Comments received on poems by Doggerel Dave
Suburban Solidarity
Goldfinch60 said:
Those trees can be a right nuisance, I had one in our garden for years and there I was every autumn hoovering up leaves every week. I had it cut down early this year and now in autumn it is so strange not to see the autumn leaves all over the garden.
Andy
November 26th, 2020 01:33
Goldfinch60 said:
Those trees can be a right nuisance, I had one in our garden for years and there I was every autumn hoovering up leaves every week. I had it cut down early this year and now in autumn it is so strange not to see the autumn leaves all over the garden.
Andy
November 26th, 2020 01:33
Suburban Solidarity
dusk arising said:
If the system is against ya..... chop the bugger down. Or drill a hole in the trunk and inject some poison.
Or better still, threaten to build a big high wall and get Mexico to pay for it. We did that with the romans you know.
November 26th, 2020 00:45
dusk arising said:
If the system is against ya..... chop the bugger down. Or drill a hole in the trunk and inject some poison.
Or better still, threaten to build a big high wall and get Mexico to pay for it. We did that with the romans you know.
November 26th, 2020 00:45
Suburban Solidarity
Dove said:
Awe! I just get Fallen grapefruits! Interesting poem! Them leaves can get messy
Happy Holiday! Mr Vegetarian ! Smiles
November 25th, 2020 23:41
Dove said:
Awe! I just get Fallen grapefruits! Interesting poem! Them leaves can get messy
Happy Holiday! Mr Vegetarian ! Smiles
November 25th, 2020 23:41
Nature - got to be a winner!?
Neville said:
No shit .......................... or rather too much of it maybe .. in the wrong place at the ................... nice un Dog ... :)
November 23rd, 2020 04:07
Neville said:
No shit .......................... or rather too much of it maybe .. in the wrong place at the ................... nice un Dog ... :)
November 23rd, 2020 04:07
Nature - got to be a winner!?
dusk arising said:
(sing to tune of I\'m all shook up)
Affixed to my sole
from out some doggie do\'s hole
let it be heard
I done trod in a turd
my life\'s surrounded by the smell of sh^t
oh my word
now its on my shirt
oh yeah, yeah.
I\'m all messed up
=========
ok thats enough of the elvis impressions.... back to poetry in its classical style
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I could stroll in that park all day long
but on this occasion there was a terrible pong
and a squelchy feeling beneath my left shoe
yes you\'ve guessed it, i\'d stepped in dog poo
ahead was a spaniel wearing a doggy coat quilt
and in his eye, a distinct look of guilt
so not one to let the moment pass bye
deftly i flipped the turd in his eye
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as can be seen elsewhere on mps, theres some kinds of poetry which instantly get my creative juices flowing (the stains are terrible) and you\'ve scored a bulls-eye with your splendid post today.
November 23rd, 2020 01:41
dusk arising said:
(sing to tune of I\'m all shook up)
Affixed to my sole
from out some doggie do\'s hole
let it be heard
I done trod in a turd
my life\'s surrounded by the smell of sh^t
oh my word
now its on my shirt
oh yeah, yeah.
I\'m all messed up
=========
ok thats enough of the elvis impressions.... back to poetry in its classical style
================
I could stroll in that park all day long
but on this occasion there was a terrible pong
and a squelchy feeling beneath my left shoe
yes you\'ve guessed it, i\'d stepped in dog poo
ahead was a spaniel wearing a doggy coat quilt
and in his eye, a distinct look of guilt
so not one to let the moment pass bye
deftly i flipped the turd in his eye
=====
as can be seen elsewhere on mps, theres some kinds of poetry which instantly get my creative juices flowing (the stains are terrible) and you\'ve scored a bulls-eye with your splendid post today.
November 23rd, 2020 01:41
Nature - got to be a winner!?
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ Good Morning Dave (it 6am Monday here) thanks for the *Nature Song* we used t sing it with the Scouts round the camp fire in the Last Century ! As to the POEM ! The GOOD BOOK says we *Should be careful how & where we walk !* AMEN
W T McGonagall was a Irsh Poet ~ A free spirit who obeyed none of the *Rules of Classic Poetry !* He is a good role model for Modern Poets !
Blessings & Peace to YOU & YOURS
Love Angela Brian Smokey Cat ! ! !
November 23rd, 2020 01:35
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ Good Morning Dave (it 6am Monday here) thanks for the *Nature Song* we used t sing it with the Scouts round the camp fire in the Last Century ! As to the POEM ! The GOOD BOOK says we *Should be careful how & where we walk !* AMEN
W T McGonagall was a Irsh Poet ~ A free spirit who obeyed none of the *Rules of Classic Poetry !* He is a good role model for Modern Poets !
Blessings & Peace to YOU & YOURS
Love Angela Brian Smokey Cat ! ! !
November 23rd, 2020 01:35
Nature - got to be a winner!?
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write Dave, as I said to Jabberwocky with those clean shoes you must watch where you put your feet.
Andy
November 23rd, 2020 01:29
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write Dave, as I said to Jabberwocky with those clean shoes you must watch where you put your feet.
Andy
November 23rd, 2020 01:29
Nature - got to be a winner!?
Doggerel Dave said:
Grass (no not the stuff you roll up and light) - the horizontal green stuff...that\'s Nature, right?
Stylistically owes much to William Topaz McGonagall – to whom I am in great debt.
When that old Tay bridge came a tumbling down
McGonagall was there for the event.
Now whereas most folks think him a clown
He allows free range for my poetic bent.
Regards Dave
November 23rd, 2020 01:00
Doggerel Dave said:
Grass (no not the stuff you roll up and light) - the horizontal green stuff...that\'s Nature, right?
Stylistically owes much to William Topaz McGonagall – to whom I am in great debt.
When that old Tay bridge came a tumbling down
McGonagall was there for the event.
Now whereas most folks think him a clown
He allows free range for my poetic bent.
Regards Dave
November 23rd, 2020 01:00
Try this for size:
Doggerel Dave said:
Thank all you four (but who\'s counting?) for your support. Its a pity I was asleep when all the Hurrahs and Bravos came through. Didn\'t wake me. I was in a deep antipodean slumber.
Dave
November 17th, 2020 17:24
Doggerel Dave said:
Thank all you four (but who\'s counting?) for your support. Its a pity I was asleep when all the Hurrahs and Bravos came through. Didn\'t wake me. I was in a deep antipodean slumber.
Dave
November 17th, 2020 17:24
Try this for size:
dusk arising said:
Somebody stole my dad\'s car with my essay in it whilst i was in the library researching for my halo.
November 17th, 2020 10:01
dusk arising said:
Somebody stole my dad\'s car with my essay in it whilst i was in the library researching for my halo.
November 17th, 2020 10:01
Try this for size:
Michael Edwards said:
Even the dogs got hiccups seems to have gone out fashion. Great fun write.
November 17th, 2020 09:02
Michael Edwards said:
Even the dogs got hiccups seems to have gone out fashion. Great fun write.
November 17th, 2020 09:02
Try this for size:
Goldfinch60 said:
Glad you enjoyed the funeral, will you be seeing your Granny tomorrow. Any excuse to avoid an essay!
Your integration has been accepted by the management Dave so just keep writing.
Andy
November 17th, 2020 01:45
Goldfinch60 said:
Glad you enjoyed the funeral, will you be seeing your Granny tomorrow. Any excuse to avoid an essay!
Your integration has been accepted by the management Dave so just keep writing.
Andy
November 17th, 2020 01:45
It\'s over then?
Neville said:
interesting and realist dialogue .. for a moment, I thought I was eavesdropping on a neighbour .. an additionally well crafted poem tied everything together nicely ...
... Neville
November 16th, 2020 04:16
Neville said:
interesting and realist dialogue .. for a moment, I thought I was eavesdropping on a neighbour .. an additionally well crafted poem tied everything together nicely ...
... Neville
November 16th, 2020 04:16
It\'s over then?
Dove said:
Thanks for sharing the dialogue, The poem I loved the best! Perfect rhymes; and of course heartfelt words ! Best to you
November 14th, 2020 11:39
Dove said:
Thanks for sharing the dialogue, The poem I loved the best! Perfect rhymes; and of course heartfelt words ! Best to you
November 14th, 2020 11:39
It\'s over then?
Doggerel Dave said:
Absolutely Andy.
I had two (serially monogamous) relationships in the
\'80\'s - possibly my most \'mature\' decade. I still correspond with both.
And both contribute in their own special, unique ways to \'W\' in the script.
Take care, Dave
November 14th, 2020 03:16
Doggerel Dave said:
Absolutely Andy.
I had two (serially monogamous) relationships in the
\'80\'s - possibly my most \'mature\' decade. I still correspond with both.
And both contribute in their own special, unique ways to \'W\' in the script.
Take care, Dave
November 14th, 2020 03:16
It\'s over then?
Goldfinch60 said:
As Phil has said it is very realistic but sometime relationships do not work even after many years. It did happen to me, my first wife and I divorced but then I found my Joyce but in all that time I was still friends with my first wife, she and her husband came up and stayed with us occasionally as Joyce and I did with them.
Relationships can be many things, even just remaining friends.
Andy
November 14th, 2020 02:22
Goldfinch60 said:
As Phil has said it is very realistic but sometime relationships do not work even after many years. It did happen to me, my first wife and I divorced but then I found my Joyce but in all that time I was still friends with my first wife, she and her husband came up and stayed with us occasionally as Joyce and I did with them.
Relationships can be many things, even just remaining friends.
Andy
November 14th, 2020 02:22
It\'s over then?
Doggerel Dave said:
Thanks Phil for your reading. Oh I suppose I\'ll have to blow my cover a little (you will probably wish you had never asked -sorry about that!)
First, M is not me - only bits. Some of W is M and some of M is W. Some pieces imported for the occasion. But I did my best to fit them both together into two coherent wholes.
On the evidence as presented, my sympathies lie largely with W, I have to say.
Women always expected to give up their individuality and move with the man. W\'s arguments there are irrefutable to me, and if I got anything out of this exercise at all, it made me feel a little better about myself for laying it out.
Take care Dave
PS: the actual me has returned to the UK a number of times since leaving in \'87. Can confirm I have, for part of the time, lodged with a lady I knew when in London....
November 14th, 2020 00:47
Doggerel Dave said:
Thanks Phil for your reading. Oh I suppose I\'ll have to blow my cover a little (you will probably wish you had never asked -sorry about that!)
First, M is not me - only bits. Some of W is M and some of M is W. Some pieces imported for the occasion. But I did my best to fit them both together into two coherent wholes.
On the evidence as presented, my sympathies lie largely with W, I have to say.
Women always expected to give up their individuality and move with the man. W\'s arguments there are irrefutable to me, and if I got anything out of this exercise at all, it made me feel a little better about myself for laying it out.
Take care Dave
PS: the actual me has returned to the UK a number of times since leaving in \'87. Can confirm I have, for part of the time, lodged with a lady I knew when in London....
November 14th, 2020 00:47
It\'s over then?
MendedFences27 said:
The dialogue seems realistic. Two people of different mindsets. Your poem details the occurrence. Some people live their lives never having set foot outside of a small perimeter. For such as these it would be devastating to leave. She just did not have the courage to explore new vistas. Question - Did you consider staying?
Never expected the continuation of contact. Surprised by that. But assume you make the trip.
Thought provoking piece. Thanks - Phil A.
November 13th, 2020 22:39
MendedFences27 said:
The dialogue seems realistic. Two people of different mindsets. Your poem details the occurrence. Some people live their lives never having set foot outside of a small perimeter. For such as these it would be devastating to leave. She just did not have the courage to explore new vistas. Question - Did you consider staying?
Never expected the continuation of contact. Surprised by that. But assume you make the trip.
Thought provoking piece. Thanks - Phil A.
November 13th, 2020 22:39
It\'s over then?
Doggerel Dave said:
Noticed one theme common at MPS is Love - found , gained, rejected (or ‘unrequited’ if you want to be fancy), lost. So here’s my contribution – never to be mentioned again.
Autobiographical? – Well bits, it\'s complicated; certainly by no means all. Which bits? – Not telling. Please give me credit for a little creativity...
Any comments on the two protagonists? Their motivations etc?
PS: To whom it might concern: this is from my archive; note 2014 unaltered, nothing added.
November 13th, 2020 17:44
Doggerel Dave said:
Noticed one theme common at MPS is Love - found , gained, rejected (or ‘unrequited’ if you want to be fancy), lost. So here’s my contribution – never to be mentioned again.
Autobiographical? – Well bits, it\'s complicated; certainly by no means all. Which bits? – Not telling. Please give me credit for a little creativity...
Any comments on the two protagonists? Their motivations etc?
PS: To whom it might concern: this is from my archive; note 2014 unaltered, nothing added.
November 13th, 2020 17:44
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MendedFences27 said:
Sherman said, \"War is Hell,\" he was right. It is the culmination of all of mankind\'s sins, greed lust, hatred, etc.
Your \"critique\" is spot on. Why is it the playground for the rich and powerful?
November 13th, 2020 11:46
MendedFences27 said:
Sherman said, \"War is Hell,\" he was right. It is the culmination of all of mankind\'s sins, greed lust, hatred, etc.
Your \"critique\" is spot on. Why is it the playground for the rich and powerful?
November 13th, 2020 11:46
Harry
AuburnScribbler said:
Loved reading this Dave, an excellent bit of storytelling.
I have an affinity with spiders myself, must be because I am a Scorpio thus a fellow arachnid.
Being a half-Scot, I like the fact that your poem has a link to the story of Robert the Bruce; using a spider\'s will to build it\'s web back up again as inspiration to be victorious at Bannockburn.
Again a brilliant write, bless Harry and Harriet, have a good one and please do take care.
November 13th, 2020 03:23
AuburnScribbler said:
Loved reading this Dave, an excellent bit of storytelling.
I have an affinity with spiders myself, must be because I am a Scorpio thus a fellow arachnid.
Being a half-Scot, I like the fact that your poem has a link to the story of Robert the Bruce; using a spider\'s will to build it\'s web back up again as inspiration to be victorious at Bannockburn.
Again a brilliant write, bless Harry and Harriet, have a good one and please do take care.
November 13th, 2020 03:23
A Relationship
Doggerel Dave said:
Well yeh, but some, like this one, have a certain sense of place, an assertive dignity that I begrudgingly admire; she (yes -she, something Anna knew immediately - go figure) wheedled herself into the household as a stray and in her own interactive way, rules the roost now . Got a smattering of dog in there somewhere...
Dave
PS: I don\'t want a cat like that - won\'t risk it. Took me long enough to graduate as an autonomous human being without being back under the sway of Authority.
November 11th, 2020 03:28
Doggerel Dave said:
Well yeh, but some, like this one, have a certain sense of place, an assertive dignity that I begrudgingly admire; she (yes -she, something Anna knew immediately - go figure) wheedled herself into the household as a stray and in her own interactive way, rules the roost now . Got a smattering of dog in there somewhere...
Dave
PS: I don\'t want a cat like that - won\'t risk it. Took me long enough to graduate as an autonomous human being without being back under the sway of Authority.
November 11th, 2020 03:28
A Relationship
Goldfinch60 said:
Cats are so arrogant and they believe that owners are there servants.
Andy
November 11th, 2020 03:02
Goldfinch60 said:
Cats are so arrogant and they believe that owners are there servants.
Andy
November 11th, 2020 03:02
Harry
Doggerel Dave said:
So I\'m sure your husband knows the score, and treats you with double lined kid gloves, s.z (I don\'t want to appear over familiar, but is there anything , any other short form name I could address you with?)
Let\'s get this clear now before I get exhausted: My visitor was a SPIDER very much as described in the opening comment authored by me plus \'a smidgen of imaginative interpretation in the main text!!!\' as per the third entry in this comments column.
Now to business: I\'m looking forward to your spider story - or hopefully a full series soon . Please don\'t let me down.
Regards Dave
November 10th, 2020 06:50
Doggerel Dave said:
So I\'m sure your husband knows the score, and treats you with double lined kid gloves, s.z (I don\'t want to appear over familiar, but is there anything , any other short form name I could address you with?)
Let\'s get this clear now before I get exhausted: My visitor was a SPIDER very much as described in the opening comment authored by me plus \'a smidgen of imaginative interpretation in the main text!!!\' as per the third entry in this comments column.
Now to business: I\'m looking forward to your spider story - or hopefully a full series soon . Please don\'t let me down.
Regards Dave
November 10th, 2020 06:50
Harry
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Wow this was a fantastic super interlude with the glories of solitude and quietness very enticing the way you describe it. And whether Harry was a spider or a human visitor it was fun to read of. I like to think it was about a spider as I admire and revere spiders a lot.
November 9th, 2020 12:26
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Wow this was a fantastic super interlude with the glories of solitude and quietness very enticing the way you describe it. And whether Harry was a spider or a human visitor it was fun to read of. I like to think it was about a spider as I admire and revere spiders a lot.
November 9th, 2020 12:26
Harry
Fay Slimm. said:
What an interesting read and a surprising end to the tale of Harry the Huntsman and his comings and goings - love the rhythmic humour in this engaging story Dave and look forward to reading more of your work soon.
November 7th, 2020 03:42
Fay Slimm. said:
What an interesting read and a surprising end to the tale of Harry the Huntsman and his comings and goings - love the rhythmic humour in this engaging story Dave and look forward to reading more of your work soon.
November 7th, 2020 03:42
Harry
Goldfinch60 said:
May Harriet\'s family bring you joy and happiness and more words like these Dave.
Andy
November 7th, 2020 01:57
Goldfinch60 said:
May Harriet\'s family bring you joy and happiness and more words like these Dave.
Andy
November 7th, 2020 01:57
Harry
Doggerel Dave said:
Huntsmans in Australia are large (for a spider). As the common name implies, they don\'t build webs but \'hunt\' for their food. Actually there doesn\'t appear to be much activity, as they seem to adopt a \'sit and wait\' strategy. One has occasionally turned up at my place, snuggled in behind a picture on my wall and strolled out occasionally to see how the world is progressing. Did me no harm, was not evicted.
November 6th, 2020 20:21
Doggerel Dave said:
Huntsmans in Australia are large (for a spider). As the common name implies, they don\'t build webs but \'hunt\' for their food. Actually there doesn\'t appear to be much activity, as they seem to adopt a \'sit and wait\' strategy. One has occasionally turned up at my place, snuggled in behind a picture on my wall and strolled out occasionally to see how the world is progressing. Did me no harm, was not evicted.
November 6th, 2020 20:21
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Michael Edwards said:
Ditto LB - it\'s a great write as is your response.
November 4th, 2020 06:46
Michael Edwards said:
Ditto LB - it\'s a great write as is your response.
November 4th, 2020 06:46
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Doggerel Dave said:
Cheers L.B. - Didn\'t think I\'d be able to show you anything poetical.
Regards Dave
November 3rd, 2020 06:22
Doggerel Dave said:
Cheers L.B. - Didn\'t think I\'d be able to show you anything poetical.
Regards Dave
November 3rd, 2020 06:22
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