Comments received on poems by Michael Edwards
AND PUPPETS DANCE
L. B. Mek said:
I am a huge fan
of form, being utilised to accentuate an aspect
of the poetry or the poetic voice;
its much more meaningful than
words and syllables being counted out and stifled to fit-in with some random form or meter rules,
at least for me,
(but each to their own)..
anyway, there are two immediate and direct connections I make
when looking at the aesthetics of your poem, initially
firstly: I link the \'dance\'
in your title
with the easily discernible line pattern
of \'One\' - \'one, two, three\'
just like, some traditional dance steps are counted out,
(introducing concepts of melodic synchronicity
in the relationship your poetry goes-on to depict)
second: your choice
of layout for the two stanzas being interchangeable
almost like how everything is reversed in a mirror;
whilst still being a true a reflection;
(just like the prevalent symmetry
imbued,
in the abstract/surrealism of your painting);
and then, words like \'amorphous, masquerade and lassitude\'
are utilised with purpose to emphasis the free spirit nature
of the person you\'re describing in the second stanza
(almost ambivalent or abstracted
or more poetically,
someone impossible to describe completely,
someone who exists beyond everyday characterisation or labelling,
someone genuinely: Unique
in your eyes)..
and then lastly,
you hint at the intimacy in your relationship, because
you describe how this \'melodic charm\' of hers
only show, during rare times
when its least expected for her to display these alluring traits
\'intervals of quietude\'
\'where few birds sing\'...
(all in all
I found this poem to be a beautiful dedication,
impassioned in its choice wording
and comprehensively - transparently sincere, in its portrayal)
simply a brilliant work of Art
straight from the heart...
(as always
forgive me if I\'ve missed the mark completely
and gone, in a completely different direction to your own,
original interpretation or meaning)
thanks for sharing, my friend
this was a genuine poetic treat!
October 25th, 2021 06:09
L. B. Mek said:
I am a huge fan
of form, being utilised to accentuate an aspect
of the poetry or the poetic voice;
its much more meaningful than
words and syllables being counted out and stifled to fit-in with some random form or meter rules,
at least for me,
(but each to their own)..
anyway, there are two immediate and direct connections I make
when looking at the aesthetics of your poem, initially
firstly: I link the \'dance\'
in your title
with the easily discernible line pattern
of \'One\' - \'one, two, three\'
just like, some traditional dance steps are counted out,
(introducing concepts of melodic synchronicity
in the relationship your poetry goes-on to depict)
second: your choice
of layout for the two stanzas being interchangeable
almost like how everything is reversed in a mirror;
whilst still being a true a reflection;
(just like the prevalent symmetry
imbued,
in the abstract/surrealism of your painting);
and then, words like \'amorphous, masquerade and lassitude\'
are utilised with purpose to emphasis the free spirit nature
of the person you\'re describing in the second stanza
(almost ambivalent or abstracted
or more poetically,
someone impossible to describe completely,
someone who exists beyond everyday characterisation or labelling,
someone genuinely: Unique
in your eyes)..
and then lastly,
you hint at the intimacy in your relationship, because
you describe how this \'melodic charm\' of hers
only show, during rare times
when its least expected for her to display these alluring traits
\'intervals of quietude\'
\'where few birds sing\'...
(all in all
I found this poem to be a beautiful dedication,
impassioned in its choice wording
and comprehensively - transparently sincere, in its portrayal)
simply a brilliant work of Art
straight from the heart...
(as always
forgive me if I\'ve missed the mark completely
and gone, in a completely different direction to your own,
original interpretation or meaning)
thanks for sharing, my friend
this was a genuine poetic treat!
October 25th, 2021 06:09
AND PUPPETS DANCE
dusk arising said:
interpretation.... a haunting sadness pervades and invades otherwise light hearted dreams.
Great flow and an amazing mental picture/story developes.
Interesting picture, is that the musical instrument heronimus bosch played upon.
October 25th, 2021 03:14
dusk arising said:
interpretation.... a haunting sadness pervades and invades otherwise light hearted dreams.
Great flow and an amazing mental picture/story developes.
Interesting picture, is that the musical instrument heronimus bosch played upon.
October 25th, 2021 03:14
AND PUPPETS DANCE
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M.
How does Miss Berles see this?!
October 25th, 2021 02:19
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M.
How does Miss Berles see this?!
October 25th, 2021 02:19
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
Laura🌻 said:
Michael,
Thank you for sharing and making me smile. Great art…love it.
Have a wonderful Saturday.
Laura🌻
October 23rd, 2021 01:46
Laura🌻 said:
Michael,
Thank you for sharing and making me smile. Great art…love it.
Have a wonderful Saturday.
Laura🌻
October 23rd, 2021 01:46
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
A.H. Browning said:
I’m smiling. Thanks for that. I think I have finally found the exact words that are worthy and appropriate to put on my tombstone (with your permission) 👍
Is that your artistry above the poem?
October 22nd, 2021 21:28
A.H. Browning said:
I’m smiling. Thanks for that. I think I have finally found the exact words that are worthy and appropriate to put on my tombstone (with your permission) 👍
Is that your artistry above the poem?
October 22nd, 2021 21:28
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
L. B. Mek said:
(I see your name, my friend
and a part of me, that exists in a taut state
simply, exhales for a little while...)
and yes, I too recycle
all the shit that\'s thrown at me
and yes, wise Poet
it sure does make good fertilizer!
which makes good angry potatoes
that insures that moonshine
of fury, I carry with me
is enabled to overcome
all the hurdles, that exist
to trip me...
(still hoping for the best!
thanks for letting us know you\'re still going strong Michael)..
loved the picture, tried to zoom-in
to that core middle colour
looks to me like its that vibrant tint of clotting blood,
and then I got to thinking
are the other colours
born out of that nucleus, essential
or do they work in-reverse
and are condensing to make,
that essential, nucleus;
or even better,
is that existence? a simultaneous experience
of distilled and burgeoning sensations?
either way, that\'s Art
I can finish a wine bottle contemplating over..
thank you!
October 22nd, 2021 05:06
L. B. Mek said:
(I see your name, my friend
and a part of me, that exists in a taut state
simply, exhales for a little while...)
and yes, I too recycle
all the shit that\'s thrown at me
and yes, wise Poet
it sure does make good fertilizer!
which makes good angry potatoes
that insures that moonshine
of fury, I carry with me
is enabled to overcome
all the hurdles, that exist
to trip me...
(still hoping for the best!
thanks for letting us know you\'re still going strong Michael)..
loved the picture, tried to zoom-in
to that core middle colour
looks to me like its that vibrant tint of clotting blood,
and then I got to thinking
are the other colours
born out of that nucleus, essential
or do they work in-reverse
and are condensing to make,
that essential, nucleus;
or even better,
is that existence? a simultaneous experience
of distilled and burgeoning sensations?
either way, that\'s Art
I can finish a wine bottle contemplating over..
thank you!
October 22nd, 2021 05:06
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
dusk arising said:
At last.... now i feel i can fart unrestrained.
Great write... outside the box again.
October 22nd, 2021 02:12
dusk arising said:
At last.... now i feel i can fart unrestrained.
Great write... outside the box again.
October 22nd, 2021 02:12
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
orchidee said:
Ohh, good write Michael. Why does it always hit the fan?! We should stand out of the way of the fan!
You seen Berle-Ington Bertie?!
October 22nd, 2021 01:47
orchidee said:
Ohh, good write Michael. Why does it always hit the fan?! We should stand out of the way of the fan!
You seen Berle-Ington Bertie?!
October 22nd, 2021 01:47
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
Goldfinch60 said:
My first laugh of the day Michael, thank you.
Andy
October 22nd, 2021 01:43
Goldfinch60 said:
My first laugh of the day Michael, thank you.
Andy
October 22nd, 2021 01:43
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M. lol, in your series on dib-berles and dab-berles.
You met Dib and Dab?!
October 13th, 2021 01:53
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M. lol, in your series on dib-berles and dab-berles.
You met Dib and Dab?!
October 13th, 2021 01:53
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
Goldfinch60 said:
Fun words about a very serious subject Michael.
Good to see you back.
Brilliant artwork.
Andy
October 13th, 2021 00:49
Goldfinch60 said:
Fun words about a very serious subject Michael.
Good to see you back.
Brilliant artwork.
Andy
October 13th, 2021 00:49
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (7)
Doggerel Dave said:
Got a good laugh out of your last two lines Michael. Wicked image.
\'Tis a serious subject, though (and please don\'t look to Australia for models/answers).
October 12th, 2021 16:14
Doggerel Dave said:
Got a good laugh out of your last two lines Michael. Wicked image.
\'Tis a serious subject, though (and please don\'t look to Australia for models/answers).
October 12th, 2021 16:14
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Fay Slimm. said:
Cant stop the giggle exploding when thoughts of what a mighty big plug that would need Mike - grrrrrreat to see you back with a wonderful water-colour plus your unique and welcome wit.
October 12th, 2021 15:42
Fay Slimm. said:
Cant stop the giggle exploding when thoughts of what a mighty big plug that would need Mike - grrrrrreat to see you back with a wonderful water-colour plus your unique and welcome wit.
October 12th, 2021 15:42
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (6)
L. B. Mek said:
firstly your painting:
I love the geometric fluidity
of all your diverse and distinct imagery
that orderly chaos of wilful nature
grabs you,
makes you tilt your head, at times
has you asking, wondering
contemplating
in short
it makes you realise, you\'re looking at Art, with a vivacious zeal for life
as its: go-to voice!
nothing tepid or measured
this be that mathematical accuracy of existences chaos
framed, distilled
with ease of relatability and mystique of creativity!
secondly your words:
😄
(forgive my overzealous eccentricity, hopefully by now you\'ve learnt to put up with me,) lol
Thanks for letting us know, all
is as well as can be dear Poet
and sharing your genius again.
I still have me fingers and toes all crossed, my friend
September 24th, 2021 04:01
L. B. Mek said:
firstly your painting:
I love the geometric fluidity
of all your diverse and distinct imagery
that orderly chaos of wilful nature
grabs you,
makes you tilt your head, at times
has you asking, wondering
contemplating
in short
it makes you realise, you\'re looking at Art, with a vivacious zeal for life
as its: go-to voice!
nothing tepid or measured
this be that mathematical accuracy of existences chaos
framed, distilled
with ease of relatability and mystique of creativity!
secondly your words:
😄
(forgive my overzealous eccentricity, hopefully by now you\'ve learnt to put up with me,) lol
Thanks for letting us know, all
is as well as can be dear Poet
and sharing your genius again.
I still have me fingers and toes all crossed, my friend
September 24th, 2021 04:01
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (6)
orchidee said:
Good write M. lol.
Fido will bark fiercely at me for this:
\'My dog\'s got no nose\'
\'How does he smell?\'
\'Awful!\'
September 24th, 2021 01:50
orchidee said:
Good write M. lol.
Fido will bark fiercely at me for this:
\'My dog\'s got no nose\'
\'How does he smell?\'
\'Awful!\'
September 24th, 2021 01:50
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (6)
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write Michael but like Fay the artwork intrigued me, there i so much going on in it.
PS going to The Ashmolean today.
Andy
September 24th, 2021 00:47
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write Michael but like Fay the artwork intrigued me, there i so much going on in it.
PS going to The Ashmolean today.
Andy
September 24th, 2021 00:47
DIBBLES AND DABBLES (6)
Laura🌻 said:
Michael,
I enjoyed reading your witty couplet and your artwork of course. I’ve been thinking about your wife. I hope she’s doing better.
Laura🌻
September 24th, 2021 00:37
Laura🌻 said:
Michael,
I enjoyed reading your witty couplet and your artwork of course. I’ve been thinking about your wife. I hope she’s doing better.
Laura🌻
September 24th, 2021 00:37
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Doggerel Dave said:
That\'s that then - I don\'\'t want no more posies.
When \'s (7)?
September 23rd, 2021 19:20
Doggerel Dave said:
That\'s that then - I don\'\'t want no more posies.
When \'s (7)?
September 23rd, 2021 19:20
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Fay Slimm. said:
So good to see you posting again Michael - - I chuckled at your witty two liner and stayed a while longer studying your amazing art work - - do hope things are improving at home health-wise dear friend.
September 23rd, 2021 15:30
Fay Slimm. said:
So good to see you posting again Michael - - I chuckled at your witty two liner and stayed a while longer studying your amazing art work - - do hope things are improving at home health-wise dear friend.
September 23rd, 2021 15:30
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dusk arising said:
Flora don\'t stand too much study, it melts.
September 23rd, 2021 10:43
dusk arising said:
Flora don\'t stand too much study, it melts.
September 23rd, 2021 10:43
CONSTRUCT
Neville said:
I used to struggle with certain constructs but you made everything fit perfectly mate .... well bloomin done and welcome back ............. N
September 19th, 2021 12:19
Neville said:
I used to struggle with certain constructs but you made everything fit perfectly mate .... well bloomin done and welcome back ............. N
September 19th, 2021 12:19
CONSTRUCT
Doggerel Dave said:
Yes - reminds me a little of my last trip to the Old Country. I don\'t think I will return now - which may be just as well, as everything changes...
Great to see you back, Michael.
September 19th, 2021 06:19
Doggerel Dave said:
Yes - reminds me a little of my last trip to the Old Country. I don\'t think I will return now - which may be just as well, as everything changes...
Great to see you back, Michael.
September 19th, 2021 06:19
CONSTRUCT
dusk arising said:
Taint a permanent boundary though is it. Looking around the perimeters of my city i see HUGE industrial units in what was pastureland two years ago.
Where are we going?
September 19th, 2021 03:13
dusk arising said:
Taint a permanent boundary though is it. Looking around the perimeters of my city i see HUGE industrial units in what was pastureland two years ago.
Where are we going?
September 19th, 2021 03:13
CONSTRUCT
Fay Slimm. said:
So good to read your engaging words again Michael and view your impressive art work - I do agree that those verdant hills are the best medicine for \"man\'s construct\" and ever will be. Warmest of wishes from Fay
September 19th, 2021 03:03
Fay Slimm. said:
So good to read your engaging words again Michael and view your impressive art work - I do agree that those verdant hills are the best medicine for \"man\'s construct\" and ever will be. Warmest of wishes from Fay
September 19th, 2021 03:03
CONSTRUCT
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M.
I would not pinch these words, but could add them as a verse, slightly adapted, to my harvest theme hymn for today - if you wish?
September 19th, 2021 02:25
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M.
I would not pinch these words, but could add them as a verse, slightly adapted, to my harvest theme hymn for today - if you wish?
September 19th, 2021 02:25
CONSTRUCT
Goldfinch60 said:
That verdant land is now suffering so much because of man\'s greed Michael.
Andy
September 19th, 2021 02:23
Goldfinch60 said:
That verdant land is now suffering so much because of man\'s greed Michael.
Andy
September 19th, 2021 02:23
Harold\'s Lament
myself and me said:
Obviously, it was not a good idea to bend down to tie the lace.
August 23rd, 2021 16:32
myself and me said:
Obviously, it was not a good idea to bend down to tie the lace.
August 23rd, 2021 16:32
Harold\'s Lament
L. B. Mek said:
a fun read Michael
not sure how we go about verifying
one historical \'fact\'
as being more \'factual\' than another
generally I assume, all information
has its accuracy decrease
with each forgotten second
August 23rd, 2021 05:11
L. B. Mek said:
a fun read Michael
not sure how we go about verifying
one historical \'fact\'
as being more \'factual\' than another
generally I assume, all information
has its accuracy decrease
with each forgotten second
August 23rd, 2021 05:11
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