Comments received on poems by sorenbarrett
Wind in a jar
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful imagery and imagination soren, I am quite happy with what I have at present thank you.
Andy
February 22nd, 2024 02:26
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful imagery and imagination soren, I am quite happy with what I have at present thank you.
Andy
February 22nd, 2024 02:26
Wind in a jar
Teddy.15 said:
Wow so original and so brilliant in imagery although I\'m hoping the wind in the jar is from the park 🤣 lol brilliant my dear sorenbarret 🌹
February 21st, 2024 09:52
Teddy.15 said:
Wow so original and so brilliant in imagery although I\'m hoping the wind in the jar is from the park 🤣 lol brilliant my dear sorenbarret 🌹
February 21st, 2024 09:52
Wind in a jar
2781 said:
We\'ve all got to go-what more can a man do but to eat, drink, and enjoy the fruits of his labour.
February 21st, 2024 06:55
2781 said:
We\'ve all got to go-what more can a man do but to eat, drink, and enjoy the fruits of his labour.
February 21st, 2024 06:55
Sparrow
Goldfinch60 said:
No matter how wet they get sparrows will live and fly in the sunshine soren.
Andy
February 21st, 2024 02:23
Goldfinch60 said:
No matter how wet they get sparrows will live and fly in the sunshine soren.
Andy
February 21st, 2024 02:23
Sparrow
Teddy.15 said:
This screams determination to me, a stunning piece of imagery and a glorious ending. I do believe we all have these wings and we can all take flight in metaphor at least. 🌹
February 20th, 2024 05:38
Teddy.15 said:
This screams determination to me, a stunning piece of imagery and a glorious ending. I do believe we all have these wings and we can all take flight in metaphor at least. 🌹
February 20th, 2024 05:38
Sparrow
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Sparrow” by sorenbarrett
Birds live a rough life, out in the wild, or even on people’s premises. The nests are not waterproof. The birds get drenched in rains. Newborn ones don’t even have feathers. Imagine what they go through in the rains… The nests are buffetted about during strong winds.
From my poem “The hungry sparrow” written on 1 March, 1995 :
“The birds and their nests be buffet\'d about,
While, hither, the little kids shriek and shout;
Utterly drench\'d, the poor birds shake,
While their babies cry and stay awake…”
“The baby birds plead touchingly for some food :
But, there be yet no change in nature\'s mood;
The howling winds mercilessly strike terror
Into these birds that do shake with horror….”
“Flapping bravely their wings, so wet and sleek,
The poor birds venture out, some food to seek.
These forlorn chirpings : how heart-rending !
To whom be meant these calls so distressing ?
Would ye, birds, manage finally to stay alive ?
After some food would ye struggle and strive ?”
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Soman Ragavan. 20 February, 2024.
February 20th, 2024 05:00
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Sparrow” by sorenbarrett
Birds live a rough life, out in the wild, or even on people’s premises. The nests are not waterproof. The birds get drenched in rains. Newborn ones don’t even have feathers. Imagine what they go through in the rains… The nests are buffetted about during strong winds.
From my poem “The hungry sparrow” written on 1 March, 1995 :
“The birds and their nests be buffet\'d about,
While, hither, the little kids shriek and shout;
Utterly drench\'d, the poor birds shake,
While their babies cry and stay awake…”
“The baby birds plead touchingly for some food :
But, there be yet no change in nature\'s mood;
The howling winds mercilessly strike terror
Into these birds that do shake with horror….”
“Flapping bravely their wings, so wet and sleek,
The poor birds venture out, some food to seek.
These forlorn chirpings : how heart-rending !
To whom be meant these calls so distressing ?
Would ye, birds, manage finally to stay alive ?
After some food would ye struggle and strive ?”
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Soman Ragavan. 20 February, 2024.
February 20th, 2024 05:00
Inconsistencies
Goldfinch60 said:
Strong words soren, I just cannot understand why ANYONE can harm children for whatever reason.
Andy
February 20th, 2024 02:01
Goldfinch60 said:
Strong words soren, I just cannot understand why ANYONE can harm children for whatever reason.
Andy
February 20th, 2024 02:01
Inconsistencies
Doggerel Dave said:
A hypothetical to end all hypotheticals, Soren.
February 19th, 2024 16:17
Doggerel Dave said:
A hypothetical to end all hypotheticals, Soren.
February 19th, 2024 16:17
Inconsistencies
Parisab said:
Thoughtful and lively ideas from your poem! Whether real as in faith or metaphorical as in spirituality, the killing of the son or of the lamb, should not be in the human’s hand…
February 19th, 2024 14:47
Parisab said:
Thoughtful and lively ideas from your poem! Whether real as in faith or metaphorical as in spirituality, the killing of the son or of the lamb, should not be in the human’s hand…
February 19th, 2024 14:47
Inconsistencies
orchidee said:
A sensible comment now. I think that, as is said, God has infinite wisdom, that if there was a better way, he would have thought of it.
I accept it, though mysterious, but it does not hinder my faith.
Also, how about God testing Abraham to sacrifice Isaac?
February 19th, 2024 12:24
orchidee said:
A sensible comment now. I think that, as is said, God has infinite wisdom, that if there was a better way, he would have thought of it.
I accept it, though mysterious, but it does not hinder my faith.
Also, how about God testing Abraham to sacrifice Isaac?
February 19th, 2024 12:24
Inconsistencies
orchidee said:
A daft angle on this - if botox could truly improve people, would you let KP be a \'guinea pig\' to find out? I reply: Why, yes of course; in fact it\'s already so! heehee.
Well, it don\'t improve her, so......
February 19th, 2024 12:22
orchidee said:
A daft angle on this - if botox could truly improve people, would you let KP be a \'guinea pig\' to find out? I reply: Why, yes of course; in fact it\'s already so! heehee.
Well, it don\'t improve her, so......
February 19th, 2024 12:22
Inconsistencies
Bella Shepard said:
My question would be, what parent could sacrifice their child in such a way. Belief is what makes the world go round, for better or worse. I do shudder at \"this line\", for in my mind the symbolism of Christ represents an enlightenment of the mind and human soul. You strike at the very heart of questions I grapple with, yet can find no answers to. Brilliant!!
February 19th, 2024 10:24
Bella Shepard said:
My question would be, what parent could sacrifice their child in such a way. Belief is what makes the world go round, for better or worse. I do shudder at \"this line\", for in my mind the symbolism of Christ represents an enlightenment of the mind and human soul. You strike at the very heart of questions I grapple with, yet can find no answers to. Brilliant!!
February 19th, 2024 10:24
Discarded
Goldfinch60 said:
Age can be like that for many soren but blessfully not for all.
Andy
February 19th, 2024 02:58
Goldfinch60 said:
Age can be like that for many soren but blessfully not for all.
Andy
February 19th, 2024 02:58
Discarded
Doggerel Dave said:
Can\'t reach in there for the metaphor, but can vividly remember the feeling of loss when an old, familiar, much repaired (don\'t see many of them these days) pair of boots are consigned to the bin having sat in the back of the cupboard for far too long, dusty musty and mouldy....
February 18th, 2024 07:13
Doggerel Dave said:
Can\'t reach in there for the metaphor, but can vividly remember the feeling of loss when an old, familiar, much repaired (don\'t see many of them these days) pair of boots are consigned to the bin having sat in the back of the cupboard for far too long, dusty musty and mouldy....
February 18th, 2024 07:13
Discarded
arqios said:
Sometimes we can feel like a discarded shoe. I may be taking the metaphor elsewhere. But that’s the strength of the poem.
February 18th, 2024 06:34
arqios said:
Sometimes we can feel like a discarded shoe. I may be taking the metaphor elsewhere. But that’s the strength of the poem.
February 18th, 2024 06:34
Discarded
Teddy.15 said:
Maybe you have just described how I feel somedays. Very clever and brilliant imagery as always. 🌹
February 18th, 2024 06:21
Teddy.15 said:
Maybe you have just described how I feel somedays. Very clever and brilliant imagery as always. 🌹
February 18th, 2024 06:21
Dark to light
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful, beautiful words soren to lead me into this \'new Spring day\'.
Andy
February 18th, 2024 02:21
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful, beautiful words soren to lead me into this \'new Spring day\'.
Andy
February 18th, 2024 02:21
Dark to light
orchidee said:
You know that Helios chappie?!
It\'s not a person, daft Orchi, says Fido! lol.
February 17th, 2024 11:09
orchidee said:
You know that Helios chappie?!
It\'s not a person, daft Orchi, says Fido! lol.
February 17th, 2024 11:09
Choices
2781 said:
More thought provoking- if I hadn\'t read your comment I would find it a critique of today, if not tomorrow.
February 17th, 2024 06:43
2781 said:
More thought provoking- if I hadn\'t read your comment I would find it a critique of today, if not tomorrow.
February 17th, 2024 06:43
Dark to light
Teddy.15 said:
Utter beauty within your lines I was totally hynotized and in a spin right to the end and then I saw it I saw spring. Another kudos dear sorenbarret. 🌹 Thank you for sharing your poetry I am so sincerely excited each time to read your magnificent work. 🤗
February 17th, 2024 05:34
Teddy.15 said:
Utter beauty within your lines I was totally hynotized and in a spin right to the end and then I saw it I saw spring. Another kudos dear sorenbarret. 🌹 Thank you for sharing your poetry I am so sincerely excited each time to read your magnificent work. 🤗
February 17th, 2024 05:34
Choices
Doggerel Dave said:
Solid build there, Soren. capped with the last four lines of which the first and last really anchor the whole piece for me.
February 16th, 2024 19:21
Doggerel Dave said:
Solid build there, Soren. capped with the last four lines of which the first and last really anchor the whole piece for me.
February 16th, 2024 19:21
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