Comments received on poems by sorenbarrett
Age
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, this made me think about how words can carry multiple lives at once. A spring can be mechanical, seasonal, or a source of water, and you\'ve managed to weave all three together naturally. I always enjoy seeing that kind of wordplay, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ๐ฆโโฌ
June 24th, 2026 13:26
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, this made me think about how words can carry multiple lives at once. A spring can be mechanical, seasonal, or a source of water, and you\'ve managed to weave all three together naturally. I always enjoy seeing that kind of wordplay, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ๐ฆโโฌ
June 24th, 2026 13:26
Age
Soman Ragavan said:
At first the power is less, thus it meanders about. As it gathers speed and force, it is able to forge its way in a more straight path. Thus, the word \"straightens...\" Even from a seemingly barren place, we can find a spring arising, from rock and soil. To rise up it has to fight gravity. Then as it flows, gravity fights back : the spring keeps going down. Flowers blooming in winter symbolise the victory of the flowers over the harshness of winter and snow. The poet\'s eye captures all this...
June 24th, 2026 08:21
Soman Ragavan said:
At first the power is less, thus it meanders about. As it gathers speed and force, it is able to forge its way in a more straight path. Thus, the word \"straightens...\" Even from a seemingly barren place, we can find a spring arising, from rock and soil. To rise up it has to fight gravity. Then as it flows, gravity fights back : the spring keeps going down. Flowers blooming in winter symbolise the victory of the flowers over the harshness of winter and snow. The poet\'s eye captures all this...
June 24th, 2026 08:21
Age
arqios said:
Reminds me of muscle memory and also how just the right amount of heat would make metals go back to their original shape. ๐๐ป๐๏ธ
June 24th, 2026 08:21
arqios said:
Reminds me of muscle memory and also how just the right amount of heat would make metals go back to their original shape. ๐๐ป๐๏ธ
June 24th, 2026 08:21
Age
Friendship said:
Your poem seems to be written in a timeless context, reflecting on the perennial cycle of life and nature, although it may reflect the poet\'s contemporary thoughts on aging.
June 24th, 2026 06:41
Friendship said:
Your poem seems to be written in a timeless context, reflecting on the perennial cycle of life and nature, although it may reflect the poet\'s contemporary thoughts on aging.
June 24th, 2026 06:41
Uncertainty
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, this hit me hard. The tension is palpable from the opening lines onward. You captured that feeling of being completely overwhelmed by another personโs anger in a way that feels very immediate and real. Powerful piece, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ
June 23rd, 2026 22:29
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, this hit me hard. The tension is palpable from the opening lines onward. You captured that feeling of being completely overwhelmed by another personโs anger in a way that feels very immediate and real. Powerful piece, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ
June 23rd, 2026 22:29
I sit listening for sounds around me
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, what struck me most is how attentively this listens. Every sound feels like part of the same unfolding composition, from the smallest movement to the largest. By the end, the outside world and the inner world seem to meet in the flames. Powerful poem, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ
June 23rd, 2026 21:50
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, what struck me most is how attentively this listens. Every sound feels like part of the same unfolding composition, from the smallest movement to the largest. By the end, the outside world and the inner world seem to meet in the flames. Powerful poem, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ
June 23rd, 2026 21:50
Uncertainty
Kevin Hulme said:
Quite an angry piece. Real emotions here.
Good One.
June 23rd, 2026 18:14
Kevin Hulme said:
Quite an angry piece. Real emotions here.
Good One.
June 23rd, 2026 18:14
Chilled
Brookestiehl said:
I love the metaphors in this, especially the first sentence. AMAZING work
June 23rd, 2026 13:43
Brookestiehl said:
I love the metaphors in this, especially the first sentence. AMAZING work
June 23rd, 2026 13:43
Uncertainty
Thomas W Case said:
This carries a strong physical immediacyโlike the body reacting before the mind has time to negotiate anything.
The tension is palpable in the imagery: heat, steel, blankness, containment.
What stands out most is the shift from internal overwhelm to external commandโthe moment where the relationship flips into expulsion.
The ending lands blunt and decisive, and that sharpness gives the whole piece its weight.
June 23rd, 2026 08:33
Thomas W Case said:
This carries a strong physical immediacyโlike the body reacting before the mind has time to negotiate anything.
The tension is palpable in the imagery: heat, steel, blankness, containment.
What stands out most is the shift from internal overwhelm to external commandโthe moment where the relationship flips into expulsion.
The ending lands blunt and decisive, and that sharpness gives the whole piece its weight.
June 23rd, 2026 08:33
Uncertainty
Paul Bell said:
Sounds like the ex, especially with the reference, hit the road Jack.
The only other person that instils that fear is the taxman.
Some you don\'t want to meet on a dark night, or even in the day light.
June 23rd, 2026 08:05
Paul Bell said:
Sounds like the ex, especially with the reference, hit the road Jack.
The only other person that instils that fear is the taxman.
Some you don\'t want to meet on a dark night, or even in the day light.
June 23rd, 2026 08:05
Uncertainty
arqios said:
Now there\'s a poem that packs a punch while wrapped up in trepidation. ๐๏ธ๐
June 23rd, 2026 05:43
arqios said:
Now there\'s a poem that packs a punch while wrapped up in trepidation. ๐๏ธ๐
June 23rd, 2026 05:43
Uncertainty
Friendship said:
Well written. This poem centers on the poet\'s physical and emotional reactions to someone who commands a presence. This includes feelings of fear and anxiety, the sensation of being trapped, and the overwhelming impact of the other person\'s emotions.
June 23rd, 2026 03:40
Friendship said:
Well written. This poem centers on the poet\'s physical and emotional reactions to someone who commands a presence. This includes feelings of fear and anxiety, the sensation of being trapped, and the overwhelming impact of the other person\'s emotions.
June 23rd, 2026 03:40
I sit listening for sounds around me
Teddy.15 said:
Oh yes what a beautiful poem and I was drawn right into the sound and last lines ๐น
June 23rd, 2026 02:08
Teddy.15 said:
Oh yes what a beautiful poem and I was drawn right into the sound and last lines ๐น
June 23rd, 2026 02:08
I sit listening for sounds around me
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words soren, poems can come from many places.
Andy
June 23rd, 2026 01:17
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words soren, poems can come from many places.
Andy
June 23rd, 2026 01:17
I sit listening for sounds around me
Shahrukh said:
Reading this feels like i was with you when you were writing it. Loved it soren
June 22nd, 2026 20:38
Shahrukh said:
Reading this feels like i was with you when you were writing it. Loved it soren
June 22nd, 2026 20:38
I sit listening for sounds around me
cellinic said:
I\'d rather agree with arqios that what\'s essentially meant is the birth of a poem. Nicely done.
June 22nd, 2026 20:11
cellinic said:
I\'d rather agree with arqios that what\'s essentially meant is the birth of a poem. Nicely done.
June 22nd, 2026 20:11
I sit listening for sounds around me
Kevin Hulme said:
When ever I hear the Sounds out of my Window, It reminds me of \'Rear Window\' and Jimmy Stewart watching the Neighbours. The day in motion.
A fave right here .
June 22nd, 2026 18:50
Kevin Hulme said:
When ever I hear the Sounds out of my Window, It reminds me of \'Rear Window\' and Jimmy Stewart watching the Neighbours. The day in motion.
A fave right here .
June 22nd, 2026 18:50
Growing old
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, what caught me most was the progression itself...one moment you\'re flying kites and skinning your knees, and before you know it you\'re looking back across decades. That steady march forward gives this real emotional weight. Beautifully done, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ๐ฆโโฌ
June 22nd, 2026 09:55
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Soren, what caught me most was the progression itself...one moment you\'re flying kites and skinning your knees, and before you know it you\'re looking back across decades. That steady march forward gives this real emotional weight. Beautifully done, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ๐ฆโโฌ
June 22nd, 2026 09:55
I sit listening for sounds around me
orchidee said:
Yes, sounds like some mindfulness there. That can be useful, though some of it has eccentric elements in it, I think.
June 22nd, 2026 06:59
orchidee said:
Yes, sounds like some mindfulness there. That can be useful, though some of it has eccentric elements in it, I think.
June 22nd, 2026 06:59
I sit listening for sounds around me
Friendship said:
Nicely written. Your poem emphasizes the importance of being attuned to one\'s environment, suggesting that inspiration can be found in the mundane aspects of life. It reflects a broader theme of mindfulness and the transformative power of observation in the creative process.
June 22nd, 2026 06:54
Friendship said:
Nicely written. Your poem emphasizes the importance of being attuned to one\'s environment, suggesting that inspiration can be found in the mundane aspects of life. It reflects a broader theme of mindfulness and the transformative power of observation in the creative process.
June 22nd, 2026 06:54
I sit listening for sounds around me
arqios said:
Great to witness the birthing of a poem. Birthing is not always the most accurate word ๐๐๏ธ
June 22nd, 2026 06:31
arqios said:
Great to witness the birthing of a poem. Birthing is not always the most accurate word ๐๐๏ธ
June 22nd, 2026 06:31
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