Comments received on poems by Jay-Lee Jane
Dark Cupid
Paul Bell said:
I\'m thinking chocolates won\'t do the trick here. In saying that, I sort of like this.
February 9th, 2022 07:17
Paul Bell said:
I\'m thinking chocolates won\'t do the trick here. In saying that, I sort of like this.
February 9th, 2022 07:17
Mum and Dad
FallenAngel1🕊 said:
You express your feelings here so superbly well. For me it was my mom,..I loved her and always will,..but she was an alcoholic bitch,..when drunk. But an absolute angel streight of heaven when sober. Like the female version of Dr.Jyckell and Mr.Hyde.lol🌞🕊
January 27th, 2022 19:19
FallenAngel1🕊 said:
You express your feelings here so superbly well. For me it was my mom,..I loved her and always will,..but she was an alcoholic bitch,..when drunk. But an absolute angel streight of heaven when sober. Like the female version of Dr.Jyckell and Mr.Hyde.lol🌞🕊
January 27th, 2022 19:19
birds in the sky
Nicholas Browning said:
Simple, yet it has depth. Short, but carries duration. A fantastic read. Well done.
Also I agree with not being free. (Me personally)
November 26th, 2021 10:49
Nicholas Browning said:
Simple, yet it has depth. Short, but carries duration. A fantastic read. Well done.
Also I agree with not being free. (Me personally)
November 26th, 2021 10:49
birds in the sky
spilleronsheet said:
It’s poetic
It’s beauty
Though pain and tears lace these lines
Your free
Cause your words are free
And with your words with wings
You shall fly from the cage you dwell in
Well crafted poetry dear friend
November 26th, 2021 08:48
spilleronsheet said:
It’s poetic
It’s beauty
Though pain and tears lace these lines
Your free
Cause your words are free
And with your words with wings
You shall fly from the cage you dwell in
Well crafted poetry dear friend
November 26th, 2021 08:48
birds in the sky
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful poetry
great use of purposed repetition,
thanks for sharing
November 26th, 2021 07:06
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful poetry
great use of purposed repetition,
thanks for sharing
November 26th, 2021 07:06
You
spilleronsheet said:
A well conveyed message with a powerful poetry
Abuses are a total no
Well said dear poet
Roses are red
And the poetry on the point
November 23rd, 2021 16:27
spilleronsheet said:
A well conveyed message with a powerful poetry
Abuses are a total no
Well said dear poet
Roses are red
And the poetry on the point
November 23rd, 2021 16:27
Mum and Dad
spilleronsheet said:
In your rhyming words the sad truth was enveloped
November 23rd, 2021 15:59
spilleronsheet said:
In your rhyming words the sad truth was enveloped
November 23rd, 2021 15:59
Mum and Dad
Nicholas Browning said:
Empathy goes out to you my friend. For me it was the mother though.
November 23rd, 2021 11:52
Nicholas Browning said:
Empathy goes out to you my friend. For me it was the mother though.
November 23rd, 2021 11:52
You
Doggerel Dave said:
I think they got your message.....short and to the point - nicely done.
I suppose at your position on life\'s journey interpersonal relationships would be a big preoccupation, but I personally have no picture of Gin Gin in my head - I would very much like a word picture of the place and your position there (only if you want to).
November 22nd, 2021 06:10
Doggerel Dave said:
I think they got your message.....short and to the point - nicely done.
I suppose at your position on life\'s journey interpersonal relationships would be a big preoccupation, but I personally have no picture of Gin Gin in my head - I would very much like a word picture of the place and your position there (only if you want to).
November 22nd, 2021 06:10
Without Music
Poetic Dan said:
Very raw and soulful, thank you so much for sharing!
October 7th, 2021 09:12
Poetic Dan said:
Very raw and soulful, thank you so much for sharing!
October 7th, 2021 09:12
Without Music
L. B. Mek said:
this was a wonderful poetic treat
and if you ever try to write in this style again, might be fun to create two diverse poetic voices in the one write, maybe each representing opposing views? I imagine it might be more work, but also more fun to attempt.. lol
but what do I know, anyway
I just wanted to say thank you for sharing, such a unique read
(oh and psssst, you didn\'t underline the first I) lol
October 7th, 2021 04:24
L. B. Mek said:
this was a wonderful poetic treat
and if you ever try to write in this style again, might be fun to create two diverse poetic voices in the one write, maybe each representing opposing views? I imagine it might be more work, but also more fun to attempt.. lol
but what do I know, anyway
I just wanted to say thank you for sharing, such a unique read
(oh and psssst, you didn\'t underline the first I) lol
October 7th, 2021 04:24
I am your daughter
L. B. Mek said:
true artistic talent
arrowed with purposed intent, to portray and share
meaningful, impactful, sincere
and Relatable message...
Showcasing a true touch of class,
I would be very proud if I could ever create something like this,
I truly hope you\'re proud of yourself!
thanks for sharing, dear Artist
October 5th, 2021 06:34
L. B. Mek said:
true artistic talent
arrowed with purposed intent, to portray and share
meaningful, impactful, sincere
and Relatable message...
Showcasing a true touch of class,
I would be very proud if I could ever create something like this,
I truly hope you\'re proud of yourself!
thanks for sharing, dear Artist
October 5th, 2021 06:34
Home
Zemde said:
A beautiful story! I love how the poem goes from feeling cold, scared, and vulnerable to warm, cozy, and loved.
September 14th, 2021 23:02
Zemde said:
A beautiful story! I love how the poem goes from feeling cold, scared, and vulnerable to warm, cozy, and loved.
September 14th, 2021 23:02
Heartbreaking Tragedy
L. B. Mek said:
very sweet, its defiant and stark and yet still romantic and tentative
\'This heartbreak is a tragedy,
Or is this some conspiracy?
I’ll let you go; though don’t stray apart\'..
(thanks for sharing, a wonderful shorty)
September 14th, 2021 03:54
L. B. Mek said:
very sweet, its defiant and stark and yet still romantic and tentative
\'This heartbreak is a tragedy,
Or is this some conspiracy?
I’ll let you go; though don’t stray apart\'..
(thanks for sharing, a wonderful shorty)
September 14th, 2021 03:54
They Call Me Jealousy
Fozzy said:
Jealousy must be an emotion that hurts. Is it a case envy = anger.. jealousy = hurt...I dont know
September 13th, 2021 09:48
Fozzy said:
Jealousy must be an emotion that hurts. Is it a case envy = anger.. jealousy = hurt...I dont know
September 13th, 2021 09:48
They Call Me Jealousy
L. B. Mek said:
\'And that’s why you’ll wish that I’m gone fast.
My fingertips of ash will burn through bone,
That’s enough to have you running home.
I have breath of frost and darkest night,
That alone will have you out of my sight.
I am the monster hiding in the deepest parts of your soul,
I am the part of you that will never grow old.\'..
(and, if I may be so rude as to borrow from your convo above):
\'I will defiantly keep tweaking, working and reworking them!!\'
these two, quotes
insures I\'ll be looking out for every write you post, dear poet
thank you! for choosing to share
such a wonderful read
September 13th, 2021 06:33
L. B. Mek said:
\'And that’s why you’ll wish that I’m gone fast.
My fingertips of ash will burn through bone,
That’s enough to have you running home.
I have breath of frost and darkest night,
That alone will have you out of my sight.
I am the monster hiding in the deepest parts of your soul,
I am the part of you that will never grow old.\'..
(and, if I may be so rude as to borrow from your convo above):
\'I will defiantly keep tweaking, working and reworking them!!\'
these two, quotes
insures I\'ll be looking out for every write you post, dear poet
thank you! for choosing to share
such a wonderful read
September 13th, 2021 06:33
They Call Me Jealousy
orchidee said:
A fine write Jay.
I read somewhere of the difference between jealousy and envy. Don\'t take me as verbatim here, but I think it said jealousy in some senses is wanting, as a sort of right, what we may not have. Envy is \'worse\' in wanting what we may not always need, but are greedy to have it.
September 13th, 2021 02:11
orchidee said:
A fine write Jay.
I read somewhere of the difference between jealousy and envy. Don\'t take me as verbatim here, but I think it said jealousy in some senses is wanting, as a sort of right, what we may not have. Envy is \'worse\' in wanting what we may not always need, but are greedy to have it.
September 13th, 2021 02:11
A Pair of Men
jarcher54 said:
A lovely and lively view of the two men. To me, you were implying that they are one and the same man. If only we could listen to ourselves as older folks when we are young and confident and gullible! I assumed the older one had experienced something akin to war. Good to know your clues were sufficient for me to feel that without you having to hit us over the head to spell it out. The \"fearful memories\" could have been other tragedies, famine, pestilence, homelessness or being a refugee from a hell hole. Good work young lady, who clearly has picked up a bit of old wisdom from someone!
September 12th, 2021 23:56
jarcher54 said:
A lovely and lively view of the two men. To me, you were implying that they are one and the same man. If only we could listen to ourselves as older folks when we are young and confident and gullible! I assumed the older one had experienced something akin to war. Good to know your clues were sufficient for me to feel that without you having to hit us over the head to spell it out. The \"fearful memories\" could have been other tragedies, famine, pestilence, homelessness or being a refugee from a hell hole. Good work young lady, who clearly has picked up a bit of old wisdom from someone!
September 12th, 2021 23:56
Daddy Kisses Me
Goldfinch60 said:
He will always be there for you as you will for him.
Andy
September 8th, 2021 02:08
Goldfinch60 said:
He will always be there for you as you will for him.
Andy
September 8th, 2021 02:08
Home
Doggerel Dave said:
Keep at it, Jane. You have a place here.
I\'ve lived in Australia for along time, so there are plenty of questions I could ask....but that is entirely up to you..
A powerful write.
August 26th, 2021 04:29
Doggerel Dave said:
Keep at it, Jane. You have a place here.
I\'ve lived in Australia for along time, so there are plenty of questions I could ask....but that is entirely up to you..
A powerful write.
August 26th, 2021 04:29
Home
L. B. Mek said:
I laud your tenacity
keep sharing, keep hoping, keep believing!
August 26th, 2021 03:34
L. B. Mek said:
I laud your tenacity
keep sharing, keep hoping, keep believing!
August 26th, 2021 03:34
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