Comments received on poems by arqios
over troubled water
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful metaphor of what might be but isn\'t. Misaligned be it structure, conversation, relationship an attempt failed. How many poems have I constructed this way to end in two pieces that never meet. A song where one piece lays itself down over troubled water to form safe passage for a person loved in this case the opposite a trap for the unsuspecting that might fall by following with faith. Well constructed this poem reaches the other side of understanding.
September 16th, 2026 06:54
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful metaphor of what might be but isn\'t. Misaligned be it structure, conversation, relationship an attempt failed. How many poems have I constructed this way to end in two pieces that never meet. A song where one piece lays itself down over troubled water to form safe passage for a person loved in this case the opposite a trap for the unsuspecting that might fall by following with faith. Well constructed this poem reaches the other side of understanding.
September 16th, 2026 06:54
over troubled water
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
a deep write my friend, much enjoyed
September 16th, 2026 06:46
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
a deep write my friend, much enjoyed
September 16th, 2026 06:46
something you had to earn
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Rik, we all learn from our lives, it is called experience and it cannot be taught.
Andy
September 16th, 2026 01:20
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Rik, we all learn from our lives, it is called experience and it cannot be taught.
Andy
September 16th, 2026 01:20
something you had to earn
Tristan Robert Lange said:
arqios, what a devastating and compassionate piece. You enter the distorted accounting of shame, remain honest about its cruelty, and gradually uncover the love it had erased from view. This is beautifully crafted and deeply human, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
September 15th, 2026 22:22
Tristan Robert Lange said:
arqios, what a devastating and compassionate piece. You enter the distorted accounting of shame, remain honest about its cruelty, and gradually uncover the love it had erased from view. This is beautifully crafted and deeply human, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
September 15th, 2026 22:22
something you had to earn
Doggerel Dave said:
Read three times. Large stretches of familiarity. I’ll vote for Thomas – his contribution here, which engages at a deep level with your work.
September 15th, 2026 18:46
Doggerel Dave said:
Read three times. Large stretches of familiarity. I’ll vote for Thomas – his contribution here, which engages at a deep level with your work.
September 15th, 2026 18:46
something you had to earn
orchidee said:
Good write A. I was an imposition. I hung around like a bad.....smell, noooo, apple! lol.
September 15th, 2026 09:02
orchidee said:
Good write A. I was an imposition. I hung around like a bad.....smell, noooo, apple! lol.
September 15th, 2026 09:02
something you had to earn
bezimienny said:
I think this piece well captures the thoughts many struggling people have, ending is very heart touching and it\'s a great poem overall.
September 15th, 2026 08:24
bezimienny said:
I think this piece well captures the thoughts many struggling people have, ending is very heart touching and it\'s a great poem overall.
September 15th, 2026 08:24
something you had to earn
Thomas W Case said:
There’s a damn devastating tenderness here, because the poem takes the private mathematics of shame—measuring every need as a cost—and slowly dismantles it with the evidence of all the hands, photographs, and doors that say otherwise. The final “You were here” is the quiet knockout: not a grand rescue or easy absolution, just the profound realization that existence itself was never a debt that had to be repaid.
September 15th, 2026 07:53
Thomas W Case said:
There’s a damn devastating tenderness here, because the poem takes the private mathematics of shame—measuring every need as a cost—and slowly dismantles it with the evidence of all the hands, photographs, and doors that say otherwise. The final “You were here” is the quiet knockout: not a grand rescue or easy absolution, just the profound realization that existence itself was never a debt that had to be repaid.
September 15th, 2026 07:53
something you had to earn
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
a heart touching write
September 15th, 2026 07:23
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
a heart touching write
September 15th, 2026 07:23
something you had to earn
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful transformative write from burden to being, from need to space filled. I remember one of my children, when young and frustrated by my rails upon him saying \"I didn\'t ask to be here you share in the blame\" yet when my grandchildren came I took from those infants, stealing joy and the life giving power to believe and go on. We all serve a purpose not just for ourselves but for others that we may never know what we gave to them or they stole from us. A most heart touching poem my friend.
September 15th, 2026 06:50
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful transformative write from burden to being, from need to space filled. I remember one of my children, when young and frustrated by my rails upon him saying \"I didn\'t ask to be here you share in the blame\" yet when my grandchildren came I took from those infants, stealing joy and the life giving power to believe and go on. We all serve a purpose not just for ourselves but for others that we may never know what we gave to them or they stole from us. A most heart touching poem my friend.
September 15th, 2026 06:50
old friend
Mutley Ravishes said:
Memory, how could we exist without it? And yet sages tell us we are not the memories. Another paradox?!
September 14th, 2026 21:59
Mutley Ravishes said:
Memory, how could we exist without it? And yet sages tell us we are not the memories. Another paradox?!
September 14th, 2026 21:59
old friend
Tristan Robert Lange said:
What a tender and beautifully restrained piece, my friend. Memory becomes an invitation to look again and discover whether the former connection still illuminates both people. Quietly powerful work, arqios. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
September 14th, 2026 11:14
Tristan Robert Lange said:
What a tender and beautifully restrained piece, my friend. Memory becomes an invitation to look again and discover whether the former connection still illuminates both people. Quietly powerful work, arqios. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
September 14th, 2026 11:14
old friend
orchidee said:
Good write A. Aww, why they never think of me? Cos I threaten to sing to them. lol.
September 14th, 2026 09:13
orchidee said:
Good write A. Aww, why they never think of me? Cos I threaten to sing to them. lol.
September 14th, 2026 09:13
old friend
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
Nostalgic write much enjoyed
September 14th, 2026 07:00
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
Nostalgic write much enjoyed
September 14th, 2026 07:00
old friend
sorenbarrett said:
I wonder at times it old friends remember as I do. Those thoughts carry so much nostalgia. Well written my friend
September 14th, 2026 06:55
sorenbarrett said:
I wonder at times it old friends remember as I do. Those thoughts carry so much nostalgia. Well written my friend
September 14th, 2026 06:55
third wheel
Goldfinch60 said:
That third wheel is so important in our lives Rik.
Andy
September 14th, 2026 02:10
Goldfinch60 said:
That third wheel is so important in our lives Rik.
Andy
September 14th, 2026 02:10
third wheel
Tristan Robert Lange said:
What struck me most here, my friend, is the journey from exclusion to self-possession. The surrounding world emphasizes the loneliness, while writing becomes the means of reclaiming it...turning an unwanted position into a chosen path. Powerful piece. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
September 13th, 2026 18:56
Tristan Robert Lange said:
What struck me most here, my friend, is the journey from exclusion to self-possession. The surrounding world emphasizes the loneliness, while writing becomes the means of reclaiming it...turning an unwanted position into a chosen path. Powerful piece. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
September 13th, 2026 18:56
third wheel
Kevin Hulme said:
I remember someone saying that \' You can\'t write with a Pram in the Hall\'. Meaning you need Peace and Quiet to work . And no baby crying and such. I find it the same.
Good Write again.
September 13th, 2026 16:03
Kevin Hulme said:
I remember someone saying that \' You can\'t write with a Pram in the Hall\'. Meaning you need Peace and Quiet to work . And no baby crying and such. I find it the same.
Good Write again.
September 13th, 2026 16:03
third wheel
orchidee said:
Doh! I will \'get my coat\'. I\'ve \'overstayed my welcome\'. I\'m \'hanging around like a gooseberry\'. Enough! says fido to me - \'Just go!\' lol. But I say to him \'I can\'t go; me car needs FOUR wheels; can\'t get anywhere with 3 wheels. Well, I could with one of those 3-wheeled car thingys, I suppose
September 13th, 2026 09:15
orchidee said:
Doh! I will \'get my coat\'. I\'ve \'overstayed my welcome\'. I\'m \'hanging around like a gooseberry\'. Enough! says fido to me - \'Just go!\' lol. But I say to him \'I can\'t go; me car needs FOUR wheels; can\'t get anywhere with 3 wheels. Well, I could with one of those 3-wheeled car thingys, I suppose
September 13th, 2026 09:15
third wheel
Thomas W Case said:
There’s a damn satisfying arc here, because what begins as the ache of being the unwanted third wheel gradually transforms into a recognition that solitude can become a place of strength rather than exile. The strongest turn is “solitude, once a shadow, / becomes a sanctuary,” because it gives the poem its emotional release—the poet stops trying to escape being alone and discovers there are still roads worth walking.
September 13th, 2026 08:05
Thomas W Case said:
There’s a damn satisfying arc here, because what begins as the ache of being the unwanted third wheel gradually transforms into a recognition that solitude can become a place of strength rather than exile. The strongest turn is “solitude, once a shadow, / becomes a sanctuary,” because it gives the poem its emotional release—the poet stops trying to escape being alone and discovers there are still roads worth walking.
September 13th, 2026 08:05
third wheel
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
A most appealing write my friend, much enjoyed
September 13th, 2026 05:29
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
A most appealing write my friend, much enjoyed
September 13th, 2026 05:29
third wheel
sorenbarrett said:
As if talking with a ghost. There is a detached view as if watching a movie where reality is depersonalized and distanced through ink on a page. That wall of separation a bastion and castle wall or as stated in the poem itself a sanctuary from life\'s all too powerful and painful armies of assailants. Nicely written Cryptic once again a fave my friend
September 13th, 2026 05:24
sorenbarrett said:
As if talking with a ghost. There is a detached view as if watching a movie where reality is depersonalized and distanced through ink on a page. That wall of separation a bastion and castle wall or as stated in the poem itself a sanctuary from life\'s all too powerful and painful armies of assailants. Nicely written Cryptic once again a fave my friend
September 13th, 2026 05:24
search box reflection
FrasMac said:
\"Reflecting on the dark glass\" - now there\'s a thought to hold.....
September 13th, 2026 01:18
FrasMac said:
\"Reflecting on the dark glass\" - now there\'s a thought to hold.....
September 13th, 2026 01:18
angling angler angled
Goldfinch60 said:
That surface will break Rik and the truth shall be seen .
Andy
September 13th, 2026 01:02
Goldfinch60 said:
That surface will break Rik and the truth shall be seen .
Andy
September 13th, 2026 01:02
angling angler angled
orchidee said:
Good write B. Well, you\'ve used all the \'A\'s. None left. lol.
September 12th, 2026 10:45
orchidee said:
Good write B. Well, you\'ve used all the \'A\'s. None left. lol.
September 12th, 2026 10:45
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