Comments received on poems by 🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽
My favourite anecdote from Urdu
Jon Nakapalau said:
Wonderful - thank you for sharing.
February 29th, 2020 14:41
Jon Nakapalau said:
Wonderful - thank you for sharing.
February 29th, 2020 14:41
When life was really child\'s play
Jon Nakapalau said:
Took me back - inspired.
February 29th, 2020 14:39
Jon Nakapalau said:
Took me back - inspired.
February 29th, 2020 14:39
The better Gems
Jon Nakapalau said:
Wow! Love the many \'cuts\' of this poem!
February 29th, 2020 14:39
Jon Nakapalau said:
Wow! Love the many \'cuts\' of this poem!
February 29th, 2020 14:39
The better Gems
Gino said:
This is a great write my friend, brilliant work!
February 29th, 2020 11:21
Gino said:
This is a great write my friend, brilliant work!
February 29th, 2020 11:21
The better Gems
xeina said:
What a gem of a poem this is. Very heartfelt and well-written.
February 27th, 2020 03:34
xeina said:
What a gem of a poem this is. Very heartfelt and well-written.
February 27th, 2020 03:34
The better Gems
Seek said:
What a gem of a poem, S. Zaynab. Hongera! You do such a marvellous job of replacing those \"precious\" metals that many of us worship, with precious qualities most should aspire to. Thoroughly enjoyed this and thank you for sharing.
February 26th, 2020 21:16
Seek said:
What a gem of a poem, S. Zaynab. Hongera! You do such a marvellous job of replacing those \"precious\" metals that many of us worship, with precious qualities most should aspire to. Thoroughly enjoyed this and thank you for sharing.
February 26th, 2020 21:16
The better Gems
Nemo said:
And through kindness hearts are owned, very well written 🌹
February 26th, 2020 15:31
Nemo said:
And through kindness hearts are owned, very well written 🌹
February 26th, 2020 15:31
The better Gems
MendedFences27 said:
There\'s a lot of beauty in this poem: Comparisons that are heart-felt, the value of human consideration over sparkling gems, and the transient nature of mankind.
However, let me say this knowing I and everyone else is guilty of this, your poem would be all the more powerful if reduced down to its basic elements. Consider this: just the first two lines of each stanza, and even those somewhat condensed, and the final stanza cut to just one line.
Although the rest are beautiful words they do not add to what you were trying to achieve.
A beautiful poem none the less but more powerful if cut to the quick. - Phil A.
February 26th, 2020 11:18
MendedFences27 said:
There\'s a lot of beauty in this poem: Comparisons that are heart-felt, the value of human consideration over sparkling gems, and the transient nature of mankind.
However, let me say this knowing I and everyone else is guilty of this, your poem would be all the more powerful if reduced down to its basic elements. Consider this: just the first two lines of each stanza, and even those somewhat condensed, and the final stanza cut to just one line.
Although the rest are beautiful words they do not add to what you were trying to achieve.
A beautiful poem none the less but more powerful if cut to the quick. - Phil A.
February 26th, 2020 11:18
The better Gems
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI FRIEND ~ BRIAN HERE ! I love every word of your exquisite Poem. I have studied Geology and I love Gemstones. We teach Gemology @ College and it is a wonderful subject. They are beautiful in their rough state and even more beautiful when they are cut & polished ~ just as people are. I have a collection of semi-precious gemstones which I use to give talks to Seniors (60+). Every Gemstone you mention has its own *Quality & Mystique*. They all have their own application in Jewelry & Religion. I like the way you mention the Spiritual Aspect of Gemstones in your elegant *ODE to GEMSTONES*. Many of them are mentioned in our Holy Book the BIBLE. Each of us are like *Gemstones* and we can be honed & polished ~ as your poem suggests ~ and fitted for Gods Service. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ We have saved it as a Fave ~ AMEN !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love BRIAN & ANGELA
💛🤍🧡💚💙💜🤎
February 26th, 2020 10:32
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI FRIEND ~ BRIAN HERE ! I love every word of your exquisite Poem. I have studied Geology and I love Gemstones. We teach Gemology @ College and it is a wonderful subject. They are beautiful in their rough state and even more beautiful when they are cut & polished ~ just as people are. I have a collection of semi-precious gemstones which I use to give talks to Seniors (60+). Every Gemstone you mention has its own *Quality & Mystique*. They all have their own application in Jewelry & Religion. I like the way you mention the Spiritual Aspect of Gemstones in your elegant *ODE to GEMSTONES*. Many of them are mentioned in our Holy Book the BIBLE. Each of us are like *Gemstones* and we can be honed & polished ~ as your poem suggests ~ and fitted for Gods Service. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ We have saved it as a Fave ~ AMEN !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love BRIAN & ANGELA
💛🤍🧡💚💙💜🤎
February 26th, 2020 10:32
The better Gems
Fay Slimm. said:
A beautiful string of reasons for shining like gems while we have life and breath. This poetic jewel is very inspiring - It goes now into my favourites and thank you for sharing it.
February 26th, 2020 09:06
Fay Slimm. said:
A beautiful string of reasons for shining like gems while we have life and breath. This poetic jewel is very inspiring - It goes now into my favourites and thank you for sharing it.
February 26th, 2020 09:06
The better Gems
Saxon Crow said:
Awesome poem. I love that you focus on the true riches in life from many difgerent perspectives. Brilliant poem!
February 26th, 2020 06:53
Saxon Crow said:
Awesome poem. I love that you focus on the true riches in life from many difgerent perspectives. Brilliant poem!
February 26th, 2020 06:53
The better Gems
dusk arising said:
Heaven has eyes now? What stuff has been taught to you i#m wondering.
Other than the last two lines i found this an excellent piece.
February 26th, 2020 06:11
dusk arising said:
Heaven has eyes now? What stuff has been taught to you i#m wondering.
Other than the last two lines i found this an excellent piece.
February 26th, 2020 06:11
When life was really child\'s play
Syd said:
Nice poem.
Takes me way back to being a kid.
- Syd
February 3rd, 2020 20:38
Syd said:
Nice poem.
Takes me way back to being a kid.
- Syd
February 3rd, 2020 20:38
When life was really child\'s play
FredPeyer said:
Love your poem. With six grand-kids I am having the time of my life playing with them.
December 6th, 2019 17:35
FredPeyer said:
Love your poem. With six grand-kids I am having the time of my life playing with them.
December 6th, 2019 17:35
When life was really child\'s play
Bragee said:
Great writing. Made me reflect on my childhood and realize just how enjoyable that time period was. Now with my own daughter soon to be born I hope to reccconect with those days with her.
December 6th, 2019 12:03
Bragee said:
Great writing. Made me reflect on my childhood and realize just how enjoyable that time period was. Now with my own daughter soon to be born I hope to reccconect with those days with her.
December 6th, 2019 12:03
When life was really child\'s play
Leaaa said:
sweet reminiscing of all our innocence:) thank you for the memories you popped into my head of my fun childhood moments.
December 4th, 2019 23:39
Leaaa said:
sweet reminiscing of all our innocence:) thank you for the memories you popped into my head of my fun childhood moments.
December 4th, 2019 23:39
When life was really child\'s play
A said:
Honestly this is really good. Perfect stanzas, fantastic beat, smooth rhyme and your vocabulary is executed perfectly.
I really enjoyed the way you captured that nostalgic feeling of childhood.
an honest work of art.
December 4th, 2019 23:29
A said:
Honestly this is really good. Perfect stanzas, fantastic beat, smooth rhyme and your vocabulary is executed perfectly.
I really enjoyed the way you captured that nostalgic feeling of childhood.
an honest work of art.
December 4th, 2019 23:29
When life was really child\'s play
poet2rhyme4tommorrow said:
exceptionally nsync with what I recollect about mine childhood playtime, particularly those prepubescent summer days, when thyself and sisters, more so the youngest versus oldest found me inebriated with unbounded obliviousness, while prancing as an animal of choice such as ponying up antics of a horse.
tell me more about your magical moments merrily mutating from one (in)animate creature and another.
December 4th, 2019 15:40
poet2rhyme4tommorrow said:
exceptionally nsync with what I recollect about mine childhood playtime, particularly those prepubescent summer days, when thyself and sisters, more so the youngest versus oldest found me inebriated with unbounded obliviousness, while prancing as an animal of choice such as ponying up antics of a horse.
tell me more about your magical moments merrily mutating from one (in)animate creature and another.
December 4th, 2019 15:40
When life was really child\'s play
dusk arising said:
Reads like happy memories of childhood. Sadly several poets on MPS were not so fortuneate as innocent children.
December 4th, 2019 10:49
dusk arising said:
Reads like happy memories of childhood. Sadly several poets on MPS were not so fortuneate as innocent children.
December 4th, 2019 10:49
When life was really child\'s play
Poetic Dan said:
Fantastic stuff! I did love playing around with my older sister, although I was made to think it was not right! Some adults loose that child light or never got given the right.
Keep up the write
Much peace and respect
December 4th, 2019 06:52
Poetic Dan said:
Fantastic stuff! I did love playing around with my older sister, although I was made to think it was not right! Some adults loose that child light or never got given the right.
Keep up the write
Much peace and respect
December 4th, 2019 06:52
When life was really child\'s play
orchidee said:
Aww, why they call me a dull boy?! heehee.
A fine write Zaynab, of happy days! We can be child-like though, while being adults.
December 4th, 2019 02:30
orchidee said:
Aww, why they call me a dull boy?! heehee.
A fine write Zaynab, of happy days! We can be child-like though, while being adults.
December 4th, 2019 02:30
When life was really child\'s play
Goldfinch60 said:
Yes I was there back in the day many, many years ago. The time of innocence in our lives.
December 4th, 2019 01:29
Goldfinch60 said:
Yes I was there back in the day many, many years ago. The time of innocence in our lives.
December 4th, 2019 01:29
When life was really child\'s play
Nafis Light said:
Not sure how you did it, but as soon as I started looking at it, a woman\'s voice started reciting/singing the whole poem.
Interesting. :-)
December 3rd, 2019 18:47
Nafis Light said:
Not sure how you did it, but as soon as I started looking at it, a woman\'s voice started reciting/singing the whole poem.
Interesting. :-)
December 3rd, 2019 18:47
When life was really child\'s play
Michael Edwards said:
What an uplifting write which takes me right back to my childhood - thanks so much for posting this gem.
December 3rd, 2019 14:58
Michael Edwards said:
What an uplifting write which takes me right back to my childhood - thanks so much for posting this gem.
December 3rd, 2019 14:58
O\' human heart
Reivax Camlost said:
It\'s been a fair while since this was written, but I do recall you once asking me to comment on your most recent poem, and I never did; by my calculations this was the poem that was written most recently at that time. And it\'s quite a wonderful piece; I especially appreciate the notes of assonance and dissonance that you wove together between the lines. You preserve the lyrical quality of the poem when read aloud through cleverly arranging the meter and the rhymescheme to act continuously between transitions—a delightful stroke. The subject matter also really resonates, the nature of the heart troubles me often; how we can hold both love and hatred, violence and beauty, all seemingly equally sublime in nature or else equally base when considered against the weight of whatever things we hold as truly pure or good. To resolve that question with a return to the simple intuitions of humanity in such a noble fashion, that\'s admirable, I think.
November 19th, 2019 12:39
Reivax Camlost said:
It\'s been a fair while since this was written, but I do recall you once asking me to comment on your most recent poem, and I never did; by my calculations this was the poem that was written most recently at that time. And it\'s quite a wonderful piece; I especially appreciate the notes of assonance and dissonance that you wove together between the lines. You preserve the lyrical quality of the poem when read aloud through cleverly arranging the meter and the rhymescheme to act continuously between transitions—a delightful stroke. The subject matter also really resonates, the nature of the heart troubles me often; how we can hold both love and hatred, violence and beauty, all seemingly equally sublime in nature or else equally base when considered against the weight of whatever things we hold as truly pure or good. To resolve that question with a return to the simple intuitions of humanity in such a noble fashion, that\'s admirable, I think.
November 19th, 2019 12:39
O\' human heart
AlitaOpal said:
Fantastic piece, the heart indeed is a powerful organ thank you x
November 3rd, 2019 17:57
AlitaOpal said:
Fantastic piece, the heart indeed is a powerful organ thank you x
November 3rd, 2019 17:57
Mankind in Dreamland
AlitaOpal said:
conscious and subconscious dreaming.. the one you speak off like the pictures of Salvador Dali, can look surreal and make sense and on the flip-side looks like it makes sense but feels surreal.. Amazing master piece x
October 30th, 2019 11:23
AlitaOpal said:
conscious and subconscious dreaming.. the one you speak off like the pictures of Salvador Dali, can look surreal and make sense and on the flip-side looks like it makes sense but feels surreal.. Amazing master piece x
October 30th, 2019 11:23
Human hues
Reivax Camlost said:
A work of emotional ultraviolet, methinks. Bright; exciting. It glows. Alternatively witty and deep, this one doesn\'t compromise feeling or genuineness for literary appeal, but then, it doesn\'t really need to.
October 30th, 2019 09:43
Reivax Camlost said:
A work of emotional ultraviolet, methinks. Bright; exciting. It glows. Alternatively witty and deep, this one doesn\'t compromise feeling or genuineness for literary appeal, but then, it doesn\'t really need to.
October 30th, 2019 09:43
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