Comments received on poems by aDarkerMind
When Tomorrow Crept Like Ants Towards The Sword
L. B. Mek said:
\'pilgrims on pillaged steps
with deeds to the concrete child
walking on stilts through pickled spit
when tomorrow crept like ants towards the sword\'..
such a great read
beautifully concise and imaginative imagery, that electrifies
rather than drown your poignant commentary..
thanks for sharing such a delectable literary treat, dear poet
April 9th, 2021 04:11
L. B. Mek said:
\'pilgrims on pillaged steps
with deeds to the concrete child
walking on stilts through pickled spit
when tomorrow crept like ants towards the sword\'..
such a great read
beautifully concise and imaginative imagery, that electrifies
rather than drown your poignant commentary..
thanks for sharing such a delectable literary treat, dear poet
April 9th, 2021 04:11
The Second Sunday of the Eye
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully worded, a strong spine of repetition utilised effectively to add a lyrical element
an enjoyable read, in my humble opinion
April 8th, 2021 03:25
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully worded, a strong spine of repetition utilised effectively to add a lyrical element
an enjoyable read, in my humble opinion
April 8th, 2021 03:25
what came first?
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing questions Melvin - I wonder what the true answers are?
Andy
April 7th, 2021 00:26
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing questions Melvin - I wonder what the true answers are?
Andy
April 7th, 2021 00:26
With Aphrodite\'s Kiss
L. B. Mek said:
\'it just seems sometimes in Winter\'s lust still falls a Summer rain.
is it true when comes a minor loss, so to comes greater gain?
perhaps, with Aphrodite\'s kiss, I will appreciate the pain;\'
these lines imitate virtual-reality\'s immersive traits
purely by enticing a readers imagination
through written words, alone
April 5th, 2021 04:21
L. B. Mek said:
\'it just seems sometimes in Winter\'s lust still falls a Summer rain.
is it true when comes a minor loss, so to comes greater gain?
perhaps, with Aphrodite\'s kiss, I will appreciate the pain;\'
these lines imitate virtual-reality\'s immersive traits
purely by enticing a readers imagination
through written words, alone
April 5th, 2021 04:21
Ballad of Mr. Lockdown
Eugene S. said:
Ah, this is amazing! Favorited for sure!!
April 3rd, 2021 17:45
Eugene S. said:
Ah, this is amazing! Favorited for sure!!
April 3rd, 2021 17:45
Ballad of Mr. Lockdown
L. B. Mek said:
defiantly: Brilliant!
(forgive me for rudely rearranging your wonderful work
but this is how your poem chose to speak to me)..
\'I am the closest friend of no-one, my enemies are few
my mind it seems more occupied with the lesser that I do\'
\'was it all about the prophet or the profiteering mound?
I am of the understanding it was neither.
was it all about investors or inventors of the math?
I have no understanding of this either;\'
\'I am but a simple man who wears his heart upon his quill\'
\'I am now something to the nothing. I am the nothing of it all.
so if my nothings what you\'re asking, you are welcome to it all.\'
April 2nd, 2021 06:25
L. B. Mek said:
defiantly: Brilliant!
(forgive me for rudely rearranging your wonderful work
but this is how your poem chose to speak to me)..
\'I am the closest friend of no-one, my enemies are few
my mind it seems more occupied with the lesser that I do\'
\'was it all about the prophet or the profiteering mound?
I am of the understanding it was neither.
was it all about investors or inventors of the math?
I have no understanding of this either;\'
\'I am but a simple man who wears his heart upon his quill\'
\'I am now something to the nothing. I am the nothing of it all.
so if my nothings what you\'re asking, you are welcome to it all.\'
April 2nd, 2021 06:25
Ballad of Mr. Lockdown
Goldfinch60 said:
Your nothing is seen in your words Melvin so that you are never nothing.
Andy
April 2nd, 2021 01:47
Goldfinch60 said:
Your nothing is seen in your words Melvin so that you are never nothing.
Andy
April 2nd, 2021 01:47
Play Dead Among The Flies
L. B. Mek said:
if this is a biographical dedication, then I\'m so sorry for your loss..
but know either way, you\'ve penned
a write worth investing in
to fully explore, and cherish as a serenade
for the pure love of reading
April 1st, 2021 06:30
L. B. Mek said:
if this is a biographical dedication, then I\'m so sorry for your loss..
but know either way, you\'ve penned
a write worth investing in
to fully explore, and cherish as a serenade
for the pure love of reading
April 1st, 2021 06:30
No More The Frowning Clown
L. B. Mek said:
\'surely time has come to run away from the frowns of the clown
and enjoy instead the mischievous scrumping of plums;
let this adult play with the children of the smile
let him be the child he only dreamt he would ever be\'..
that remnant thread
of blissful ignorance to \'all things possible\'
remaining in that shrivelled paltry shred
of our childhood\'s treasured memories
excavated, with a poet\'s despairing ink
to salvage
that crippling perception of bleak reality
threatening
to drown-out all, but nihilism\'s penchant for misery..
is what your words conveyed to me dear poet
a great write, with wonderful use of characterised imagery!
April 1st, 2021 04:17
L. B. Mek said:
\'surely time has come to run away from the frowns of the clown
and enjoy instead the mischievous scrumping of plums;
let this adult play with the children of the smile
let him be the child he only dreamt he would ever be\'..
that remnant thread
of blissful ignorance to \'all things possible\'
remaining in that shrivelled paltry shred
of our childhood\'s treasured memories
excavated, with a poet\'s despairing ink
to salvage
that crippling perception of bleak reality
threatening
to drown-out all, but nihilism\'s penchant for misery..
is what your words conveyed to me dear poet
a great write, with wonderful use of characterised imagery!
April 1st, 2021 04:17
No More The Frowning Clown
Goldfinch60 said:
The innocence of children can be so uplifting and bring back such wonderful memories into our lives.
Andy
April 1st, 2021 00:24
Goldfinch60 said:
The innocence of children can be so uplifting and bring back such wonderful memories into our lives.
Andy
April 1st, 2021 00:24
From Cradle to a Moth
aDarkerMind said:
thank you once again Jerry. most kind;
March 29th, 2021 11:45
aDarkerMind said:
thank you once again Jerry. most kind;
March 29th, 2021 11:45
All About Eve
aDarkerMind said:
thank you L B Mek. you are, as always, very kind.
March 29th, 2021 09:36
aDarkerMind said:
thank you L B Mek. you are, as always, very kind.
March 29th, 2021 09:36
All About Eve
L. B. Mek said:
\'I have whistled one too many times
about the burning of the deck. about the felling of the mast;
castrated eyes upon the turning of my neck
I am all about Eve in the distance in Butterfly net
with a sweet tasting Rose and a posse of Earl Grey Bees;
she brings subsidence to my crooked ears\'..
wonderful flow, admittedly I couldn\'t quite grasp everything but I appreciate the artistry of eloquence in your inking prowess
March 29th, 2021 04:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'I have whistled one too many times
about the burning of the deck. about the felling of the mast;
castrated eyes upon the turning of my neck
I am all about Eve in the distance in Butterfly net
with a sweet tasting Rose and a posse of Earl Grey Bees;
she brings subsidence to my crooked ears\'..
wonderful flow, admittedly I couldn\'t quite grasp everything but I appreciate the artistry of eloquence in your inking prowess
March 29th, 2021 04:50
Twice About The Moon
L. B. Mek said:
categorised perfectly, for these words are imbued with a fantastical element, showcasing a brightly hued view of the everyday ordinary, few of us seldom stop to consider briefly, let alone twice..
good read
March 26th, 2021 04:46
L. B. Mek said:
categorised perfectly, for these words are imbued with a fantastical element, showcasing a brightly hued view of the everyday ordinary, few of us seldom stop to consider briefly, let alone twice..
good read
March 26th, 2021 04:46
the slyness of a quartered moon
L. B. Mek said:
deep, this are just some of the surface layers I manage to uncover:
\'at this time of ungodly hour
where pretence gleams with pretentious whit\'
\'light be the mood of earths upending room
bright be the brood of befuddled mud on Pastorias cheek
as rod and staff dive deep\'
\'through uncharted veins of a daughters snow
now lights the wrath of the urchins beaten brow;
as seethes the slyness of a quartered moon
at time o\'clock now sleeps the hawk of seas
on cormorant tongue where spies the teeth of mist\'
March 25th, 2021 05:58
L. B. Mek said:
deep, this are just some of the surface layers I manage to uncover:
\'at this time of ungodly hour
where pretence gleams with pretentious whit\'
\'light be the mood of earths upending room
bright be the brood of befuddled mud on Pastorias cheek
as rod and staff dive deep\'
\'through uncharted veins of a daughters snow
now lights the wrath of the urchins beaten brow;
as seethes the slyness of a quartered moon
at time o\'clock now sleeps the hawk of seas
on cormorant tongue where spies the teeth of mist\'
March 25th, 2021 05:58
Comes the Fiddlers Three
aDarkerMind said:
thank you Michael for your kind words. very kind of you;
March 22nd, 2021 11:59
aDarkerMind said:
thank you Michael for your kind words. very kind of you;
March 22nd, 2021 11:59
Comes the Fiddlers Three
L. B. Mek said:
what assured write of tempered commentary, insightfully historical in context and with pin-point accuracy to timely relevance..
a great read!
March 22nd, 2021 06:33
L. B. Mek said:
what assured write of tempered commentary, insightfully historical in context and with pin-point accuracy to timely relevance..
a great read!
March 22nd, 2021 06:33
Comes the Fiddlers Three
Michael Edwards said:
Love this - needs another read and will pop it in my saves - such imagery.
March 21st, 2021 14:55
Michael Edwards said:
Love this - needs another read and will pop it in my saves - such imagery.
March 21st, 2021 14:55
Bring Port To The Table and Mourn
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing read DM, the last stanza says a great deal.
Andy
March 17th, 2021 01:22
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing read DM, the last stanza says a great deal.
Andy
March 17th, 2021 01:22
Bring Port To The Table and Mourn
Jerry Reynolds said:
Dark write, D.M. Good read.
March 16th, 2021 09:51
Jerry Reynolds said:
Dark write, D.M. Good read.
March 16th, 2021 09:51
Bring Port To The Table and Mourn
aDarkerMind said:
thank you L B Mek. I do appreciate your comments.
March 16th, 2021 05:35
aDarkerMind said:
thank you L B Mek. I do appreciate your comments.
March 16th, 2021 05:35
Bring Port To The Table and Mourn
L. B. Mek said:
harrowing imagery utilised skilfully, a thought provoking read..
thanks for sharing
March 16th, 2021 05:27
L. B. Mek said:
harrowing imagery utilised skilfully, a thought provoking read..
thanks for sharing
March 16th, 2021 05:27
Reflections
Goldfinch60 said:
Resting against that aging tree gives us more energy to continue in our life and I am so fortunate to have found them to keep me going into old age.
Sunny side up please.
Andy
March 16th, 2021 01:16
Goldfinch60 said:
Resting against that aging tree gives us more energy to continue in our life and I am so fortunate to have found them to keep me going into old age.
Sunny side up please.
Andy
March 16th, 2021 01:16
Three Blind Mice
Jerry Reynolds said:
Harsh write, Melvin. Great images, good read.
March 13th, 2021 11:55
Jerry Reynolds said:
Harsh write, Melvin. Great images, good read.
March 13th, 2021 11:55
Spring Wool
L. B. Mek said:
\'wear this winter coat a day.
this feinted wool
with arthritic hands and denatured fangs
how quick we forget
that in days past she sang;\'..
a great read, thanks for sharing dear poet
March 12th, 2021 05:48
L. B. Mek said:
\'wear this winter coat a day.
this feinted wool
with arthritic hands and denatured fangs
how quick we forget
that in days past she sang;\'..
a great read, thanks for sharing dear poet
March 12th, 2021 05:48
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