Comments received on poems by Neville



Woollen Stockings
L. B. Mek said:

... and with the Daughters parents dreaming of a day when she can play the role of a rich - poor man\'s wife, or even settle for the role with cushioned seating in the world of heated rooms, bathed with the hue of computer screens,
a brilliant write my friend,
how sharply your empathetic eyes read the abundant ironies in life

October 9th, 2020 04:35

Woollen Stockings
Goldfinch60 said:

I am sure that the family are so much happier than those sitting behind a desk. Great words Neville.

Andy

October 9th, 2020 00:39

Woollen Stockings
dusk arising said:

Left me with one word in mind, outlined by your piece.

Dignity.

October 8th, 2020 13:55

Woollen Stockings
orchidee said:

A fine write N. Could I meet her?!

October 8th, 2020 06:28

Woollen Stockings
Lorna said:

I\'m with you...... who really are the lucky ones?

October 8th, 2020 05:15

Woollen Stockings
Fay Slimm. said:

You pen a rich encounter with those who make livings from simple endeavours which when seen stay long in the memory - this has to be a tale from your foreign travels mon ami and rightly you write up the difference in life-styles..... a real little gem of a read ..........x

October 8th, 2020 04:37

Blue Light
L. B. Mek said:

there is a gross side to me that reads your words and hints at the use of the \'blue\' in the light of her arm that just saved itself from a stroking injury - vein, by sheer luck,
I will refuse to verify any meaning to my meandering wonderings on this erm \'touchy\' topic...
and to think you utilised the purest of poetic nature for your chosen form, oh the ancient\'s would\'ve blown their haiku veins 🤦‍♂️

October 8th, 2020 03:31

Blue Light
Dove said:

Well certainly sounds ,
Psychedelic devil den,
Someone shooting up ,

Haiku Guess , lol





October 7th, 2020 10:33

Blue Light
Laura🌻 said:

Neville,

A very interesting and
intriguing poem...
as most of your writings are.

Hmmm...
Perhaps that ‘stroke of luck’
of missing
‘the vein in her arm’
was due to her poor vision.

Laura🌻


October 7th, 2020 08:10

Blue Light
Goldfinch60 said:

It’s good the lights blue
But was it flashing on off
Hope it was stable.

Andy

October 7th, 2020 04:57

Blue Light
dusk arising said:

Arithmetic and poetry should be kept on separate pages... grrrrr

quite silly really
now i come to think of it
a haiku hola

October 7th, 2020 03:27

Blue Light
Fay Slimm. said:

Apart from concluding the obvious I confess I am all at sea with this intriguing 5 7 5 Nev. - -- I maybe obtuse but its message keeps needling me - - a really good haiku but hey - - give me a clue .......................x

October 7th, 2020 02:48

Blue Light
orchidee said:

Ohh themes like this make me shudder.
I heard some things at a self-help group - some in \'worse\' or deeper problems than me.
If she cut the blue (vein) would it be so bad as cutting the red (artery)? Veins take blood back to the heart; arteries take them away from the heart. This is how I see this. Bit of biology there!
I was a brain surgeon once, ya know. I couldn\'t find some brains. They were pea-sized in some folk. I mean, separate from the pituitary gland, which is pea-sized, I think. Staggers back in amazement at my dazzling knowledge?! lol.

October 7th, 2020 02:19

Blue Light
Michael Edwards said:

First Goldy and now another 575 - I really must write more of these - love this one Neville.

October 7th, 2020 02:12

A Solitary Passing
Laura🌻 said:

Neville,

A top notch write.
Writing in the first person immerses this reader into your subject’s plight. It makes me feels like I want to be there to comfort and ease the pain in some way.
All I can do now is to offer prayers to all who have lost their lives in such dire situations.

Laura🌻


October 6th, 2020 19:36

A Solitary Passing
Dove said:

Such lonely sadness! Well written!

October 6th, 2020 17:01

A Solitary Passing
dusk arising said:

Every young recruit of every cause should be made to completely understand what you have written today and to meditate upon it for it opens up so many otherwise hidden aspects of conflicts consequence.

I have written upon similar lines before and at this time of year we prepare for the 11th Nov when no doubt i and others shall air words of consequence again.

October 6th, 2020 07:21

Attrition
orchidee said:

Ya can\'t beat a bit of attriting, if that\'s even a word?!

October 6th, 2020 06:24

A Solitary Passing
orchidee said:

Ya can\'t beat flies - or can ya? Swot \'em then!

October 6th, 2020 06:16

A Solitary Passing
Fay Slimm. said:

The read gave me a picture of the dire situation when on battlefields soldiers often die slowly and yes with flies as their only companions - - a most solitary passing indeed is that end which comes during war and one we must never forget. Hope this is near to the message your haunt of a write meant my caring friend - - if not then I stand to be corrected and willingly .........x

October 6th, 2020 05:27

A Solitary Passing
Lorna said:

Neville - really beautiful this one..... it\'s sad but I find it so peaceful........

October 6th, 2020 04:32

A Solitary Passing
Goldfinch60 said:

But I am with you in Spirit, preferably Laphroaig.😈😈😈.

October 6th, 2020 04:27

Attrition
L. B. Mek said:

the absurd chain of haphazardly circumstantial events that manipulated a simmering but stable Europe into the bloodshed of horror that was WW1 is quite simply: mind boggling, to read it now is like reading some far-fetched plot of a fictional story...
only it\'s not fictional and the horrors and consequences are sill prevalent a century later...
even more horrifyingly: is the haunting realisation that humanity has learnt little from having experienced a century of two horrific world wars...
Attrition, indeed: I smile at people\'s notion that Hell is an ideology reserved for the afterlife...
you\'ve penned a wonderfully worded empathetic write, on a subject that triggers me easily

October 6th, 2020 04:05

Attrition
Goldfinch60 said:

So true Neville.

\"We will remember them\"

Andy

October 6th, 2020 00:19

Attrition
Suresh said:

Ever since I saw the Series, the images are imprinted on my mind. Your few words have jarred this reality back to life.
Thanks

October 5th, 2020 15:58

Attrition
orchidee said:

A fine write N.

October 5th, 2020 09:50

Attrition
Fay Slimm. said:

Oh what a meaningful title to your reminder of what not to do - - --
- -to use this method of wearing down by constant attack must take minds of solid unfeeling rock-hard determination to conquer and to control - -- a heart-wrenching read my dear Nev.

October 5th, 2020 08:05

Mr. Mediocre
L. B. Mek said:

needs to be read a few times for its layers to be unravelled,
an abstract portrait
of a personality trait
we all unfortunately - know far too well,
great write my friend

October 5th, 2020 03:46

Mr. Mediocre
Goldfinch60 said:

Some very profound words Neville but mediocrity is a challenge to all and with words like yours it has been overcome.

Andy

October 4th, 2020 23:47

Mr. Mediocre
Dove said:

Dear M & M,

Being ordinary is nothin new
sadness seeps just like dew

just like dew drops softly blend
upon a rose’s petals ends

So shall your melancholy fade
And your sadness retrograde

Love is but a day away
May it find you today

May your hurts be released
And new friendships find you peace




October 4th, 2020 19:03



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