Comments received on poems by Lonelykaren
MouNtAin!!
Bandiras86 said:
Thanks a lot for your efforts.... (let nature be your teacher), nice poem Lonelykaren, keep going.
February 23rd, 2012 12:31
Bandiras86 said:
Thanks a lot for your efforts.... (let nature be your teacher), nice poem Lonelykaren, keep going.
February 23rd, 2012 12:31
What is life!!:@
Dolphine29 said:
Deep deep core, the shattering echo of a feeling that is shared; even alone, that feeling is well known, and once shared the load comes less heavy.
Thank you for sharing :)
Best
D
August 19th, 2011 17:47
Dolphine29 said:
Deep deep core, the shattering echo of a feeling that is shared; even alone, that feeling is well known, and once shared the load comes less heavy.
Thank you for sharing :)
Best
D
August 19th, 2011 17:47
Diary of a broken girl # 1
Cheeky Missy said:
The speaker sounds just like a teenage girl. Her life is far from perfect, and yet not so ugly as she imagines it. She needs to learn to deal with it since if she becomes a woman, she will need to bear such griefs and personal displeasures gracefully, for life will ever be throwing unpleasant circumstances in her way. The embrace of a lover seems to be the answer to her, and yet it is not, exactly. What she needs is to know the truth and embrace it. Beautifully expressive of reality.
August 18th, 2011 22:02
Cheeky Missy said:
The speaker sounds just like a teenage girl. Her life is far from perfect, and yet not so ugly as she imagines it. She needs to learn to deal with it since if she becomes a woman, she will need to bear such griefs and personal displeasures gracefully, for life will ever be throwing unpleasant circumstances in her way. The embrace of a lover seems to be the answer to her, and yet it is not, exactly. What she needs is to know the truth and embrace it. Beautifully expressive of reality.
August 18th, 2011 22:02
Everytime
colly wally said:
Sad that someone so talented allows another to decide her feelings and her path of life. I'm hoping that you'll learn from these experiences that feelings shouldn't be allowed to run your life, but the other way around.
April 13th, 2011 01:56
colly wally said:
Sad that someone so talented allows another to decide her feelings and her path of life. I'm hoping that you'll learn from these experiences that feelings shouldn't be allowed to run your life, but the other way around.
April 13th, 2011 01:56
MouNtAin!!
colly wally said:
I can identify with this - the peace and joy that comes from God's creation. Lovely poetry.
April 13th, 2011 01:50
colly wally said:
I can identify with this - the peace and joy that comes from God's creation. Lovely poetry.
April 13th, 2011 01:50
Sick and Tired
colly wally said:
I understand a little of your feelings. Eventually you'll be joyful and thankful for life. Good poetry.
April 13th, 2011 01:47
colly wally said:
I understand a little of your feelings. Eventually you'll be joyful and thankful for life. Good poetry.
April 13th, 2011 01:47
MouNtAin!!
Lonelykaren said:
Thank you. That is what i was going for.
thanks for the 9. :)
March 25th, 2011 14:52
Lonelykaren said:
Thank you. That is what i was going for.
thanks for the 9. :)
March 25th, 2011 14:52
MouNtAin!!
Alexandre Landsley said:
I like this.........it has some sort of soothing tone to it......nicely done!!
March 23rd, 2011 21:23
Alexandre Landsley said:
I like this.........it has some sort of soothing tone to it......nicely done!!
March 23rd, 2011 21:23
Everytime
Cheeky Missy said:
It is very sorrowful and bitter. A very grievous situation, aptly expressed. Nicely done.
March 19th, 2011 22:01
Cheeky Missy said:
It is very sorrowful and bitter. A very grievous situation, aptly expressed. Nicely done.
March 19th, 2011 22:01
I want out!!
Cheeky Missy said:
You've depicted the torment very well. Sounds very miserable and discouraging. Death seems like the only escape...yet to where...the speaker is almost too depressed to care, but not quite. Good job.
February 26th, 2011 23:00
Cheeky Missy said:
You've depicted the torment very well. Sounds very miserable and discouraging. Death seems like the only escape...yet to where...the speaker is almost too depressed to care, but not quite. Good job.
February 26th, 2011 23:00
I want out!!
Alexandre Landsley said:
Your feelings are well express.......such a good write!!
February 26th, 2011 10:54
Alexandre Landsley said:
Your feelings are well express.......such a good write!!
February 26th, 2011 10:54
Silent Tears
Briana said:
you are not the only one that feels that pain. I know where you're coming from all i can say is that at the end of whatever you are going through things will turn out to be fine.
February 24th, 2011 18:38
Briana said:
you are not the only one that feels that pain. I know where you're coming from all i can say is that at the end of whatever you are going through things will turn out to be fine.
February 24th, 2011 18:38
I Can See
Cheeky Missy said:
Didn't your teacher tell you what you were doing wrong and what you needed to change to become the poet you aspired to be? That would be instructive and rather useful, to say the least. He didn't like the thoughts you presented in this?....I guess the problem is that once folk embrace free verse, there seems such a wide field that anyone can claim success in poetry, seems to me; and then again rhyme and rythm seem insufficient by themselves as well. Well of course I am nobody, but the images you presented in each stanza seemed good.
February 12th, 2011 14:27
Cheeky Missy said:
Didn't your teacher tell you what you were doing wrong and what you needed to change to become the poet you aspired to be? That would be instructive and rather useful, to say the least. He didn't like the thoughts you presented in this?....I guess the problem is that once folk embrace free verse, there seems such a wide field that anyone can claim success in poetry, seems to me; and then again rhyme and rythm seem insufficient by themselves as well. Well of course I am nobody, but the images you presented in each stanza seemed good.
February 12th, 2011 14:27
Simply Me
Marius said:
Beautiful poem! Know though that hate is too honest and strong a feeling to feel for anyone, especially for yourself. Love and accept yourself the way you are, Karen.
Be loved.
February 11th, 2011 15:20
Marius said:
Beautiful poem! Know though that hate is too honest and strong a feeling to feel for anyone, especially for yourself. Love and accept yourself the way you are, Karen.
Be loved.
February 11th, 2011 15:20
My Life!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Editing is work I'd rather not do myself, but sometimes our stuff looks better when we do. That said, you know God's our maker? Check out the short sermon on Mars hill in the end of Acts 17...it gives quite the perspective on all our lives and this world...I've found it useful myself....particularly the part where He says why....that we should seek Him and find Him, "though He be not far from every one of us....." Just a serious suggestion. This is a great piece for so often we(or some of us) do struggle with these thoughts that you're wrestling with in this poem....if we can find/if the Lord would show us the answer, instead of ending our earthly existence, that would be better. Good piece!
February 2nd, 2011 18:06
Cheeky Missy said:
Editing is work I'd rather not do myself, but sometimes our stuff looks better when we do. That said, you know God's our maker? Check out the short sermon on Mars hill in the end of Acts 17...it gives quite the perspective on all our lives and this world...I've found it useful myself....particularly the part where He says why....that we should seek Him and find Him, "though He be not far from every one of us....." Just a serious suggestion. This is a great piece for so often we(or some of us) do struggle with these thoughts that you're wrestling with in this poem....if we can find/if the Lord would show us the answer, instead of ending our earthly existence, that would be better. Good piece!
February 2nd, 2011 18:06
Simply Me
Cheeky Missy said:
It is a sad cry, which while almost begging to be loved, does not even reach out its arms for the requested acceptance....but rather defiantly squares it's shoulders, slumping with the discouragement. "By the sea..." seems an excellent metaphor aptly expressing the loneliness. Fascinating. And seems a cry so many tormented can echo. But, please cut some slack for the receiver and don't so readily believe they hate you.
January 27th, 2011 14:53
Cheeky Missy said:
It is a sad cry, which while almost begging to be loved, does not even reach out its arms for the requested acceptance....but rather defiantly squares it's shoulders, slumping with the discouragement. "By the sea..." seems an excellent metaphor aptly expressing the loneliness. Fascinating. And seems a cry so many tormented can echo. But, please cut some slack for the receiver and don't so readily believe they hate you.
January 27th, 2011 14:53
No Answer
Cheeky Missy said:
It is excellently expressed...except that you seem to bounce from one character to another, for God never shares laughs or conversations and yet the poem concludes with waiting on Him. Then don't let impatience win the day, and don't dictate the response you expect....read in the Bible to see how God answers, who He answers, what, and when...while you are waiting...remember Daniel 9 and 10, Ps 105:4, John 9:31 and elsewhere....seek the Lord....evermore.
January 26th, 2011 19:47
Cheeky Missy said:
It is excellently expressed...except that you seem to bounce from one character to another, for God never shares laughs or conversations and yet the poem concludes with waiting on Him. Then don't let impatience win the day, and don't dictate the response you expect....read in the Bible to see how God answers, who He answers, what, and when...while you are waiting...remember Daniel 9 and 10, Ps 105:4, John 9:31 and elsewhere....seek the Lord....evermore.
January 26th, 2011 19:47
No Answer
john said:
interesting... i don't understand the sword stabbing part though in the first stanza lol. what does it mean? makes me wonder what the line "i am so sorry about what i did" means. so also, who left who? i like the energy. good poem.
January 25th, 2011 23:19
john said:
interesting... i don't understand the sword stabbing part though in the first stanza lol. what does it mean? makes me wonder what the line "i am so sorry about what i did" means. so also, who left who? i like the energy. good poem.
January 25th, 2011 23:19
Not Again!!
Anna said:
You sound like my brother! Congrats! I like your poem, and I'd favor it if I can figure out how. And about the brother comment, that turns out to be a compliment. So no worries! Although, I don't think many poets use the words that are spelt like this; ppl. ETC.
January 23rd, 2011 21:07
Anna said:
You sound like my brother! Congrats! I like your poem, and I'd favor it if I can figure out how. And about the brother comment, that turns out to be a compliment. So no worries! Although, I don't think many poets use the words that are spelt like this; ppl. ETC.
January 23rd, 2011 21:07
Not Again!!
Cheeky Missy said:
You and the majority of us? So very much the same...when we thought we could change and improve ourselves. Salvation belongs unto the Lord. God works in His people to will and to do of His good pleasure....I don't know that any of us really possesses the ability within ourselves to deliver or save ourselves, improving ourselves, but it does seem we can make matters worse. So far as I can see, only the Lord can save and deliver us. As a poem, you excellently portrayed the situation of the depressed person....great job! And with a hint of end-rhyming, which I enjoyed.
January 21st, 2011 15:18
Cheeky Missy said:
You and the majority of us? So very much the same...when we thought we could change and improve ourselves. Salvation belongs unto the Lord. God works in His people to will and to do of His good pleasure....I don't know that any of us really possesses the ability within ourselves to deliver or save ourselves, improving ourselves, but it does seem we can make matters worse. So far as I can see, only the Lord can save and deliver us. As a poem, you excellently portrayed the situation of the depressed person....great job! And with a hint of end-rhyming, which I enjoyed.
January 21st, 2011 15:18
