Comments received on poems by David Wakeling



Joseph and the last orange.
Simurgh said:

Ethical and moral issues also reflected in this poem. Enjoyable read!


February 7th, 2025 06:23

Joseph and the last orange.
Simurgh said:

Indeed, what a price to pay for the orange! It was sometimes power controlling the justice and sometimes hard reality.
This poem is a splendid masterpiece of metaphors! ✨🌹🌹
I enjoyed reading the journey of your poems, they are always ironic and beautiful in its own unmatched way.

February 7th, 2025 06:19

The Lamb and the Tiger.
Poetic Licence said:

Someone who thinks they have complete power having it turned on them, a very good and strong moral in this writing and i enjoyed the read ( rat poison for flavour).

February 7th, 2025 04:50

The Lamb and the Tiger.
sorenbarrett said:

A story about choice power over self and others. very nicely written with careful word choice and great images to paint the story. In the end there is a moral and meaning to the story. Well done my friend

February 7th, 2025 04:32

My stupid Mum.
Goldfinch60 said:

But in you she has brought a good man David.

Andy

February 7th, 2025 02:46

My stupid Mum.
Tony36 said:

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Excellent write David

February 6th, 2025 12:27

My stupid Mum.
Cassie58 said:

Kids can be such a pain in the backside. Thankfully they grow up and learn to be more caring and sensitive towards their parents. This was the kid in you. Your mum was a diamond from what I can see. Enjoyed your words and thinking here David. Have a good day.

February 6th, 2025 08:55

My stupid Mum.
Poetic Licence said:

Taking you on the journey how when young you take everything for granted and feel a lot of what your parents do is pointless and stupid, arriving into maturity realising they were all acts of love, compassion and care. A lovely write

February 6th, 2025 05:41

My stupid Mum.
sorenbarrett said:

Message recieved. Such a wonderful way to present it. I\'ve been a kid, had kids and watched kids. We all are kids in one way or anothe and still growing. Growing out of ignorance hopefully and into understanding. Growing in empathy and understanding of love. A beautiful write

February 6th, 2025 03:50

My stupid Mum.
arqios said:

Walking in someone else’s shoes for a bit? Doesn’t really sound like confessional poetry per se… a tad more like narrating from someone else’s perspective. Perhaps I’m wrong but reminds me of that β€œyeah-nah” music video from several years ago now. πŸ™πŸ»πŸ•Š

February 6th, 2025 02:44

Joseph and the last orange.
Cassie58 said:

What a price to pay for an orange. Sort of rough justice or cruel karma. Life is harsh isn’t it? A good read David. Enjoyed with my late night cuppa.

February 5th, 2025 17:53

Joseph and the last orange.
arqios said:

Another one that would’ve been transported to the penal colony, back in the day. β€œAlms. Alms. Spare me a piece of bread. Spare me your mercy.”

February 5th, 2025 06:34

Joseph and the last orange.
Poetic Licence said:

Made me think this one because it is not to much to just want an orange, but then it is the way you go about that and they way it is received. Social as well as moral issues made an interesting and enjoyable read.

February 5th, 2025 04:56

Joseph and the last orange.
sorenbarrett said:

There may be a meta metaphor here. Poverty asks for justice of which there is none and comes up empty handed. The only escape in a power driven world is death the only true justice dispensed to all. How\'s that for a cynic\'s review? Good write my friend

February 5th, 2025 04:41

Alison\'s first time.
Poetic Licence said:

A gift from the heart is a true gift, it is not giving thinking how it will be received, so sometime we can have regrets after but not at the time of giving. An interesting write that makes you have a think, enjoyed reading.

February 4th, 2025 05:59

Alison\'s first time.
sorenbarrett said:

Another poem that makes one ponder. One should never give a gift that one regrets. A gift is from the heart freely given with no regret regardless of what is done with it anything else is but a ransom. A wonderful write nicely worded and structured

February 4th, 2025 03:55

Alison\'s first time.
arqios said:

At best life can be overwhelming for seasoned travellers but can be so much more πŸ‘πŸ»πŸ•ŠπŸ™πŸ»

February 4th, 2025 01:38

The Kiama Rock-Hoppers Club
Tony36 said:

Excellent write David

February 3rd, 2025 10:42

The Kiama Rock-Hoppers Club
sorenbarrett said:

Child or adult we often do foolish things that have bad results. Things we never intended but in our ignorance or neglect we are responsible and have to live with it. A wonderfully written piece set up well and well told with a sinking feeling at the end.

February 3rd, 2025 04:11

The Kiama Rock-Hoppers Club
Poetic Licence said:

A very touching and sad read, reminding me of events we have had here over the years very much like this.

February 3rd, 2025 03:07

The Kiama Rock-Hoppers Club
arqios said:

We have our own version in the West Moreton region, the Walloon sisters who both drowned in their backyard dam. So sad. πŸ•Š

February 3rd, 2025 02:06

The Water\'s Edge.
sorenbarrett said:

Some really great lines in this poem \"God is ill and his silence is a cage\" is one that evokes a great deal of thought. Very nicely done David.

February 2nd, 2025 04:47

The Water\'s Edge.
arqios said:

The words and lines come to me like a dance between hope and despair, love and fear. It resonates deeply, offering a powerful reflection on our collective journey. πŸ‘πŸ»πŸ™πŸ»πŸ•Š

February 2nd, 2025 03:38

The Dawning Grace.
Tony36 said:

Excellent write David

February 1st, 2025 17:19

The Dawning Grace.
arqios said:

Love the heading, a beeline for the future shore! πŸ‘πŸ»πŸ™πŸ»πŸ•Š

February 1st, 2025 07:08

The Dawning Grace.
sorenbarrett said:

Beautiful verse and near rhyme in a somewhat classical form that carries the reader through this world to the beyond. It floats effortlessly as a cloud through the sky. It leaves behind an etherial feel.

February 1st, 2025 04:13

Australia, diamond, Australia,
arqios said:

Well now, have come across a patriotic poem this grand or this moving, mate! Sure fire like and Fave πŸ™πŸ»πŸ‘πŸ»πŸ•ŠπŸ‡¦πŸ‡Ί

January 31st, 2025 06:54

Australia, diamond, Australia,
sorenbarrett said:

A most beautiful tribute and poem to a land. It rouses the heart with pride and calls for a sense of nationalism. Much to be proud of here in both the land and the poem full of images and history.

January 31st, 2025 04:00

Australia, diamond, Australia,
Poetic Licence said:

Somewhere i have not had the pleasure to visit but have longed to go, really enjoyed the read. have a great weekend

January 31st, 2025 02:46

Grandpa Doe
Tony36 said:

Excellent write David

January 30th, 2025 10:28



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