Comments received on poems by Neville
The Confession
L. B. Mek said:
attempting to scribe
those raw, heinous aspects
of our so-called \'human\' nature
rarely lends itself to poetic eloquence
be Proud, Hyung
you find it hard to write, despite
your unquestioned skill and talent
because, I feel
like me, you have an innate hatred
for the very fact
that such words, need to exist
but this is why, I refer to those I respect
\'we truth scribblers, few\'
this is why, we challenge ourselves
to word, a transparency
to our reality, even its most
detestable aspects..
(I read and learn, wise Poet
thank you!)
January 27th, 2023 03:28
L. B. Mek said:
attempting to scribe
those raw, heinous aspects
of our so-called \'human\' nature
rarely lends itself to poetic eloquence
be Proud, Hyung
you find it hard to write, despite
your unquestioned skill and talent
because, I feel
like me, you have an innate hatred
for the very fact
that such words, need to exist
but this is why, I refer to those I respect
\'we truth scribblers, few\'
this is why, we challenge ourselves
to word, a transparency
to our reality, even its most
detestable aspects..
(I read and learn, wise Poet
thank you!)
January 27th, 2023 03:28
Just Another Way Out
L. B. Mek said:
harrowingly Brilliant!
so insightful Hyung
sadly I recognise many a friend
who\'ve fallen for this
far, too common trapping
of ambition, to fit in
amongst circles, made more
of venomous tongues
than a forest of snakes..
(to me, this is less a poetic depiction
more, a sobering meditation
on the ill-fate, awaiting so many
who in their ambition, to fit in
do instead, push themselves
till their very foundation, of self
begins to creak and shudder
underneath, all that self-deceiving
and those, vultures
waiting to find the cracks, to exploit
any weakness
begin to throw, their insidious stones
wrapped in barded words, targeted
to do the most irreversible damage
...
here be the price, of acceptance
within our so called society
...
and yet, the alternative, is to be left
a bystander, to life itself
...
fck!)
January 27th, 2023 03:16
L. B. Mek said:
harrowingly Brilliant!
so insightful Hyung
sadly I recognise many a friend
who\'ve fallen for this
far, too common trapping
of ambition, to fit in
amongst circles, made more
of venomous tongues
than a forest of snakes..
(to me, this is less a poetic depiction
more, a sobering meditation
on the ill-fate, awaiting so many
who in their ambition, to fit in
do instead, push themselves
till their very foundation, of self
begins to creak and shudder
underneath, all that self-deceiving
and those, vultures
waiting to find the cracks, to exploit
any weakness
begin to throw, their insidious stones
wrapped in barded words, targeted
to do the most irreversible damage
...
here be the price, of acceptance
within our so called society
...
and yet, the alternative, is to be left
a bystander, to life itself
...
fck!)
January 27th, 2023 03:16
The Confession
Doggerel Dave said:
If it\'s not too much trouble, Nev, would you mind if I put any appreciation on hold, until you arrive at a final version?
My overly literal mind has tied itself into a couple of knots over this, and I must take a lengthy lie down.
January 26th, 2023 18:43
Doggerel Dave said:
If it\'s not too much trouble, Nev, would you mind if I put any appreciation on hold, until you arrive at a final version?
My overly literal mind has tied itself into a couple of knots over this, and I must take a lengthy lie down.
January 26th, 2023 18:43
The Confession
orchidee said:
KP says it\'s excellent. What does she know about poetry though?! lol.
January 26th, 2023 12:24
orchidee said:
KP says it\'s excellent. What does she know about poetry though?! lol.
January 26th, 2023 12:24
The Confession
Caring dove said:
Interesting writing like how it starts more lighthearted with the mention of nature ( the sand ) and the turquoise umbrella ) but then it turns out he has a confession to make ( which I wasn’t expecting )
Especially like the first two verses
January 26th, 2023 11:31
Caring dove said:
Interesting writing like how it starts more lighthearted with the mention of nature ( the sand ) and the turquoise umbrella ) but then it turns out he has a confession to make ( which I wasn’t expecting )
Especially like the first two verses
January 26th, 2023 11:31
The Confession
Fay Slimm. said:
Sensational write Nev. - The turquoise umbrella did it for me - - reminiscent of a wonderful painting by Andre Kohn and his girl had a torn skirt too - -however I know not a thing of the male who faced need of confession - - as always the clever intrigue calls for knowing a bit more re. this haunt of a read..........x
January 26th, 2023 09:08
Fay Slimm. said:
Sensational write Nev. - The turquoise umbrella did it for me - - reminiscent of a wonderful painting by Andre Kohn and his girl had a torn skirt too - -however I know not a thing of the male who faced need of confession - - as always the clever intrigue calls for knowing a bit more re. this haunt of a read..........x
January 26th, 2023 09:08
The Confession
Christina8 said:
Wow an unexpected plot twist at the end. Very good!! x
January 26th, 2023 07:59
Christina8 said:
Wow an unexpected plot twist at the end. Very good!! x
January 26th, 2023 07:59
Just Another Way Out
[email protected] said:
This is an encouraging start. However, there\'s a lot of extraneous wording that if gotten rid of will make the poem much stronger. For example: \"Like some old church MIGHT sound PERHAPS.....I think removing perhaps would make the stanza resound more. The opening line is really good---in draws you in, especially \"such a pretty fabrication\".
January 25th, 2023 11:39
[email protected] said:
This is an encouraging start. However, there\'s a lot of extraneous wording that if gotten rid of will make the poem much stronger. For example: \"Like some old church MIGHT sound PERHAPS.....I think removing perhaps would make the stanza resound more. The opening line is really good---in draws you in, especially \"such a pretty fabrication\".
January 25th, 2023 11:39
Just Another Way Out
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful emotive words Neville.
Andy
January 25th, 2023 01:53
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful emotive words Neville.
Andy
January 25th, 2023 01:53
Just Another Way Out
Zain Khalid said:
Great!
I love this...
It\'s good to be a part of this amazing community.
January 24th, 2023 19:23
Zain Khalid said:
Great!
I love this...
It\'s good to be a part of this amazing community.
January 24th, 2023 19:23
Just Another Way Out
Bella Shepard said:
Wonderfully worded my friend. Sad for the people who never seem to be able to find their true selves, and perhaps need help all the more. They do unwittingly compound their own misery, and you can only ask why?
January 24th, 2023 14:04
Bella Shepard said:
Wonderfully worded my friend. Sad for the people who never seem to be able to find their true selves, and perhaps need help all the more. They do unwittingly compound their own misery, and you can only ask why?
January 24th, 2023 14:04
Just Another Way Out
Fay Slimm. said:
A summary of inner sadness never outed hence fabrication and changeable moods --- - -- tragic indeed when no life-purpose is found demise can seem the only way out - - your powerful words hit the stages of despair so clearly methinks mon ami...............x
January 24th, 2023 10:18
Fay Slimm. said:
A summary of inner sadness never outed hence fabrication and changeable moods --- - -- tragic indeed when no life-purpose is found demise can seem the only way out - - your powerful words hit the stages of despair so clearly methinks mon ami...............x
January 24th, 2023 10:18
Just Another Way Out
Doggerel Dave said:
There are some shonkey architects about......Neville.....🙂
January 24th, 2023 08:15
Doggerel Dave said:
There are some shonkey architects about......Neville.....🙂
January 24th, 2023 08:15
Just Another Way Out
Christina8 said:
Ooh I like this poem a lot. \"built like a temple\" is very sexy but the hollowness is sad......Also sad that she was the key player in her demise. Well done! x
January 24th, 2023 07:29
Christina8 said:
Ooh I like this poem a lot. \"built like a temple\" is very sexy but the hollowness is sad......Also sad that she was the key player in her demise. Well done! x
January 24th, 2023 07:29
A Single Truth For all Things Being Unequal
L. B. Mek said:
(distinction is vital
to enable recognition
yet
when bombarded with such endless
diversity
in all-things, existence
seldom are we offered the opportunity
to take note, of those tendril notes
that do more than tease our noses
and entice our eyes
within such a brief, gust of wind as life...)
I recognise the yearning for acceptance
of our fallible state, within ambition to experience
all of existence, greedily
in these subtle poem Hyung
\'just maybe, waiting
to be found and felt ..\'
a toast, dear Poet
for all the maybe\'s we\'ve yet
to feel
to taste, to treasure
as our next, next
favourite
\'Salut!\'
🍻😎
onwards then my friend, ever
onwards
January 23rd, 2023 04:22
L. B. Mek said:
(distinction is vital
to enable recognition
yet
when bombarded with such endless
diversity
in all-things, existence
seldom are we offered the opportunity
to take note, of those tendril notes
that do more than tease our noses
and entice our eyes
within such a brief, gust of wind as life...)
I recognise the yearning for acceptance
of our fallible state, within ambition to experience
all of existence, greedily
in these subtle poem Hyung
\'just maybe, waiting
to be found and felt ..\'
a toast, dear Poet
for all the maybe\'s we\'ve yet
to feel
to taste, to treasure
as our next, next
favourite
\'Salut!\'
🍻😎
onwards then my friend, ever
onwards
January 23rd, 2023 04:22
She Smelt Like 24 Carat Gold
L. B. Mek said:
funny how we smelt, true worth
of those we\'ve lost, after
but while in our hands, seemingly
like gold, they shine so dimly...
(clever and so true wise Poet
a wonderful nugget, to ponder)
sorry for your loss
January 23rd, 2023 04:11
L. B. Mek said:
funny how we smelt, true worth
of those we\'ve lost, after
but while in our hands, seemingly
like gold, they shine so dimly...
(clever and so true wise Poet
a wonderful nugget, to ponder)
sorry for your loss
January 23rd, 2023 04:11
The Day Before the Day Before Today
L. B. Mek said:
\'I watched you drown
in monochrome reflections\'
love this wording Hyung..
how we obsess the minutia
details
while watching our opportunity\'s
dissipate, before our very eyes...
(oh youth, oh weary soul
woe to ye, who dares attempt
to feign, sincerity
damned, to be a blind witness
to all that ye see
and relinquish, needlessly)
January 23rd, 2023 04:07
L. B. Mek said:
\'I watched you drown
in monochrome reflections\'
love this wording Hyung..
how we obsess the minutia
details
while watching our opportunity\'s
dissipate, before our very eyes...
(oh youth, oh weary soul
woe to ye, who dares attempt
to feign, sincerity
damned, to be a blind witness
to all that ye see
and relinquish, needlessly)
January 23rd, 2023 04:07
A Single Truth For all Things Being Unequal
Doggerel Dave said:
Salutary reminder that compared to what is known there is so much unknown. A well of ignorance is the sum total of human knowledge.... couldn\'t agree more, Nev.
January 22nd, 2023 16:58
Doggerel Dave said:
Salutary reminder that compared to what is known there is so much unknown. A well of ignorance is the sum total of human knowledge.... couldn\'t agree more, Nev.
January 22nd, 2023 16:58
She Smelt Like 24 Carat Gold
Doggerel Dave said:
Precious few words there, Nev................................(departing or departed......?) 🙂
January 22nd, 2023 16:25
Doggerel Dave said:
Precious few words there, Nev................................(departing or departed......?) 🙂
January 22nd, 2023 16:25
A Single Truth For all Things Being Unequal
Christina8 said:
Great poem! Maybe we should all wear blindfolds for a day and discover the world that we don\'t savor as often. x
January 22nd, 2023 09:29
Christina8 said:
Great poem! Maybe we should all wear blindfolds for a day and discover the world that we don\'t savor as often. x
January 22nd, 2023 09:29
A Single Truth For all Things Being Unequal
orchidee said:
Good write N.
Every little thing - every big thing - that KP spends my money on. Mainly botox. Doh! She\'s a one.
January 22nd, 2023 07:10
orchidee said:
Good write N.
Every little thing - every big thing - that KP spends my money on. Mainly botox. Doh! She\'s a one.
January 22nd, 2023 07:10
A Single Truth For all Things Being Unequal
arqios said:
Here\'s to all them waiting to be founds. Perhaps we shall feel them as they come to us.
January 22nd, 2023 05:31
arqios said:
Here\'s to all them waiting to be founds. Perhaps we shall feel them as they come to us.
January 22nd, 2023 05:31
A Single Truth For all Things Being Unequal
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes wholly agree mon ami that exciting adventures of finding both seen and future seen senses are waiting to be savoured by those who look, listen or sniff. An inspiring truth indeed................x
January 22nd, 2023 05:02
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes wholly agree mon ami that exciting adventures of finding both seen and future seen senses are waiting to be savoured by those who look, listen or sniff. An inspiring truth indeed................x
January 22nd, 2023 05:02
The Day Before the Day Before Today
Goldfinch60 said:
Good words Neville.
\"Today is the day that you worried about yesterday.\"
Andy
January 22nd, 2023 03:12
Goldfinch60 said:
Good words Neville.
\"Today is the day that you worried about yesterday.\"
Andy
January 22nd, 2023 03:12
She Smelt Like 24 Carat Gold
GenXer Shamrocker ☘️ said:
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January 21st, 2023 10:18
GenXer Shamrocker ☘️ said:
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January 21st, 2023 10:18
She Smelt Like 24 Carat Gold
Christina8 said:
This is a really sensual, great piece! In those moments she must have been like a treasure, like gold! x
January 21st, 2023 09:14
Christina8 said:
This is a really sensual, great piece! In those moments she must have been like a treasure, like gold! x
January 21st, 2023 09:14
She Smelt Like 24 Carat Gold
orchidee said:
KP smelt like gold too - when it\'s heated and melted in smelting, that is.
That\'ll be her botox melting.
She wanted something 24 carat, so I bought her a bag of carrots! lol.
Now KP - don\'t say I never give you anything!
January 21st, 2023 08:34
orchidee said:
KP smelt like gold too - when it\'s heated and melted in smelting, that is.
That\'ll be her botox melting.
She wanted something 24 carat, so I bought her a bag of carrots! lol.
Now KP - don\'t say I never give you anything!
January 21st, 2023 08:34
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