Comments received on poems by A
Without You (its a moving on thing kindof)
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A fab superb poem and i like how it is paradoxical in expressing that you will be both fine without the person but also not so ffine. I like the word plsy on the word game. Kudos!!
Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
May 7th, 2021 02:46
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A fab superb poem and i like how it is paradoxical in expressing that you will be both fine without the person but also not so ffine. I like the word plsy on the word game. Kudos!!
Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
May 7th, 2021 02:46
Without You (its a moving on thing kindof)
Goldfinch60 said:
You will move forward in your life and all will be fine.
Andy
April 20th, 2021 00:26
Goldfinch60 said:
You will move forward in your life and all will be fine.
Andy
April 20th, 2021 00:26
Without You (its a moving on thing kindof)
Doggerel Dave said:
Of course you will be alright (I\'ve had a little nose around in your back catalogue - not comprehensive, I\'m afraid; so little time). You have a broad view of life and the world, strong opinions which will be all the better without the \'benefit\' of someone else\'s filter.
April 19th, 2021 20:12
Doggerel Dave said:
Of course you will be alright (I\'ve had a little nose around in your back catalogue - not comprehensive, I\'m afraid; so little time). You have a broad view of life and the world, strong opinions which will be all the better without the \'benefit\' of someone else\'s filter.
April 19th, 2021 20:12
I think im loosing my mind.
myself and me said:
You are totally at the right mind. Well penned.
May 10th, 2020 23:39
myself and me said:
You are totally at the right mind. Well penned.
May 10th, 2020 23:39
I think im loosing my mind.
orchidee said:
Oohhh, you might be in love then! Feeling all dreamy, etc.
What would I know? lol. I seem to swoon at the least \'hot\' poem - heehee.
May 10th, 2020 03:40
orchidee said:
Oohhh, you might be in love then! Feeling all dreamy, etc.
What would I know? lol. I seem to swoon at the least \'hot\' poem - heehee.
May 10th, 2020 03:40
I think im loosing my mind.
Goldfinch60 said:
Fly high A, you will be fine in the wonderful future that will be your life.
May 10th, 2020 02:38
Goldfinch60 said:
Fly high A, you will be fine in the wonderful future that will be your life.
May 10th, 2020 02:38
Realism. Short n simple
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A fine muse poem, it is superb as a poem as you think things. Kudos.
Plz Pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
May 8th, 2020 09:45
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A fine muse poem, it is superb as a poem as you think things. Kudos.
Plz Pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
May 8th, 2020 09:45
Realism. Short n simple
dusk arising said:
Feelings into words are the equasion which is the making of a poet. It differs daily or even by the minute.
Warm windows and summer eves are tranquility of mind i guess. Yet a feeling of creativity has brought you here with, as you say, nothing large to say, nothing to make the world shudder. But the poetry of your words moves your world one step on and is appreciated here for your art/skill/craft.
March 26th, 2020 03:29
dusk arising said:
Feelings into words are the equasion which is the making of a poet. It differs daily or even by the minute.
Warm windows and summer eves are tranquility of mind i guess. Yet a feeling of creativity has brought you here with, as you say, nothing large to say, nothing to make the world shudder. But the poetry of your words moves your world one step on and is appreciated here for your art/skill/craft.
March 26th, 2020 03:29
Fucking Mondays
orchidee said:
Erm, yes. TMI (Too Much Information) to explain all the meaning! Ooh.
December 5th, 2019 03:15
orchidee said:
Erm, yes. TMI (Too Much Information) to explain all the meaning! Ooh.
December 5th, 2019 03:15
Fucking Mondays
Poetic Dan said:
I did and fell in but no worries! I was just in time for tea!
Great stuff
December 5th, 2019 02:23
Poetic Dan said:
I did and fell in but no worries! I was just in time for tea!
Great stuff
December 5th, 2019 02:23
Fucking Mondays
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A sublime poem and you express your muse in a swell way. Kudos.
Pls pleez do review/ comment my newest poem too.
December 4th, 2019 23:23
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A sublime poem and you express your muse in a swell way. Kudos.
Pls pleez do review/ comment my newest poem too.
December 4th, 2019 23:23
Fucking Mondays
Leaaa said:
I love the aggressive humor in this short story. It reminds me of the saying \"It\'s always gotta be something\" life is going to tear an infinite amount of holes, just have to learn to not give a shit.
December 4th, 2019 23:19
Leaaa said:
I love the aggressive humor in this short story. It reminds me of the saying \"It\'s always gotta be something\" life is going to tear an infinite amount of holes, just have to learn to not give a shit.
December 4th, 2019 23:19
\'Paint me blue.\' ///also happy anniversary everyone~
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING FRIEND : ANGELA HERE : Happy Aniversary ONE Year is a long time on this site ! Fortunately I studied GREEK at School so I enjoyed this POEM ! The Title DEPRESSION and the final line *Paint me Blue* form a link to the rest of the POEM !
VERSE 1. Feeling peeved ~ Empty thought ~ Empty heart ~ Empty home ~ Emotions we all feel ! Im twice your Age but one can still feel depressed. BRIAN (35) My Fiancee and I are 11,500 miles apart LONDON (B) and AUCKLAND NZ (A) Im on a Work Exchange which will end in OCTOBER !
VERSE 2. Loved & not Shoved (for someone better) ! Do your still think GOOD comes from FATE or are you still trapped in a puddle of your own RESPONSES ?
VERSE 3. Fix ME up ~ renew ME ~ tear ME down ~ (Depress ME) ~ PAINT ME BLUE !
I LOVE IT : Great Poem - Great Cathartic Message !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Your Friend : ANGELA 🧡
Please cheack our site ~ Thanks A !
June 13th, 2019 15:26
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING FRIEND : ANGELA HERE : Happy Aniversary ONE Year is a long time on this site ! Fortunately I studied GREEK at School so I enjoyed this POEM ! The Title DEPRESSION and the final line *Paint me Blue* form a link to the rest of the POEM !
VERSE 1. Feeling peeved ~ Empty thought ~ Empty heart ~ Empty home ~ Emotions we all feel ! Im twice your Age but one can still feel depressed. BRIAN (35) My Fiancee and I are 11,500 miles apart LONDON (B) and AUCKLAND NZ (A) Im on a Work Exchange which will end in OCTOBER !
VERSE 2. Loved & not Shoved (for someone better) ! Do your still think GOOD comes from FATE or are you still trapped in a puddle of your own RESPONSES ?
VERSE 3. Fix ME up ~ renew ME ~ tear ME down ~ (Depress ME) ~ PAINT ME BLUE !
I LOVE IT : Great Poem - Great Cathartic Message !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Your Friend : ANGELA 🧡
Please cheack our site ~ Thanks A !
June 13th, 2019 15:26
Well, Shit.
Nicholas Browning said:
Yeah, this would be correct. To love is usually to throw everything else out of the window.
Good title, too :p
March 18th, 2019 15:22
Nicholas Browning said:
Yeah, this would be correct. To love is usually to throw everything else out of the window.
Good title, too :p
March 18th, 2019 15:22
Well, Shit.
orchidee said:
Oops, should be marked 18+ I think. Woof! I got a watchdog, Fido, barks at 18+ stuff! lol.
March 18th, 2019 15:18
orchidee said:
Oops, should be marked 18+ I think. Woof! I got a watchdog, Fido, barks at 18+ stuff! lol.
March 18th, 2019 15:18
Catching Fireflies
Nicholas Browning said:
Well, geez, where do I even start.
From the moment you are born people project their expectations on you. They tell you what they THINK is real, and try to force the same ideals on you. The precise reason I don\'t believe in God is because I was forcefully made to worship something I couldn\'t even see from a young age. So, I grew up and realized that if there was a God, he was a bit of a prick. I mean, why else would innocent children be born only to develop cancer and die before age 5? Makes no sense to me to this day. Anywho, on to the next.
\"Who am I?\"
Very potent question. It takes a lot of time and thought to begin processing what the meaning to that question even is, and harder still to find the answer. More or less it\'s something very obvious and subtle, but very hard to find if your \"Personality\" forbids you from seeing the plain truth. Change is not so easily made, and even if it was it wouldn\'t disregard the difficulty of answering the question of what one\'s true nature really is.
Who you want to become though is more complicated I think. It\'s impossible to fight through your natural born state of mind, unless you alter your intelligence with harmful drugs that limit your thinking capacity to almost zero. Kinda like a zombie. It\'s not easy to become anything, and it\'s also true that nothing is gained without having to sacrifice something for it. So, whether it be a job, friendship, love, or anything else that carries weight behind it in your eyes - Never lose sight of what you know you desire. But always make sure that there\'s a decent goal behind obtaining something. Like financial stability or peace of mind. Just some examples, but the choice and course of action both lay upon your conscience, so best of luck regarding that. I chose this poem to read because I enjoyed the title. I like fireflies and what they symbolize. I commented because I enjoyed the topic and theme. Most people on this site don\'t like to discuss these things, which is probably why no one else commented. Just a heads up! See you around.
March 12th, 2019 17:30
Nicholas Browning said:
Well, geez, where do I even start.
From the moment you are born people project their expectations on you. They tell you what they THINK is real, and try to force the same ideals on you. The precise reason I don\'t believe in God is because I was forcefully made to worship something I couldn\'t even see from a young age. So, I grew up and realized that if there was a God, he was a bit of a prick. I mean, why else would innocent children be born only to develop cancer and die before age 5? Makes no sense to me to this day. Anywho, on to the next.
\"Who am I?\"
Very potent question. It takes a lot of time and thought to begin processing what the meaning to that question even is, and harder still to find the answer. More or less it\'s something very obvious and subtle, but very hard to find if your \"Personality\" forbids you from seeing the plain truth. Change is not so easily made, and even if it was it wouldn\'t disregard the difficulty of answering the question of what one\'s true nature really is.
Who you want to become though is more complicated I think. It\'s impossible to fight through your natural born state of mind, unless you alter your intelligence with harmful drugs that limit your thinking capacity to almost zero. Kinda like a zombie. It\'s not easy to become anything, and it\'s also true that nothing is gained without having to sacrifice something for it. So, whether it be a job, friendship, love, or anything else that carries weight behind it in your eyes - Never lose sight of what you know you desire. But always make sure that there\'s a decent goal behind obtaining something. Like financial stability or peace of mind. Just some examples, but the choice and course of action both lay upon your conscience, so best of luck regarding that. I chose this poem to read because I enjoyed the title. I like fireflies and what they symbolize. I commented because I enjoyed the topic and theme. Most people on this site don\'t like to discuss these things, which is probably why no one else commented. Just a heads up! See you around.
March 12th, 2019 17:30
Hi, Im lonely.
Nicholas Browning said:
They way your rhyme scheme carries over from a stanza to the next is interesting. By the way, that\'s a lot of layers.
March 12th, 2019 17:17
Nicholas Browning said:
They way your rhyme scheme carries over from a stanza to the next is interesting. By the way, that\'s a lot of layers.
March 12th, 2019 17:17
I didn\'t know what to call this
orchidee said:
Erm, call it \'This\'ll hurt your eyes!\' (that yellow/orange!) lol.
Or - a stunning, deeply-thought out title (nope?) - \'Friends\'. Ta-Dah! lol.
February 19th, 2019 06:53
orchidee said:
Erm, call it \'This\'ll hurt your eyes!\' (that yellow/orange!) lol.
Or - a stunning, deeply-thought out title (nope?) - \'Friends\'. Ta-Dah! lol.
February 19th, 2019 06:53
A Society In The Clouds (An LGBTQ+ Poem)
kevin browne said:
Brilliantly written with intermittent moments of unexpected rhyme. The under current flow is strong and powerful. I\'ve been bi-sexual since I was 17 and have only spoke of it twice to people abroad. I\'ve cried over it, and died over it, too. For me, I\'ve suffered from bring bi-sexual. I found it a bit beneath me really. I\'m 49 now, but still have the same feelings over both sexes. My daughter, Kirsty is Gay, and I first noticed her signs from an age of when she was 12/`13 years old. Through her puberty her hormones were attracted to the same sex. WE never spoke about until her 21st birthday when she rang me up and told me she is gay. I knew after she was 114 she was Gay because there was never a boy whom she fancied, I questioned frequently if there was a boy friend and the answer was a always a no. She is happily settled now with Tash. 2 very happy and lucky to have found each other. Oh, how I related, and felt as if it were me you were writing about. Thank you for your gestures towards human sexualities.
February 5th, 2019 20:55
kevin browne said:
Brilliantly written with intermittent moments of unexpected rhyme. The under current flow is strong and powerful. I\'ve been bi-sexual since I was 17 and have only spoke of it twice to people abroad. I\'ve cried over it, and died over it, too. For me, I\'ve suffered from bring bi-sexual. I found it a bit beneath me really. I\'m 49 now, but still have the same feelings over both sexes. My daughter, Kirsty is Gay, and I first noticed her signs from an age of when she was 12/`13 years old. Through her puberty her hormones were attracted to the same sex. WE never spoke about until her 21st birthday when she rang me up and told me she is gay. I knew after she was 114 she was Gay because there was never a boy whom she fancied, I questioned frequently if there was a boy friend and the answer was a always a no. She is happily settled now with Tash. 2 very happy and lucky to have found each other. Oh, how I related, and felt as if it were me you were writing about. Thank you for your gestures towards human sexualities.
February 5th, 2019 20:55
A Society In The Clouds (An LGBTQ+ Poem)
psychofemale said:
well said, everyone needs to take the time to read this. good stuff here.
February 5th, 2019 19:44
psychofemale said:
well said, everyone needs to take the time to read this. good stuff here.
February 5th, 2019 19:44
The king and his army have arrived.
SLR said:
You classified it as fantasy but it feels spiritual to me. This sounds like judgement day. The king and his army. And the woman as Christendom. Lots of analogies in the bible.
May 17th, 2018 20:46
SLR said:
You classified it as fantasy but it feels spiritual to me. This sounds like judgement day. The king and his army. And the woman as Christendom. Lots of analogies in the bible.
May 17th, 2018 20:46
Mindset of a Logophile
SLR said:
I love it. I also love words. Their importance in everyday life, on special occasions, To explain, to teach, to describe. Everything makes more impact when the exact right words are used.
May 16th, 2018 22:34
SLR said:
I love it. I also love words. Their importance in everyday life, on special occasions, To explain, to teach, to describe. Everything makes more impact when the exact right words are used.
May 16th, 2018 22:34
Mindset of a Logophile
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS AEMA ~ I got the message !
Love your second poem ! This is a real modern (21st C) Free Verse Poem. Dynamic ~ full of rhythm ~ straight from your heart ! Modern poetry is WORDS in any order but with a MESSAGE ! Poetry & Literature are infinite ~ millions of words in hundreds of languages so we can only dip our toe in ! However any interaction with the World\'s Literature is always a blessing ~ what languages are you studying ? Keep writing and I promise to write a positive comment on every poem you post ~ I am an Encourager ! Yours BRIAN Please check my POEMS & FUSIONS (the latest one is on ARTISTS ~ You should try a FUSION ~ OK
May 16th, 2018 11:32
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS AEMA ~ I got the message !
Love your second poem ! This is a real modern (21st C) Free Verse Poem. Dynamic ~ full of rhythm ~ straight from your heart ! Modern poetry is WORDS in any order but with a MESSAGE ! Poetry & Literature are infinite ~ millions of words in hundreds of languages so we can only dip our toe in ! However any interaction with the World\'s Literature is always a blessing ~ what languages are you studying ? Keep writing and I promise to write a positive comment on every poem you post ~ I am an Encourager ! Yours BRIAN Please check my POEMS & FUSIONS (the latest one is on ARTISTS ~ You should try a FUSION ~ OK
May 16th, 2018 11:32
Songs of the Rain
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Greetings from England AEMS (Love Louisiana !) welcome to MPS ~ it\'s a great Poetry Site ~ consider us all an extension of your HOME SCHOOL ! The way MPS works is we comment on each others poems and build up a CIRCLE of MPS Friends ~ OK !
Love the tune you included ~ it sounded just like the rain on my shed roof !
Love the POEM it is a GEM ! Rain is what makes PLANET EARTH a living Planet ! You describe the WATER CYCLE which is driven bt the Sun and circulates and purifies the Earth\'s water supply !
I teach APPLIED SCIENCE so here is my summation !
STANZA 1. Yes the rain is stored in the clouds
STANZA 2. As the rain falls it sees how essential it is to the FLORA (see how happy flowers are in the rain !) and the FAUNA and that it makes them all HAPPY (including farmers !)
STANZA 3. It sings its SONG - It makes its call and brings water and life - Raindrops are happy and tinkle when they fall !
STANZA 4. Love the analogy - we can open our ears & eyes and be like love & life giving raindrops - AMEN
STANZA 5. WE need to listen to \"The Song of the Rain\" I sure do !
STANZA 6. IF ONLY - IF ONLY - We could be more loving & giving - like the RAINDROPS !
This is an awesome poem - I give it an A* - you have great Spiritual insight - more please Yours BRIAN (UK) P
lease check my POEMS and my FUSION on Artists - To see it press DEVELOPING - OK
May 16th, 2018 09:56
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Greetings from England AEMS (Love Louisiana !) welcome to MPS ~ it\'s a great Poetry Site ~ consider us all an extension of your HOME SCHOOL ! The way MPS works is we comment on each others poems and build up a CIRCLE of MPS Friends ~ OK !
Love the tune you included ~ it sounded just like the rain on my shed roof !
Love the POEM it is a GEM ! Rain is what makes PLANET EARTH a living Planet ! You describe the WATER CYCLE which is driven bt the Sun and circulates and purifies the Earth\'s water supply !
I teach APPLIED SCIENCE so here is my summation !
STANZA 1. Yes the rain is stored in the clouds
STANZA 2. As the rain falls it sees how essential it is to the FLORA (see how happy flowers are in the rain !) and the FAUNA and that it makes them all HAPPY (including farmers !)
STANZA 3. It sings its SONG - It makes its call and brings water and life - Raindrops are happy and tinkle when they fall !
STANZA 4. Love the analogy - we can open our ears & eyes and be like love & life giving raindrops - AMEN
STANZA 5. WE need to listen to \"The Song of the Rain\" I sure do !
STANZA 6. IF ONLY - IF ONLY - We could be more loving & giving - like the RAINDROPS !
This is an awesome poem - I give it an A* - you have great Spiritual insight - more please Yours BRIAN (UK) P
lease check my POEMS and my FUSION on Artists - To see it press DEVELOPING - OK
May 16th, 2018 09:56
Songs of the Rain
SLR said:
I see that we have some things in common. I also hear a song when it rains. I\'ve been told I\'m odd and my viewpoint frequently different than other people I know. I was also homeschooled for a while. Great post! You\'re DEFINITELY one to watch
May 15th, 2018 22:06
SLR said:
I see that we have some things in common. I also hear a song when it rains. I\'ve been told I\'m odd and my viewpoint frequently different than other people I know. I was also homeschooled for a while. Great post! You\'re DEFINITELY one to watch
May 15th, 2018 22:06
Songs of the Rain
a__pott said:
Incredible take on rain, an already beautiful thing made more beautiful. A favorite
May 14th, 2018 19:51
a__pott said:
Incredible take on rain, an already beautiful thing made more beautiful. A favorite
May 14th, 2018 19:51
Songs of the Rain
Lorna said:
This is a beautiful view of the rain! If I were 13 I too would be a bit horrified by today\'s world...... soon though you will be the \"people\" of the future and maybe you can change it...... Happy Birthday......
May 14th, 2018 15:53
Lorna said:
This is a beautiful view of the rain! If I were 13 I too would be a bit horrified by today\'s world...... soon though you will be the \"people\" of the future and maybe you can change it...... Happy Birthday......
May 14th, 2018 15:53
