Comments received on poems by sorenbarrett
Record Player
faie said:
I enjoyed the poem. Reading it made me think of the record spinning on the turntable and how carefree life becomes at that moment when the music sounds.
February 21st, 2025 21:59
faie said:
I enjoyed the poem. Reading it made me think of the record spinning on the turntable and how carefree life becomes at that moment when the music sounds.
February 21st, 2025 21:59
Flies
David Wakeling said:
Wow this is a amazing. The flies almost took on super human status as they dictated the scene.Good fun Well done
February 21st, 2025 16:03
David Wakeling said:
Wow this is a amazing. The flies almost took on super human status as they dictated the scene.Good fun Well done
February 21st, 2025 16:03
Flies
Friendship said:
This was a very challenging one, Soren, Your poem revolves around the frustration and disgust experienced when food, typically a source of pleasure and nourishment, is tainted by the presence of flies. It reflects on the loss of purity and enjoyment in a meal due to external, unsanitary influences, symbolizing broader themes of decay, contamination, and the inevitability of nature\'s intrusion into human life. Yet it also seems that The flies are a metaphor for uncontrollable and unwelcome aspects of life that spoil what is otherwise enjoyable. Serves to highlight the fragility of human experiences, particularly those related to pleasure and nourishment, and reflects on how nature, in the form of flies, can intrude upon and taint those experiences. It evokes a broader commentary on the inevitability of decay and the challenges of maintaining purity in life.
February 21st, 2025 15:05
Friendship said:
This was a very challenging one, Soren, Your poem revolves around the frustration and disgust experienced when food, typically a source of pleasure and nourishment, is tainted by the presence of flies. It reflects on the loss of purity and enjoyment in a meal due to external, unsanitary influences, symbolizing broader themes of decay, contamination, and the inevitability of nature\'s intrusion into human life. Yet it also seems that The flies are a metaphor for uncontrollable and unwelcome aspects of life that spoil what is otherwise enjoyable. Serves to highlight the fragility of human experiences, particularly those related to pleasure and nourishment, and reflects on how nature, in the form of flies, can intrude upon and taint those experiences. It evokes a broader commentary on the inevitability of decay and the challenges of maintaining purity in life.
February 21st, 2025 15:05
Fear
Friendship said:
Soren, Your poem aims to evoke empathy and provoke thought about the human condition, particularly regarding the relationship between past actions and present suffering. It serves as a reflection on vulnerability and the haunting nature of unresolved pain. You painted an imagery that evokes a sense of being trapped in one\'s own body and the haunting memory of past sins. The language you use is raw and evocative, with words like \"naked,\" \"homeless,\" and \"pain\" conjuring a stark sense of vulnerability. Yet your words like \"death bell\'s knell\" and \"bug prickles\" emphasize sensory experiences tied to suffering and discomfort as if one could comprehend yet remain oblivious to it.
February 21st, 2025 12:29
Friendship said:
Soren, Your poem aims to evoke empathy and provoke thought about the human condition, particularly regarding the relationship between past actions and present suffering. It serves as a reflection on vulnerability and the haunting nature of unresolved pain. You painted an imagery that evokes a sense of being trapped in one\'s own body and the haunting memory of past sins. The language you use is raw and evocative, with words like \"naked,\" \"homeless,\" and \"pain\" conjuring a stark sense of vulnerability. Yet your words like \"death bell\'s knell\" and \"bug prickles\" emphasize sensory experiences tied to suffering and discomfort as if one could comprehend yet remain oblivious to it.
February 21st, 2025 12:29
Flies
NinjaGirl said:
I hate flies! Some people know what\'s not theirs but chose to continue anyway...
February 21st, 2025 12:21
NinjaGirl said:
I hate flies! Some people know what\'s not theirs but chose to continue anyway...
February 21st, 2025 12:21
Flies
orchidee said:
They only live 3 weeks anyway, I read somewhere. Ahh. Maggot Pie for KP\'s supper tonight. But Fido and I are having roast beef! lol.
February 21st, 2025 11:21
orchidee said:
They only live 3 weeks anyway, I read somewhere. Ahh. Maggot Pie for KP\'s supper tonight. But Fido and I are having roast beef! lol.
February 21st, 2025 11:21
Flies
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Well, this one 🪰 would make for a great read at the start of fasting! 🪰 LOL! Obviously many metaphors here, but I chose to read this as is 🪰 and...I\'ll pass the plate! 🤣 🌹👏 Seriously, well done on this brilliant piece, Soren. Observational poetry that really can work on so many other levels. A must fave for me. 🪰
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February 21st, 2025 11:17
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Well, this one 🪰 would make for a great read at the start of fasting! 🪰 LOL! Obviously many metaphors here, but I chose to read this as is 🪰 and...I\'ll pass the plate! 🤣 🌹👏 Seriously, well done on this brilliant piece, Soren. Observational poetry that really can work on so many other levels. A must fave for me. 🪰
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February 21st, 2025 11:17
Flies
2781 said:
It\'s enough to turn you off your food. Thing is, they know a good meal when they see one.
February 21st, 2025 09:06
2781 said:
It\'s enough to turn you off your food. Thing is, they know a good meal when they see one.
February 21st, 2025 09:06
Flies
Doggerel Dave said:
I seem to remember you riffed on this topic before, Soren. Got something against the little buggers, have yer?
A well vented piece.
February 21st, 2025 07:48
Doggerel Dave said:
I seem to remember you riffed on this topic before, Soren. Got something against the little buggers, have yer?
A well vented piece.
February 21st, 2025 07:48
Flies
Cassie58 said:
No one likes flies in their food. How rude of the flies to invite themselves to lunch. Why do they do it? Well all creatures have to live and need nourishment. This poem is rich in metaphor and has many meanings. Flies actually get bad press. Without them we would be up to our eyes in dead and rotting bodies and filth. That I learned from my biology lessons. Best just swat them away. Your metaphors are quite amazing sorenbarrett. Thinking outside the box all the time. A poem enjoyed.
February 21st, 2025 07:26
Cassie58 said:
No one likes flies in their food. How rude of the flies to invite themselves to lunch. Why do they do it? Well all creatures have to live and need nourishment. This poem is rich in metaphor and has many meanings. Flies actually get bad press. Without them we would be up to our eyes in dead and rotting bodies and filth. That I learned from my biology lessons. Best just swat them away. Your metaphors are quite amazing sorenbarrett. Thinking outside the box all the time. A poem enjoyed.
February 21st, 2025 07:26
Flies
Mutley Ravishes said:
The big fish eat the little ones!
That was a fun read, Soren.
February 21st, 2025 07:18
Mutley Ravishes said:
The big fish eat the little ones!
That was a fun read, Soren.
February 21st, 2025 07:18
Flies
Poetic Licence said:
On the fun side of this write I hate flies with a passion, on the serious side there are many messages in this write. How it needs one bad thing to go unchecked then it quickly multiplies, how greed becomes a disease, the more they the more they want etc etc, very nicely written and really enjoyed the read
February 21st, 2025 06:16
Poetic Licence said:
On the fun side of this write I hate flies with a passion, on the serious side there are many messages in this write. How it needs one bad thing to go unchecked then it quickly multiplies, how greed becomes a disease, the more they the more they want etc etc, very nicely written and really enjoyed the read
February 21st, 2025 06:16
Flies
arqios said:
The onset of a maggoty process, I’m afraid… prevention is always more effective than curative measures… 🙏🏻
February 21st, 2025 06:08
arqios said:
The onset of a maggoty process, I’m afraid… prevention is always more effective than curative measures… 🙏🏻
February 21st, 2025 06:08
Flies
Teddy.15 said:
I\'d say this is about greed, I see the generosity of the peaceful narrator acceptance of what is going on, knowing he cannot change it, he reflects on what good he can get from the bad situation. I would go as far to say this could also be about politics. But who am I to say. 🌹 Ah yes lots to munch on. 🌹
February 21st, 2025 04:34
Teddy.15 said:
I\'d say this is about greed, I see the generosity of the peaceful narrator acceptance of what is going on, knowing he cannot change it, he reflects on what good he can get from the bad situation. I would go as far to say this could also be about politics. But who am I to say. 🌹 Ah yes lots to munch on. 🌹
February 21st, 2025 04:34
Relics of the lost
Emile Dubois said:
Beautiful, I guess even in dementia the mind has the key, and yet one is sadly lost to oneself. Thanks for a stimulating read
February 21st, 2025 03:11
Emile Dubois said:
Beautiful, I guess even in dementia the mind has the key, and yet one is sadly lost to oneself. Thanks for a stimulating read
February 21st, 2025 03:11
Ultimate weapon
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words of understanding soren.
Andy
February 21st, 2025 02:12
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words of understanding soren.
Andy
February 21st, 2025 02:12
Ultimate weapon
James Michael said:
Great flow, rhyming and rhythm to this one. Metaphorically relatable. Well done!
February 20th, 2025 19:38
James Michael said:
Great flow, rhyming and rhythm to this one. Metaphorically relatable. Well done!
February 20th, 2025 19:38
All loss
Ladywithaquill said:
I thought the first line was biting but then the rest of it hits you and wow this poem really pierces your heart!
February 20th, 2025 15:36
Ladywithaquill said:
I thought the first line was biting but then the rest of it hits you and wow this poem really pierces your heart!
February 20th, 2025 15:36
Ultimate weapon
David Wakeling said:
This is quite a lot to unpack.I had to read it twice to appreciate it.Pity sympathy compassion they are all there .Amazing poem
February 20th, 2025 15:20
David Wakeling said:
This is quite a lot to unpack.I had to read it twice to appreciate it.Pity sympathy compassion they are all there .Amazing poem
February 20th, 2025 15:20
Ultimate weapon
Tristan Robert Lange said:
At first read, this comes off as a poem about empathy and compassion; however, some clues might alter that initial reading. Words such as pity and weapon. The lines: “no one can ignore / This a weapon of the mind refined / Treating the enemy as one below, disarming the hardest blow / Now shrunken the largest foe, disemboweled their ego”, are further evidence that this is someone who is using pity, compassion and empathy against others as weapon, perhaps utilizing it as a way of building themselves up why cutting others down. So, while this initially sounds like a sincerely compassionate person, he/she turns out to be a narcissist, weaponizing those otherwise good things against others for their own gain. Well done on this, my friend. A multi-layered and rewarding read. ❤️🙏 I apologize for my absence for the last couple of days. Been hit hard with a nasty cold. Finally, I feel somewhat alive again! LOL!
February 20th, 2025 08:41
Tristan Robert Lange said:
At first read, this comes off as a poem about empathy and compassion; however, some clues might alter that initial reading. Words such as pity and weapon. The lines: “no one can ignore / This a weapon of the mind refined / Treating the enemy as one below, disarming the hardest blow / Now shrunken the largest foe, disemboweled their ego”, are further evidence that this is someone who is using pity, compassion and empathy against others as weapon, perhaps utilizing it as a way of building themselves up why cutting others down. So, while this initially sounds like a sincerely compassionate person, he/she turns out to be a narcissist, weaponizing those otherwise good things against others for their own gain. Well done on this, my friend. A multi-layered and rewarding read. ❤️🙏 I apologize for my absence for the last couple of days. Been hit hard with a nasty cold. Finally, I feel somewhat alive again! LOL!
February 20th, 2025 08:41
Ultimate weapon
Friendship said:
This is a powerful poem, Soren. Your poem advocates for a change in perspective regarding how we approach conflict. It suggests that fostering understanding and compassion can lead to more effective and just resolutions than reliance on violence and revenge. I like how you use the metaphor of weapons to represent emotional and psychological tools. For example, You use \"Pity\'s sword of steel\" which symbolizes the strength of compassion. You create a striking contrast between violence and kindness.
February 20th, 2025 08:25
Friendship said:
This is a powerful poem, Soren. Your poem advocates for a change in perspective regarding how we approach conflict. It suggests that fostering understanding and compassion can lead to more effective and just resolutions than reliance on violence and revenge. I like how you use the metaphor of weapons to represent emotional and psychological tools. For example, You use \"Pity\'s sword of steel\" which symbolizes the strength of compassion. You create a striking contrast between violence and kindness.
February 20th, 2025 08:25
Ultimate weapon
Salvia.S said:
Such a beautiful and thought provoking poem! Well done!
February 20th, 2025 06:41
Salvia.S said:
Such a beautiful and thought provoking poem! Well done!
February 20th, 2025 06:41
Ultimate weapon
Neville said:
At times when one has a clear advantage, pity per se is indeed the most welcome and ultimate gift .. however, those that use it as a weapon will ultimately lose that advantage on what will become an uneven playing field .. this feels like something that is being played out write now .. and I note not a drop of ink wasted .. Neville
February 20th, 2025 05:28
Neville said:
At times when one has a clear advantage, pity per se is indeed the most welcome and ultimate gift .. however, those that use it as a weapon will ultimately lose that advantage on what will become an uneven playing field .. this feels like something that is being played out write now .. and I note not a drop of ink wasted .. Neville
February 20th, 2025 05:28
Ultimate weapon
Teddy.15 said:
I\'m a grand believer that some thrive on pity, I myself am not a fan of those sorts, I am a grand believer of justice ⚖️ and ego well, you know me well enough to know that\'s a thing I really dislike, I want to show you a line I love more but in this case it\'s every line, so powerful and indeed is the very reason I myself do not believe in God. Kudos, you just interpreted my own thoughts of today. 🤗 🌹
February 20th, 2025 05:25
Teddy.15 said:
I\'m a grand believer that some thrive on pity, I myself am not a fan of those sorts, I am a grand believer of justice ⚖️ and ego well, you know me well enough to know that\'s a thing I really dislike, I want to show you a line I love more but in this case it\'s every line, so powerful and indeed is the very reason I myself do not believe in God. Kudos, you just interpreted my own thoughts of today. 🤗 🌹
February 20th, 2025 05:25
Ultimate weapon
Poetic Licence said:
Loved this read of honest observations, with some great lines in.
February 20th, 2025 05:14
Poetic Licence said:
Loved this read of honest observations, with some great lines in.
February 20th, 2025 05:14
Ultimate weapon
arqios said:
How so very true! And no less in a poem too🙏🏻🕊
February 20th, 2025 03:48
arqios said:
How so very true! And no less in a poem too🙏🏻🕊
February 20th, 2025 03:48
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