Comments received on poems by David Wakeling
The Sound of Bob Dylan.
Bobby O said:
Maybe change the form of your sentence structure here and there
ie:
Gone is the train , timely lament delivered partnered w shrieking whistles refrain
April 8th, 2023 08:57
Bobby O said:
Maybe change the form of your sentence structure here and there
ie:
Gone is the train , timely lament delivered partnered w shrieking whistles refrain
April 8th, 2023 08:57
The Sound of Bob Dylan.
Bobby O said:
Maybe change the form of your sentence structure here and there
ie:
Gone is the train , timely lament delivered partnered w shrieking whistles refrain
April 8th, 2023 08:56
Bobby O said:
Maybe change the form of your sentence structure here and there
ie:
Gone is the train , timely lament delivered partnered w shrieking whistles refrain
April 8th, 2023 08:56
The Train to Treblinka.
Goldfinch60 said:
Very strong words David and so meaningful.
Andy
April 8th, 2023 01:58
Goldfinch60 said:
Very strong words David and so meaningful.
Andy
April 8th, 2023 01:58
The Train to Treblinka.
David Wakeling said:
Yes I have actually.Modern high schools are becoming unsafe.The number of shootings is comparable to war.
April 7th, 2023 16:04
David Wakeling said:
Yes I have actually.Modern high schools are becoming unsafe.The number of shootings is comparable to war.
April 7th, 2023 16:04
The Train to Treblinka.
charles69 said:
I think this is a great and artistic poem. It has wonderful power, and must have taken work, but also much talent. Reading it was a lot like being there, compelling and sad but als hopeful and brave.
I feel we should stay in touch with such feelings inside of us, and this work aids that in a masterful way.
Have you ever thought about writing a similar poem about the plight , the aftermath of a tragic shooting at a school? It is needed.
April 7th, 2023 13:28
charles69 said:
I think this is a great and artistic poem. It has wonderful power, and must have taken work, but also much talent. Reading it was a lot like being there, compelling and sad but als hopeful and brave.
I feel we should stay in touch with such feelings inside of us, and this work aids that in a masterful way.
Have you ever thought about writing a similar poem about the plight , the aftermath of a tragic shooting at a school? It is needed.
April 7th, 2023 13:28
The most horrifying discovery of my childhood.
Goldfinch60 said:
In life your gain experience in many ways, experience cannot be taught.
Andy
April 6th, 2023 00:36
Goldfinch60 said:
In life your gain experience in many ways, experience cannot be taught.
Andy
April 6th, 2023 00:36
The most horrifying discovery of my childhood.
David Wakeling said:
Thank you fort he wise comment
April 5th, 2023 16:04
David Wakeling said:
Thank you fort he wise comment
April 5th, 2023 16:04
The most horrifying discovery of my childhood.
arqios said:
As children we often \'live inside\' our heads until the bubble is burst, this particular event traumatic for both Bruce and the young D.W. A shared life, an often belated truth and also something espoused by the descriptive \'commonwealth.\'
April 5th, 2023 06:41
arqios said:
As children we often \'live inside\' our heads until the bubble is burst, this particular event traumatic for both Bruce and the young D.W. A shared life, an often belated truth and also something espoused by the descriptive \'commonwealth.\'
April 5th, 2023 06:41
The most horrifying discovery of my childhood.
David Wakeling said:
Indeed well said.Thank you for reading
April 5th, 2023 03:26
David Wakeling said:
Indeed well said.Thank you for reading
April 5th, 2023 03:26
The most horrifying discovery of my childhood.
Mello said:
The lesson you learned that day is a valuable one. Life is indeed meant to be shared with others, and it\'s up to us to make it a positive and uplifting experience for everyone. While we may not always know what to do in the moment, we can strive to be there for others and to stand up against injustice whenever we can. Thank you for sharing your story and reminding us of the importance of empathy and compassion.
April 5th, 2023 03:01
Mello said:
The lesson you learned that day is a valuable one. Life is indeed meant to be shared with others, and it\'s up to us to make it a positive and uplifting experience for everyone. While we may not always know what to do in the moment, we can strive to be there for others and to stand up against injustice whenever we can. Thank you for sharing your story and reminding us of the importance of empathy and compassion.
April 5th, 2023 03:01
The Sermon on the Hill.
2781 said:
Looks true, but looks can be deceiving, as they say.
April 2nd, 2023 04:01
2781 said:
Looks true, but looks can be deceiving, as they say.
April 2nd, 2023 04:01
We are the stuff that screams are made of.
David Wakeling said:
Thank you so much
April 1st, 2023 20:35
David Wakeling said:
Thank you so much
April 1st, 2023 20:35
We are the stuff that screams are made of.
Eugene S. said:
Yes. A great rendition of a common concern and human theme. Well expressed.
April 1st, 2023 19:40
Eugene S. said:
Yes. A great rendition of a common concern and human theme. Well expressed.
April 1st, 2023 19:40
The House of Tears.
2781 said:
I wondered if they wandered, or where they coerced
March 31st, 2023 06:18
2781 said:
I wondered if they wandered, or where they coerced
March 31st, 2023 06:18
The House of Tears.
David Wakeling said:
Good for you.I\'ll be there as well once they let me out of the house of tears
March 31st, 2023 02:10
David Wakeling said:
Good for you.I\'ll be there as well once they let me out of the house of tears
March 31st, 2023 02:10
The House of Tears.
Goldfinch60 said:
Clever words David, I will not be going there as I live in the house of laughter.
Andy
March 31st, 2023 01:26
Goldfinch60 said:
Clever words David, I will not be going there as I live in the house of laughter.
Andy
March 31st, 2023 01:26
Pamela Strong and the Lemon Meringue Pie.
David Wakeling said:
Thanks for reading
March 30th, 2023 23:12
David Wakeling said:
Thanks for reading
March 30th, 2023 23:12
Pamela Strong and the Lemon Meringue Pie.
sorenbarrett said:
Very home like and domestic.
March 30th, 2023 17:29
sorenbarrett said:
Very home like and domestic.
March 30th, 2023 17:29
Puppa goes on a Yacht.
David Wakeling said:
I\'m not offended at all.Actually there are other adventures that Puppa goes on.A children\'s book sounds good
March 28th, 2023 20:16
David Wakeling said:
I\'m not offended at all.Actually there are other adventures that Puppa goes on.A children\'s book sounds good
March 28th, 2023 20:16
Puppa goes on a Yacht.
Norman Flagtea said:
Dear David! Does it offend you if I said that this would make a lovely children\'s picture book?
March 28th, 2023 15:26
Norman Flagtea said:
Dear David! Does it offend you if I said that this would make a lovely children\'s picture book?
March 28th, 2023 15:26
The Rain Over Kiama.
Doggerel Dave said:
David: I feel you are not explicit enough re location. I may know where Kiama is, but the great majority of punters (sorry - poets) here, I would hazard, don\'t. Now while not knowing doesn\'t detract from an otherwise rich piece, it could be a slight distraction....
March 25th, 2023 15:46
Doggerel Dave said:
David: I feel you are not explicit enough re location. I may know where Kiama is, but the great majority of punters (sorry - poets) here, I would hazard, don\'t. Now while not knowing doesn\'t detract from an otherwise rich piece, it could be a slight distraction....
March 25th, 2023 15:46
Same Sky Different Rain.
ForeverAbi said:
Without names the reader is not engaged.No-one knows who is talking to whom and why.Unfinished
March 23rd, 2023 16:32
ForeverAbi said:
Without names the reader is not engaged.No-one knows who is talking to whom and why.Unfinished
March 23rd, 2023 16:32
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