Comments received on poems by NafisaSB
on clouds
L. B. Mek said:
so beautiful
this, that kaleidoscopic view of life
where wisdom
grants a glimpse of life\'s gray feats
and rainfall\'s
cooling refrain of melodic, healing
..
such a soothing read, dear Poet
thank you!
June 5th, 2023 03:27
L. B. Mek said:
so beautiful
this, that kaleidoscopic view of life
where wisdom
grants a glimpse of life\'s gray feats
and rainfall\'s
cooling refrain of melodic, healing
..
such a soothing read, dear Poet
thank you!
June 5th, 2023 03:27
cascading water falls..
Soman Ragavan said:
NafisaSB
cascading water fall
My comments on the poem \"Cascading water fall” by NafisaSB
Your poetic eye has caught things happening in the waterfall :
--the water falls gently at first; --the droplets pause; --they drop madly, making noise; --the river foams and roars; --the waves rise with power; --the birds take flight; --the fishes scamper away from the pressure caused by the falling water.
We should point out that the falling water helps the water to oxygenate, which is good for the fish.
Regarding rivers, we can note the following :
The river flows on, going downhill, gathering speed and power; it can move rocks, break its banks, pull along nearby trees; it makes noise; it is mostly unsalty, but turns salty when it reaches the sea; when the river reaches the sea, it becomes the sea. All the noises and ravages it makes along the way end when it enters the sea. It enters the sea quietly. Its reign ends when it meets the sea.
The sun turns some sea water to moisture, that rise to form clouds; the clouds give place to rain at some places and snow at other places. Rain water turns into rivers; snow melts and flows downhill too. Rivers run downhill (through gravity) to reach the ocean. When river water reaches the sea, the wheel has turned full circle : the water returns to where it started…
Still, poets can write much about the beauty and workings of the river. Soman Ragavan. 4 June, 2023. //
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June 4th, 2023 01:32
Soman Ragavan said:
NafisaSB
cascading water fall
My comments on the poem \"Cascading water fall” by NafisaSB
Your poetic eye has caught things happening in the waterfall :
--the water falls gently at first; --the droplets pause; --they drop madly, making noise; --the river foams and roars; --the waves rise with power; --the birds take flight; --the fishes scamper away from the pressure caused by the falling water.
We should point out that the falling water helps the water to oxygenate, which is good for the fish.
Regarding rivers, we can note the following :
The river flows on, going downhill, gathering speed and power; it can move rocks, break its banks, pull along nearby trees; it makes noise; it is mostly unsalty, but turns salty when it reaches the sea; when the river reaches the sea, it becomes the sea. All the noises and ravages it makes along the way end when it enters the sea. It enters the sea quietly. Its reign ends when it meets the sea.
The sun turns some sea water to moisture, that rise to form clouds; the clouds give place to rain at some places and snow at other places. Rain water turns into rivers; snow melts and flows downhill too. Rivers run downhill (through gravity) to reach the ocean. When river water reaches the sea, the wheel has turned full circle : the water returns to where it started…
Still, poets can write much about the beauty and workings of the river. Soman Ragavan. 4 June, 2023. //
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June 4th, 2023 01:32
Compete with self..
David Wakeling said:
This is probably good advice I just never take advice.
June 2nd, 2023 00:23
David Wakeling said:
This is probably good advice I just never take advice.
June 2nd, 2023 00:23
enjoy
mvvenkataraman said:
Have Henry Wadsworth Longfellow and William Blake together joined to write this poem???
June 1st, 2023 10:40
mvvenkataraman said:
Have Henry Wadsworth Longfellow and William Blake together joined to write this poem???
June 1st, 2023 10:40
enjoy
Doggerel Dave said:
Couldn\'t agree more, N. But don\'t outside forces limit your options?
June 1st, 2023 06:42
Doggerel Dave said:
Couldn\'t agree more, N. But don\'t outside forces limit your options?
June 1st, 2023 06:42
stars
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Stars” by NafisaSB
Poets are fascinated by sunrise, sunset, the moon, the waves, mountains and the stars. The special thing about stars is that they appear to twinkle. This adds to their mystery and their appeal.
You say “The star you choose for yourself” Thus, it is possible for us to choose one star. That star does not mind. It continues to look at us and to shine for us. We are not the only one to look at it. It still shines towards anyone looking at it. This poem is typical of how poets feels towards the mysteries and wonders of the earth and the sky. Your writings are certainly poetic. Soman Ragavan. 29 May, 2023. // https://allpoetry.com/Soman_Ragavan
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May 29th, 2023 08:58
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Stars” by NafisaSB
Poets are fascinated by sunrise, sunset, the moon, the waves, mountains and the stars. The special thing about stars is that they appear to twinkle. This adds to their mystery and their appeal.
You say “The star you choose for yourself” Thus, it is possible for us to choose one star. That star does not mind. It continues to look at us and to shine for us. We are not the only one to look at it. It still shines towards anyone looking at it. This poem is typical of how poets feels towards the mysteries and wonders of the earth and the sky. Your writings are certainly poetic. Soman Ragavan. 29 May, 2023. // https://allpoetry.com/Soman_Ragavan
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May 29th, 2023 08:58
hang on
L. B. Mek said:
I\'ll have a cup of your poetic hope
dear Poet
better than any coffee! lol
thank you
May 22nd, 2023 04:36
L. B. Mek said:
I\'ll have a cup of your poetic hope
dear Poet
better than any coffee! lol
thank you
May 22nd, 2023 04:36
Surround yourself
2781 said:
What\'s that line: a good heart these days is hard to find..goes with friends also, I am grateful for the few I have.
I\'ve learnt to expect nothing nothing and ask little, after that is only joy.
And if I may ramble a bit longer- everyone will be judged by their actions, and God is the rewarder.
Love to you and all.
May 16th, 2023 02:37
2781 said:
What\'s that line: a good heart these days is hard to find..goes with friends also, I am grateful for the few I have.
I\'ve learnt to expect nothing nothing and ask little, after that is only joy.
And if I may ramble a bit longer- everyone will be judged by their actions, and God is the rewarder.
Love to you and all.
May 16th, 2023 02:37
Surround yourself
Bobby O said:
It is Di important to connect w the right people.
May 16th, 2023 02:26
Bobby O said:
It is Di important to connect w the right people.
May 16th, 2023 02:26
Paradise @ mom\'s feet
2781 said:
;never forget what you learned at your mothers knee. Wear their council like a winning crown, like rings on your fingers.
May 14th, 2023 02:20
2781 said:
;never forget what you learned at your mothers knee. Wear their council like a winning crown, like rings on your fingers.
May 14th, 2023 02:20
too busy
L. B. Mek said:
great message!
wish I had realised these facts
earlier in life
thanks for sharing, dear poet
May 12th, 2023 04:37
L. B. Mek said:
great message!
wish I had realised these facts
earlier in life
thanks for sharing, dear poet
May 12th, 2023 04:37
Loyalty and honesty
David Wakeling said:
You might be waiting a long time. Most people live in a world of lies
May 11th, 2023 01:14
David Wakeling said:
You might be waiting a long time. Most people live in a world of lies
May 11th, 2023 01:14
Let it out
Bobby O said:
When I do follow this true advice I do indeed feel that cathartic release.
May 10th, 2023 01:22
Bobby O said:
When I do follow this true advice I do indeed feel that cathartic release.
May 10th, 2023 01:22
Greed for power
Bobby O said:
Like the message and the content and what I really think was brilliant was the phrasing rhythm, very fresh with nice juxtaposition of modifiers and stamped endings avoiding usual cliche’. I’m a fan
May 6th, 2023 00:12
Bobby O said:
Like the message and the content and what I really think was brilliant was the phrasing rhythm, very fresh with nice juxtaposition of modifiers and stamped endings avoiding usual cliche’. I’m a fan
May 6th, 2023 00:12
Hidden pearls
L. B. Mek said:
like you, dear talented Poet
thank you!
for choosing to share your wonderful talent with us
(I read and learn)
May 1st, 2023 05:11
L. B. Mek said:
like you, dear talented Poet
thank you!
for choosing to share your wonderful talent with us
(I read and learn)
May 1st, 2023 05:11
Don\'t hold grudges
Doggerel Dave said:
Nah I need to have grudges - it saves me from further disappointments when my newly instituted trust (on your advice, Nafisha) is freshly abused.
April 27th, 2023 05:17
Doggerel Dave said:
Nah I need to have grudges - it saves me from further disappointments when my newly instituted trust (on your advice, Nafisha) is freshly abused.
April 27th, 2023 05:17
Know-alls
Doggerel Dave said:
Not sure of God\'s domain, but get the message anyway and feel gently merry at the message.
April 27th, 2023 05:10
Doggerel Dave said:
Not sure of God\'s domain, but get the message anyway and feel gently merry at the message.
April 27th, 2023 05:10
Sailor\'s tale
Lorna said:
Off and away and you took us with you .... good one
April 12th, 2023 05:12
Lorna said:
Off and away and you took us with you .... good one
April 12th, 2023 05:12
Books vs wapp
L. B. Mek said:
depends, dear Poet
are you not still reading?
well then
maybe this is a mere, deviation
a break
soon, if you miss your literary vice
enough
you\'ll be nose deep again, reading
something
with a little more substance;
see, its ok
if we take side paths, from time to time
we need only remember that destination
we were aiming for
and we\'ll soon find ourselves, back on track
do not be too hard on yourself
April 10th, 2023 05:49
L. B. Mek said:
depends, dear Poet
are you not still reading?
well then
maybe this is a mere, deviation
a break
soon, if you miss your literary vice
enough
you\'ll be nose deep again, reading
something
with a little more substance;
see, its ok
if we take side paths, from time to time
we need only remember that destination
we were aiming for
and we\'ll soon find ourselves, back on track
do not be too hard on yourself
April 10th, 2023 05:49
Be special
orchidee said:
Good write N.
I thought only you and I were perfect already - no!! (heehee).
April 6th, 2023 02:05
orchidee said:
Good write N.
I thought only you and I were perfect already - no!! (heehee).
April 6th, 2023 02:05
Global warming
Doggerel Dave said:
You cover a lot of ground there, Nafisa, a comprehensive catalogue of humankind\'s errors well written. A terrible worry as both good and and not so people and animal species plus vegetation are all going to suffer....
April 4th, 2023 02:16
Doggerel Dave said:
You cover a lot of ground there, Nafisa, a comprehensive catalogue of humankind\'s errors well written. A terrible worry as both good and and not so people and animal species plus vegetation are all going to suffer....
April 4th, 2023 02:16
Mind your business
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve said NO! in some very neat lines Nafisa, They may pay more attention and consider their next line more carefully in future....
April 4th, 2023 02:06
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve said NO! in some very neat lines Nafisa, They may pay more attention and consider their next line more carefully in future....
April 4th, 2023 02:06
Lessons learnt
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
and so true
\'quality over quantity
and
sincerity over simplicity\'
to follow, as other\'s do
to belong to majority\'s, rule
is that safe passage
and choice, in any life
(a short allegory, if you permit me:
used to be, scientist\'s assumed
zebra\'s evolved their black n white stripes
to blend-in with their surroundings
and yet, eventually
logic prevailed and people realised
blank n white, could never blend-in
amongst nature\'s barren desserts and forest green
aesthetics
so then, it became clear
zebra\'s, camouflage themselves
so they blend-in
with each other
as a defence mechanism, see
the odd one out from the herd
is first to be targeted
by nature\'s hunter\'s and bullies...
and in Japan, there is a saying
to avoid, needless allegorical story telling
\'“The nail that sticks out gets hammered down, first”)
and yet this inherited, zeal
for conformity and self-subjugated states
of existence
do not seat easily, with some of us
and it shows
in the choices we make, from the miniscule
to those we let, stand by our sides
as we traverse, this accursed
life of endlessly chaotic, strife
and how do you recognise
these few, who choose
to be true to themselves:
by the glint in their weary eyes
and those smile lines
not too evident, when not in use
but deep as dimpled craters
when they share a laugh, with those
they care about...)
April 3rd, 2023 03:13
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
and so true
\'quality over quantity
and
sincerity over simplicity\'
to follow, as other\'s do
to belong to majority\'s, rule
is that safe passage
and choice, in any life
(a short allegory, if you permit me:
used to be, scientist\'s assumed
zebra\'s evolved their black n white stripes
to blend-in with their surroundings
and yet, eventually
logic prevailed and people realised
blank n white, could never blend-in
amongst nature\'s barren desserts and forest green
aesthetics
so then, it became clear
zebra\'s, camouflage themselves
so they blend-in
with each other
as a defence mechanism, see
the odd one out from the herd
is first to be targeted
by nature\'s hunter\'s and bullies...
and in Japan, there is a saying
to avoid, needless allegorical story telling
\'“The nail that sticks out gets hammered down, first”)
and yet this inherited, zeal
for conformity and self-subjugated states
of existence
do not seat easily, with some of us
and it shows
in the choices we make, from the miniscule
to those we let, stand by our sides
as we traverse, this accursed
life of endlessly chaotic, strife
and how do you recognise
these few, who choose
to be true to themselves:
by the glint in their weary eyes
and those smile lines
not too evident, when not in use
but deep as dimpled craters
when they share a laugh, with those
they care about...)
April 3rd, 2023 03:13
Legacy
L. B. Mek said:
Amen!
so true, dear poet
(indeed, deeds of vanquishing feats
may appeal to youth\'s vehement ideals
but, wiser heads
do realise, it be those small gifts
in life, that reward us
our most meaningful mementos
and curate, with every choice made
the echoing legacy\'s of worth
in those footprints, we leave behind...)
April 3rd, 2023 02:54
L. B. Mek said:
Amen!
so true, dear poet
(indeed, deeds of vanquishing feats
may appeal to youth\'s vehement ideals
but, wiser heads
do realise, it be those small gifts
in life, that reward us
our most meaningful mementos
and curate, with every choice made
the echoing legacy\'s of worth
in those footprints, we leave behind...)
April 3rd, 2023 02:54
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