetboy123 said:
A brilliant thought-provoking write, and it\'s nice to see you back as well!
May 31st, 2018 10:06
poetboy123 said:
A brilliant thought-provoking write, and it\'s nice to see you back as well!
May 31st, 2018 10:06
Ghost
Fay Slimm. said:
I was walking that pathway with you so clear your description of life in a typical city - thanks for sharing it Nicholas.
May 10th, 2018 16:43
Fay Slimm. said:
I was walking that pathway with you so clear your description of life in a typical city - thanks for sharing it Nicholas.
May 10th, 2018 16:43
Ghost
orchidee said:
Aww, did I say ya was dead?! But a shocker - a friend said to someone I know: \'Not seen ya for ages; thought ya was dead!\' Oohh. A fine write N.
May 10th, 2018 11:39
orchidee said:
Aww, did I say ya was dead?! But a shocker - a friend said to someone I know: \'Not seen ya for ages; thought ya was dead!\' Oohh. A fine write N.
May 10th, 2018 11:39
Ghost
Michael Edwards said:
So pleased you\'re not dead - I would miss your super work. A great bit of narrative poetry.
May 10th, 2018 11:12
Michael Edwards said:
So pleased you\'re not dead - I would miss your super work. A great bit of narrative poetry.
May 10th, 2018 11:12
Ghost
Lorna said:
This is very powerful Nicholas. I love the story it tells although a bit sad........
May 10th, 2018 07:39
Lorna said:
This is very powerful Nicholas. I love the story it tells although a bit sad........
May 10th, 2018 07:39
Memories of Yesterday
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Great diction for “only 21” and an impressive number of lines for someone of your generation. Keep up the great work!
May 6th, 2018 21:25
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Great diction for “only 21” and an impressive number of lines for someone of your generation. Keep up the great work!
May 6th, 2018 21:25
Memories of Yesterday
sylviasearcher said:
This reads well beyond your youth...
Reminds me of a feeling I get sometimes
April 24th, 2018 09:39
sylviasearcher said:
This reads well beyond your youth...
Reminds me of a feeling I get sometimes
April 24th, 2018 09:39
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