Comments received on poems by Neville
What Do You Drive
dusk arising said:
I can hear that baritone sax solo..... and the coloured girls say \'do da do - dad doo dad doo\' etc
Feels odd writing \'coloured\' in 2019
The song by Lou Reed was actually about a transvestite friend of his so maybe the \'lady\' in your piece did u a favour being gone. But i don\'t know which way you swing LOL.
February 20th, 2019 07:52
dusk arising said:
I can hear that baritone sax solo..... and the coloured girls say \'do da do - dad doo dad doo\' etc
Feels odd writing \'coloured\' in 2019
The song by Lou Reed was actually about a transvestite friend of his so maybe the \'lady\' in your piece did u a favour being gone. But i don\'t know which way you swing LOL.
February 20th, 2019 07:52
What Do You Drive
Fay Slimm. said:
The shame of being taken in by a two-timing dame eh Nev ? - - Loved this fun poem with its excellent flow and amazing rhyme-schemes - am still singin\' it in my head.
February 20th, 2019 06:40
Fay Slimm. said:
The shame of being taken in by a two-timing dame eh Nev ? - - Loved this fun poem with its excellent flow and amazing rhyme-schemes - am still singin\' it in my head.
February 20th, 2019 06:40
What Do You Drive
sylviasearcher said:
I think it all went wrong at ‘hey babe’ lol.
Need to work on your chat up lines!
Catchy expression of it though.
Played like a comedy sketch in my mind.
Not sure if that was the intention? 😂
Ps by all went wrong I meant the man in your poem not your poem. I liked the poem, it made me laugh. Laughing is good.
February 20th, 2019 04:10
sylviasearcher said:
I think it all went wrong at ‘hey babe’ lol.
Need to work on your chat up lines!
Catchy expression of it though.
Played like a comedy sketch in my mind.
Not sure if that was the intention? 😂
Ps by all went wrong I meant the man in your poem not your poem. I liked the poem, it made me laugh. Laughing is good.
February 20th, 2019 04:10
What Do You Drive
orchidee said:
Where did she go? Was she related to Boadicea? Oh, that was yesterday\'s gal! lol.
February 20th, 2019 03:57
orchidee said:
Where did she go? Was she related to Boadicea? Oh, that was yesterday\'s gal! lol.
February 20th, 2019 03:57
What Do You Drive
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Dooh Da Doo Dad Doo Do
Thanks Neville... I think
Love Lou Reed
Great concept
Andrew
February 20th, 2019 03:56
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Dooh Da Doo Dad Doo Do
Thanks Neville... I think
Love Lou Reed
Great concept
Andrew
February 20th, 2019 03:56
Shield Maiden
SerenWise said:
This is awesome, I love the use of language and metaphor! Good job :)
February 19th, 2019 17:37
SerenWise said:
This is awesome, I love the use of language and metaphor! Good job :)
February 19th, 2019 17:37
Shield Maiden
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Dark and powerful Neville I liked it Great write AGAIN!
February 19th, 2019 17:03
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Dark and powerful Neville I liked it Great write AGAIN!
February 19th, 2019 17:03
Shield Maiden
Michael Edwards said:
A right shudder of a read that stays with you - fine work Neville.
February 19th, 2019 12:11
Michael Edwards said:
A right shudder of a read that stays with you - fine work Neville.
February 19th, 2019 12:11
Shield Maiden
sylviasearcher said:
This piece intrigued me.
I was left a little uncertain about how the author felt about his creation or the image in his head?
It reminded me of baba yaga or such mythical wild woman ideas.
There is a calmness yet a dread.
An emptiness yet battlefield ablaze.
Perhaps an acceptance of fate?
February 19th, 2019 06:09
sylviasearcher said:
This piece intrigued me.
I was left a little uncertain about how the author felt about his creation or the image in his head?
It reminded me of baba yaga or such mythical wild woman ideas.
There is a calmness yet a dread.
An emptiness yet battlefield ablaze.
Perhaps an acceptance of fate?
February 19th, 2019 06:09
Shield Maiden
Fay Slimm. said:
A dark and sad shape indeed is your feral maiden Neville - - loved the cold flow of this shivery piece -
- -a wraith of the tarot-card table so adeptly described makes a haunt of a read.
February 19th, 2019 04:47
Fay Slimm. said:
A dark and sad shape indeed is your feral maiden Neville - - loved the cold flow of this shivery piece -
- -a wraith of the tarot-card table so adeptly described makes a haunt of a read.
February 19th, 2019 04:47
Shield Maiden
orchidee said:
Oohh what\'s she up to there, battling on? She certainly \'gets out more\' - like I should do! Did she \'get her coat\' having \'over-stayed her welcome\' somewhere, then go off on these adventures?!
February 19th, 2019 04:25
orchidee said:
Oohh what\'s she up to there, battling on? She certainly \'gets out more\' - like I should do! Did she \'get her coat\' having \'over-stayed her welcome\' somewhere, then go off on these adventures?!
February 19th, 2019 04:25
Away With Words
Fay Slimm. said:
ha ha - - well one was to think about NAKED - - but the others are too near the bone...........
February 18th, 2019 13:41
Fay Slimm. said:
ha ha - - well one was to think about NAKED - - but the others are too near the bone...........
February 18th, 2019 13:41
Away With Words
Fay Slimm. said:
Hey Neville - what a great idea for reader participation - - - I thought of a few cheeky ones but settled for - --
\"Lets all think about FUN for a change\"
February 18th, 2019 07:45
Fay Slimm. said:
Hey Neville - what a great idea for reader participation - - - I thought of a few cheeky ones but settled for - --
\"Lets all think about FUN for a change\"
February 18th, 2019 07:45
Away With Words
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Great right Neville
My word would be compassion or forgivemess or care or concern or humaness or oh I don\'t know now I\'m all stressed thinking about what word it would be thanks Nev!
lol
February 18th, 2019 05:15
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Great right Neville
My word would be compassion or forgivemess or care or concern or humaness or oh I don\'t know now I\'m all stressed thinking about what word it would be thanks Nev!
lol
February 18th, 2019 05:15
Away With Words
Michael Edwards said:
Under water basket weaving?
Oh sorry that\'s four words - how about privycleaning ?
Great fun write.
February 18th, 2019 04:13
Michael Edwards said:
Under water basket weaving?
Oh sorry that\'s four words - how about privycleaning ?
Great fun write.
February 18th, 2019 04:13
Away With Words
orchidee said:
Yes, those pesky words - they are cads, bounders, jolly bad shows, eh?!
February 18th, 2019 03:03
orchidee said:
Yes, those pesky words - they are cads, bounders, jolly bad shows, eh?!
February 18th, 2019 03:03
Away With Words
sylviasearcher said:
Aphasia?
Voicelessness?
Emptiness?
Apathy?
Powerlessness?
Oh so many words could fill that void.
It reminded me of a poem I wrote.
February 18th, 2019 02:56
sylviasearcher said:
Aphasia?
Voicelessness?
Emptiness?
Apathy?
Powerlessness?
Oh so many words could fill that void.
It reminded me of a poem I wrote.
February 18th, 2019 02:56
Embu
dusk arising said:
What need of words when they are only a carriage of sentiment. The prayer is within not without. For who is there to hear.
February 17th, 2019 08:56
dusk arising said:
What need of words when they are only a carriage of sentiment. The prayer is within not without. For who is there to hear.
February 17th, 2019 08:56
Embu
orchidee said:
I could do with an embu, seeing as I\'m 21 again tomorrow, N. lol. I do meditation sometimes. Nope, not to think myself into being younger!
February 17th, 2019 08:39
orchidee said:
I could do with an embu, seeing as I\'m 21 again tomorrow, N. lol. I do meditation sometimes. Nope, not to think myself into being younger!
February 17th, 2019 08:39
A Handful of Ghosts
SerenWise said:
This is very thought-provoking, nicely done
February 16th, 2019 11:06
SerenWise said:
This is very thought-provoking, nicely done
February 16th, 2019 11:06
A Handful of Ghosts
dusk arising said:
A pleasant near Miss for your heart. Not the right companion for the whole journey but a few pleasant day trips are on the cards by the look of it.
February 16th, 2019 09:41
dusk arising said:
A pleasant near Miss for your heart. Not the right companion for the whole journey but a few pleasant day trips are on the cards by the look of it.
February 16th, 2019 09:41
A Handful of Ghosts
sylviasearcher said:
I sometimes
Wonder
If I share
My bed
With more than
A handful
Of
Ghosts
And whether
There is any
Space
In that bed
Left
For me
Just a thought...
From your words
February 16th, 2019 08:29
sylviasearcher said:
I sometimes
Wonder
If I share
My bed
With more than
A handful
Of
Ghosts
And whether
There is any
Space
In that bed
Left
For me
Just a thought...
From your words
February 16th, 2019 08:29
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