Comments received on poems by Neville
Celsius Rising
Bella Shepard said:
The cloak of invisibility can sometimes be a blessing, perhaps a bullit dodged? One never knows. Intriguing write dear friend, I guess I took a little interpretive license here.
May 16th, 2023 14:38
Bella Shepard said:
The cloak of invisibility can sometimes be a blessing, perhaps a bullit dodged? One never knows. Intriguing write dear friend, I guess I took a little interpretive license here.
May 16th, 2023 14:38
Celsius Rising
MendedFences27 said:
Somehow, I felt sorry for the yellow man of her artwork, short-lived from the heat of the experience. Yet. we know that it happens.
Your poem draws a picture of a romance that burned with an overpowering heat. The now, \"Invisible Man\" must gather the strength to move on, and avoid \"crayon\" artists. - Phil A.
May 16th, 2023 11:03
MendedFences27 said:
Somehow, I felt sorry for the yellow man of her artwork, short-lived from the heat of the experience. Yet. we know that it happens.
Your poem draws a picture of a romance that burned with an overpowering heat. The now, \"Invisible Man\" must gather the strength to move on, and avoid \"crayon\" artists. - Phil A.
May 16th, 2023 11:03
Celsius Rising
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"Celsius Rising\" is a brief yet intriguing poem that captures the initial fascination and subsequent disillusionment experienced by the speaker towards an individual.
May 16th, 2023 10:51
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"Celsius Rising\" is a brief yet intriguing poem that captures the initial fascination and subsequent disillusionment experienced by the speaker towards an individual.
May 16th, 2023 10:51
Celsius Rising
Fay Slimm. said:
Gurt stuff agen Nev. -Am feeling the boiling point of this short-lived affair - - Made my temperature rise to think of that golden haired Adonis being crayon portrayed in the sun before he made himself scarcer than scarce............x
May 16th, 2023 07:43
Fay Slimm. said:
Gurt stuff agen Nev. -Am feeling the boiling point of this short-lived affair - - Made my temperature rise to think of that golden haired Adonis being crayon portrayed in the sun before he made himself scarcer than scarce............x
May 16th, 2023 07:43
Celsius Rising
orchidee said:
The temperature never rises for KP and I. It\'s always sub-zero! heehee.
May 16th, 2023 05:17
orchidee said:
The temperature never rises for KP and I. It\'s always sub-zero! heehee.
May 16th, 2023 05:17
Celsius Rising
Bobby O said:
I’m still mulling the “invisible “ but as I always I love the sashay of the phrase
May 16th, 2023 04:02
Bobby O said:
I’m still mulling the “invisible “ but as I always I love the sashay of the phrase
May 16th, 2023 04:02
Mantis Praying
Goldfinch60 said:
Sometimes things do not appear as we would hope they would.
Andy
May 16th, 2023 03:11
Goldfinch60 said:
Sometimes things do not appear as we would hope they would.
Andy
May 16th, 2023 03:11
Mantis Praying
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Neville.
To never experience afterglow is not pretty indeed.
May 15th, 2023 14:18
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Neville.
To never experience afterglow is not pretty indeed.
May 15th, 2023 14:18
Mantis Praying
orchidee said:
Did KP eat me, as female preying mantis does after.........?. swoon! I read they may behead their male mate even before........
Nope is the answer, cos we never have any \'excitement\' Fido says it\'s not good for KP and I. lol.
May 15th, 2023 10:18
orchidee said:
Did KP eat me, as female preying mantis does after.........?. swoon! I read they may behead their male mate even before........
Nope is the answer, cos we never have any \'excitement\' Fido says it\'s not good for KP and I. lol.
May 15th, 2023 10:18
Mantis Praying
arqios said:
Oh wow cold hearted with a bit of jam sparkling in the corner vertex of poker smiling puckering lips. Perhaps even flicking a lone rose petal on that rapidly cooling corpse while she walks off unhurriedly, the clacking of her heels ringing with the cadence of the Reaper\'s march.
May 15th, 2023 05:54
arqios said:
Oh wow cold hearted with a bit of jam sparkling in the corner vertex of poker smiling puckering lips. Perhaps even flicking a lone rose petal on that rapidly cooling corpse while she walks off unhurriedly, the clacking of her heels ringing with the cadence of the Reaper\'s march.
May 15th, 2023 05:54
Mantis Praying
L. B. Mek said:
(meh
not that deep, me thinks
just going price for good
sex,
nowadays, for those
so desperate, to smile
away
their chosen drug of demise...)
lol
forgive my horribly warped
sense of humour, and
thanks for putting up with me
😌
(hope you n yours have a great week)
May 15th, 2023 03:39
L. B. Mek said:
(meh
not that deep, me thinks
just going price for good
sex,
nowadays, for those
so desperate, to smile
away
their chosen drug of demise...)
lol
forgive my horribly warped
sense of humour, and
thanks for putting up with me
😌
(hope you n yours have a great week)
May 15th, 2023 03:39
They Were Nothing But Fools
L. B. Mek said:
(showcasing great skill, dear Poet
worded, open to interpretation
yet, directing our flow to that
same river of poetic, introspection)
I seem to know these fool\'s innately
those who weave patterns, beyond
logic or consideration\'s
capacity, to comprehend
their zeal for cyclic, idiocy..
\'as i ask, every morning
mirror mirror, whose the fool
you know better than most
in reply, my face looks back
eyes clueless, to life\'s lessons...\'
May 15th, 2023 03:31
L. B. Mek said:
(showcasing great skill, dear Poet
worded, open to interpretation
yet, directing our flow to that
same river of poetic, introspection)
I seem to know these fool\'s innately
those who weave patterns, beyond
logic or consideration\'s
capacity, to comprehend
their zeal for cyclic, idiocy..
\'as i ask, every morning
mirror mirror, whose the fool
you know better than most
in reply, my face looks back
eyes clueless, to life\'s lessons...\'
May 15th, 2023 03:31
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
L. B. Mek said:
\'of our tears
forming and falling, in some
kind of obscene
and collective defeat ..
Indeed ..
What began as a trickle,
now rages
outrageously, like a swift
flowing river\'
(so true, worded so acute)
\'So fight it, come closer
stand directly
behind me and hold fast
to my skirts
Oh’ and pray, keep both
your eyes tightly shut ..\'
(Ha! You lead I\'ll try n keep-up
dear wise Kilt loving, exhibitionist
😉)
\'Bouncing off
yellow stained cloth stars
haphazardly set
against a backdrop of hate ..
Just ripe for pinning
come morning, to writhing
grey mountains
piled high with blue striped
pyjamas ..\'
(We, MUST NEVER FORGET!
how it all started, with those
\'yellow stained cloth stars\'
to identify and BRAND
those, deemed inhuman
and hated, because
\'some\'
dogmatic text, millenniums ago
blamed them
for the murder of a character
labelled
as a deity creator, and \'Father\'
to all of existence
including, those very same Jews!
\'some\'
try to forget, by the logic of that
\'same\'
lore, they worship
how these very same Jews
are also \'HIS\' children...
yeah, what \'Father\' wouldn\'t appreciate
the MASS, attempted Genocide
of \'HIS children\'..
yeah, stuff that up your
self righteous, \'GOOD BOOK\'
you brainwashed zealot morons)
May 15th, 2023 03:22
L. B. Mek said:
\'of our tears
forming and falling, in some
kind of obscene
and collective defeat ..
Indeed ..
What began as a trickle,
now rages
outrageously, like a swift
flowing river\'
(so true, worded so acute)
\'So fight it, come closer
stand directly
behind me and hold fast
to my skirts
Oh’ and pray, keep both
your eyes tightly shut ..\'
(Ha! You lead I\'ll try n keep-up
dear wise Kilt loving, exhibitionist
😉)
\'Bouncing off
yellow stained cloth stars
haphazardly set
against a backdrop of hate ..
Just ripe for pinning
come morning, to writhing
grey mountains
piled high with blue striped
pyjamas ..\'
(We, MUST NEVER FORGET!
how it all started, with those
\'yellow stained cloth stars\'
to identify and BRAND
those, deemed inhuman
and hated, because
\'some\'
dogmatic text, millenniums ago
blamed them
for the murder of a character
labelled
as a deity creator, and \'Father\'
to all of existence
including, those very same Jews!
\'some\'
try to forget, by the logic of that
\'same\'
lore, they worship
how these very same Jews
are also \'HIS\' children...
yeah, what \'Father\' wouldn\'t appreciate
the MASS, attempted Genocide
of \'HIS children\'..
yeah, stuff that up your
self righteous, \'GOOD BOOK\'
you brainwashed zealot morons)
May 15th, 2023 03:22
Just a Series of What ifs And a Maybe
L. B. Mek said:
Amen!
I too, share in that dream of a wish
Hyung
May 15th, 2023 03:05
L. B. Mek said:
Amen!
I too, share in that dream of a wish
Hyung
May 15th, 2023 03:05
Mantis Praying
Parisab said:
For sure women can also be violent and dangerous, but interestingly in literature and film they are usually portrayed as the femme fetal sensual types: and their abusive conduct is minimized: thanks for bringing another dimension to this archetype: was this intentional on Mother’s Day:)?
May 15th, 2023 02:01
Parisab said:
For sure women can also be violent and dangerous, but interestingly in literature and film they are usually portrayed as the femme fetal sensual types: and their abusive conduct is minimized: thanks for bringing another dimension to this archetype: was this intentional on Mother’s Day:)?
May 15th, 2023 02:01
Mantis Praying
Fay Slimm. said:
A haunt of a read Nev but a good reminder that not all smiles are meant to be kind - - shall now watch out more for mantis-types licking their lips before striking.......x
May 15th, 2023 01:38
Fay Slimm. said:
A haunt of a read Nev but a good reminder that not all smiles are meant to be kind - - shall now watch out more for mantis-types licking their lips before striking.......x
May 15th, 2023 01:38
Mantis Praying
orchidee said:
Now KP did this accidentally as she was trying to give me a shave. It\'s not that I won\'t bore you with the details of it, but that they will be too swoony to mention! lol.
May 15th, 2023 01:34
orchidee said:
Now KP did this accidentally as she was trying to give me a shave. It\'s not that I won\'t bore you with the details of it, but that they will be too swoony to mention! lol.
May 15th, 2023 01:34
They Were Nothing But Fools
Goldfinch60 said:
Very intriguing words Neville.
Andy
May 15th, 2023 01:13
Goldfinch60 said:
Very intriguing words Neville.
Andy
May 15th, 2023 01:13
They Were Nothing But Fools
Bella Shepard said:
The old saying \"one man\'s junk is another man\'s treasure\" comes to mind. I suppose we all judge according to our own sense of worth. Loved it!
May 14th, 2023 13:06
Bella Shepard said:
The old saying \"one man\'s junk is another man\'s treasure\" comes to mind. I suppose we all judge according to our own sense of worth. Loved it!
May 14th, 2023 13:06
They Were Nothing But Fools
arqios said:
The genius of our madness is almost always in the public eye. Ayayay...
May 14th, 2023 09:21
arqios said:
The genius of our madness is almost always in the public eye. Ayayay...
May 14th, 2023 09:21
They Were Nothing But Fools
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem invites the reader to reflect on the nature of reality and the value of individual pursuits, while acknowledging the potential for others to view those pursuits as foolish.
May 14th, 2023 05:38
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem invites the reader to reflect on the nature of reality and the value of individual pursuits, while acknowledging the potential for others to view those pursuits as foolish.
May 14th, 2023 05:38
They Were Nothing But Fools
orchidee said:
Another nice poem about KP and I! lol. She knows how to beat an egg, ya know.
May 14th, 2023 05:24
orchidee said:
Another nice poem about KP and I! lol. She knows how to beat an egg, ya know.
May 14th, 2023 05:24
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
MendedFences27 said:
I share your anxiety about where the future will go. Once again, the Hate-mongers are rising.
May 13th, 2023 13:48
MendedFences27 said:
I share your anxiety about where the future will go. Once again, the Hate-mongers are rising.
May 13th, 2023 13:48
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
Jerry Reynolds said:
A fine write, Neville. Nature does not reward children who won\'t learn.
May 13th, 2023 10:30
Jerry Reynolds said:
A fine write, Neville. Nature does not reward children who won\'t learn.
May 13th, 2023 10:30
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
orchidee said:
A sensitive write N - though I don\'t know anything about Smokey R.
May 13th, 2023 10:09
orchidee said:
A sensitive write N - though I don\'t know anything about Smokey R.
May 13th, 2023 10:09
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
Bobby O said:
“What began as a trickle.” Your phrase conjures visceral and tactile image and as you build the story we journey with and we learn. Nice write, great read. You got it going on.
P. S. I took the Title as a play on that famous Smokey Robinson song. “Just like Pagliacci did, I try to keep my sadness hid, smilin’ in the public eye , while in my lonely room I cry”
May 13th, 2023 04:08
Bobby O said:
“What began as a trickle.” Your phrase conjures visceral and tactile image and as you build the story we journey with and we learn. Nice write, great read. You got it going on.
P. S. I took the Title as a play on that famous Smokey Robinson song. “Just like Pagliacci did, I try to keep my sadness hid, smilin’ in the public eye , while in my lonely room I cry”
May 13th, 2023 04:08
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