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The Artistic Arrogance of Impeccable Poetry
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening ~ Desert Words ~ Thank you for an interesting critique of the Immortal Bard ~ Robbie Burns ! I trust it is *Tongue in Cheek* because the Scots (I am English) still believe in Corporal punishment ~ and you are on very sacred ground. He did consider Himself to be *Just a Verse Writer* and he was not above self criticism ~ as is evidenced by the last stanza of *To A Louse*
O had some Power the giftie gie us
To see oursels as ithers see us
It wad frae many a blunder free us
An* foolish notion
What airs in dress an* gait would lea*e us
An* ev*n devotion.
This stanza (which does not need tanslating) is is in Burns Metre (or Old Habbie) which always has perfect metre (in Auld Scots) and a basic rhyme pattern aaabab. It is meant to be recited and it flows beautifully in the original. But not when translated into standard English. Have you ever been to a Burns Supper (January) they have lots of them in the USA. One learns much about Burns in the *Toast to the Immortal Bard* and his Impeccable Poetry recited by Scots Immigrants is a delight to the Ear. The highlight is the *Piping In* of the Haggis (Food o* the Gods) and the recitation (with actions) of To a Haggis in the original Auld Scots ~ Truly Awsome. A Man who could write this from his heart on a Napkin at the Table and compose a witty but profound Poem about TOOTHACHE well deserves the title *The Immortal Bard\". Also bear in mind that while his poems on superficial reading would appear to be about MICE & DAISIES & LOUSE etc they are in fact satyrical historical masterpieces ~ which have stood the test of time ~ Immortal indeed. Scotlands greatest Poet ever ! AMEN
Thanks for sharing
Your Brian Williams.
June 29th, 2020 16:22
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening ~ Desert Words ~ Thank you for an interesting critique of the Immortal Bard ~ Robbie Burns ! I trust it is *Tongue in Cheek* because the Scots (I am English) still believe in Corporal punishment ~ and you are on very sacred ground. He did consider Himself to be *Just a Verse Writer* and he was not above self criticism ~ as is evidenced by the last stanza of *To A Louse*
O had some Power the giftie gie us
To see oursels as ithers see us
It wad frae many a blunder free us
An* foolish notion
What airs in dress an* gait would lea*e us
An* ev*n devotion.
This stanza (which does not need tanslating) is is in Burns Metre (or Old Habbie) which always has perfect metre (in Auld Scots) and a basic rhyme pattern aaabab. It is meant to be recited and it flows beautifully in the original. But not when translated into standard English. Have you ever been to a Burns Supper (January) they have lots of them in the USA. One learns much about Burns in the *Toast to the Immortal Bard* and his Impeccable Poetry recited by Scots Immigrants is a delight to the Ear. The highlight is the *Piping In* of the Haggis (Food o* the Gods) and the recitation (with actions) of To a Haggis in the original Auld Scots ~ Truly Awsome. A Man who could write this from his heart on a Napkin at the Table and compose a witty but profound Poem about TOOTHACHE well deserves the title *The Immortal Bard\". Also bear in mind that while his poems on superficial reading would appear to be about MICE & DAISIES & LOUSE etc they are in fact satyrical historical masterpieces ~ which have stood the test of time ~ Immortal indeed. Scotlands greatest Poet ever ! AMEN
Thanks for sharing
Your Brian Williams.
June 29th, 2020 16:22
The Artistic Arrogance of Impeccable Poetry
Neville said:
You write like an Englishman sir,
decidedly well, if you ask me..
June 29th, 2020 14:03
Neville said:
You write like an Englishman sir,
decidedly well, if you ask me..
June 29th, 2020 14:03
Lost
dusk arising said:
Be mindful of where you tread for one day you just may happen upon such a place. I know I did and I go there in my meditative mind to linger.
It is in the depths of Wales, a valley with a stream which i know both in spate and drought.
Take your mind to a place beside flowing water and relax into whatever is your state of mind.. Do it for real and you will find places which begin to satisfy some of your desires/
June 11th, 2020 10:46
dusk arising said:
Be mindful of where you tread for one day you just may happen upon such a place. I know I did and I go there in my meditative mind to linger.
It is in the depths of Wales, a valley with a stream which i know both in spate and drought.
Take your mind to a place beside flowing water and relax into whatever is your state of mind.. Do it for real and you will find places which begin to satisfy some of your desires/
June 11th, 2020 10:46
Life Begins In Half An Hour
Goldfinch60 said:
It certainly is time DW, and that time is wonderful.
Andy
May 24th, 2020 01:31
Goldfinch60 said:
It certainly is time DW, and that time is wonderful.
Andy
May 24th, 2020 01:31
Sing To Me
anonymousblue said:
This heartbreaking lament touched me. I love how you painted a sad nighttime scene with simple yet precise language. Well done.
May 1st, 2020 03:58
anonymousblue said:
This heartbreaking lament touched me. I love how you painted a sad nighttime scene with simple yet precise language. Well done.
May 1st, 2020 03:58
Sing To Me
Goldfinch60 said:
May the songs reach your heart and life together ensues.
Andy
May 1st, 2020 00:54
Goldfinch60 said:
May the songs reach your heart and life together ensues.
Andy
May 1st, 2020 00:54
Passing Guest
FredPeyer said:
Desert Words, your poem is like the desert wind. Well done. It\'s not about the destination, it\'s about the journey!
April 18th, 2020 10:37
FredPeyer said:
Desert Words, your poem is like the desert wind. Well done. It\'s not about the destination, it\'s about the journey!
April 18th, 2020 10:37
Hope In The Air
Goldfinch60 said:
Oh yes I feel the hope and your words confirm that hope.
Andy
April 18th, 2020 01:15
Goldfinch60 said:
Oh yes I feel the hope and your words confirm that hope.
Andy
April 18th, 2020 01:15
Emerging
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write and so true, experience is behind you so that you can move forward into the future.
Andy
April 6th, 2020 00:47
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write and so true, experience is behind you so that you can move forward into the future.
Andy
April 6th, 2020 00:47
Emerging
Goddess of the Mist said:
Wow! Love this! Very powerful and encouraging ;-)
April 5th, 2020 21:38
Goddess of the Mist said:
Wow! Love this! Very powerful and encouraging ;-)
April 5th, 2020 21:38
If I Knew Then
dusk arising said:
Soothing to be touched by your words today. Life\'s injustices are rarely all \'one way\' though.
So many situations we could resolve to advantage with our wisdom of latter years tells true in your piece today.
Your choice of phrasing brings to mind that this piece is a very personal write with perhaps one other person in mind.
March 8th, 2020 00:43
dusk arising said:
Soothing to be touched by your words today. Life\'s injustices are rarely all \'one way\' though.
So many situations we could resolve to advantage with our wisdom of latter years tells true in your piece today.
Your choice of phrasing brings to mind that this piece is a very personal write with perhaps one other person in mind.
March 8th, 2020 00:43
If I Knew Then
angmaria said:
Very soulful 💕! Lots of emotion shining through I enjoyed reading it
March 7th, 2020 18:10
angmaria said:
Very soulful 💕! Lots of emotion shining through I enjoyed reading it
March 7th, 2020 18:10
Between You And Me
myself and me said:
It\'s time to move on. When you turn around, you will find you still there. It is just too hard to do.
Well expressed.
December 12th, 2019 19:23
myself and me said:
It\'s time to move on. When you turn around, you will find you still there. It is just too hard to do.
Well expressed.
December 12th, 2019 19:23
Healing Mountain
Goldfinch60 said:
May the climb up the rest of the mountain be filled with joy and more wonderful words.
November 24th, 2019 01:59
Goldfinch60 said:
May the climb up the rest of the mountain be filled with joy and more wonderful words.
November 24th, 2019 01:59
Healing Mountain
Caring dove said:
Really lovely ! I love this . I especially love the third part of this poem ,
November 24th, 2019 01:03
Caring dove said:
Really lovely ! I love this . I especially love the third part of this poem ,
November 24th, 2019 01:03
Go Slowly
Bragee said:
Slowing down and taking in everything around you is good for your health.
November 22nd, 2019 16:27
Bragee said:
Slowing down and taking in everything around you is good for your health.
November 22nd, 2019 16:27
Beautiful Voice
Goldfinch60 said:
Nature\'s symphony is so wonderful to hear, as are your words.
October 17th, 2019 00:33
Goldfinch60 said:
Nature\'s symphony is so wonderful to hear, as are your words.
October 17th, 2019 00:33
Beautiful Voice
Thoughts In Time said:
Beautiful...yes if we only listen..we will hear 🌹
October 17th, 2019 00:07
Thoughts In Time said:
Beautiful...yes if we only listen..we will hear 🌹
October 17th, 2019 00:07
Remorse
dusk arising said:
Your positive mind recalls to good of life\'s experiences rather than dwell upon the negatives I guess. In that i see my own outlook reflected. I\'m thankful for the joys rather than remorseful about the negatives.
A healing question within your well constructed piece today i think.
August 9th, 2019 09:02
dusk arising said:
Your positive mind recalls to good of life\'s experiences rather than dwell upon the negatives I guess. In that i see my own outlook reflected. I\'m thankful for the joys rather than remorseful about the negatives.
A healing question within your well constructed piece today i think.
August 9th, 2019 09:02
My Wish
Fay Slimm. said:
One of the most moving and gently expressed of writings on death and the afterlife.............. must keep this one in my faves to read over again......... thank you for sharing your purposeful wish.
August 7th, 2019 12:35
Fay Slimm. said:
One of the most moving and gently expressed of writings on death and the afterlife.............. must keep this one in my faves to read over again......... thank you for sharing your purposeful wish.
August 7th, 2019 12:35
My Wish
Neville said:
I think this is without any doubt my most favourite poem of yours, that I have considered to date .... Neville
August 7th, 2019 12:01
Neville said:
I think this is without any doubt my most favourite poem of yours, that I have considered to date .... Neville
August 7th, 2019 12:01
Memories Visiting
dusk arising said:
Poetic excellence here! It has everything of the nights alone after.....
Anyone who has been there will be deeply moved by your pain and phrasing.
Really such a fine piece of writing and a must for my favourites.
August 3rd, 2019 11:50
dusk arising said:
Poetic excellence here! It has everything of the nights alone after.....
Anyone who has been there will be deeply moved by your pain and phrasing.
Really such a fine piece of writing and a must for my favourites.
August 3rd, 2019 11:50
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