Linger
spilleronsheet said:

So emotional and so poignant
The words brought tears
And so many memories lingered beside
To those whom I lost
I wonder whether they are happy where they are
I wonder if they are watching me
Such a mourning
I remember my grand parents
With whom most of my childhood memories are embed in my mind
I am pretty sure they are watching me
Well penned dear Neville
The poetry felt so personal to me
Thank you for sharing

November 23rd, 2021 14:52

An All Too Certain Falsity
Garth Rakumakoe said:

How at times you say so much about a theme or subject without saying much is something I admire in your writing style Neville. You do minimalism so well and and so revealingly. This is another such piece. It\'s a rare quality, and a form of craft to marvel at. Thank you for gracing us yet again.


November 23rd, 2021 06:13

Linger
L. B. Mek said:

\'I just
could not find the right words
to place

inside
this mourning song
for safe keeping,\'..
(how acutely, you portray
that need, to feel
like our Time spent
at another\'s side, won\'t
be considered, so miniscule
and steeped in irrelevance, in seconds
after, that abrupt goodbye
of our raked-raw, worded emotions..)
subtly poignant, a heart wrenching depiction
of the person in the relationship
who, lingers
in the embers of the ruins, long abandoned...
simply beautiful, dear masterful Poet
love the unassuming flow and accessible wording
one of your very Best!
\'in my humble opinion\'

November 23rd, 2021 05:52

An All Too Certain Falsity
L. B. Mek said:

love your accessible wording
and blunt - poetic transparency, dear Poet
\'sadly, I have experienced your words
from both sides, of the blame assigning bridge;
where, we choose to label - quickly
so-as to bottle
and limit
the debris, from what
we once deemed, indestructible
that need to assert, blame
to - A, side...
while in reality
the gradients, in our relationship\'s - demise
was as equal, as the attraction
we both gave-in, too
knowing
beyond those aesthetic, tethers
we really
had little foundation, to build-on
in the first place...!\'

November 22nd, 2021 06:49

An All Too Certain Falsity
Doggerel Dave said:

Thanks Nev for a lesson all should see and cogitate upon:
\'Love\' a term used with free abandon by many who don\'t know it\'s meaning.
Have i just just mounted an old hobby horse of mine....again...?

November 22nd, 2021 05:43

An All Too Certain Falsity
Fay Slimm. said:

Being loved the best is an aim of so many who need constant assurance of value etc - but to be taken for granted can sting the most........ some deep thoughts in this read today Nev. - - hope I have done its message justice in this short review.....................x

November 22nd, 2021 03:28

An All Too Certain Falsity
Goldfinch60 said:

Love or thoughts of love if not explained can be so painful Neville.

Andy

November 22nd, 2021 02:44

An All Too Familiar Modus
Doggerel Dave said:

Where was yer British reserve? Well for them as hasn\'t got it , a cautionary tale.

November 21st, 2021 19:53

An All Too Familiar Modus
dusk arising said:

You\'ve been reading my diaries again Neville.

November 21st, 2021 05:55

An All Too Familiar Modus
Fay Slimm. said:

Seems often the misled mislead those who being vulnerable believe too easily - - great example here Nev. of finding out a bit too late that all is not fair in love or war................x

November 21st, 2021 04:28

An All Too Familiar Modus
Caring dove said:

Some people don’t care enough , and just think about themselves in a selfish way … not caring about others feelings

November 21st, 2021 02:19

Unsincerely Yours
Accidental Poet said:

But maybe she smiles to herself at thought of him. 🤔

November 20th, 2021 10:09

The Wreck of Our Lady
SureshG said:

Whether it be a small boat, a yacht, a ship, a bungalow, a mansion, a car, a truck or even a toy either beached, or by the side of the road, in a junkyard or even in the attic, they all have a story to tell, but they all will need a poet such as yourself to give them that last hurrah

November 20th, 2021 09:21

The Wreck of Our Lady
Paul Bell said:

All ships go to that watery grave at some point, though some go quicker.
There is a great tradition in Britain in restoring old ships, if possible. I take it this ship is too far gone.

November 20th, 2021 08:02

The Wreck of Our Lady
Doggerel Dave said:

Orchi is obsessed with these women he believes you keep throwing up onto MPS - should go without saying they are all, all of them, boats in various states of disrepair.... I have at home a small (4 in) piece of driftwood, found on a beach, smoothed by years of immersion, eaten out by long dead boring thingys and one broken brass screw embedded in its body... Should I do a poem in competition? Nah - not me....You do what you do best, Nev.

November 20th, 2021 03:17