Enemy
NafisaSB said:

you have given us so much to ponder about - some of these thoughts come to us too - glad you put them in verse, and asked the world..

April 6th, 2025 02:37

Serpentine Seduction
sorenbarrett said:

A masterpiece of alliteration that like the snake unnoticed until it is too close it bites before you know it. Very nicely done Tristan

April 5th, 2025 07:09

Viscosity
Courtnie McKern said:

Nicely done! I love the last line
Where ink will flow free and enter hearts to live

April 4th, 2025 20:08

Viscosity
Poetic Licence said:

Poetry is the plaster to cover the wounds and pain, that in the real world we would never show. A way of releasing those demons that torment us every day into a relatively safe environment, in the process allowing us to possibly heal but more importantly letting us that we are not alone in our struggles and experiences , enjoyed the read

April 4th, 2025 12:33

Viscosity
Cheeky Missy said:

You cull Shakespeare adroutly herein, and too prettily too, my la! \"...in black ink my love--\" and from the initial knowledge of family to the larger reality, weave the fabric of a garment seems the world might wear. Gorgeously rendered with exquisite imagery and a fascinating, intriguing, haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.

April 4th, 2025 09:57

Viscosity
sorenbarrett said:

Loved the metaphor, the wording, and the meter. This has a strong topic that speaks to evolution, bonding and family. Very well written Tristan.

April 4th, 2025 08:21

All I See Is Darkness
arqios said:

Throwback magic! The darkness was very dark indeed 🙏🏻🕊

April 3rd, 2025 19:10

All I See Is Darkness
GenXer Shamrocker ☘️ said:

A beautiful write for just being 14 when written

April 3rd, 2025 12:03

All I See Is Darkness
Poetic Licence said:

Very relatable to me like walking around with a permanent blindfold on, taking the authors notes that is sad to feel so low at that age, but that was me as well. The explains to me alot about the authors writing\'s and the history that formed the author, nicely expressed and written

April 3rd, 2025 10:54

What the Hell?
Mutley Ravishes said:

Now that was a challenging read. Be wise as serpents, gentle as doves!

April 2nd, 2025 21:43

What the Hell?
arqios said:

A magnum opus! Magnificence in articulation 🕊🙏🏻

April 2nd, 2025 16:02

A Trip
Cheeky Missy said:

Hmm. Charming quatrains with an interesting rhyme scheme, rendering a classic format and theme to effect so beautifully, it seems familiar somehow. Fascinating and thought-provoking with great imagery and a fitly haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing. I like it.

April 2nd, 2025 12:40

What the Hell?
orchidee said:

I went to a thorn bush expecting to find apples on it - doh! \'Tree know by its fruit\'. Too much here for me to comment on in detail. All I know is I can\'t have figs cos they..... Too Much Info to say why!

April 2nd, 2025 10:40

What the Hell?
Poetic Licence said:

This write is justified, religion is more guilty than the layman of misinterpretation of the holy books , as it is these houses of faith that the layman is told what to think, do and believe, and each and everyone is there serve there own purpose and individual agenda. Enjoyed the read

April 2nd, 2025 09:48

Opioid
Mutley Ravishes said:

I once read of a warrior from old Japan who was tortured, and didn\'t even blink an eye. I have no way (that I know of/am capable of presently) to verify if that is a true story. Let\'s imagine it is. Then, how on earth did he do that? The only answer I can come up with is that there was no one there to feel the pain.

April 2nd, 2025 00:46