Comments received on poems by adventuressmalik
Fetch me to thy Lap
L. B. Mek said:
contrasting..
why seek, what makes you feel
detached - a gap
away from laps, denied to
you
when you have pillows, to
choose from..
seek the comfort, you deserve
falling six feet, to find solace
is a warping of reality\'s, fallacy..
the inevitable, awaits
best to strive for what you, can
while you still have a chance..
(a good write
and yeah, I too feel the same
sometimes, but
it\'s a futile mindset
best
to shake ourselves free
and look forward again
if we spend too much time
looking at what\'s below us
we\'ll find our faces, smacking
into our horizon\'s)
June 27th, 2022 04:52
L. B. Mek said:
contrasting..
why seek, what makes you feel
detached - a gap
away from laps, denied to
you
when you have pillows, to
choose from..
seek the comfort, you deserve
falling six feet, to find solace
is a warping of reality\'s, fallacy..
the inevitable, awaits
best to strive for what you, can
while you still have a chance..
(a good write
and yeah, I too feel the same
sometimes, but
it\'s a futile mindset
best
to shake ourselves free
and look forward again
if we spend too much time
looking at what\'s below us
we\'ll find our faces, smacking
into our horizon\'s)
June 27th, 2022 04:52
Keeping Alive
adventuressmalik said:
Thank you Jonas. I really wish if you could share it. Sending you a PM.
May 25th, 2022 17:55
adventuressmalik said:
Thank you Jonas. I really wish if you could share it. Sending you a PM.
May 25th, 2022 17:55
Heart of Gold
Jonas Robinson said:
\"Keep me searchin for a heart o gold. And I\'m gettin old.\" I loved this. Thank you for sharing. Love is an amazing gift.
May 25th, 2022 17:00
Jonas Robinson said:
\"Keep me searchin for a heart o gold. And I\'m gettin old.\" I loved this. Thank you for sharing. Love is an amazing gift.
May 25th, 2022 17:00
Keeping Alive
Jonas Robinson said:
A good rhyme feels good this time of year, on an evening like this. Thank you for sharing. I, also have experienced a near death experience.
May 25th, 2022 16:13
Jonas Robinson said:
A good rhyme feels good this time of year, on an evening like this. Thank you for sharing. I, also have experienced a near death experience.
May 25th, 2022 16:13
Keeping Alive
Aradhya said:
nicely penned Malik. the words flow smoothly and the lyrical quality is excellent.
\'Every moment is deep enough
to overwrite events of the past,
How can I think of the future
when I am facing the present blast.\'
an enchanting read, thank you!
May 25th, 2022 00:51
Aradhya said:
nicely penned Malik. the words flow smoothly and the lyrical quality is excellent.
\'Every moment is deep enough
to overwrite events of the past,
How can I think of the future
when I am facing the present blast.\'
an enchanting read, thank you!
May 25th, 2022 00:51
Heart of Gold
Bella Shepard said:
To love the heart and soul of another is the greatest gift that age can never touch. You\'ve expressed the sentiment so well. Beautiful and touching dear poet.
May 24th, 2022 17:07
Bella Shepard said:
To love the heart and soul of another is the greatest gift that age can never touch. You\'ve expressed the sentiment so well. Beautiful and touching dear poet.
May 24th, 2022 17:07
Last jump of the Day
spilleronsheet said:
The skydiving which gave advice
Learnt few lessons of life
Very intriguing
Good one dear poet
Really liked these lines
“Sometimes it is light and variable
and not a steady breeze so stable.
Like the future that we all seek,
which is so untenable and unique. “
May 24th, 2022 15:18
spilleronsheet said:
The skydiving which gave advice
Learnt few lessons of life
Very intriguing
Good one dear poet
Really liked these lines
“Sometimes it is light and variable
and not a steady breeze so stable.
Like the future that we all seek,
which is so untenable and unique. “
May 24th, 2022 15:18
Heart of Gold
Aradhya said:
beautifully written max. yes, when physical beauty withers with time, the beauty in our hearts never fade away and that is why its so precious. great job!
May 24th, 2022 15:08
Aradhya said:
beautifully written max. yes, when physical beauty withers with time, the beauty in our hearts never fade away and that is why its so precious. great job!
May 24th, 2022 15:08
Steal you from my Dreams
Bella Shepard said:
There is such a pureness of soul in your writing about love. It is deep and transcends earthly bounds. You never cease to amaze me.
May 22nd, 2022 11:41
Bella Shepard said:
There is such a pureness of soul in your writing about love. It is deep and transcends earthly bounds. You never cease to amaze me.
May 22nd, 2022 11:41
Hope binds the present together...
Aradhya said:
a beautifully and artistically written poem. loved the lines,
\' Another rainy day brings,
another rainy thought.
Rain descends from clouds,
a blessing for the distraught.\'
truly a pleasure to read. great job!
May 22nd, 2022 00:15
Aradhya said:
a beautifully and artistically written poem. loved the lines,
\' Another rainy day brings,
another rainy thought.
Rain descends from clouds,
a blessing for the distraught.\'
truly a pleasure to read. great job!
May 22nd, 2022 00:15
Hope binds the present together...
adventuressmalik said:
Thank you for the greatest tribute to a deeper expression. You made it worthy of attention that I have to read it again...... to see your words come alive.
May 16th, 2022 23:12
adventuressmalik said:
Thank you for the greatest tribute to a deeper expression. You made it worthy of attention that I have to read it again...... to see your words come alive.
May 16th, 2022 23:12
Hope binds the present together...
L. B. Mek said:
(Hope, eternal
between pulses, synced
by attraction\'s and intimacy\'s
sincerity
of serendepitously, fated
rewards
for believing, yearning and bravely
leaping
with Hope
for that magic connection
most people, find hard
to dream of...)
a wonderful dedication, with some striking imagery
a fantastic read! dear Poet
May 16th, 2022 05:37
L. B. Mek said:
(Hope, eternal
between pulses, synced
by attraction\'s and intimacy\'s
sincerity
of serendepitously, fated
rewards
for believing, yearning and bravely
leaping
with Hope
for that magic connection
most people, find hard
to dream of...)
a wonderful dedication, with some striking imagery
a fantastic read! dear Poet
May 16th, 2022 05:37
Hope binds the present together...
Saxon Crow said:
A well-written poem Max that was enjoyable to read.
May 16th, 2022 00:16
Saxon Crow said:
A well-written poem Max that was enjoyable to read.
May 16th, 2022 00:16
O! my inspiration prime
Bella Shepard said:
Such a beautiful poem of love immemorial. Your last stanza is superb!
May 13th, 2022 13:58
Bella Shepard said:
Such a beautiful poem of love immemorial. Your last stanza is superb!
May 13th, 2022 13:58
A moment to cherish
Cassia DeSousa said:
Hello Max
this is lovely positive spin on mourning a love that is gone,
great job! tchau...Cassia
May 12th, 2022 13:49
Cassia DeSousa said:
Hello Max
this is lovely positive spin on mourning a love that is gone,
great job! tchau...Cassia
May 12th, 2022 13:49
A moment to cherish
adventuressmalik said:
Thank you dear Poet. We are individuals because we are capable of thinking differently. I know perpetual and perennial philosophy, so I write that way.
The pull off a soul which you may know from earlier life is stronger, if you feel that strong vibration.... may be you\'d have a different perspective. And yes, I agree that practical world is different.
May 12th, 2022 06:28
adventuressmalik said:
Thank you dear Poet. We are individuals because we are capable of thinking differently. I know perpetual and perennial philosophy, so I write that way.
The pull off a soul which you may know from earlier life is stronger, if you feel that strong vibration.... may be you\'d have a different perspective. And yes, I agree that practical world is different.
May 12th, 2022 06:28
A moment to cherish
L. B. Mek said:
personally, I don\'t believe
in absolutism, dear Poet..
I heed the wise words
taken from a \'Hollywood\' movie
profiteering, by stealing and warping
the culture of a proud Nation:
from, \'The Last Samurai\'
Katsumoto: \'\'You believe a Person* can change their* destiny?\'\'
Algren: \'\'I think a Person* does what *is possible*, until
their destiny is revealed.\'\'
(as in, when I say my first
fluttering \'hello\'
I don\'t assume, they wont be the beginning
of my tears..
nor, when I stutter my tearful goodbyes
do I assume, a blink later
we won\'t be back in each others arms
or that this parting, may
be a necessary, divergence
in my life
delivering me, eventually
to much warmer, arms ..)
anyway, forgive
my laboured writing
but you probably know
what I\'m trying to get at
better than myself..
thanks for sharing! such relatable words
May 12th, 2022 04:41
L. B. Mek said:
personally, I don\'t believe
in absolutism, dear Poet..
I heed the wise words
taken from a \'Hollywood\' movie
profiteering, by stealing and warping
the culture of a proud Nation:
from, \'The Last Samurai\'
Katsumoto: \'\'You believe a Person* can change their* destiny?\'\'
Algren: \'\'I think a Person* does what *is possible*, until
their destiny is revealed.\'\'
(as in, when I say my first
fluttering \'hello\'
I don\'t assume, they wont be the beginning
of my tears..
nor, when I stutter my tearful goodbyes
do I assume, a blink later
we won\'t be back in each others arms
or that this parting, may
be a necessary, divergence
in my life
delivering me, eventually
to much warmer, arms ..)
anyway, forgive
my laboured writing
but you probably know
what I\'m trying to get at
better than myself..
thanks for sharing! such relatable words
May 12th, 2022 04:41
Blueish Lagoon of your Eyes
Cassia DeSousa said:
Hello
this is lovely & evocative
tchau..Cassia
May 11th, 2022 14:55
Cassia DeSousa said:
Hello
this is lovely & evocative
tchau..Cassia
May 11th, 2022 14:55
A Wish
adventuressmalik said:
Your praise is so poetic, it makes me proud not of the poem but because you chose to reflect on it. Thank you dear friend.
May 10th, 2022 07:27
adventuressmalik said:
Your praise is so poetic, it makes me proud not of the poem but because you chose to reflect on it. Thank you dear friend.
May 10th, 2022 07:27
A Wish
L. B. Mek said:
love that last stanza!
wish I could pour it into my
life\'s coffee, circumstances
like granules of wisdom\'s, sugar
to sweeten my cupful sips
of daybreak horizons,
now
late twilight, Time - distilled
as beings so hollow and bleak...
(what a reassuring, read
thank you! dear Poet)
May 10th, 2022 05:23
L. B. Mek said:
love that last stanza!
wish I could pour it into my
life\'s coffee, circumstances
like granules of wisdom\'s, sugar
to sweeten my cupful sips
of daybreak horizons,
now
late twilight, Time - distilled
as beings so hollow and bleak...
(what a reassuring, read
thank you! dear Poet)
May 10th, 2022 05:23
The inspiration of my higher soul
Saxon Crow said:
Keep going brother. Your journey will take you to unexpected and beautiful places
May 10th, 2022 01:54
Saxon Crow said:
Keep going brother. Your journey will take you to unexpected and beautiful places
May 10th, 2022 01:54
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