Comments received on poems by Neville



Freshly Squeezed
SureshG said:

WOW!

I thought you were going to go to what happened before, in between those sheets, but really

WOW!

July 8th, 2021 13:22

Freshly Squeezed
Jerry Reynolds said:

Beautiful write, Neville.
Loved walking through the laundry on the line a wonderful smell. Haven\'t thought of it in years,
till now. Thanks
I

July 8th, 2021 09:34

Freshly Squeezed
Doggerel Dave said:

\' just waiting on winter\' - nothing more?
What did you get up to in the meantime?
Image clear in my mind - evokes memories of my own (refuse to disclose); what more can I ask of a short sketch such as yours, Neville?

July 8th, 2021 06:14

Freshly Squeezed
L. B. Mek said:

and so, once more - I find myself, swaying
with that gentle breeze of your poetic genius
subtle, my gifted friend
as ever - ever, so subtle: your nudge
that has us swimming in memories
even our shadow stains, pointedly - chose to forget...
yes I too have, a few names dear Poet
and they too, will have theirs I\'m sure
the true magic in your words, is when we realise
the likeliness, that even in name only
miles and lifetime\'s - apart
there\'s a chance: we\'re all, thinking alike...
(such a Brilliant Gem, of a subtly nuanced Poem!)

July 8th, 2021 05:43

Freshly Squeezed
Fay Slimm. said:

Hey lover - - cant wait for winter after remembering those sheets. -- - - - - - To an incurable romantic the name has to be covert methinks..............x

July 8th, 2021 04:05

Freshly Squeezed
Goldfinch60 said:

My wife used to thoroughly enjoy looking at sheets drying on the line.
Aah, memories.

Andy

July 8th, 2021 03:34

Way Too Late
L. B. Mek said:

\'refused listen to reason and then, to common sense
but later came to realise\'
\'Way Too Late\'..
(why do I feel like, we should have been studying this
as a conceptualised introduction
to our fallible selves, since kindergarten
then maybe, we could have avoided
most - of our brutal: life lessons...?)
there\'s an aspect of grounded wisdom
that makes all your unassumingly - profound
philosophical concepts
appear so accessible and measured;
these three stages, you\'ve worded so relatable
are so universal, and can be applied
to almost every person on earth, and yet
you\'ve just subtly inserted them in the poem
in such an understated manner,
what a gift you choose to share, so generously
dear poet, thank you!

July 8th, 2021 02:34

Way Too Late
SureshG said:

At the end of it all, I’m left wondering, why? Thank you for clarifying in such a poetic stance

July 7th, 2021 13:32

Way Too Late
Trenz Pruca said:

Insightful poem. Like Dusk Arising I had an unplanned goodbye when my dear friend also fell off a cliff. That was the first image that came to mind when I read your poem.

July 7th, 2021 12:54

Way Too Late
Jerry Reynolds said:

Hardball write, Neville.
Denial creates head-on collisions in slow motion.

July 7th, 2021 08:53

Way Too Late
orchidee said:

A fine write N.
I ain\'t said Hello to her yet, let alone Goodbye, unplanned or not! lol.
Probably be as dusk says......

July 7th, 2021 06:25

Way Too Late
Fay Slimm. said:

Her trust then shattered and with eyes wide open her cannons I guess were raised and ready to plan her reaction........ powerful stuff Nev.......x

July 7th, 2021 04:37

Way Too Late
Doggerel Dave said:

How did you get away with it Neville? \'Bit dangerous, your confession now.... or do you have a statute of limitations in the UK?

July 7th, 2021 04:31

Way Too Late
dusk arising said:

I once had an unplanned goodbye,... she fell off the cliff.

July 7th, 2021 03:40

Way Too Late
Goldfinch60 said:

Strong message Neville; totally agree.

Andy

July 7th, 2021 02:42

No Mean Feet
Goldfinch60 said:

Some relationships are very weird and it takes its toll on both.

Andy

July 7th, 2021 00:50

No Mean Feet
Dove said:

lol, the only feet I stay away from is : 10 feet under!

Seriously, your poems are always down to earth, no pun intended

July 6th, 2021 12:53

Maybe One of Us Should Leave
SureshG said:

I can totally relate to the intense emotions you have exposed, for I have witnessed first hand the mental trauma they experience, and my abject failure in getting through to them. Though poetic, yet powerful

July 6th, 2021 12:43

No Mean Feet
dusk arising said:

So how are your feet now Neville? LOL

The maintenance of a good lady\'s esteem requires more than the occasional, out of the blue, turn up. The emphasis here upon the word \'good\'.

July 6th, 2021 07:08

No Mean Feet
Doggerel Dave said:

A wee bit of tension going on there? They\'ve got one hell of a past, Neville, and he may need his feet in good condition to get out in a hurry....

July 6th, 2021 06:38

No Mean Feet
orchidee said:

Oohh, I best meet this lass! heehee.

July 6th, 2021 06:17

No Mean Feet
Fay Slimm. said:

Was it Louis Armstrong who sang \"I dunt luv ya cos ya feets too big\" - -or did I dream that one up after reading your exposure of a weak excuse for not gettin\' in touch - whatever amigo I giggled until the last line - then saw how volatile your ladies are gettin\' lately - - all in the game of love tho\' eh .......... x

July 6th, 2021 06:16

Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Goldfinch60 said:

Such sadness in these words, I too have spoken to a young girl whose only way out seemed to be self harming, I hope that my words helped her.
Self harming seems so prevalent nowadays in young people so what is going wrong in these days are they not being treated well by their parents/guardians.
Strange world.

Andy

July 6th, 2021 00:41

Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Jerry Reynolds said:

Good write, Neville.
An interesting character to write about. What was the source of her tension?

July 5th, 2021 08:40

Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Neville said:


The following individual response is specifically for Doggerel Dave .. but anyone else too if interested ..

Hello DD,
Am so glad you asked that question ..
The inspiration for this little scribble actually sprang from one of the very last clinical sessions I had with a young South American patient of mine who used to cut her beautiful self terribly as a means of tension release ...
I am in fact both proud and pleased to report she has never admitted (and I believe her) having cut her self since ... I get a card each year both for Christmas (she does not know I am Buddhist) and my birthday ....

All Good Things,

Neville :)


July 5th, 2021 07:51

Maybe One of Us Should Leave
L. B. Mek said:

its an archaic, yet ageless tradition
to let our poisonous roots - bleed, to heal
although
the drippings, that trail our regrets
follow us, long - long: after our poem\'s
tableau...
what a brilliant, subtle
and heart wrenchingly acute depiction, my friend
\'so - so relatable
that infuriating: suddenness
of too, fuckin late!\'


July 5th, 2021 07:32

Geraldine
L. B. Mek said:

I always liked the word \'Passing\'
in this context
see, between Nature and \'We\'
of sentient awareness, what\'s unquestionable
is that gentle resonance, we feel
intuitively - mostly;
where, what we see - has a role
in what we feel, and
what we - celebrate, has a tether
to what we let go...
so this here words of dedication, serenade
that timeless tradition
where Nature salutes, and winks
to comfortingly let us know, there may
be more to our story
after those final blinked curtains
open our passageway
to that encore of relativity, awaiting
our realisation
of unbreakable connectivity, to all things
deemed existence
in that endless - matter, of our universe.
(I\'m sorry for you loss brother
and I thank you
for creating sometime so beautiful
out of the Phoenix: of your unwavering Love)

July 5th, 2021 07:21

Three T’s
L. B. Mek said:

\'selfless, selfish and surreal
three S\'s, that distractedly insure
we\'re all hindered, just enough\'
to be left at the mercy
of your Tyrannical: T\'s..
a thought provoking shorty, thanks for the insight
dear poet

July 5th, 2021 07:05

Maybe One of Us Should Leave
orchidee said:

If she leaves, send her to me. or will she be too much for me?!
You\'ve stunned me into silence - no singing! I heard horrific stores about cutting. *shudders*.
I only use razor blades for shaving. It\'s Too Much Info to tell you cutting details I heard.

July 5th, 2021 04:35

Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Fay Slimm. said:

Seems like no compatible answer to this familiar request my friend...... your title depicts a well known phrase --- but I do hope it turned out right in the end for those two.

July 5th, 2021 04:12



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