Comments received on poems by aDarkerMind



as now the beast has come
L. B. Mek said:

there is so much depth
to how you utilise
that captivating trait
of juxtapose imagery:
\'coral (wordplay on chorale) hymns, for the dancing of the whale\'
\'tall gods for the arches*
house of chamelion;\'
\'ancient grapes with their paper mache hands
spoon flavours to the moon
of t-bone eyes and snails fin\'
(and that\'s all from two stanzas, lol)..
\'what a talent, you choose to share dear poet
thank you!\'
and btw have you read \'the master and margarita\'
by Mikhail Bulgakov,

July 16th, 2021 04:09

who cares the age of fantasy
L. B. Mek said:

\'high into the hills of a beehives afternoon tea
singing to the trees of my innocence and guilt;

in abstract form, a mangoes mother cheers a taverns light
with flight of hand, dangling the marrow of my aunt
on sawdust floors where pours a warming ale
deep into the eyes of the lovers crystal glaze
as each crooked beam steams the windows of my bread;\'

\'still, I make of this my very own affair;\'
\'and I too, was a kid once;\'
Amen!
Artistry\'s sublime decadence
of worded Poetic transcendence...
humbly, I thank you
\'What a Talent!\'

July 13th, 2021 06:11

When Once The Veil Of Her Face
L. B. Mek said:

\'unravelled the twists and turns as voice meets voice
torturing the ghost of my ears;

her eyes of a forest green
still lost inside the portrait of her distant shell
on her canvas of elusive bones
hiding with the hearts of swans far beyond her castle walls\'..
at this point, I just want to deep-dive, study
everything you write
I will say it, till the moon regains her sunflower beam
its a privilege to witness: your poetic genius, at play

July 13th, 2021 06:05

Who Lights The Way?
Poetic Dan said:

Many things I could say but I\'m quite glad I found your work today and went to the beginning to find this gem of word play!

Truly appreciated
Much peace and respect

July 11th, 2021 06:44

when time became my ocean
Poetic Dan said:

Brilliant again!

July 11th, 2021 06:40

Changing of the Guard
Poetic Dan said:

\"Sleeping alone with the medals of my constant war\" wow what a line and so much more, thank you for the inspiration!

Keep up the write
Much peace and respect

July 11th, 2021 06:38

when time became my ocean
flyingfish said:

WOW. Wonderful imagery. Well done. Best Wishes

July 9th, 2021 12:39

A Ponytail In A Hitchcock Play
L. B. Mek said:

(As much as I\'m just awed
by your display of poetic genius!)
surely, this write needs an age restriction warning
please, lets at least try to maintain some semblance
of consideration for the - as yet, untainted
by the life-weary: demoralised in our society,
(its just a click
costs nothing - takes away nothing
a simple gesture, that
common-sense civility: still exists)..
anyway, please forgive my opinionated moaning
and thanks for sharing

July 9th, 2021 03:35

And I, Who Has Kissed The Eyes Of Her Trees
L. B. Mek said:

\'and I, who has kissed the eyes of her trees
laid bare my snow-flake skin
with pains of a sulking wood\'
\'beyond the chorus of her mind
within a single word of a thimbles prayer
the high breeze of her scattered crawl\'
\'cast aside by the petals of lifes\' uncertain rose
as flows her blood through the veins
of my own now weary heart;\'
\'and I, who has died beside her grave
danced with the chimes of her cathederal eyes\'
\'and I, who has walked beneath her dawn
scented the candles of her hands
followed the echo of her breath\'
\'she, who now walks beneath my dawn
will sleep in peace
with the warmth of a one last midnight kiss
I will cry no more
and live forever in her heart;\'
\'with nothing left but the memory of her smile\'
(please forgive me for daring to rearrange
your masterful stanzas, dear Poet
but this is how your Poem expressed itself to me
so Beautifully!)
genuinely, one of the best love Poems
I have ever read: anywhere!
thank you, what a privilege


July 6th, 2021 03:14

what else that hides between?
L. B. Mek said:

\'between the fathom and the furlong
where twists the knives
of the thriving athiest
sister of the sun, mother of the moons\'
incarcerated doubt
with her stout heart and steady aim
so wings the steady progress
of her digestive heart\'s unsteady flight;\'
\'between Dante\'s hell
and her pale green skin of Oak
where her tempermental offspring
thrive on the saliva of her eyes
in splintered nests possessed
with obsessions cut and dried\'
\'between us and them
between a mundane and a miracle
before the healing of progressive scorn

I can do nothing more but witness
the shitless wonders
of a cold war in a summer heat, giving reason
for a heaving lungs
release from a captives grip;\'..
(behold: modernity\'s
self-destructive war
fought on those hairline splinters of difference
between those who profess to worship
one or a handful of deities - only
and thereby: by default
claim themselves - to be, atheist\'s
towards the other 3\'000 deities, known
to humanity;
and
those other\'s, who profess themselves
as atheist\'s to the entire 3\'000 or more
known deities, in our world...!)
how succinctly, yet poignantly you\'ve worded
our absurd basis for this seemingly unending
hatred and divisiveness,
dear talented Poet
(forgive me for cutting and pasting, so rudely
I was just trying to highlight your brilliance)


July 5th, 2021 05:17

Keep Walking
L. B. Mek said:

\'I saw a long dark cloak drifting on the spirit of Arden
I witnessed nothing more than any blind man could prove;

was it the woman I long to touch? I cannot find her
double jeopardy here, have only got one dice to roll
but with the race now on, somewhere in this darkness
hides the deepest mind buried in the deepest hole\'..
what a talent! dear Poet
and what a humbling privilege
to witness your wordsmith prowess

July 2nd, 2021 03:40

not since when last october lied
L. B. Mek said:

I read this, and can\'t help hearing
\'If I was God, I would\'ve - so done it all betta!\'
like a child, screeching
\'If I was a Parent, I would neva hurt my child\'
and then twenty or thirty years later
that same child - bellowing
\'stop crying! you have no idea
how lucky you are
to have Me as your parent, if it would\'ve been
My parents...\' lol
life\'s, so easy with that mindset of teen angst
mindless rebelliousness
where everything, is a consequence of circumstance
and a broken world - gifts
a landfill dumpsite of opportunity, to project
all the blame we accumulate
thereby insuring, all that raging anger
allows no room for accountability
to slither near, with our accrued invoice
for a lifetime of hypocritical idiocy...
Rage-on! dear poet
hope it helps, to distract - permanently
may you never
come across that withering mirror, of reality



July 1st, 2021 03:38

Of What About Exactly?
L. B. Mek said:

\'what harm can come from the swelling of silence?
this is all of what remains inside me now
once cherished now feared, always
a hunted Steer between chapters\'..
one day, there will be a gold rush
for these nugget\'s of insights
you choose to share with us
or, they\'ll inspire
someone the universe has intrusted
with a magnificently Poetic destiny,
either way
that potential of inspirational quality
you imbue
in each of your poems, is truly - well
inspiring

June 28th, 2021 06:08

Persistent Inconsistency
L. B. Mek said:

only, when those childhood pillar\'s
of perceived vehemence, are shed
do we finally begin
to taste and feel the veracity of modernity\'s
sleeted streets of dizzying misery;
and then: the true fun
of reality\'s seasonal, slaps: to our calloused face
can really, take aim...
meanwhile, we\'ll just grip the ropes and ponder
what round this is
and when, will we finally start doing that whole
\'living\' thing...

June 25th, 2021 05:21

save me from tomorrow
L. B. Mek said:

\'deep into the heartless epidural of a panasomic dream;
my murdered spine
chocking on the phlem of an unreasonable fog

with a bullfrog cocking its\' weary limbs into the sunset
of a terminal sky
waltz\'s with my cabbage patch doll

and succumbs
to the red clay charms
of an adolescent tide\'..
Seriously, in all seriousness: behold, this surreal beauty
of Poetic talent\'s vehemence, in its undiluted Brilliance!

June 24th, 2021 04:04

A Caterpillar Rainbow
L. B. Mek said:

Brilliant!
what a talent you were gifted

June 22nd, 2021 03:52

when jesus stole my avocados\' brain
Saxon Crow said:

Like this one Mel. Very cool

June 20th, 2021 02:03

who knows to where the ark will sail
L. B. Mek said:

\'benign
but with a cancerous intent
of weaving a blue water stitch;

the rainbow
with a mole brain planting its\' roots
into the crevis of a secret den

when will the covid brain: enlighten\'

June 15th, 2021 04:51

in love with a laughing hyena
aDarkerMind said:

thank you for my birthday wishes L B Mek;
as for my being a broken person..no;
I simlply choose to write with a mind that forever questions not what is right, but what is accepted as being right, ignoring those who have a different view on life;
I dont find a rainbow fascinating, but I do ask, when a man falls in love with a drag queen bingo caller, he gets castrated!
isnt that also a wonderful thing?
two people falling in love;
yes, I view the world through miserable eyes.
but one thing I will not do;
is write only to please the eyes of those of read what I write;\'
as I said before, my mind rules my pen, and that is what I must live with;



June 14th, 2021 12:21

in love with a laughing hyena
L. B. Mek said:

Happy Birthday dear Poet,
(what can I do, you may choose
to be prejudicial against those of my pigment of skin
but still, I affirm my choice to recognise
you: for the poetry,
than the broken person, you so fervently
project yourself to be)
\'bingo callers long lost need for steam\', eh? lol
this be that: \'word picture\' they talk about
words and lines imbued with such distinct clarity
even that manufactured, 4th dimensionality
of immersivity, miraged - pixel perfection
can ever: come close to imitating

June 14th, 2021 05:32

in a petit pois mood on the surface of a scar
L. B. Mek said:

\'kisses for a bootleg wine
that pours
through the pors of inflamable plastic macks

high on chicken wire
as the tonsils love
breaks wind and answers back;

deep inside the eyes of a pancreas delight
scented sugar cubes overpower
the flowering peppers overindulgent scream

as a heatwave dangles
its\' treasured hook
into a suffocating light

bondage in a corduroy suit\'

June 11th, 2021 04:30

I am a fetus in a goldfish bowl
L. B. Mek said:

\'with landmine knives
cutting through the bruises on my chin
chocking on loves whispers
as my premature sperm glistens and curtsys
on its\' meeting of precautionary skin;

naked for the threadbare summers raves
a cotton candy dancing on the stomachs of the brave
as a butchers breast drips its\' silk onto the ribs
of a swollen mothers rage;\'
what a cruel society we\'ve curated
to warp such a talent, into a raving monstrosity
clouded in accrued pain-addled, smog
that so few get to appreciate
its threadbare remnant of artistry,
such a waste!
and what a triumph
for the innate nature of creativity
that manages to outshine
all this vitriol excess of hate..
screaming to all: there\'s hope yet
enough at least, to conquer - over
such impotently bleak perceptions
of our commonly shared, existence

June 10th, 2021 03:46

a suicide wind in a cardboard sky
A Boy With Roses said:

The title of this poem paints quite a numb feeling. The Sex Pistols are always great, and Heart of Gold by Neil Young is a staple on my life. He\'s such a cute, genuine man and songwriter.

June 8th, 2021 16:59

a suicide wind in a cardboard sky
Jerry Reynolds said:

Good one, D.M.

June 8th, 2021 13:50

How Fickle The Pickled Rose In Its\' Orchard Grave
L. B. Mek said:

that\'s a very striking image on the video \'cover\':
a skeleton, blackened monkey face
with black gloves and hoody
all within a black n white video...
ok, well I hope
this weaponization of artistry
gives you the world, you want to curate..
I kinds feel, dispirited
once more, at myself
for choosing to believe
there\'s more good than bad
when the abundance of malicious idiocy
tells me different, every gruelling step
of my unwavering climb...
just sad, on so many levels... really


June 8th, 2021 05:45

As I Journey Through The Veins Of The Frozen Mandarin
Trenz Pruca said:

Great! I loved it. Love the images. Thank you.

June 6th, 2021 13:06

In The Suicide Pond Where Drowns Dementias\' Reign
L. B. Mek said:

\'where is the dripping lard
that burns my eternal greed?
as it seeds
your powdered wedding ring
as it sours
my tasting of your post natal hormone seed;
bleed with the sun
feed on the sublime interroagation
as the prison guard snickers
with the confessional sums of love\'..
wow!
although I think I need a little help in context
to guide me, sadly
I lack the brain capacity to comprehend fully...
still, of what little I\'ve gleaned
I\'ve insatiably devoured
with my glutenous greed for all-things imbued
with that artistic integrity: of Poetic majesty...

June 4th, 2021 04:44

To coexist with the spring in a christmas shoe
L. B. Mek said:

just, so depressingly sad - what a waste
it is a crime against our generation\'s Poetry
and affirmation to everything accessible
that we deny ourselves
or have other\'s deny it for us:
that you, dear poet are not a house hold name
being encouraged and celebrated by society\'s majority!
\'walking with the tremors of a catfish
doped on the Marciano punch
in the seventh round
with a parceled rum and black, my sordid eyes settle
on a glimpse of the sea
as the seafaring queen buttons her corset
and shaves her butterfly arms.
butternut beans
in a squandered levine
swims the articulate tide
with an heir apperent guest
of a shepherds eye\'

\'pricks from the aardvaks teeth
bites into the heaving of my bleeding flesh
of nonchalant screams
love is all, and
love is all it is.
tarrogan thighs in beds of aluminums stockings and lace
traces my footsteps back
to a prehistoric morphine pill under a covid sky.
why does your wire cut so deep?\'

June 3rd, 2021 04:17

In the excreted company of the wolves nocturnal cyst
L. B. Mek said:

wow, such vividly obscene volatility
showcased with: purposed integrity!
this be a poem that is meant, to be felt
not merely read..
conveying with unmistakeable clarity
the anguish of the author
at that one time
in this one - singular, mindset...
(although
I would understand if some may argue
this needs an age restriction warning
for its graphic imagery
admittedly this is a little less subtle
than your usual, artistry)
either way, at least for me
this is such, an intriguing read!
(I\'ve never - ever, read hate of the \'broken hearted\'
expressed with such: unvarnished eloquence):
\'I am in love with the boil on the backsideof her heart
wanking with the spanking hand of the occult
in sulking trees with knees of abanded seed
she breathes my semon cold through the veins of abandoned profiterole ghost;
I love you most\'
reminds me of the Great: Emily Disckinson:
\'It would never be Common—more—I said—
Difference—had begun—
Many a bitterness—had been—
But that old sort—was done—

Or—if it sometime—showed—as \'twill—
Upon the Downiest—Morn—
Such bliss—had I—for all the years—
\'Twould give an Easier—pain—\'
from \'It would never be common, more - I said\' or \'poem 430\'
( https://mypoeticside.com/show-classic-poem-8305 )

June 1st, 2021 04:28

Too Long This Day Of Pain
L. B. Mek said:

reading your poetry, is like
dogpaddling upon an inked sea: of idiosyncratic imagery:
\'I have mingled well
with the entourage of solvents, continued abuse
robust, yet rusting beneath an auctioneers
toe-tapping hammer.
sounds of the swinging sixties
hanging, from the ears of deaths prescriptive pollen
in counts of three to five
sunken heads, nesting in the pillows
of a cautious whim
where swarms the starving flies
on a henchmans wounded chest.\'
thank you, for Choosing
to share your brilliance dear Poet..
(and I too agree, there\'s no hierarchy of worth
in realms: of True \'artistic integrity\'
you should encourage my show of humility
for we all know of that monstrous, Pride
we each harbour: willingly) lol
still, I humbly appreciate
your kind reply to my last comment
it means more
coming from a Poet of your calibre

May 31st, 2021 04:04

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