Comments received on poems by Maplespal
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sorenbarrett said:
A clever write that utilizes the sense as a numbering system to elucidate the ways in which thought is used. Very nicely done
June 9th, 2025 05:21
sorenbarrett said:
A clever write that utilizes the sense as a numbering system to elucidate the ways in which thought is used. Very nicely done
June 9th, 2025 05:21
Now I live
RSM0812 said:
This poem conveys to me a transition of 2 to 1. A broken relationship and the hope to move on. Also about a person\'s limititations and self awareness. Great write.
June 8th, 2025 08:45
RSM0812 said:
This poem conveys to me a transition of 2 to 1. A broken relationship and the hope to move on. Also about a person\'s limititations and self awareness. Great write.
June 8th, 2025 08:45
Now I live
sorenbarrett said:
I could feel the pain of individuality in this poem and the lack of acceptance by others. The power of this poem comes in its declaration of being oneself as more important than affiliation and bending to the desires of others. Lovely
June 8th, 2025 07:16
sorenbarrett said:
I could feel the pain of individuality in this poem and the lack of acceptance by others. The power of this poem comes in its declaration of being oneself as more important than affiliation and bending to the desires of others. Lovely
June 8th, 2025 07:16
3 more dumps
sorenbarrett said:
A great set that each present conflicting images that counterbalance each other. Very nice presentation of beauty and illusion
June 7th, 2025 06:58
sorenbarrett said:
A great set that each present conflicting images that counterbalance each other. Very nice presentation of beauty and illusion
June 7th, 2025 06:58
Rumour my night
sorenbarrett said:
So identifiable it seems one\'s own thoughts not that of the poet. Well worded in images familiar it speaks to the inner self. Images well painted call up visions of the past, dreamlike it speaks from visions best left undisturbed awakening the slumbering dead. It bleeds unrest and weakening from the hemorrhage it sleeps. A wonderful poem that deserves a fave
June 5th, 2025 05:52
sorenbarrett said:
So identifiable it seems one\'s own thoughts not that of the poet. Well worded in images familiar it speaks to the inner self. Images well painted call up visions of the past, dreamlike it speaks from visions best left undisturbed awakening the slumbering dead. It bleeds unrest and weakening from the hemorrhage it sleeps. A wonderful poem that deserves a fave
June 5th, 2025 05:52
The levee breaks
sorenbarrett said:
Such transitions are not easy and this poem worded them well
June 4th, 2025 05:45
sorenbarrett said:
Such transitions are not easy and this poem worded them well
June 4th, 2025 05:45
Pinned
sorenbarrett said:
A strong poem of recognition that volition is defeated by stronger forces and submission is the only recourse. Well written
June 3rd, 2025 06:05
sorenbarrett said:
A strong poem of recognition that volition is defeated by stronger forces and submission is the only recourse. Well written
June 3rd, 2025 06:05
3 x notes on thought
sorenbarrett said:
There is a sadness and a sense of loss that tie these together as well as a sense of resentment. They go well together and seem to be a natural trio.
June 2nd, 2025 05:39
sorenbarrett said:
There is a sadness and a sense of loss that tie these together as well as a sense of resentment. They go well together and seem to be a natural trio.
June 2nd, 2025 05:39
Be for me
sorenbarrett said:
A plea for the ideal and to make it real. A heart felt poem. Lovely
June 1st, 2025 08:02
sorenbarrett said:
A plea for the ideal and to make it real. A heart felt poem. Lovely
June 1st, 2025 08:02
I\'m a God
sorenbarrett said:
Clever, wonderfully worded, a great metaphor and sadly too true. A fave
May 31st, 2025 08:08
sorenbarrett said:
Clever, wonderfully worded, a great metaphor and sadly too true. A fave
May 31st, 2025 08:08
Staring spot
sorenbarrett said:
We all write and when unable to write them down they are lost. When we have the time we write and these survive in written form. A lovely write
May 30th, 2025 06:08
sorenbarrett said:
We all write and when unable to write them down they are lost. When we have the time we write and these survive in written form. A lovely write
May 30th, 2025 06:08
Quietly listening
sorenbarrett said:
A kind invitation for understanding. Nicely written in metaphor. Very nice
May 29th, 2025 05:40
sorenbarrett said:
A kind invitation for understanding. Nicely written in metaphor. Very nice
May 29th, 2025 05:40
Disappointed
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting write that provokes some thought. Well done
May 28th, 2025 05:37
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting write that provokes some thought. Well done
May 28th, 2025 05:37
I\'m learning
sorenbarrett said:
Always together with the one we love whether physically or mentally it is all the same. A most lovely poem of this unity
May 27th, 2025 07:07
sorenbarrett said:
Always together with the one we love whether physically or mentally it is all the same. A most lovely poem of this unity
May 27th, 2025 07:07
A ghostly message
sorenbarrett said:
This poem a message from beyond and as a guidance it is well written with good flow and rhyme. Nicely done
May 26th, 2025 06:20
sorenbarrett said:
This poem a message from beyond and as a guidance it is well written with good flow and rhyme. Nicely done
May 26th, 2025 06:20
2 more thoughts
sorenbarrett said:
A poem that reflects its feelings of drifting and the second of giving meaning to life. Very nice
May 25th, 2025 08:01
sorenbarrett said:
A poem that reflects its feelings of drifting and the second of giving meaning to life. Very nice
May 25th, 2025 08:01
A Thought: A dawns spark
sorenbarrett said:
Very nicely written this poem of rhyme with a metaphor of time passing in the change of day so it is for all of us and that clock that is winding down
May 24th, 2025 06:45
sorenbarrett said:
Very nicely written this poem of rhyme with a metaphor of time passing in the change of day so it is for all of us and that clock that is winding down
May 24th, 2025 06:45
Echoed and streamed
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful story told in this poem of deceit and consequences. Most intriguing it is in good rhyme that carries the reader onward and to a marvelous ending. A fave
May 23rd, 2025 08:53
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful story told in this poem of deceit and consequences. Most intriguing it is in good rhyme that carries the reader onward and to a marvelous ending. A fave
May 23rd, 2025 08:53
Reminding note
sorenbarrett said:
A haunting poem. So often I forget my dreams and could use a reminding note or maybe not if they are ones better forgotten. A most touching and lovely poem
May 22nd, 2025 06:51
sorenbarrett said:
A haunting poem. So often I forget my dreams and could use a reminding note or maybe not if they are ones better forgotten. A most touching and lovely poem
May 22nd, 2025 06:51
Stained head
sorenbarrett said:
Misery comes through clearly in this poem of pain and hurt. It emphasizes the stain left by it. The repetition in rhyming words underlines its suffering.
May 21st, 2025 05:41
sorenbarrett said:
Misery comes through clearly in this poem of pain and hurt. It emphasizes the stain left by it. The repetition in rhyming words underlines its suffering.
May 21st, 2025 05:41
A Thought: It
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting write about (it). A fun read that speaks to what it can be.
May 20th, 2025 15:43
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting write about (it). A fun read that speaks to what it can be.
May 20th, 2025 15:43
Damaged
sorenbarrett said:
A most wonderful metaphor constructed in this poem that works so well.
May 19th, 2025 13:07
sorenbarrett said:
A most wonderful metaphor constructed in this poem that works so well.
May 19th, 2025 13:07
Acceptable & Holes
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of something missing is the theme of this poem it leaves holes as is said in the poem. A ghostly write that haunts.
May 18th, 2025 08:09
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of something missing is the theme of this poem it leaves holes as is said in the poem. A ghostly write that haunts.
May 18th, 2025 08:09
I\'m busy
Doggerel Dave said:
In this, many of your other ‘brain dumps’ (maybe all – I haven’t managed to read the entirety) plus your public profile you show an awareness of your own situation and mind set which should be a model for everyone, in the military or out.
There are too few of you around.
May 17th, 2025 20:25
Doggerel Dave said:
In this, many of your other ‘brain dumps’ (maybe all – I haven’t managed to read the entirety) plus your public profile you show an awareness of your own situation and mind set which should be a model for everyone, in the military or out.
There are too few of you around.
May 17th, 2025 20:25
I\'m busy
sorenbarrett said:
Powerless to fight and give one\'s life for a fight one did not pick or a leader one did not elect. Pawn in a king\'s game. Good write
May 17th, 2025 06:42
sorenbarrett said:
Powerless to fight and give one\'s life for a fight one did not pick or a leader one did not elect. Pawn in a king\'s game. Good write
May 17th, 2025 06:42
Hungry for pride
sorenbarrett said:
Loyalty to ones job seems a thing of the past when one could count on a pension and everyone retired instead of being fired. Today reduction in force, automation, relocation, new management, stock holder demands all leave one with a job duration of a year or two at most. It is a two way street loyalty between employer and employee and today the road is out. A good read
May 16th, 2025 09:21
sorenbarrett said:
Loyalty to ones job seems a thing of the past when one could count on a pension and everyone retired instead of being fired. Today reduction in force, automation, relocation, new management, stock holder demands all leave one with a job duration of a year or two at most. It is a two way street loyalty between employer and employee and today the road is out. A good read
May 16th, 2025 09:21
A roosters yell
sorenbarrett said:
A fun read that works as a metaphor as well. Very nicely done
May 15th, 2025 12:54
sorenbarrett said:
A fun read that works as a metaphor as well. Very nicely done
May 15th, 2025 12:54
2 Fragments
sorenbarrett said:
These two may be fragments but tie together well and if there was ever an antiwar message it is here. The whole idea of greed underlying war is a strong one and my favorite lines are the last one of the final fragment (a painted mess in a field of mud.) My father, grandfather, and great grandfather all fought in wars and all said the same after it was over. It was just a bunch of foolishness, A fave
May 14th, 2025 06:42
sorenbarrett said:
These two may be fragments but tie together well and if there was ever an antiwar message it is here. The whole idea of greed underlying war is a strong one and my favorite lines are the last one of the final fragment (a painted mess in a field of mud.) My father, grandfather, and great grandfather all fought in wars and all said the same after it was over. It was just a bunch of foolishness, A fave
May 14th, 2025 06:42
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