Comments received on poems by FredPeyer
Just A Job (Short Story)
Michael Edwards said:
Great read with a super ending - really enjoyed this.
July 13th, 2017 02:07
Michael Edwards said:
Great read with a super ending - really enjoyed this.
July 13th, 2017 02:07
Just A Job (Short Story)
P.H.Rose said:
Brilliant Fred
Brilliant!!!!
Wonderful start to my day..
July 13th, 2017 01:57
P.H.Rose said:
Brilliant Fred
Brilliant!!!!
Wonderful start to my day..
July 13th, 2017 01:57
Just A Job (Short Story)
burning-embers said:
You devious devil, nice one, nice twist. Easy relaxing read. just read your note and i see u want a critique - only thing i\'d say is this. We have all seen the hit man going about his job so many times on the TV or in the movies. One or two of your lines didn\'t need saying, the scene was already painted e.g. (and i haven\'t the text open in front of me) so as not to leave fingerprints - now that\'s what we call here in UK stating the bleedin obvious. My personal view when i read that much detail in a novel is i begin to wonder whether the book were written for a younger, less informed, reader.
Nonetheless this was a good read and i can assure you that if it wasn\'t i wouldn\'t have read all the way through.
July 13th, 2017 01:21
burning-embers said:
You devious devil, nice one, nice twist. Easy relaxing read. just read your note and i see u want a critique - only thing i\'d say is this. We have all seen the hit man going about his job so many times on the TV or in the movies. One or two of your lines didn\'t need saying, the scene was already painted e.g. (and i haven\'t the text open in front of me) so as not to leave fingerprints - now that\'s what we call here in UK stating the bleedin obvious. My personal view when i read that much detail in a novel is i begin to wonder whether the book were written for a younger, less informed, reader.
Nonetheless this was a good read and i can assure you that if it wasn\'t i wouldn\'t have read all the way through.
July 13th, 2017 01:21
The Kiss
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write and the last stanza is so meaningful.
July 13th, 2017 00:57
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write and the last stanza is so meaningful.
July 13th, 2017 00:57
The Kiss
Christina8 said:
A wonderful poem about sharing kisses over a lifetime---superb!
July 12th, 2017 17:22
Christina8 said:
A wonderful poem about sharing kisses over a lifetime---superb!
July 12th, 2017 17:22
Hoping
Cyprian Van Dyke said:
Interesting poem and moral. Gives thoughts to anyone reading this that can relate. Tyfs!
July 12th, 2017 16:03
Cyprian Van Dyke said:
Interesting poem and moral. Gives thoughts to anyone reading this that can relate. Tyfs!
July 12th, 2017 16:03
Defiance
Heather T said:
Love this damn-it-all voice of yours, Fred. Was that a middle finger at the end? 🙃
July 12th, 2017 14:36
Heather T said:
Love this damn-it-all voice of yours, Fred. Was that a middle finger at the end? 🙃
July 12th, 2017 14:36
The Kiss
Louis Gibbs said:
The kiss, as it evolves over time in a relationship ... what an enchanting theme! A fine poem, made even better by the hauntingly beautiful last line, Thank you for gifting us with this one, Fred!
July 12th, 2017 13:54
Louis Gibbs said:
The kiss, as it evolves over time in a relationship ... what an enchanting theme! A fine poem, made even better by the hauntingly beautiful last line, Thank you for gifting us with this one, Fred!
July 12th, 2017 13:54
The Kiss
malubotelho said:
You covered the subject so well. A beautiful work that of yours. I myself made a rendition to the subject on my poem (A kiss) but only romantic kiss. You covered it entirely. Thank you
July 12th, 2017 12:09
malubotelho said:
You covered the subject so well. A beautiful work that of yours. I myself made a rendition to the subject on my poem (A kiss) but only romantic kiss. You covered it entirely. Thank you
July 12th, 2017 12:09
The Kiss
burning-embers said:
Kissing is quite quite glorious. But when u pull it apart its a bit weird too.
Damned enjoyable tho. Here in UK kissing has the nickname snogging.
July 12th, 2017 10:34
burning-embers said:
Kissing is quite quite glorious. But when u pull it apart its a bit weird too.
Damned enjoyable tho. Here in UK kissing has the nickname snogging.
July 12th, 2017 10:34
Fuck this Live
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good and true write but it is not just in Hawaii, it is everywhere. Here in the UK it seems to be getting worse but those who have the power to do anything about it cannot, or do not, see the problem.
July 12th, 2017 00:08
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good and true write but it is not just in Hawaii, it is everywhere. Here in the UK it seems to be getting worse but those who have the power to do anything about it cannot, or do not, see the problem.
July 12th, 2017 00:08
Fuck this Live
Louis Gibbs said:
A grim portrait, this one, and a commentary on the times. \"There but for the grace of God\" comes to mind. Fine poem, Fred!
July 11th, 2017 21:40
Louis Gibbs said:
A grim portrait, this one, and a commentary on the times. \"There but for the grace of God\" comes to mind. Fine poem, Fred!
July 11th, 2017 21:40
Fuck this Live
burning-embers said:
These people are all individuals not one smelly heap. Each has their own story and valid reason for their circumstance. Comments made by PoeticDan here resonate with me. Excellent provocative writing FredPeyer
July 11th, 2017 13:54
burning-embers said:
These people are all individuals not one smelly heap. Each has their own story and valid reason for their circumstance. Comments made by PoeticDan here resonate with me. Excellent provocative writing FredPeyer
July 11th, 2017 13:54
Fuck this Live
Michael Edwards said:
It\'s an increasing problem here in the UK - If only there were a universal answer to help these poor folk.
July 11th, 2017 08:58
Michael Edwards said:
It\'s an increasing problem here in the UK - If only there were a universal answer to help these poor folk.
July 11th, 2017 08:58
Fuck this Live
malubotelho said:
By the way now that you brought this up I don\'t see much of them in the area I live. Did they all went to Hawai?
July 11th, 2017 08:52
malubotelho said:
By the way now that you brought this up I don\'t see much of them in the area I live. Did they all went to Hawai?
July 11th, 2017 08:52
Fuck this Live
malubotelho said:
Fred, you hit the vein here. How sad it is to see people at the street without a shelter, food, hope? It is the true shame of our sociate and yet we don\'t do much, or do nothing. But really? What we regular people could do? This is why family and friends are so important but with the alcoholism there is not much hope. We have to have compassion but it also can drag us to a terrible and miserable situation by association. I think if we could create a group of people and begin to make and bring soup for the homeless it could help a bit. At least they could feel some hope.
July 11th, 2017 08:50
malubotelho said:
Fred, you hit the vein here. How sad it is to see people at the street without a shelter, food, hope? It is the true shame of our sociate and yet we don\'t do much, or do nothing. But really? What we regular people could do? This is why family and friends are so important but with the alcoholism there is not much hope. We have to have compassion but it also can drag us to a terrible and miserable situation by association. I think if we could create a group of people and begin to make and bring soup for the homeless it could help a bit. At least they could feel some hope.
July 11th, 2017 08:50
Fuck this Live
P.H.Rose said:
Wonderful poem Fred
An absolute work of art sir.
I wrote a similar poem
Called \" guilty charity \"
It\'s about a tramp I met
One day, the poem was
More about how a person
Gets to this state, what
Happened... it\'s not a real
Story just something that could
Happen.. please Fred if you get
Time read it and let me know what you think of it...
love this Fred.. great work !!!
July 11th, 2017 07:26
P.H.Rose said:
Wonderful poem Fred
An absolute work of art sir.
I wrote a similar poem
Called \" guilty charity \"
It\'s about a tramp I met
One day, the poem was
More about how a person
Gets to this state, what
Happened... it\'s not a real
Story just something that could
Happen.. please Fred if you get
Time read it and let me know what you think of it...
love this Fred.. great work !!!
July 11th, 2017 07:26
Fuck this Live
Nicholas Browning said:
Man, I tell ya, it ain\'t a pretty sight. But how can you distinguish one homeless person from a fake these days? Since I was a child people have been pretending to be homeless just to rob people of their good will. People being homeless makes me sick. People pretending to be homeless pisses me off. That\'s putting it lightly. It\'s no joke, that\'s for sure. Good poetry, strong message. Keep it up Fred.
July 11th, 2017 03:41
Nicholas Browning said:
Man, I tell ya, it ain\'t a pretty sight. But how can you distinguish one homeless person from a fake these days? Since I was a child people have been pretending to be homeless just to rob people of their good will. People being homeless makes me sick. People pretending to be homeless pisses me off. That\'s putting it lightly. It\'s no joke, that\'s for sure. Good poetry, strong message. Keep it up Fred.
July 11th, 2017 03:41
Fuck this Live
Poetic Dan said:
All done sir, for I\'ve been that one on the street, I know friends that also were lucky to get out of this so call homeless disease (will said) this cure is not simply because not many want to see.
The other day I gentlemen was so thankful for me stopping and reading his card, say no one stops, let\'s alone have a conversation and shake hands.
I can never offer much but my time, if they don\'t have dogs they usually have a good cuddle with mine. From my own experience food and water is needed but if you just feel abandoned then it\'s the spirit that\'s struggling, for this you need to see and feel genuine compassion.
All done for your part, I know it feels small but we all have an impact your ripple will help bring the wave.
July 11th, 2017 03:04
Poetic Dan said:
All done sir, for I\'ve been that one on the street, I know friends that also were lucky to get out of this so call homeless disease (will said) this cure is not simply because not many want to see.
The other day I gentlemen was so thankful for me stopping and reading his card, say no one stops, let\'s alone have a conversation and shake hands.
I can never offer much but my time, if they don\'t have dogs they usually have a good cuddle with mine. From my own experience food and water is needed but if you just feel abandoned then it\'s the spirit that\'s struggling, for this you need to see and feel genuine compassion.
All done for your part, I know it feels small but we all have an impact your ripple will help bring the wave.
July 11th, 2017 03:04
Fuck this Live
kevin browne said:
it\'s a tragedy that it happens right across the globe. some areas worse than other but none-the-less, it\'s still a fucking tragedy and disgrace in this day and age. get it together civilisations. an important poem here that people should listen and react to.
July 11th, 2017 02:31
kevin browne said:
it\'s a tragedy that it happens right across the globe. some areas worse than other but none-the-less, it\'s still a fucking tragedy and disgrace in this day and age. get it together civilisations. an important poem here that people should listen and react to.
July 11th, 2017 02:31
Hoping
malubotelho said:
We have here more than hope because we can write and send messages. To DS/KS if I was your neyghbor I would visit you and your horse and we could laugh together because I laugh by myself reading your comments. You have more than hope because you have good humor. Thanks Fred. Very nice write indeed.
July 10th, 2017 23:57
malubotelho said:
We have here more than hope because we can write and send messages. To DS/KS if I was your neyghbor I would visit you and your horse and we could laugh together because I laugh by myself reading your comments. You have more than hope because you have good humor. Thanks Fred. Very nice write indeed.
July 10th, 2017 23:57
Hoping
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write, that feeling of hope showing up as hopelessness.
July 10th, 2017 23:41
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write, that feeling of hope showing up as hopelessness.
July 10th, 2017 23:41
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