Comments received on poems by Neville
The Edge of Golden
L. B. Mek said:
sadly, nowadays
for a select majority, their passion is reserved
for those political or social activism
victimhood triggers..
and so
I suspect, they\'ll read these words
that you masterfully and succinctly
distilled into poetic brevity
then see your age restriction, categorisation
and reduce: this \'lived-in-truth\'
worded with a poet\'s gift for relatability
as a depiction of risqué playfulness;
and not
pointedly, more meaningfully
as an inked recollection
of experienced true love being actualised
into a physical expression
of sensuality, sincerity and loyalty;
where innately heightened
tantalised, fingertip nerves of spirituality
play those piano keys on flesh
to produce, a melody
of sensation\'s electrifying goosebumps;
a feat, only achieved
when the act of sex, has more meaning
than merely
sating biologically engraved mating cravings
and the excreting of stimulated liquids;
where literally: magically
at that time and in that moment
two people - become one, willingly and wholeheartedly
and impassioned, oh - so, much more satisfyingly;
a wondrously cathartic, artform
of physical and spiritual synchronicity, that few
get to experience this days
where blue pills and morning-after pills
mean, this gifted superpower
to experience
\'edge of golden\': nirvana on earth
as blissful affirmation
to all things, unique about our existence
is wasted, pitifully
as just another aspect of humanity
we take for granted, far - too, easily...
June 7th, 2021 04:40
L. B. Mek said:
sadly, nowadays
for a select majority, their passion is reserved
for those political or social activism
victimhood triggers..
and so
I suspect, they\'ll read these words
that you masterfully and succinctly
distilled into poetic brevity
then see your age restriction, categorisation
and reduce: this \'lived-in-truth\'
worded with a poet\'s gift for relatability
as a depiction of risqué playfulness;
and not
pointedly, more meaningfully
as an inked recollection
of experienced true love being actualised
into a physical expression
of sensuality, sincerity and loyalty;
where innately heightened
tantalised, fingertip nerves of spirituality
play those piano keys on flesh
to produce, a melody
of sensation\'s electrifying goosebumps;
a feat, only achieved
when the act of sex, has more meaning
than merely
sating biologically engraved mating cravings
and the excreting of stimulated liquids;
where literally: magically
at that time and in that moment
two people - become one, willingly and wholeheartedly
and impassioned, oh - so, much more satisfyingly;
a wondrously cathartic, artform
of physical and spiritual synchronicity, that few
get to experience this days
where blue pills and morning-after pills
mean, this gifted superpower
to experience
\'edge of golden\': nirvana on earth
as blissful affirmation
to all things, unique about our existence
is wasted, pitifully
as just another aspect of humanity
we take for granted, far - too, easily...
June 7th, 2021 04:40
Cactus Days
Saxon Crow said:
Yoy should have said fucknoff you little c***. That would be a different poem haha
June 7th, 2021 04:01
Saxon Crow said:
Yoy should have said fucknoff you little c***. That would be a different poem haha
June 7th, 2021 04:01
As Yet Unforgiven
L. B. Mek said:
(sorry my friend, I just read your insightful shorty
and these words below exploded from somewhere
deep inside me, I didn\'t know existed
I can\'t thank you enough)..
its those repeated mistakes, we make
that perpetuate, our cycle of bad luck
to add to that hipping pile
of regretted: bad choices
that we can never forgive, and thus
we seldom acknowledge
yet perversely
hardly ever allow ourselves
to forget and shed, instead
carrying them
from one splintered reflection of self
to another, distorted mirrored impression
lost, endlessly dwelling
within that self loathing cocoon, blind
to all those fleeting possibilities
for healing and growth
we allow, to pass-us-by: frequently - wastefully..
June 7th, 2021 04:00
L. B. Mek said:
(sorry my friend, I just read your insightful shorty
and these words below exploded from somewhere
deep inside me, I didn\'t know existed
I can\'t thank you enough)..
its those repeated mistakes, we make
that perpetuate, our cycle of bad luck
to add to that hipping pile
of regretted: bad choices
that we can never forgive, and thus
we seldom acknowledge
yet perversely
hardly ever allow ourselves
to forget and shed, instead
carrying them
from one splintered reflection of self
to another, distorted mirrored impression
lost, endlessly dwelling
within that self loathing cocoon, blind
to all those fleeting possibilities
for healing and growth
we allow, to pass-us-by: frequently - wastefully..
June 7th, 2021 04:00
The Edge of Golden
Goldfinch60 said:
If you race too quickly you may well be too tired at the end of the race to give pleasure Neville. \"Slowly, slowly, catchee monkee\"
Andy
June 7th, 2021 00:12
Goldfinch60 said:
If you race too quickly you may well be too tired at the end of the race to give pleasure Neville. \"Slowly, slowly, catchee monkee\"
Andy
June 7th, 2021 00:12
The Edge of Golden
Jerry Reynolds said:
Sun\'s out here, Neville but this made it a bit brighter.
June 6th, 2021 14:02
Jerry Reynolds said:
Sun\'s out here, Neville but this made it a bit brighter.
June 6th, 2021 14:02
The Edge of Golden
Trenz Pruca said:
Thank you for bringing back to memory what has been long gone for me.
June 6th, 2021 13:09
Trenz Pruca said:
Thank you for bringing back to memory what has been long gone for me.
June 6th, 2021 13:09
The Edge of Golden
orchidee said:
She seems a bit feisty this lass. Should I give her a miss? lol.
June 6th, 2021 09:52
orchidee said:
She seems a bit feisty this lass. Should I give her a miss? lol.
June 6th, 2021 09:52
The Edge of Golden
Fay Slimm. said:
Another few lines of spice Nev. to brighten a sunless Sunday - -smiling big now so thanks in bunches . The ways raced to pleasures of love are truly gilded with touch.
June 6th, 2021 07:41
Fay Slimm. said:
Another few lines of spice Nev. to brighten a sunless Sunday - -smiling big now so thanks in bunches . The ways raced to pleasures of love are truly gilded with touch.
June 6th, 2021 07:41
As Yet Unforgiven
Goldfinch60 said:
True Neville, we must always move on in our lives.
Andy
June 6th, 2021 00:14
Goldfinch60 said:
True Neville, we must always move on in our lives.
Andy
June 6th, 2021 00:14
As Yet Unforgiven
Michael Edwards said:
Love this little \'un - a mirror reversed.
June 5th, 2021 16:01
Michael Edwards said:
Love this little \'un - a mirror reversed.
June 5th, 2021 16:01
As Yet Unforgiven
Doggerel Dave said:
Have to forgive yourself one day Neville - no point in not doing so. Finito, over...can\'t be undone...
June 5th, 2021 08:15
Doggerel Dave said:
Have to forgive yourself one day Neville - no point in not doing so. Finito, over...can\'t be undone...
June 5th, 2021 08:15
As Yet Unforgiven
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well done, Neville. I dearly love the edge of this or that.
June 5th, 2021 07:52
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well done, Neville. I dearly love the edge of this or that.
June 5th, 2021 07:52
As Yet Unforgiven
dusk arising said:
Really good use of the double negative in that last line. This piece wins for me in so many ways.
Great mind-play you leave your reader with here too.
Excellent writing Neville and a joy to read.
June 5th, 2021 06:19
dusk arising said:
Really good use of the double negative in that last line. This piece wins for me in so many ways.
Great mind-play you leave your reader with here too.
Excellent writing Neville and a joy to read.
June 5th, 2021 06:19
As Yet Unforgiven
Fay Slimm. said:
Two strong negatives make that final line unmissable Nev --- blame the cracked mirror - if you dare - - after reading this three-liner gem........x
June 5th, 2021 04:53
Fay Slimm. said:
Two strong negatives make that final line unmissable Nev --- blame the cracked mirror - if you dare - - after reading this three-liner gem........x
June 5th, 2021 04:53
A Precious Drought
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful memories formed by your wonderful words Neville.
Andy
June 5th, 2021 01:11
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful memories formed by your wonderful words Neville.
Andy
June 5th, 2021 01:11
A Precious Drought
myself and me said:
The weeping wisteria took me away. May the cracked ground be flooded by the rain.
June 4th, 2021 21:04
myself and me said:
The weeping wisteria took me away. May the cracked ground be flooded by the rain.
June 4th, 2021 21:04
A Precious Drought
Laura🌻 said:
Neville,
Your poem has made me think of so many moments...especially of days gone by.
After reading this poem and some of the comments, after my long absence due to health reasons, my interpretation is a bit different than some of the other poets’. I’ve personalized and internalized this wonderful write of yours. It has given me a healthy dose of what is to come. I shall accept and welcome each day with a smile.
Thank you.
Laura🌻
June 4th, 2021 16:13
Laura🌻 said:
Neville,
Your poem has made me think of so many moments...especially of days gone by.
After reading this poem and some of the comments, after my long absence due to health reasons, my interpretation is a bit different than some of the other poets’. I’ve personalized and internalized this wonderful write of yours. It has given me a healthy dose of what is to come. I shall accept and welcome each day with a smile.
Thank you.
Laura🌻
June 4th, 2021 16:13
A Precious Drought
MendedFences27 said:
Sweet, heartfelt, and glorious words.
May your \"parched\" \"garden\" forever flourish and her \"tears\" disappear.
This poem begins sadly yet ends gloriously, somewhat magically. Who would have thought of \"wisteria...weeping amethysts\"?
Like this format you have been using lately. Is it now a signature thing with you? - Phil A
June 4th, 2021 11:01
MendedFences27 said:
Sweet, heartfelt, and glorious words.
May your \"parched\" \"garden\" forever flourish and her \"tears\" disappear.
This poem begins sadly yet ends gloriously, somewhat magically. Who would have thought of \"wisteria...weeping amethysts\"?
Like this format you have been using lately. Is it now a signature thing with you? - Phil A
June 4th, 2021 11:01
A Precious Drought
Fay Slimm. said:
Fantastic imagery you use for this reminder that love when spent leaves behind some wonderful memories - - - -- - \" the wisteria is weeping amethysts\" is a phrase to
make me sigh for amigo ...............x
June 4th, 2021 08:35
Fay Slimm. said:
Fantastic imagery you use for this reminder that love when spent leaves behind some wonderful memories - - - -- - \" the wisteria is weeping amethysts\" is a phrase to
make me sigh for amigo ...............x
June 4th, 2021 08:35
A Precious Drought
Jerry Reynolds said:
Beautifully written, Neville. Powerfully felt.
June 4th, 2021 08:12
Jerry Reynolds said:
Beautifully written, Neville. Powerfully felt.
June 4th, 2021 08:12
A Precious Drought
Doggerel Dave said:
Did she receive this message Neville, or similar with same sentiment?
\"Hope so - someone to whom it belongs should have this , apart from MPS.
June 4th, 2021 07:58
Doggerel Dave said:
Did she receive this message Neville, or similar with same sentiment?
\"Hope so - someone to whom it belongs should have this , apart from MPS.
June 4th, 2021 07:58
A Precious Drought
L. B. Mek said:
\'Our garden
may well be parched
…
But the wisteria
is weeping amethysts\'...
(we never miss our water
till the well runs dry
we never miss our woman
till they say: goodbye...)
brilliantly emotive, such a relatable wording
of a cherished love, being expressed proud!
treasured more: for having been grazed
by that harsh bitterness of a lost love\'s, drought..
a great read
imbued with subtle nuances of soothing as well
I enjoyed this, on such an intricately private level
my friend, I thank you!
June 4th, 2021 05:44
L. B. Mek said:
\'Our garden
may well be parched
…
But the wisteria
is weeping amethysts\'...
(we never miss our water
till the well runs dry
we never miss our woman
till they say: goodbye...)
brilliantly emotive, such a relatable wording
of a cherished love, being expressed proud!
treasured more: for having been grazed
by that harsh bitterness of a lost love\'s, drought..
a great read
imbued with subtle nuances of soothing as well
I enjoyed this, on such an intricately private level
my friend, I thank you!
June 4th, 2021 05:44
A Precious Drought
Saxon Crow said:
Nev your words totally get to me. Everytime. Faved
June 4th, 2021 04:40
Saxon Crow said:
Nev your words totally get to me. Everytime. Faved
June 4th, 2021 04:40
A Precious Drought
dusk arising said:
Violet shaded tears of amethyst treasure long loving moments of yesteryear. Parched days, robbed of youthful vigour, rewarded by the rainfall of rich memory and here the amethyst treasure can be reached out and grasped in the flesh.
June 4th, 2021 04:06
dusk arising said:
Violet shaded tears of amethyst treasure long loving moments of yesteryear. Parched days, robbed of youthful vigour, rewarded by the rainfall of rich memory and here the amethyst treasure can be reached out and grasped in the flesh.
June 4th, 2021 04:06
A Precious Drought
orchidee said:
You brought that rain to us today?
Someone says \'Ooh, it\'s been dry lately\'. Then the rain turns up before you know it! lol.
Is this lass sad over something?!
June 4th, 2021 04:04
orchidee said:
You brought that rain to us today?
Someone says \'Ooh, it\'s been dry lately\'. Then the rain turns up before you know it! lol.
Is this lass sad over something?!
June 4th, 2021 04:04
Sheen
MendedFences27 said:
\"A stolen kiss\" might bring the \"sheen\" back to a blind person\'s eyes. It might also imply \"a seed of a soul\" that otherwise would seem missing. That \"sheen\" becomes mighty important if the eyes belong to a loved one.
Or maybe I just read the whole thing wrong.
The expression of warmness between the two, the unexpectedness of the incident, and the closing line are what drove me to that conclusion. I hope I didn\'t misread you.
And if I did your poem is still masterful in it\'s use of similes for \"sheen\" and clever in how it\'s used to create the moment of the \"kiss.\" - Phil A
June 3rd, 2021 19:35
MendedFences27 said:
\"A stolen kiss\" might bring the \"sheen\" back to a blind person\'s eyes. It might also imply \"a seed of a soul\" that otherwise would seem missing. That \"sheen\" becomes mighty important if the eyes belong to a loved one.
Or maybe I just read the whole thing wrong.
The expression of warmness between the two, the unexpectedness of the incident, and the closing line are what drove me to that conclusion. I hope I didn\'t misread you.
And if I did your poem is still masterful in it\'s use of similes for \"sheen\" and clever in how it\'s used to create the moment of the \"kiss.\" - Phil A
June 3rd, 2021 19:35
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