Comments received on poems by Neville
Little Shepherdesses
FineB said:
Hi Neville,
Thank you for an enchanting write.
I might have bumped into your
shepherdesses last week on my travels last week.
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
November 1st, 2020 13:11
FineB said:
Hi Neville,
Thank you for an enchanting write.
I might have bumped into your
shepherdesses last week on my travels last week.
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
November 1st, 2020 13:11
Little Shepherdesses
Fay Slimm. said:
Ha - - for some reason this write reminded me of the olde ballad - -\"Nyphs and Shepherds\" being told repeatedly to \"Come Away -\" - I admit though that those naughty shepherdesses were a bit tempting - -- a big smile raised after this read today Nev........ fank u ever so.......x
November 1st, 2020 06:40
Fay Slimm. said:
Ha - - for some reason this write reminded me of the olde ballad - -\"Nyphs and Shepherds\" being told repeatedly to \"Come Away -\" - I admit though that those naughty shepherdesses were a bit tempting - -- a big smile raised after this read today Nev........ fank u ever so.......x
November 1st, 2020 06:40
Little Shepherdesses
dusk arising said:
What a lovely bright and dare i say \'jolly\' poem. Great light hearted spirit about it all which is refreshing in todays climate. Good length and uniformity.... to paraphrase you \'it sits on the page very well\'.
November 1st, 2020 06:29
dusk arising said:
What a lovely bright and dare i say \'jolly\' poem. Great light hearted spirit about it all which is refreshing in todays climate. Good length and uniformity.... to paraphrase you \'it sits on the page very well\'.
November 1st, 2020 06:29
Little Shepherdesses
orchidee said:
They having fun?! A roll in the hay? Glad some people are! Fido won\'t let me \'frolic\'. He\'s a sheepdog in disguise today, gone to spy on them! heehee.
November 1st, 2020 05:33
orchidee said:
They having fun?! A roll in the hay? Glad some people are! Fido won\'t let me \'frolic\'. He\'s a sheepdog in disguise today, gone to spy on them! heehee.
November 1st, 2020 05:33
Innerness
Dove said:
Pretty cool write! Wilderness within
sounds like fun to explore!
Are your gates open?
I Think your shades are pretty cool!
Me thinks you need sun tan lotion
October 29th, 2020 22:04
Dove said:
Pretty cool write! Wilderness within
sounds like fun to explore!
Are your gates open?
I Think your shades are pretty cool!
Me thinks you need sun tan lotion
October 29th, 2020 22:04
Innerness
L. B. Mek said:
\'Where you would have boundaries
there is a burn mark on my skin\'
Brilliant!
October 29th, 2020 04:45
L. B. Mek said:
\'Where you would have boundaries
there is a burn mark on my skin\'
Brilliant!
October 29th, 2020 04:45
Innerness
Goldfinch60 said:
Within ourselves is a vast wilderness and wildness that can take us to such wonderful places in our minds and hearts.
Andy
October 29th, 2020 01:54
Goldfinch60 said:
Within ourselves is a vast wilderness and wildness that can take us to such wonderful places in our minds and hearts.
Andy
October 29th, 2020 01:54
Innerness
orchidee said:
Could I meet her, or is she all yours? I barge in without asking sometimes, it seems. lol.
October 28th, 2020 05:17
orchidee said:
Could I meet her, or is she all yours? I barge in without asking sometimes, it seems. lol.
October 28th, 2020 05:17
Innerness
dusk arising said:
In my case the world within would be more aptly described as a thicket. Overgrown with the weeds of lost causes seeded by the fallen fruits of past desire.... but enough of me.
Tell her not to mark her would be boundaries with poured candle wax upon your tortured flesh sir. For your body is a temple, fallen to ruin maybe, but still deserving of respect.
Oh the games you play with my mind, capable of such perverse yet simple thought. Another intriguing write.
October 28th, 2020 05:02
dusk arising said:
In my case the world within would be more aptly described as a thicket. Overgrown with the weeds of lost causes seeded by the fallen fruits of past desire.... but enough of me.
Tell her not to mark her would be boundaries with poured candle wax upon your tortured flesh sir. For your body is a temple, fallen to ruin maybe, but still deserving of respect.
Oh the games you play with my mind, capable of such perverse yet simple thought. Another intriguing write.
October 28th, 2020 05:02
Innerness
Fay Slimm. said:
Wildness inside - that holds a truth when boundaries are shattered by boundless passion......... what an invite when all outside feels confined to tame................. brilliant write again Nev.
October 28th, 2020 04:49
Fay Slimm. said:
Wildness inside - that holds a truth when boundaries are shattered by boundless passion......... what an invite when all outside feels confined to tame................. brilliant write again Nev.
October 28th, 2020 04:49
Hiding Behind New Dust
Goldfinch60 said:
When we remove the dust from our lives we always see what beauty we had during that life.
Andy
October 28th, 2020 01:46
Goldfinch60 said:
When we remove the dust from our lives we always see what beauty we had during that life.
Andy
October 28th, 2020 01:46
Hiding Behind New Dust
Fay Slimm. said:
Beauty tho\' dust-trapped finds ways through to let shine its attraction and to whomsoever - as does this write dear Nev. with such a spark of beguile behind every line.
October 27th, 2020 11:02
Fay Slimm. said:
Beauty tho\' dust-trapped finds ways through to let shine its attraction and to whomsoever - as does this write dear Nev. with such a spark of beguile behind every line.
October 27th, 2020 11:02
Hiding Behind New Dust
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
Blame me teacher - one said to us \'Sing loud, so as to dislodge the dust from the ceiling\'. So I did - and not stopped yet! lol. I\'m covered in dust now. (Do shut up, Orchi. lol).
October 27th, 2020 08:58
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
Blame me teacher - one said to us \'Sing loud, so as to dislodge the dust from the ceiling\'. So I did - and not stopped yet! lol. I\'m covered in dust now. (Do shut up, Orchi. lol).
October 27th, 2020 08:58
Hiding Behind New Dust
dusk arising said:
This is a class thing i\'m sure.... the only dust i got was on my Airfix kits dangling from the ceiling. The ones my dear brother used to love to aim pieces of folded cardboard at, propelled by an ack ack elastic band.
October 27th, 2020 07:03
dusk arising said:
This is a class thing i\'m sure.... the only dust i got was on my Airfix kits dangling from the ceiling. The ones my dear brother used to love to aim pieces of folded cardboard at, propelled by an ack ack elastic band.
October 27th, 2020 07:03
Beyond Broke
BoxMyHeart said:
Reminds me of a woman I know. Stubborn with a tattoo of honest on her body.
October 25th, 2020 02:48
BoxMyHeart said:
Reminds me of a woman I know. Stubborn with a tattoo of honest on her body.
October 25th, 2020 02:48
Beyond Broke
Goldfinch60 said:
Delusion is a disease which can be mended with the medicine of love.
Andy
October 25th, 2020 01:33
Goldfinch60 said:
Delusion is a disease which can be mended with the medicine of love.
Andy
October 25th, 2020 01:33
Beyond Broke
dusk arising said:
Many out there are still in need of a repair kit in their later years. I was once deluded enough to consider my heart a repair shop.
Disallusioned, i threw away my tools.
October 24th, 2020 18:01
dusk arising said:
Many out there are still in need of a repair kit in their later years. I was once deluded enough to consider my heart a repair shop.
Disallusioned, i threw away my tools.
October 24th, 2020 18:01
Beyond Broke
Fay Slimm. said:
Seriously good this concise diagnosis of delusion my friend.............the two final words - \"needy and broken\" brought sad heartache that this state is so familiar today.
October 24th, 2020 11:58
Fay Slimm. said:
Seriously good this concise diagnosis of delusion my friend.............the two final words - \"needy and broken\" brought sad heartache that this state is so familiar today.
October 24th, 2020 11:58
Beyond Broke
orchidee said:
Where ya meeting all these gals? Or is the same gal each time?! lol. I gotta \'get me coat\', \'get out more,\' and meet some of \'em!
October 24th, 2020 11:09
orchidee said:
Where ya meeting all these gals? Or is the same gal each time?! lol. I gotta \'get me coat\', \'get out more,\' and meet some of \'em!
October 24th, 2020 11:09
Los Echoes
Goldfinch60 said:
Those moments in time gave me some wonderful memories when my lover was by my side but now on my own I am becoming a different person and seeming to become \"free without guilt\".
Andy
October 21st, 2020 00:03
Goldfinch60 said:
Those moments in time gave me some wonderful memories when my lover was by my side but now on my own I am becoming a different person and seeming to become \"free without guilt\".
Andy
October 21st, 2020 00:03
Los Echoes
MendedFences27 said:
\"Echoes\" of bygone days, now blessed with the freedom of maturity, what perhaps was complicated is now unbound. What was unreachable can now be attained. What were \"just lost moments in time\" can now become moments of fulfillment.
\"Do we,\" \"does it,\" and \"do we,\" again seem like \"echoes\" from those \"lost moments.\"
Beginning and ending on the same refrain brings the concept full circle, and adds another slice of \"Echo.\" A very clever poem, well written and expressed. A retrospective self-inquiry. Made me ponder my own past relations. - Phil A.
October 20th, 2020 14:58
MendedFences27 said:
\"Echoes\" of bygone days, now blessed with the freedom of maturity, what perhaps was complicated is now unbound. What was unreachable can now be attained. What were \"just lost moments in time\" can now become moments of fulfillment.
\"Do we,\" \"does it,\" and \"do we,\" again seem like \"echoes\" from those \"lost moments.\"
Beginning and ending on the same refrain brings the concept full circle, and adds another slice of \"Echo.\" A very clever poem, well written and expressed. A retrospective self-inquiry. Made me ponder my own past relations. - Phil A.
October 20th, 2020 14:58
Los Echoes
dusk arising said:
Reading others poetry we create a meaning from the familiar in our life.
Today i read this as a driver sat in a waiting room whilst his wife fought for her life in another room after a motor accident. The driver feeling very humble and wishing he could exchange places.
Well that\'s where you took me today. I felt this was written from the edge of feelings. Intriguing and stimulating for my remaining few grey cells.
October 20th, 2020 14:47
dusk arising said:
Reading others poetry we create a meaning from the familiar in our life.
Today i read this as a driver sat in a waiting room whilst his wife fought for her life in another room after a motor accident. The driver feeling very humble and wishing he could exchange places.
Well that\'s where you took me today. I felt this was written from the edge of feelings. Intriguing and stimulating for my remaining few grey cells.
October 20th, 2020 14:47
Los Echoes
orchidee said:
Someone having fun? Glad someone is, cos Fido won\'t let me! lol.
October 20th, 2020 07:01
orchidee said:
Someone having fun? Glad someone is, cos Fido won\'t let me! lol.
October 20th, 2020 07:01
Los Echoes
Fay Slimm. said:
Freeing feelings from guilt makes former clandestine days full of meaning - - another beguiling poetic situation to contemplate Nev. - and composed so very well .
October 20th, 2020 05:20
Fay Slimm. said:
Freeing feelings from guilt makes former clandestine days full of meaning - - another beguiling poetic situation to contemplate Nev. - and composed so very well .
October 20th, 2020 05:20
Waving at Dolphins
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful rhyme and tone, immersive imagery and crisp clear metaphors,
effortlessly capturing the whimsy in the idyllic scene of carefree childhood it depicts;
such write\'s could easily be tinged by the grating notes of envy - unknowingly, when viewed through eyes that have lived long enough to know the bitterness of regret,
another brilliant write my oh so talented friend!
October 17th, 2020 03:48
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful rhyme and tone, immersive imagery and crisp clear metaphors,
effortlessly capturing the whimsy in the idyllic scene of carefree childhood it depicts;
such write\'s could easily be tinged by the grating notes of envy - unknowingly, when viewed through eyes that have lived long enough to know the bitterness of regret,
another brilliant write my oh so talented friend!
October 17th, 2020 03:48
Waving at Dolphins
Goldfinch60 said:
I was taken to that place by the sea with your words Neville, thank you,
Andy
October 17th, 2020 00:39
Goldfinch60 said:
I was taken to that place by the sea with your words Neville, thank you,
Andy
October 17th, 2020 00:39
Waving at Dolphins
Fay Slimm. said:
The calm of this poemed scene passes into a harbouring dance such as I see on days like these in my neck of the woods - sun and your \"tame and tireless waves\" lapping in harmony with little boats - - - - - - a truly inspiring piece of writing mon ami.............x
October 16th, 2020 06:24
Fay Slimm. said:
The calm of this poemed scene passes into a harbouring dance such as I see on days like these in my neck of the woods - sun and your \"tame and tireless waves\" lapping in harmony with little boats - - - - - - a truly inspiring piece of writing mon ami.............x
October 16th, 2020 06:24
Waving at Dolphins
dusk arising said:
Picture me, sat on the quayside seeing this exactly as you describe, obligatory spliff between my fingers lest i should be blind to this vision. A smile of contentment across my hungry mouth as the munchies begin to nag.
Took me into a fanciful state of mind as was once so accessible from a certain abuse. But I was there and yes I can picture your playfully happy scene in my minds eye.
October 16th, 2020 05:56
dusk arising said:
Picture me, sat on the quayside seeing this exactly as you describe, obligatory spliff between my fingers lest i should be blind to this vision. A smile of contentment across my hungry mouth as the munchies begin to nag.
Took me into a fanciful state of mind as was once so accessible from a certain abuse. But I was there and yes I can picture your playfully happy scene in my minds eye.
October 16th, 2020 05:56
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