Comments received on poems by orchidee
Rejoice, He Reigns!
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
The last two lines of each verse are a challenge, because of the varying rhythm of the final line. Here\'s a score:
https://hymnary.org/media/fetch/142982
December 23rd, 2020 15:20
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
The last two lines of each verse are a challenge, because of the varying rhythm of the final line. Here\'s a score:
https://hymnary.org/media/fetch/142982
December 23rd, 2020 15:20
Faith Through Fears
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
OK, now I get it. You\'re writing syllabic verse, counting syllables rather than stresses. (I\'ve been studying syllabic verse lately with a master of it, but I can\'t write it myself.) The tune TALLIS\' CANON (a.k.a. THE EIGHTH TUNE) is in Long Meter, also written 8.8.8.8. and has a very strong 4/4 rhythm. To sing your verse, the singer must disregard the stress pattern of individual words and of sentences.
Here\'s a conventionally metrical text:
https://hymnary.org/media/fetch/137287
December 23rd, 2020 15:03
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
OK, now I get it. You\'re writing syllabic verse, counting syllables rather than stresses. (I\'ve been studying syllabic verse lately with a master of it, but I can\'t write it myself.) The tune TALLIS\' CANON (a.k.a. THE EIGHTH TUNE) is in Long Meter, also written 8.8.8.8. and has a very strong 4/4 rhythm. To sing your verse, the singer must disregard the stress pattern of individual words and of sentences.
Here\'s a conventionally metrical text:
https://hymnary.org/media/fetch/137287
December 23rd, 2020 15:03
Faith Through Fears
FredPeyer said:
Very well penned, orchie! It is all about faith isn\'t it?
December 23rd, 2020 10:41
FredPeyer said:
Very well penned, orchie! It is all about faith isn\'t it?
December 23rd, 2020 10:41
Faith Through Fears
orchidee said:
This is about faith while going through fears. It\'s easy to \'have faith\' when what we\'re having faith for has come to pass, or when we have no fears!
I suppose that\'s not real faith, as the thing has then happened, and we see it.
Another verse says \'Who hopes for what they see?\' No one, as they have no need to hope for it - it is there right under their nose!
December 23rd, 2020 02:58
orchidee said:
This is about faith while going through fears. It\'s easy to \'have faith\' when what we\'re having faith for has come to pass, or when we have no fears!
I suppose that\'s not real faith, as the thing has then happened, and we see it.
Another verse says \'Who hopes for what they see?\' No one, as they have no need to hope for it - it is there right under their nose!
December 23rd, 2020 02:58
Ding Dong Ditty
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
I don\'t know this Christmas tune, BRANLE L\'OFFICIEL, but here it is, played on the organ. I can sing the original English words (also on the Hymnary web site), but I can\'t sing yours easily, and the chorus defeats me. Perhaps someone with more musical skill than mine will have better luck.
https://hymnary.org/media/fetch/181074
December 21st, 2020 20:59
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
I don\'t know this Christmas tune, BRANLE L\'OFFICIEL, but here it is, played on the organ. I can sing the original English words (also on the Hymnary web site), but I can\'t sing yours easily, and the chorus defeats me. Perhaps someone with more musical skill than mine will have better luck.
https://hymnary.org/media/fetch/181074
December 21st, 2020 20:59
Ding Dong Ditty
Jerry Reynolds said:
Nice song Orchi. Have a happy Holiday and stay safe
December 21st, 2020 13:53
Jerry Reynolds said:
Nice song Orchi. Have a happy Holiday and stay safe
December 21st, 2020 13:53
Ding Dong Ditty
orchidee said:
\'The bells, the bells\'! No, not Quasimodo\'s bells!
December 21st, 2020 03:36
orchidee said:
\'The bells, the bells\'! No, not Quasimodo\'s bells!
December 21st, 2020 03:36
New Jerusalem Joys
Goldfinch60 said:
Good one Orchi.
In spite of what Robert has said I can sing the words quite easily to the tune, so you are correct.
Andy
December 21st, 2020 01:21
Goldfinch60 said:
Good one Orchi.
In spite of what Robert has said I can sing the words quite easily to the tune, so you are correct.
Andy
December 21st, 2020 01:21
New Jerusalem Joys
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
I have to know about hymn metrics, because I\'m a shape note singer, and occasionally write new texts for old tunes, and more often read (and sing) other people\'s. I know one singer who\'s translating English hymns into Esperanto. My knowledge of Esperanto is fairly minimal, but I sing them and then tell him I think they work.
December 20th, 2020 13:12
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
I have to know about hymn metrics, because I\'m a shape note singer, and occasionally write new texts for old tunes, and more often read (and sing) other people\'s. I know one singer who\'s translating English hymns into Esperanto. My knowledge of Esperanto is fairly minimal, but I sing them and then tell him I think they work.
December 20th, 2020 13:12
New Jerusalem Joys
FredPeyer said:
Orchi, I don\'t have a clue about meters, 8-7, 15-21, or any other numbers. I just like the way you write!
December 20th, 2020 12:01
FredPeyer said:
Orchi, I don\'t have a clue about meters, 8-7, 15-21, or any other numbers. I just like the way you write!
December 20th, 2020 12:01
New Jerusalem Joys
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
Oops - forgot you\'re in the UK. Hymns Ancient & Modern Revised 279 and 573. All my references to the tune have different texts.
December 20th, 2020 10:01
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
Oops - forgot you\'re in the UK. Hymns Ancient & Modern Revised 279 and 573. All my references to the tune have different texts.
December 20th, 2020 10:01
New Jerusalem Joys
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
Some readers will know the tune REGENT SQUARE as a Christmas carol beginning \"Angels from the realms of glory\" (Episcopal hymnal 93, UMC hymnal 220). Long meter with refrain, or 87.87.87. Your text doesn\'t follow this meter.
December 20th, 2020 09:56
Robert Southwick Richmond said:
Some readers will know the tune REGENT SQUARE as a Christmas carol beginning \"Angels from the realms of glory\" (Episcopal hymnal 93, UMC hymnal 220). Long meter with refrain, or 87.87.87. Your text doesn\'t follow this meter.
December 20th, 2020 09:56
Angelic Alighting
FredPeyer said:
Orchi, I can see you are getting ready for Christmas!
December 19th, 2020 12:12
FredPeyer said:
Orchi, I can see you are getting ready for Christmas!
December 19th, 2020 12:12
Bethlehem Birth
FredPeyer said:
Looks like you are finished with your ranting and back to hymning! Well done, Orchi!
December 18th, 2020 20:58
FredPeyer said:
Looks like you are finished with your ranting and back to hymning! Well done, Orchi!
December 18th, 2020 20:58
Bethlehem Birth
FineB said:
A beautiful write Orchidee.
You have captured the beauty of Jesus\'s birth- the birth of the Messiah.
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
December 18th, 2020 16:55
FineB said:
A beautiful write Orchidee.
You have captured the beauty of Jesus\'s birth- the birth of the Messiah.
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
December 18th, 2020 16:55
Bethlehem Birth
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well written Orchi. Have a safe and Happy Holiday
December 18th, 2020 15:11
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well written Orchi. Have a safe and Happy Holiday
December 18th, 2020 15:11
Timeless Not Temporal
FredPeyer said:
And the writer of this hymn will be a poet laureate one day!
December 16th, 2020 12:08
FredPeyer said:
And the writer of this hymn will be a poet laureate one day!
December 16th, 2020 12:08
Timeless Not Temporal
Jerry Reynolds said:
Nice write Orchi. Happy Holidays.
December 16th, 2020 09:26
Jerry Reynolds said:
Nice write Orchi. Happy Holidays.
December 16th, 2020 09:26
Timeless Not Temporal
dusk arising said:
By heck Mr O... you don\'t half pen them.
December 16th, 2020 05:07
dusk arising said:
By heck Mr O... you don\'t half pen them.
December 16th, 2020 05:07
Timeless Not Temporal
Michael Edwards said:
Timeless - that\'s the name of the Dulux colour which all the walls in our house are painted with. Fine write by the way Orchi.
December 16th, 2020 04:10
Michael Edwards said:
Timeless - that\'s the name of the Dulux colour which all the walls in our house are painted with. Fine write by the way Orchi.
December 16th, 2020 04:10
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