Comments received on poems by FredPeyer
Alone
malubotelho said:
You went deep with this one. Love it. Describes so well our imagination. I like when you say if you should send him home to be truly alone. I like to do that sometimes. To be totally free from my inside. To be nothing. To fade away from everything. To be like a blank canvas. Then you are reborn. Thanks for this wonderful piece.
July 15th, 2017 11:16
malubotelho said:
You went deep with this one. Love it. Describes so well our imagination. I like when you say if you should send him home to be truly alone. I like to do that sometimes. To be totally free from my inside. To be nothing. To fade away from everything. To be like a blank canvas. Then you are reborn. Thanks for this wonderful piece.
July 15th, 2017 11:16
Alone
Louis Gibbs said:
I, too, cherish my solitude. Great expression of this creative space, Fred!
July 15th, 2017 09:11
Louis Gibbs said:
I, too, cherish my solitude. Great expression of this creative space, Fred!
July 15th, 2017 09:11
Alone
burning-embers said:
Fred i know this chap you speak of, we grew up together and he spoke to me a great deal when i needed to learn from something. He reminds me of the things i ought not to do and he congratulates me freely. He allows me to indulge in things and never abuses me. One thing i admire in him above all else is his compassion. A seriously good thought provoking write.
July 15th, 2017 08:23
burning-embers said:
Fred i know this chap you speak of, we grew up together and he spoke to me a great deal when i needed to learn from something. He reminds me of the things i ought not to do and he congratulates me freely. He allows me to indulge in things and never abuses me. One thing i admire in him above all else is his compassion. A seriously good thought provoking write.
July 15th, 2017 08:23
Alone
Michael Edwards said:
Poet and artist - both done alone, no competitive element, no team spirit to pay homage to - yup I\'m a loner and this resonates - great write.
July 15th, 2017 07:35
Michael Edwards said:
Poet and artist - both done alone, no competitive element, no team spirit to pay homage to - yup I\'m a loner and this resonates - great write.
July 15th, 2017 07:35
Alone
Fay Slimm. said:
This touches home to loners like me - - most poets thrive on imagined company. Can relate to that poetic phrase \"alone yet not alone\"
July 15th, 2017 04:29
Fay Slimm. said:
This touches home to loners like me - - most poets thrive on imagined company. Can relate to that poetic phrase \"alone yet not alone\"
July 15th, 2017 04:29
Alone
orchidee said:
A fine write FP. Aww, I nipped in to comment, as this poem looked \'alone\'. heehee. I\'ve gone barmy. I\'ll be talking to lamp-posts next! lol.
July 15th, 2017 04:24
orchidee said:
A fine write FP. Aww, I nipped in to comment, as this poem looked \'alone\'. heehee. I\'ve gone barmy. I\'ll be talking to lamp-posts next! lol.
July 15th, 2017 04:24
Just A Job (Short Story)
malubotelho said:
I could catch back on this one. Short stories are so good. Fast entertainment without compromise. Oops 🙊 the way I put it it sounds almost promiscuous. I liked your writing and can not criticize because I\'m not entitled to. I know too little to wheigh anyone work. Sorry but can not help here. Thanks for sharing one more.
July 14th, 2017 23:34
malubotelho said:
I could catch back on this one. Short stories are so good. Fast entertainment without compromise. Oops 🙊 the way I put it it sounds almost promiscuous. I liked your writing and can not criticize because I\'m not entitled to. I know too little to wheigh anyone work. Sorry but can not help here. Thanks for sharing one more.
July 14th, 2017 23:34
Low Hanging Fruit
Heather T said:
So...I plucked it anyway, left my teeth marks, scrapped it, and grabbed another. Does that count for wisdom? Maybe that\'s just waste 😉
July 14th, 2017 21:36
Heather T said:
So...I plucked it anyway, left my teeth marks, scrapped it, and grabbed another. Does that count for wisdom? Maybe that\'s just waste 😉
July 14th, 2017 21:36
Low Hanging Fruit
malubotelho said:
Awesome nice, smart one. It is like we are being precisely economic today. Thanks for sharing and already copied the little cute joke too. I also love jokes.
July 14th, 2017 19:43
malubotelho said:
Awesome nice, smart one. It is like we are being precisely economic today. Thanks for sharing and already copied the little cute joke too. I also love jokes.
July 14th, 2017 19:43
Hoping
rita_ehn said:
This poem says so much. Hope gradually dwindles with every disappointment and becomes very difficult to maintain. Especially if, like you said in your comment, action has been taken and there is still no result. Good stuff.
July 14th, 2017 15:27
rita_ehn said:
This poem says so much. Hope gradually dwindles with every disappointment and becomes very difficult to maintain. Especially if, like you said in your comment, action has been taken and there is still no result. Good stuff.
July 14th, 2017 15:27
Low Hanging Fruit
Renzi said:
I can resist anything but temptation haha! Life\'s lessons and blessings? I tell myself that any way ha. Nicely penned my kind friend :)
July 14th, 2017 07:04
Renzi said:
I can resist anything but temptation haha! Life\'s lessons and blessings? I tell myself that any way ha. Nicely penned my kind friend :)
July 14th, 2017 07:04
Low Hanging Fruit
Louis Gibbs said:
NOW you give me this advice! Where were you a couple of marriages ago? Oh well, thanks anyway for this cute shorty, Fred.
July 14th, 2017 06:57
Louis Gibbs said:
NOW you give me this advice! Where were you a couple of marriages ago? Oh well, thanks anyway for this cute shorty, Fred.
July 14th, 2017 06:57
Low Hanging Fruit
Fay Slimm. said:
Wise message hiding within these four lines Fred. Good rhyme.
July 14th, 2017 04:02
Fay Slimm. said:
Wise message hiding within these four lines Fred. Good rhyme.
July 14th, 2017 04:02
Low Hanging Fruit
burning-embers said:
I like the way you\'re telling me not to go for a low hanging pear here Fred.
As always less is more. Yep, what comes easily isn\'t usually the best.
July 14th, 2017 03:46
burning-embers said:
I like the way you\'re telling me not to go for a low hanging pear here Fred.
As always less is more. Yep, what comes easily isn\'t usually the best.
July 14th, 2017 03:46
Just A Job (Short Story)
Heather T said:
A blooming second in and I thought I was in the midst of a John Grisham novel. I agree with Yumna over italics. I think the end twist underscores the callousness of the hitman\'s work being treated with the same cavalier attitude of selling a car. Even though the title you chose foreshadows, I\'m not sure I\'m settled on it. Gripping write, friend.
July 13th, 2017 17:51
Heather T said:
A blooming second in and I thought I was in the midst of a John Grisham novel. I agree with Yumna over italics. I think the end twist underscores the callousness of the hitman\'s work being treated with the same cavalier attitude of selling a car. Even though the title you chose foreshadows, I\'m not sure I\'m settled on it. Gripping write, friend.
July 13th, 2017 17:51
Just A Job (Short Story)
onepauly said:
I do like a good mystery. but you wrote how it ended. trying to help?
July 13th, 2017 09:08
onepauly said:
I do like a good mystery. but you wrote how it ended. trying to help?
July 13th, 2017 09:08
Just A Job (Short Story)
Michael Edwards said:
Great read with a super ending - really enjoyed this.
July 13th, 2017 02:07
Michael Edwards said:
Great read with a super ending - really enjoyed this.
July 13th, 2017 02:07
Just A Job (Short Story)
P.H.Rose said:
Brilliant Fred
Brilliant!!!!
Wonderful start to my day..
July 13th, 2017 01:57
P.H.Rose said:
Brilliant Fred
Brilliant!!!!
Wonderful start to my day..
July 13th, 2017 01:57
Just A Job (Short Story)
burning-embers said:
You devious devil, nice one, nice twist. Easy relaxing read. just read your note and i see u want a critique - only thing i\'d say is this. We have all seen the hit man going about his job so many times on the TV or in the movies. One or two of your lines didn\'t need saying, the scene was already painted e.g. (and i haven\'t the text open in front of me) so as not to leave fingerprints - now that\'s what we call here in UK stating the bleedin obvious. My personal view when i read that much detail in a novel is i begin to wonder whether the book were written for a younger, less informed, reader.
Nonetheless this was a good read and i can assure you that if it wasn\'t i wouldn\'t have read all the way through.
July 13th, 2017 01:21
burning-embers said:
You devious devil, nice one, nice twist. Easy relaxing read. just read your note and i see u want a critique - only thing i\'d say is this. We have all seen the hit man going about his job so many times on the TV or in the movies. One or two of your lines didn\'t need saying, the scene was already painted e.g. (and i haven\'t the text open in front of me) so as not to leave fingerprints - now that\'s what we call here in UK stating the bleedin obvious. My personal view when i read that much detail in a novel is i begin to wonder whether the book were written for a younger, less informed, reader.
Nonetheless this was a good read and i can assure you that if it wasn\'t i wouldn\'t have read all the way through.
July 13th, 2017 01:21
The Kiss
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write and the last stanza is so meaningful.
July 13th, 2017 00:57
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write and the last stanza is so meaningful.
July 13th, 2017 00:57
The Kiss
Christina8 said:
A wonderful poem about sharing kisses over a lifetime---superb!
July 12th, 2017 17:22
Christina8 said:
A wonderful poem about sharing kisses over a lifetime---superb!
July 12th, 2017 17:22
Hoping
Cyprian Van Dyke said:
Interesting poem and moral. Gives thoughts to anyone reading this that can relate. Tyfs!
July 12th, 2017 16:03
Cyprian Van Dyke said:
Interesting poem and moral. Gives thoughts to anyone reading this that can relate. Tyfs!
July 12th, 2017 16:03
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