Comments received on poems by Nicholas Browning
Story of Our Lives
orchidee said:
A fine write Nicholas. There\'s no glee if I start singing though. lol.
March 18th, 2019 02:50
orchidee said:
A fine write Nicholas. There\'s no glee if I start singing though. lol.
March 18th, 2019 02:50
Story of Our Lives
sylviasearcher said:
Well your job was done because I thoroughly enjoyed this one!
In fact it’s a favourite.
Kind of romantic yet ‘broken’.
Gentle as a lullaby yet written like a eulogy.
March 18th, 2019 02:30
sylviasearcher said:
Well your job was done because I thoroughly enjoyed this one!
In fact it’s a favourite.
Kind of romantic yet ‘broken’.
Gentle as a lullaby yet written like a eulogy.
March 18th, 2019 02:30
Story of Our Lives
Goldfinch60 said:
May that glee become wider known and more words like these be shown to us all. Good write Nicholas.
March 18th, 2019 02:00
Goldfinch60 said:
May that glee become wider known and more words like these be shown to us all. Good write Nicholas.
March 18th, 2019 02:00
Story of Our Lives
Michael Edwards said:
You say it\'s a simple tale but it\'s very enigmatic nevertheless. I can read into it but interpretation is best left to each reader. A much enjoyed read.
March 18th, 2019 01:38
Michael Edwards said:
You say it\'s a simple tale but it\'s very enigmatic nevertheless. I can read into it but interpretation is best left to each reader. A much enjoyed read.
March 18th, 2019 01:38
That Which Aches
Suresh said:
Such serenity in the inevitable
Loved every word
March 17th, 2019 10:48
Suresh said:
Such serenity in the inevitable
Loved every word
March 17th, 2019 10:48
That Which Aches
Fay Slimm. said:
The sad feel which oozes from these worthy lines tugs at the heart in the way good poetry does....... \"that which aches\" is the perfect title. - well done again Nick.
March 16th, 2019 04:04
Fay Slimm. said:
The sad feel which oozes from these worthy lines tugs at the heart in the way good poetry does....... \"that which aches\" is the perfect title. - well done again Nick.
March 16th, 2019 04:04
That Which Aches
sylviasearcher said:
This certainly made me ache, in fact it really touched me. You painted a poignant vision in my mind and it panged in my chest.
Not had that for a while. Powerful.
Good job.
March 16th, 2019 03:52
sylviasearcher said:
This certainly made me ache, in fact it really touched me. You painted a poignant vision in my mind and it panged in my chest.
Not had that for a while. Powerful.
Good job.
March 16th, 2019 03:52
That Which Aches
Michael Edwards said:
A great weave of the language - i won\'t pick out a favourite line - they are all good.
March 16th, 2019 03:16
Michael Edwards said:
A great weave of the language - i won\'t pick out a favourite line - they are all good.
March 16th, 2019 03:16
That Which Aches
orchidee said:
A fine write Nicholas. My feet ache, I can tell ya that! It\'s the long walk I took. lol.
March 16th, 2019 02:49
orchidee said:
A fine write Nicholas. My feet ache, I can tell ya that! It\'s the long walk I took. lol.
March 16th, 2019 02:49
As Hollows Whisper
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI MIKE ~ Congratulations on being in Pole position ! Its easier for you ~ you just have to stay up til midnight (its nearly 1 am Friday here) we have to get up @ 5am to be first in LINE ! I like the structure of this poem it is replete with RHYME & RHYTHM which makes it cool to read and easy to recite !
The SUBJECT (which you indicate is all about Regret & Indecision) is less smooth to swallow !
Stanza 1. It permeates FEAR in the Minds of Men
S 2. Wandering in search of answers
S 3. Taken root ~ corruption sullies (very true)
S 4. Dithering through masquerades !
I have chosen these quotes because it may not have escaped your notice that in 2016 the UK voted to leave the EU (European Union) by 52% to 48%. Its a bit like Texas (Population 25 million) wanting to cede from the USA ! Teresa May (Our President ~ we do elect Females !) voted to REMAIN so in negotions (and in view of the almost 50 : 50 vote) with the EU have been to keep us half in & half out ~ because the EU is an essential Trading Partner. This has resulted in REGRET (that we ever had the REFERENDUM in the first place !) and INDECISION about how we can EXIT (BREXIT) the EU without having a HARD BORDER between N Ireland (UK) and the Independent REPUBLIC of IRELAND where most New Yorkers come from (Even Uncle Donald was seen wearing a Green Tie and a sprig of Shamrock today for St Patrick !). Also BREXIT without damaging the UK economy. The UK Parliament have twice rejected The Deal Theresa has made with the EU so now we are asking for an extension \'til JULY (it should have been done & dusted by 29th March 2019 !) So paradoxically (unless you are student of UK Poltics & the BREXIT SAGA) the QUOTES I have extracted form each Stanza ~ exactly mirrors the DILLEMAS facing the UK Parliament for months (and years !) to come. It makes the TRUMP administration seem rational !
Yours as always BROTHER BRIAN !
March 14th, 2019 20:12
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI MIKE ~ Congratulations on being in Pole position ! Its easier for you ~ you just have to stay up til midnight (its nearly 1 am Friday here) we have to get up @ 5am to be first in LINE ! I like the structure of this poem it is replete with RHYME & RHYTHM which makes it cool to read and easy to recite !
The SUBJECT (which you indicate is all about Regret & Indecision) is less smooth to swallow !
Stanza 1. It permeates FEAR in the Minds of Men
S 2. Wandering in search of answers
S 3. Taken root ~ corruption sullies (very true)
S 4. Dithering through masquerades !
I have chosen these quotes because it may not have escaped your notice that in 2016 the UK voted to leave the EU (European Union) by 52% to 48%. Its a bit like Texas (Population 25 million) wanting to cede from the USA ! Teresa May (Our President ~ we do elect Females !) voted to REMAIN so in negotions (and in view of the almost 50 : 50 vote) with the EU have been to keep us half in & half out ~ because the EU is an essential Trading Partner. This has resulted in REGRET (that we ever had the REFERENDUM in the first place !) and INDECISION about how we can EXIT (BREXIT) the EU without having a HARD BORDER between N Ireland (UK) and the Independent REPUBLIC of IRELAND where most New Yorkers come from (Even Uncle Donald was seen wearing a Green Tie and a sprig of Shamrock today for St Patrick !). Also BREXIT without damaging the UK economy. The UK Parliament have twice rejected The Deal Theresa has made with the EU so now we are asking for an extension \'til JULY (it should have been done & dusted by 29th March 2019 !) So paradoxically (unless you are student of UK Poltics & the BREXIT SAGA) the QUOTES I have extracted form each Stanza ~ exactly mirrors the DILLEMAS facing the UK Parliament for months (and years !) to come. It makes the TRUMP administration seem rational !
Yours as always BROTHER BRIAN !
March 14th, 2019 20:12
As Hollows Whisper
kevin browne said:
Sounds like a man who has dug deep in certain periods of his life and the difficulties endured. Deep, but fab!!
March 14th, 2019 17:46
kevin browne said:
Sounds like a man who has dug deep in certain periods of his life and the difficulties endured. Deep, but fab!!
March 14th, 2019 17:46
To You I Shall Bestow
Crystal Hope said:
this is a beautiful poem. excellent writing!
March 14th, 2019 15:21
Crystal Hope said:
this is a beautiful poem. excellent writing!
March 14th, 2019 15:21
Festival of Lights
Crystal Hope said:
This is so incredibly done. fantastic work.
March 14th, 2019 15:20
Crystal Hope said:
This is so incredibly done. fantastic work.
March 14th, 2019 15:20
As Hollows Whisper
SerenWise said:
Very enjoyable, great use of rhyme and metaphor
March 14th, 2019 10:22
SerenWise said:
Very enjoyable, great use of rhyme and metaphor
March 14th, 2019 10:22
As Hollows Whisper
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes Nicholas I have truly enjoyed your talent for shaping words clearly in this message of how best to avoid defeat.
March 14th, 2019 07:33
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes Nicholas I have truly enjoyed your talent for shaping words clearly in this message of how best to avoid defeat.
March 14th, 2019 07:33
As Hollows Whisper
sylviasearcher said:
Spoken late are words that save.
This last verse briefly took me from a sense of sadness in futile plight. Yet they are whispers, dithering in little haste.
Reminded me is an idea I had about being soft and slow. Being steady.
We think strength and hope is a great almighty saviour but perhaps it is a gentle persistence amidst the masquerade?
March 14th, 2019 02:48
sylviasearcher said:
Spoken late are words that save.
This last verse briefly took me from a sense of sadness in futile plight. Yet they are whispers, dithering in little haste.
Reminded me is an idea I had about being soft and slow. Being steady.
We think strength and hope is a great almighty saviour but perhaps it is a gentle persistence amidst the masquerade?
March 14th, 2019 02:48
As Hollows Whisper
orchidee said:
A fine write N. Some poets poems can appear in Greek! Something to do with uploading or script maybe. I can translate Greek, so it best not be saucy poems! lol.
March 14th, 2019 02:43
orchidee said:
A fine write N. Some poets poems can appear in Greek! Something to do with uploading or script maybe. I can translate Greek, so it best not be saucy poems! lol.
March 14th, 2019 02:43
As Hollows Whisper
Michael Edwards said:
Well I\'ve read it now and it flows so well and what great use of phraseology - a deep and quite dark read but a great read nevertheless.
March 14th, 2019 02:18
Michael Edwards said:
Well I\'ve read it now and it flows so well and what great use of phraseology - a deep and quite dark read but a great read nevertheless.
March 14th, 2019 02:18
As Hollows Whisper
Michael Edwards said:
Not sure what font you have used Nicholas but it looks a bit like cyrillic script on my screen so sadly I can\'t read it.
March 14th, 2019 01:16
Michael Edwards said:
Not sure what font you have used Nicholas but it looks a bit like cyrillic script on my screen so sadly I can\'t read it.
March 14th, 2019 01:16
Not Too Sure Which One I\'ll Be
Night Owl said:
Yes, some days I feel purposeful and others, I want to run screaming into the woods... Either way here we all are-- and I really like your write...
March 13th, 2019 20:26
Night Owl said:
Yes, some days I feel purposeful and others, I want to run screaming into the woods... Either way here we all are-- and I really like your write...
March 13th, 2019 20:26
Ruins of the Phantasm
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
RUINS OF THE ILLUSION ~ IT HAPPENS EVERY DAY !
WOW NICK ~ This is a real SAGA ! Most Poems on MPS are very short ~ so this is refreshing ! Technically MPS is a Poetry Site so I prefer it when a STORY is presented in Free Verse (little or no rhyme) Poetic Form (finite lines & verses !). Love the PICTURE which complements the Story. It reminded me of Machu Picchu (Peru) which we have visited ~ AWESOME ~ A City lost in the Jungle ! Stanzas 1 - 5 Lead us to the Ruins of Neviltis ~ and they (The Sheep ?) start to excavate ! S 6&7. The find the KEY S 8. They (The Sheep ?) find the DOOR ! S 9. Walter dies S 10. JARED opens the DOOR ! S 11 & 12 JARED enters the DOOR and vanishes ! S 13 SF shift through SPACE & TIME ~ The Flock of Sheep are back in Place ! S 16. The appearance of the Hooded Brgrimed Figure wih Radient Eyes ! S 17. The CHIEF can only watch as the Swine fell one by one (Is this ANIMAL FARM ?) S 18 & 19 Death prevails !
Because we are both Scientists we love SF & Fantasy !
Thanks for sharing ~ much food for thought !
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA
March 13th, 2019 18:41
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
RUINS OF THE ILLUSION ~ IT HAPPENS EVERY DAY !
WOW NICK ~ This is a real SAGA ! Most Poems on MPS are very short ~ so this is refreshing ! Technically MPS is a Poetry Site so I prefer it when a STORY is presented in Free Verse (little or no rhyme) Poetic Form (finite lines & verses !). Love the PICTURE which complements the Story. It reminded me of Machu Picchu (Peru) which we have visited ~ AWESOME ~ A City lost in the Jungle ! Stanzas 1 - 5 Lead us to the Ruins of Neviltis ~ and they (The Sheep ?) start to excavate ! S 6&7. The find the KEY S 8. They (The Sheep ?) find the DOOR ! S 9. Walter dies S 10. JARED opens the DOOR ! S 11 & 12 JARED enters the DOOR and vanishes ! S 13 SF shift through SPACE & TIME ~ The Flock of Sheep are back in Place ! S 16. The appearance of the Hooded Brgrimed Figure wih Radient Eyes ! S 17. The CHIEF can only watch as the Swine fell one by one (Is this ANIMAL FARM ?) S 18 & 19 Death prevails !
Because we are both Scientists we love SF & Fantasy !
Thanks for sharing ~ much food for thought !
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA
March 13th, 2019 18:41
Ruins of the Phantasm
Nicholas Browning said:
Thanks very much! I\'m glad you read it through. And yeah, pretty much a bad hair day Haha
March 13th, 2019 14:28
Nicholas Browning said:
Thanks very much! I\'m glad you read it through. And yeah, pretty much a bad hair day Haha
March 13th, 2019 14:28
Ruins of the Phantasm
orchidee said:
A fine write NB. Now for my paraphrase of it: \'Having a bad-hair day?\' subtitled: \'They were not the happiest of bunnies!\' lol. Though it was an interesting day (or night) out for them.
March 13th, 2019 11:02
orchidee said:
A fine write NB. Now for my paraphrase of it: \'Having a bad-hair day?\' subtitled: \'They were not the happiest of bunnies!\' lol. Though it was an interesting day (or night) out for them.
March 13th, 2019 11:02
Festival of Lights
Neville said:
these words are indeed worth sharing and certainly worthy of more attention.... a little gift for everyone methinks... Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:44
Neville said:
these words are indeed worth sharing and certainly worthy of more attention.... a little gift for everyone methinks... Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:44
Sunlight
Neville said:
this is what I would call a wandering song or poem.. it should be taken slowly not hurried and should be glimpsed rather than stared at...rather like its namesake really.... enjoyed muchly.. Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:35
Neville said:
this is what I would call a wandering song or poem.. it should be taken slowly not hurried and should be glimpsed rather than stared at...rather like its namesake really.... enjoyed muchly.. Neville
March 13th, 2019 04:35
Ruins of the Phantasm
Michael Edwards said:
I\'ve dipped into it and from what I\'ve read thus far it\'s an engaging read - will certainly return when I have a little more time to spare to give it full justice.
March 13th, 2019 03:41
Michael Edwards said:
I\'ve dipped into it and from what I\'ve read thus far it\'s an engaging read - will certainly return when I have a little more time to spare to give it full justice.
March 13th, 2019 03:41
Ruins of the Phantasm
orchidee said:
I shall have to come back to this, when I have bit more time....
March 13th, 2019 02:33
orchidee said:
I shall have to come back to this, when I have bit more time....
March 13th, 2019 02:33
Festival of Lights
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING NICK ~ BRIAN here thanks for sharing your Poem ! Thanks for your comment on my response to Diamond about STRUCTURED & UNSTRUCTURED Poetry. Poetry is emotional and therefore ~ in a sense the SUBJECT is more important than the STRUCTURE ! In essence POETIC FORMS like SONNETS & HAIKU etc evolved to ameliorate the SUBJECT of the Poem. This led to the importance of Rhyme & Rhythm bcause early Poetry was Oral rather than written. Sagas would be repeated and memorised round the camp fire. We used to practice this when I was in the Scouts making up and reciting verses without ever writing them down. Limerics and folk poetry is a bit like this Simon & Garfunkel & Bob Dylan & John Denver are good examples of folk Poetry also Johnny Cash ~ Dolly Parton etc & Blue Grass & Country & Gospel it all starts out as reciable Poetry ! All those I have cited are excellent Poets as were the Beatles in the UK.
I like your Poem ~ which is (as you say) about finding meaning. Every stanza is essentially a QUATRIAN (even S 3.) which has a long first line ! There is a consistent Rhyme Pattern. S 1. xaxa S 2. xbxb S 3. (split first line) xcxc S 4. Is two doublets ddee S 5. xfxf S 6. xgxg Some of your Rhymes Stanzas 4 5 6 are half-rhymes (like PATH & GRASP) but this is good because a Good Poet should never sacrifice REASON for RHYME ! There is some underlying Rhythm making it easy to read ~ BUT more difficult to recite ! Look at Shakespeare or Longfellow or John Betjaman or Dylan or Robbie Burnes etc and you will see what I mean ! I do teach Poetry to Seniors so I am used to analysing Poetry & Blank Verse and I don\'t always PRACTICE what I PREACH. I am a Science Lecturer in a College. Shakespeare wrote naturally in IAMBIC PENTAMETER which is why his Plays are easy to learn & to recite and also sound so melodious !
You live in an interesting State ~ We like Bill Bryson who now lives in the UK. I have visited INDEPENDENCE with my Folks who knew People who moved to Tampa ~ to escape the SNOW !
Sorry to ramble on hope that all helps ~ keep posting ~ Please check our site. Angela is my Fiancee now in New Zealand on WORK EXCHANGE.
Blessings through Poetry ~ BRIAN (UK)
March 12th, 2019 19:09
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING NICK ~ BRIAN here thanks for sharing your Poem ! Thanks for your comment on my response to Diamond about STRUCTURED & UNSTRUCTURED Poetry. Poetry is emotional and therefore ~ in a sense the SUBJECT is more important than the STRUCTURE ! In essence POETIC FORMS like SONNETS & HAIKU etc evolved to ameliorate the SUBJECT of the Poem. This led to the importance of Rhyme & Rhythm bcause early Poetry was Oral rather than written. Sagas would be repeated and memorised round the camp fire. We used to practice this when I was in the Scouts making up and reciting verses without ever writing them down. Limerics and folk poetry is a bit like this Simon & Garfunkel & Bob Dylan & John Denver are good examples of folk Poetry also Johnny Cash ~ Dolly Parton etc & Blue Grass & Country & Gospel it all starts out as reciable Poetry ! All those I have cited are excellent Poets as were the Beatles in the UK.
I like your Poem ~ which is (as you say) about finding meaning. Every stanza is essentially a QUATRIAN (even S 3.) which has a long first line ! There is a consistent Rhyme Pattern. S 1. xaxa S 2. xbxb S 3. (split first line) xcxc S 4. Is two doublets ddee S 5. xfxf S 6. xgxg Some of your Rhymes Stanzas 4 5 6 are half-rhymes (like PATH & GRASP) but this is good because a Good Poet should never sacrifice REASON for RHYME ! There is some underlying Rhythm making it easy to read ~ BUT more difficult to recite ! Look at Shakespeare or Longfellow or John Betjaman or Dylan or Robbie Burnes etc and you will see what I mean ! I do teach Poetry to Seniors so I am used to analysing Poetry & Blank Verse and I don\'t always PRACTICE what I PREACH. I am a Science Lecturer in a College. Shakespeare wrote naturally in IAMBIC PENTAMETER which is why his Plays are easy to learn & to recite and also sound so melodious !
You live in an interesting State ~ We like Bill Bryson who now lives in the UK. I have visited INDEPENDENCE with my Folks who knew People who moved to Tampa ~ to escape the SNOW !
Sorry to ramble on hope that all helps ~ keep posting ~ Please check our site. Angela is my Fiancee now in New Zealand on WORK EXCHANGE.
Blessings through Poetry ~ BRIAN (UK)
March 12th, 2019 19:09
Sunlight
Neville said:
If truth is what you are seeking, as far as I am concerned.. the meaning can not be found elsewhere.. well writ young sir.. N
March 12th, 2019 17:43
Neville said:
If truth is what you are seeking, as far as I am concerned.. the meaning can not be found elsewhere.. well writ young sir.. N
March 12th, 2019 17:43
Not Too Sure Which One I\'ll Be
orchidee said:
And now you wrote a fine poem - so not entirely useless! (heehee).
February 28th, 2019 03:08
orchidee said:
And now you wrote a fine poem - so not entirely useless! (heehee).
February 28th, 2019 03:08
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