Comments received on poems by aDarkerMind
I Have Turned Around Now, Twice
Thad Wilk said:
Wow! 😯
A deep, dark and
captivating write!! ✍️
Great read, 💯
the imagery
is out of sight! 👍
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 19th, 2024 10:38
Thad Wilk said:
Wow! 😯
A deep, dark and
captivating write!! ✍️
Great read, 💯
the imagery
is out of sight! 👍
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 19th, 2024 10:38
I Have Turned Around Now, Twice
sorenbarrett said:
Another dark poem from the prince of darkness. One line after another of the unthinkable and like from a nightmare comes the incubus who calmly sits on a chair beside the bed awaiting the awakening. Great lines and images
October 18th, 2024 15:09
sorenbarrett said:
Another dark poem from the prince of darkness. One line after another of the unthinkable and like from a nightmare comes the incubus who calmly sits on a chair beside the bed awaiting the awakening. Great lines and images
October 18th, 2024 15:09
I Have Turned Around Now, Twice
Teddy.15 said:
Wonderful dear Melvin
it is here I am more hollow than my Eliot suggests.
a smell of beer. a smell as yet I have yet to comprehend.
there is no-one here but all that never ends.
Love these lines, and a great ending as you always do. Kudos 🌹
October 18th, 2024 13:00
Teddy.15 said:
Wonderful dear Melvin
it is here I am more hollow than my Eliot suggests.
a smell of beer. a smell as yet I have yet to comprehend.
there is no-one here but all that never ends.
Love these lines, and a great ending as you always do. Kudos 🌹
October 18th, 2024 13:00
what came first?
sorenbarrett said:
Duality and the questioning of where one ends and the other begins. A fun read that turns into a mental exercise and leaves ones crainial muscle sore.
October 2nd, 2024 05:01
sorenbarrett said:
Duality and the questioning of where one ends and the other begins. A fun read that turns into a mental exercise and leaves ones crainial muscle sore.
October 2nd, 2024 05:01
A little Less Panache
sorenbarrett said:
I felt like I had seen the union of union of Hieronymus Bosch with Salvador Dali and a pinch of Pablo Picasso. A wild ride over rough roads providing amusement park fun.
October 1st, 2024 04:05
sorenbarrett said:
I felt like I had seen the union of union of Hieronymus Bosch with Salvador Dali and a pinch of Pablo Picasso. A wild ride over rough roads providing amusement park fun.
October 1st, 2024 04:05
A More Obvious Art
Thomas W Case said:
Superb work. You are a tremendous talent.
September 24th, 2024 14:10
Thomas W Case said:
Superb work. You are a tremendous talent.
September 24th, 2024 14:10
A More Obvious Art
Teddy.15 said:
A masterpiece love the thought of heaven owning the landscape wouldn\'t it be so much more beautiful than what we see here. If you haven\'t already published a book dearest Melvin it\'s time to think about it, your work is truly worth gold. I absolutely love all the imagery here, and your last lines which bring it all full circle 🌹
September 24th, 2024 12:58
Teddy.15 said:
A masterpiece love the thought of heaven owning the landscape wouldn\'t it be so much more beautiful than what we see here. If you haven\'t already published a book dearest Melvin it\'s time to think about it, your work is truly worth gold. I absolutely love all the imagery here, and your last lines which bring it all full circle 🌹
September 24th, 2024 12:58
A More Obvious Art
sorenbarrett said:
I have a picture of sucking a thousand apples from the belly of a cave. Mental pictures that occure on occasion and phrases that occur as well. Most iteresting a verbal Rorschach.
September 24th, 2024 12:55
sorenbarrett said:
I have a picture of sucking a thousand apples from the belly of a cave. Mental pictures that occure on occasion and phrases that occur as well. Most iteresting a verbal Rorschach.
September 24th, 2024 12:55
Today
Dan Williams said:
So much so well done. \"a face with a thousand land mines on it\'s chin\" or \"a beating heart in a flame-grilled silhouette.\", just excellent.
September 23rd, 2024 00:19
Dan Williams said:
So much so well done. \"a face with a thousand land mines on it\'s chin\" or \"a beating heart in a flame-grilled silhouette.\", just excellent.
September 23rd, 2024 00:19
Today
sorenbarrett said:
Here the message seems clear in the beginning but fades into the fog of the distance. A meta metaphor in that today seems clear but fades into tomorrow\'s fog. Yet today is the tomorrow of yesterday and all are one in time. Lovely Melvin
September 22nd, 2024 05:48
sorenbarrett said:
Here the message seems clear in the beginning but fades into the fog of the distance. A meta metaphor in that today seems clear but fades into tomorrow\'s fog. Yet today is the tomorrow of yesterday and all are one in time. Lovely Melvin
September 22nd, 2024 05:48
Today
Teddy.15 said:
I know exactly who this one is for, oh so stunning, flawless imagery and oh my, a very special Sunday trip I suspect most Sundays to taken, soulmates forever. I love every line because you bring every last piece to life but these I love today, probably as I\'m a fan of stilton and very rarely find it here unless I go to look for it.
walking to the grave
with his stilton cheese
and a lovebite on his neck.
Even when a love bite is no longer visible sometimes on those very rare occasions it stays forever. 🌹 Happy Sunday my dear Melvin. Truly magnificent poetry my friend. 🌹
September 22nd, 2024 04:13
Teddy.15 said:
I know exactly who this one is for, oh so stunning, flawless imagery and oh my, a very special Sunday trip I suspect most Sundays to taken, soulmates forever. I love every line because you bring every last piece to life but these I love today, probably as I\'m a fan of stilton and very rarely find it here unless I go to look for it.
walking to the grave
with his stilton cheese
and a lovebite on his neck.
Even when a love bite is no longer visible sometimes on those very rare occasions it stays forever. 🌹 Happy Sunday my dear Melvin. Truly magnificent poetry my friend. 🌹
September 22nd, 2024 04:13
At Home On The Farm
Dan Williams said:
\"she is here again\" is the heart of this; then \"it is only when I spark I dare to dream\" nails it. Nice.
September 21st, 2024 00:19
Dan Williams said:
\"she is here again\" is the heart of this; then \"it is only when I spark I dare to dream\" nails it. Nice.
September 21st, 2024 00:19
From Kingdom Come
sorenbarrett said:
In obscure lines I felt clarity, in confusion understanding. This poem struck to the core of the outer limits of emotion. I loved the word play in (fucia\'s never read). The metaphor for age in (now the frost has capped my ears) is wonderful. I think my favorite line is (I am two miles shy of where I can not be) not only have I been there I think I am still there. A most wonderful poem and a Fav
September 20th, 2024 18:25
sorenbarrett said:
In obscure lines I felt clarity, in confusion understanding. This poem struck to the core of the outer limits of emotion. I loved the word play in (fucia\'s never read). The metaphor for age in (now the frost has capped my ears) is wonderful. I think my favorite line is (I am two miles shy of where I can not be) not only have I been there I think I am still there. A most wonderful poem and a Fav
September 20th, 2024 18:25
At Home On The Farm
Teddy.15 said:
Are you making sorrenbarret work? 🤣 Hey I\'m just going to say what came to mind the pensioners who have been left in the cold by the new government, but that may be the most potty analysis you have ever had, it just speaks to me. Absolutely beautiful in any case. 🌹
September 20th, 2024 07:32
Teddy.15 said:
Are you making sorrenbarret work? 🤣 Hey I\'m just going to say what came to mind the pensioners who have been left in the cold by the new government, but that may be the most potty analysis you have ever had, it just speaks to me. Absolutely beautiful in any case. 🌹
September 20th, 2024 07:32
At Home On The Farm
sorenbarrett said:
And I have been accused of being cryptic. Like a modern art painting I don\'t understand it but I like it as the color of the words blends and the shape of the meter like angles and lines pleases the senses.
September 20th, 2024 05:50
sorenbarrett said:
And I have been accused of being cryptic. Like a modern art painting I don\'t understand it but I like it as the color of the words blends and the shape of the meter like angles and lines pleases the senses.
September 20th, 2024 05:50
A Pick Me Up
Cassie58 said:
I am taken by the uplifting title of this fascinating write Melvin. I feel as though I have a colorful jigsaw in front of me. All the pieces need to be put together again. I like the references to animals and the romantic briar rose. I have to say the last three lines made me feel as though someone was imprisoned. Please forgive my rambling. It was the best I could do. I have a heavy cold :)
September 19th, 2024 09:36
Cassie58 said:
I am taken by the uplifting title of this fascinating write Melvin. I feel as though I have a colorful jigsaw in front of me. All the pieces need to be put together again. I like the references to animals and the romantic briar rose. I have to say the last three lines made me feel as though someone was imprisoned. Please forgive my rambling. It was the best I could do. I have a heavy cold :)
September 19th, 2024 09:36
A Pick Me Up
sorenbarrett said:
The imagery tells me it is a Salvador Dali and mustbe interpreted with care. Most interesting metaphors some of which I have not made the connection to yet. Loved it
September 19th, 2024 05:09
sorenbarrett said:
The imagery tells me it is a Salvador Dali and mustbe interpreted with care. Most interesting metaphors some of which I have not made the connection to yet. Loved it
September 19th, 2024 05:09
A Pick Me Up
aDarkerMind said:
a nursery rhyme from an asylum Teddy...
but a more cheerful one.
September 19th, 2024 04:47
aDarkerMind said:
a nursery rhyme from an asylum Teddy...
but a more cheerful one.
September 19th, 2024 04:47
A Pick Me Up
Teddy.15 said:
lol this is wonderful, I got a nursery rhyme feel from this one Melvin, gosh you picked it up a notch on the positive side. 🌹 👏 Love your ending feels very relatable at least I\'ll be safe and sound 🤗
September 19th, 2024 02:55
Teddy.15 said:
lol this is wonderful, I got a nursery rhyme feel from this one Melvin, gosh you picked it up a notch on the positive side. 🌹 👏 Love your ending feels very relatable at least I\'ll be safe and sound 🤗
September 19th, 2024 02:55
From Kingdom Come
Dan Williams said:
Sometimes it seems like \"two miles shy of where I cannot be.\" is as close as we ever get. Still, \"a slot-machine with the eyebrows of a goat\" is just a marvelous line.
September 19th, 2024 01:10
Dan Williams said:
Sometimes it seems like \"two miles shy of where I cannot be.\" is as close as we ever get. Still, \"a slot-machine with the eyebrows of a goat\" is just a marvelous line.
September 19th, 2024 01:10
From Kingdom Come
Cassie58 said:
I have found again my walnut tree
That has to be a positive. These trees have a wonderful canopy and symbolize many great characteristics.
I like the reference to buttercups and orange tambourines. Vibrant colour. Speaks to me of summer.
A never ending sea of tempered leaves is beautiful expression and imagery. So much in this poem to ponder on. A feast of imagery. Happy Wednesday Melvin.
September 18th, 2024 11:49
Cassie58 said:
I have found again my walnut tree
That has to be a positive. These trees have a wonderful canopy and symbolize many great characteristics.
I like the reference to buttercups and orange tambourines. Vibrant colour. Speaks to me of summer.
A never ending sea of tempered leaves is beautiful expression and imagery. So much in this poem to ponder on. A feast of imagery. Happy Wednesday Melvin.
September 18th, 2024 11:49
From Kingdom Come
Teddy.15 said:
From kingdom come
What better art is here now Summers\' fruits
Hibernate with the black swans
In a pocket full of photographs
With a slice of cheese
And a bookmark for the fuchia\'s never read.
Wild flower roots in a breakfast bowl
Each morning falls a darker shade
Of Olive trees lime green and breathing still
Simply spoilt for imagery, and may I say that everything grows from a seed, your poetry is at its pinnacle this evening a glorious bloom I\'d say. This is one of my new favourites of yours, it\'s some how filled with magnificent colour and the olives speak of peaceful times. 🌹 💙
September 17th, 2024 13:44
Teddy.15 said:
From kingdom come
What better art is here now Summers\' fruits
Hibernate with the black swans
In a pocket full of photographs
With a slice of cheese
And a bookmark for the fuchia\'s never read.
Wild flower roots in a breakfast bowl
Each morning falls a darker shade
Of Olive trees lime green and breathing still
Simply spoilt for imagery, and may I say that everything grows from a seed, your poetry is at its pinnacle this evening a glorious bloom I\'d say. This is one of my new favourites of yours, it\'s some how filled with magnificent colour and the olives speak of peaceful times. 🌹 💙
September 17th, 2024 13:44
How Slow These Cradles Rock
NafisaSB said:
the journey of life is full of ups and downs - hope the future holds more hope than the past did, and the nettles do not prick you further
good write
September 17th, 2024 01:22
NafisaSB said:
the journey of life is full of ups and downs - hope the future holds more hope than the past did, and the nettles do not prick you further
good write
September 17th, 2024 01:22
How Slow These Cradles Rock
Thomas W Case said:
Powerful imagery and tremendous use of language.
September 16th, 2024 08:13
Thomas W Case said:
Powerful imagery and tremendous use of language.
September 16th, 2024 08:13
This God of A Thousand Mouths
sorenbarrett said:
Melvin I read this over several times and it is filled with metaphor following metaphor great internal rhyme and some wordplay. At first I took it for a religious commentary no maybe more a cultural Judeo-christian comment but it gos far deeper and many metaphors I am still struggling with Melvin
September 16th, 2024 06:30
sorenbarrett said:
Melvin I read this over several times and it is filled with metaphor following metaphor great internal rhyme and some wordplay. At first I took it for a religious commentary no maybe more a cultural Judeo-christian comment but it gos far deeper and many metaphors I am still struggling with Melvin
September 16th, 2024 06:30
How Slow These Cradles Rock
Cassie58 said:
Dear Melvin, you evoke strong emotion in your poetry with unique imagery on the journey through your lines. I always have to read your work several times before I dare comment on it. Death of someone close can leave us in the depths of despair. That magnitude of loss is overwhelming
all walks of life now statues of an ordinary kind - that is remarkable expression deeply felt
So many great lines and the last four ended for me on a much lighter note. One day …..
September 16th, 2024 05:48
Cassie58 said:
Dear Melvin, you evoke strong emotion in your poetry with unique imagery on the journey through your lines. I always have to read your work several times before I dare comment on it. Death of someone close can leave us in the depths of despair. That magnitude of loss is overwhelming
all walks of life now statues of an ordinary kind - that is remarkable expression deeply felt
So many great lines and the last four ended for me on a much lighter note. One day …..
September 16th, 2024 05:48
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