Comments received on poems by FredPeyer
A Whole Lot of Work
Louis Gibbs said:
These bodies may be a \"sad symphony\" of our former selves, but the mind and soul grow endlessly, don\'t they. Great imagery in this one, Fred! Loved it.
July 6th, 2017 09:14
Louis Gibbs said:
These bodies may be a \"sad symphony\" of our former selves, but the mind and soul grow endlessly, don\'t they. Great imagery in this one, Fred! Loved it.
July 6th, 2017 09:14
A Whole Lot of Work
Renzi said:
I invisioned this wee house in my mind. And i believe in you. Believing is becoming ❤
July 6th, 2017 04:31
Renzi said:
I invisioned this wee house in my mind. And i believe in you. Believing is becoming ❤
July 6th, 2017 04:31
A Whole Lot of Work
Fay Slimm. said:
Love the positive ending to this engaging and imaginative verse - - good imagery too Fred.
July 6th, 2017 01:51
Fay Slimm. said:
Love the positive ending to this engaging and imaginative verse - - good imagery too Fred.
July 6th, 2017 01:51
A Whole Lot of Work
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write and imagery. I do hope that you can find the courage to do the work. I am sure that many on here will support you.
July 6th, 2017 01:43
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write and imagery. I do hope that you can find the courage to do the work. I am sure that many on here will support you.
July 6th, 2017 01:43
A Whole Lot of Work
onepauly said:
does that mean to erase everything above those three lines? sometimes what we mean may not mean the same thing to another. I liked everything above those three lines. for me (not you)this body of mine got old to quickly with all the chemicals I did years ago. I\'m ashamed to say what. but these days I feel very weak. with this body and heart. I have my mind and although it is very different then others. I feel to use it to compensate for my body. I love looking into my past. I take delight in it. to me its right here. I just got from someone an inspiration to write a book about living off the land. with no income. fishing, scrap metal. gold in the streets. living in a tent. bread was very cheap. I\'m going to use my mind going back there and tell about my adventures. do you want a copy of the book? ha! ha!
July 6th, 2017 01:27
onepauly said:
does that mean to erase everything above those three lines? sometimes what we mean may not mean the same thing to another. I liked everything above those three lines. for me (not you)this body of mine got old to quickly with all the chemicals I did years ago. I\'m ashamed to say what. but these days I feel very weak. with this body and heart. I have my mind and although it is very different then others. I feel to use it to compensate for my body. I love looking into my past. I take delight in it. to me its right here. I just got from someone an inspiration to write a book about living off the land. with no income. fishing, scrap metal. gold in the streets. living in a tent. bread was very cheap. I\'m going to use my mind going back there and tell about my adventures. do you want a copy of the book? ha! ha!
July 6th, 2017 01:27
A Whole Lot of Work
burning-embers said:
Evocative. You should see the tumbledown mess i love in. I know exactly wheres you coming from in this. I read it thru a couple of times picturing that jumble. All that work ahead and time to write too? Can i have one of your 36hour clocks please.
July 6th, 2017 01:25
burning-embers said:
Evocative. You should see the tumbledown mess i love in. I know exactly wheres you coming from in this. I read it thru a couple of times picturing that jumble. All that work ahead and time to write too? Can i have one of your 36hour clocks please.
July 6th, 2017 01:25
A Whole Lot of Work
MaddieJ said:
I really loved the imagery you created with this poem. All of the senses are tickled! Good job!
July 6th, 2017 01:20
MaddieJ said:
I really loved the imagery you created with this poem. All of the senses are tickled! Good job!
July 6th, 2017 01:20
A Whole Lot of Work
Michael Edwards said:
Painted a picture in my mind and ended with a smile after the last three lines - great work Alfred
July 6th, 2017 00:40
Michael Edwards said:
Painted a picture in my mind and ended with a smile after the last three lines - great work Alfred
July 6th, 2017 00:40
The Co-Pilot
malubotelho said:
The movie about God being a black woman is really beautiful. The shack.
July 5th, 2017 23:32
malubotelho said:
The movie about God being a black woman is really beautiful. The shack.
July 5th, 2017 23:32
The Co-Pilot
malubotelho said:
Everytime that guy Stephen.Sapaugh begin to comment his critics on someone poem makes me have to go back there and reread the poem to see what is missing. I\'m not a critic at all and I just love to read the poems admiring the art in it or the feelings and emotions that people releases here. It is so human. I love it. I\'m wondering what he is going to say if he reads one of my writings. He did not get to me yet.
I think in most cases we are just having a conversation with our soul. Delivering.
July 5th, 2017 23:31
malubotelho said:
Everytime that guy Stephen.Sapaugh begin to comment his critics on someone poem makes me have to go back there and reread the poem to see what is missing. I\'m not a critic at all and I just love to read the poems admiring the art in it or the feelings and emotions that people releases here. It is so human. I love it. I\'m wondering what he is going to say if he reads one of my writings. He did not get to me yet.
I think in most cases we are just having a conversation with our soul. Delivering.
July 5th, 2017 23:31
The Co-Pilot
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
Throw in some commas in this poem, and you got a real winner for a story poem. It conveys pretty well the sexism apparent in the aviation culture. Glad you wrote it. The good things are your abandon towards covering these tensions up. The bad/ugly I will combined it\'s one thing, and one thing only. Punctuation. If you added some commas this would be a very solid poem. I find myself wanting to take a breath on many of the lines, and I don\'t know where you intended me to. If I were to grade this poem I would give it a 7/10 due to lack of punctuation.
July 5th, 2017 13:40
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
Throw in some commas in this poem, and you got a real winner for a story poem. It conveys pretty well the sexism apparent in the aviation culture. Glad you wrote it. The good things are your abandon towards covering these tensions up. The bad/ugly I will combined it\'s one thing, and one thing only. Punctuation. If you added some commas this would be a very solid poem. I find myself wanting to take a breath on many of the lines, and I don\'t know where you intended me to. If I were to grade this poem I would give it a 7/10 due to lack of punctuation.
July 5th, 2017 13:40
The Co-Pilot
Louis Gibbs said:
I agree ... Off with the bras! I like your poem, Fred.
July 5th, 2017 08:17
Louis Gibbs said:
I agree ... Off with the bras! I like your poem, Fred.
July 5th, 2017 08:17
The Co-Pilot
Renzi said:
But we make a cuppa tea better right ? :p debatable in this house haha!! Awhh one day, equality 💓
July 5th, 2017 03:34
Renzi said:
But we make a cuppa tea better right ? :p debatable in this house haha!! Awhh one day, equality 💓
July 5th, 2017 03:34
The Co-Pilot
Michael Edwards said:
Sad but I\'m afraid it\'s not all equal in this world - will it ever change? Enjoyed the write.
July 5th, 2017 01:41
Michael Edwards said:
Sad but I\'m afraid it\'s not all equal in this world - will it ever change? Enjoyed the write.
July 5th, 2017 01:41
The Co-Pilot
onepauly said:
I thought the movie GI jane was pretty good.
she put them in their place.
July 5th, 2017 00:33
onepauly said:
I thought the movie GI jane was pretty good.
she put them in their place.
July 5th, 2017 00:33
What If
just a girl. said:
This is absolutely breath taking on how good it is. I love this!
July 4th, 2017 11:07
just a girl. said:
This is absolutely breath taking on how good it is. I love this!
July 4th, 2017 11:07
What If
Michael Edwards said:
Whilst practising law the first question that had to be considered when seeking answers was \'What if\' Love the poem Alfred.
July 4th, 2017 10:54
Michael Edwards said:
Whilst practising law the first question that had to be considered when seeking answers was \'What if\' Love the poem Alfred.
July 4th, 2017 10:54
What If
Heather T said:
The past is where I\'ve already been, and not the way I\'m heading. Today is daily bread, and tomorrow has its own troubles. Our times in a spreadsheet is a fascinating thought! I\'m not sure I could handle the anxiety. Provocative poem, sir.
July 4th, 2017 09:32
Heather T said:
The past is where I\'ve already been, and not the way I\'m heading. Today is daily bread, and tomorrow has its own troubles. Our times in a spreadsheet is a fascinating thought! I\'m not sure I could handle the anxiety. Provocative poem, sir.
July 4th, 2017 09:32
What If
Louis Gibbs said:
Ah, I reflect Candlewitches\' post. Well said, good lady! Good poem, Fred!
July 4th, 2017 09:03
Louis Gibbs said:
Ah, I reflect Candlewitches\' post. Well said, good lady! Good poem, Fred!
July 4th, 2017 09:03
What If
Goldfinch60 said:
What if? the most powerful statement and asked question in the world to which there is no answer.
July 4th, 2017 05:24
Goldfinch60 said:
What if? the most powerful statement and asked question in the world to which there is no answer.
July 4th, 2017 05:24
What If
FredPeyer said:
Thanks Dan. The past is the past, we cannot change it, so it doesn\'t matter, right? Thanks for your comment!
July 4th, 2017 04:13
FredPeyer said:
Thanks Dan. The past is the past, we cannot change it, so it doesn\'t matter, right? Thanks for your comment!
July 4th, 2017 04:13
What If
Poetic Dan said:
What if, it does not matter.
Now that\'s a fact!
Superbly done, thank you so much
July 4th, 2017 03:39
Poetic Dan said:
What if, it does not matter.
Now that\'s a fact!
Superbly done, thank you so much
July 4th, 2017 03:39
Morning Fog
malubotelho said:
A very expressive way with the enigmatic fingers of the fog. Lovely
July 3rd, 2017 17:15
malubotelho said:
A very expressive way with the enigmatic fingers of the fog. Lovely
July 3rd, 2017 17:15
Morning Fog
Louis Gibbs said:
Were we not all born into fog that obscures the reality of our true selves, challenging us to fight our way through it? Love the poem, Fred!
July 3rd, 2017 09:01
Louis Gibbs said:
Were we not all born into fog that obscures the reality of our true selves, challenging us to fight our way through it? Love the poem, Fred!
July 3rd, 2017 09:01
Morning Fog
Renzi said:
It\'s somewhat wonderful that this took me to a wee place in my imagination. Thankyou 💓
July 3rd, 2017 05:28
Renzi said:
It\'s somewhat wonderful that this took me to a wee place in my imagination. Thankyou 💓
July 3rd, 2017 05:28
Morning Fog
Fay Slimm. said:
Your description of the fingers of fog versed its demand to surrender so well - - great read Fred.
July 3rd, 2017 04:01
Fay Slimm. said:
Your description of the fingers of fog versed its demand to surrender so well - - great read Fred.
July 3rd, 2017 04:01
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