Comments received on poems by sorenbarrett
Awakening
Bella Shepard said:
The stunning imagery of each line fills my senses to the brim, in this beautiful poem. \"cobwebs of childhood dreams, sewn into pillowcase clouds, drifting on an upended sapphire sea of memories\", I love this so much. Your closing line captures it all dear friend, this is breathtaking!
August 17th, 2023 10:43
Bella Shepard said:
The stunning imagery of each line fills my senses to the brim, in this beautiful poem. \"cobwebs of childhood dreams, sewn into pillowcase clouds, drifting on an upended sapphire sea of memories\", I love this so much. Your closing line captures it all dear friend, this is breathtaking!
August 17th, 2023 10:43
The Old Brick Walkway
Neville said:
seems like the writing is on the wall ..
August 16th, 2023 12:42
Neville said:
seems like the writing is on the wall ..
August 16th, 2023 12:42
The Old Brick Walkway
Goldfinch60 said:
That walkway is from your past soren and it has led you to the wonderful life that you now have.
Andy
August 16th, 2023 02:14
Goldfinch60 said:
That walkway is from your past soren and it has led you to the wonderful life that you now have.
Andy
August 16th, 2023 02:14
The Old Brick Walkway
Doggerel Dave said:
Enjoyed this, Soren - fate of your walkway, the fate of the universe.....
August 15th, 2023 07:25
Doggerel Dave said:
Enjoyed this, Soren - fate of your walkway, the fate of the universe.....
August 15th, 2023 07:25
The Old Brick Walkway
orchidee said:
Good write SB.
There\'s a row about a \'wonky pub\' being demolished. New owners didn\'t care about it or its history.
August 15th, 2023 07:19
orchidee said:
Good write SB.
There\'s a row about a \'wonky pub\' being demolished. New owners didn\'t care about it or its history.
August 15th, 2023 07:19
Progress?
Bella Shepard said:
You have given us a most accurate tableau of technology superseding our humanity, in perfect verse. Every line rings so true, you would think that the warning bell would wake us up, but when you wear earplugs you never hear it. Hats off my friend, for such an incredible write.
August 13th, 2023 14:07
Bella Shepard said:
You have given us a most accurate tableau of technology superseding our humanity, in perfect verse. Every line rings so true, you would think that the warning bell would wake us up, but when you wear earplugs you never hear it. Hats off my friend, for such an incredible write.
August 13th, 2023 14:07
The Great Pretender
Doggerel Dave said:
Great to bring this topic into the arena of general speculation with your usual polish, Soren.
Here’s my take on this subject: AI will bring great change, and some of this will be good: searching, hunting selecting from massive data sets in medicine, to name just one discipline. Doubtless it will take over (and do better than) many human driven processes (job loss). In the wrong hands….and so on.
But become ‘more intelligent than\'…and take over…rule us.. just BS – The solution? PTP, Pull The Plug.
August 11th, 2023 19:09
Doggerel Dave said:
Great to bring this topic into the arena of general speculation with your usual polish, Soren.
Here’s my take on this subject: AI will bring great change, and some of this will be good: searching, hunting selecting from massive data sets in medicine, to name just one discipline. Doubtless it will take over (and do better than) many human driven processes (job loss). In the wrong hands….and so on.
But become ‘more intelligent than\'…and take over…rule us.. just BS – The solution? PTP, Pull The Plug.
August 11th, 2023 19:09
The Great Pretender
Bobby O said:
It sure is a scary plot that lies before us to on over , except it’s not a book or movie, it’s literally all the marbles. Nice write good read
August 11th, 2023 14:32
Bobby O said:
It sure is a scary plot that lies before us to on over , except it’s not a book or movie, it’s literally all the marbles. Nice write good read
August 11th, 2023 14:32
The Great Pretender
orchidee said:
I\'m half-human, half guinea-pig, so I say. We\'ve had different piggies for over 20 years now, continually! lol.
August 11th, 2023 11:24
orchidee said:
I\'m half-human, half guinea-pig, so I say. We\'ve had different piggies for over 20 years now, continually! lol.
August 11th, 2023 11:24
Falling
orchidee said:
Where ya going? Where ya falling to?
I had a fall on a country walk - fell in a pile of manure! lol (Did I?)
August 9th, 2023 02:15
orchidee said:
Where ya going? Where ya falling to?
I had a fall on a country walk - fell in a pile of manure! lol (Did I?)
August 9th, 2023 02:15
Falling
Teddy.15 said:
Dear Sorenbarrett, what a fall it is, I have a recurring dream like this, yet I always wake up before I hit the floor, you just spooked me out lol what fabulous lines so dramatic and so very believable 💖
August 8th, 2023 16:08
Teddy.15 said:
Dear Sorenbarrett, what a fall it is, I have a recurring dream like this, yet I always wake up before I hit the floor, you just spooked me out lol what fabulous lines so dramatic and so very believable 💖
August 8th, 2023 16:08
You see what you want
orchidee said:
Doh!! I was gonna explain summat technical about punctuation. I got cut orf before I finished. Now I forgot it all! Grrr. lol. Now it asks me if I wanna translate into Spanish?! What the....?!
August 6th, 2023 03:18
orchidee said:
Doh!! I was gonna explain summat technical about punctuation. I got cut orf before I finished. Now I forgot it all! Grrr. lol. Now it asks me if I wanna translate into Spanish?! What the....?!
August 6th, 2023 03:18
You see what you want
Teddy.15 said:
Yes sometimes we need very little to actually get to the point. Well said, I hope it feels better my friend. 💖
August 5th, 2023 14:20
Teddy.15 said:
Yes sometimes we need very little to actually get to the point. Well said, I hope it feels better my friend. 💖
August 5th, 2023 14:20
Loaded gun
L. B. Mek said:
death is a promise
that adds flavour to our sensations
..in life,
(I like your rhyme scheme
and the matter of fact way
you tackled such a complex
subject)
an important and engaging read
thank you! dear Poet
August 4th, 2023 03:36
L. B. Mek said:
death is a promise
that adds flavour to our sensations
..in life,
(I like your rhyme scheme
and the matter of fact way
you tackled such a complex
subject)
an important and engaging read
thank you! dear Poet
August 4th, 2023 03:36
A baited trap of flowers
L. B. Mek said:
\'When I offered a bed of roses
I didn\'t mention the thorns\'
these words hit home, dear Poet
(I bought gardening gloves
for my heart, but still
it never seems to be enough
to keep the shrapnel
of belated regret from clustering
my mind and stifling
my lungs, capacity to hope...)
whatever side of blame we seat
we\'re each left contemplating
our what if\'s..
August 4th, 2023 03:29
L. B. Mek said:
\'When I offered a bed of roses
I didn\'t mention the thorns\'
these words hit home, dear Poet
(I bought gardening gloves
for my heart, but still
it never seems to be enough
to keep the shrapnel
of belated regret from clustering
my mind and stifling
my lungs, capacity to hope...)
whatever side of blame we seat
we\'re each left contemplating
our what if\'s..
August 4th, 2023 03:29
Cave in
L. B. Mek said:
ill-fated nightmares as reality
past mistakes repeatedly casually
justice ears deaf to our pleas
with lungs stunted by fear, we dare
to seek a reasoning, a grasp
asking why that we chose to intrust
with our cave\'s of hope
seems to be incapable of staying
by our side, without setting off
those land mines
we keep hidden, deep
within those singed corridors
of our heart..
(a great write dear Poet
forgive me
I couldn\'t help but try
and scribble a little poetic reply)
August 4th, 2023 03:20
L. B. Mek said:
ill-fated nightmares as reality
past mistakes repeatedly casually
justice ears deaf to our pleas
with lungs stunted by fear, we dare
to seek a reasoning, a grasp
asking why that we chose to intrust
with our cave\'s of hope
seems to be incapable of staying
by our side, without setting off
those land mines
we keep hidden, deep
within those singed corridors
of our heart..
(a great write dear Poet
forgive me
I couldn\'t help but try
and scribble a little poetic reply)
August 4th, 2023 03:20
Loaded gun
Goldfinch60 said:
BUT NOT YET SOREN!
I still have too many people to upset. LOL
ANDY
August 4th, 2023 00:37
Goldfinch60 said:
BUT NOT YET SOREN!
I still have too many people to upset. LOL
ANDY
August 4th, 2023 00:37
Loaded gun
jarcher54 said:
Sorry to disagree... when we were kids several of us all agreed to never die! (-:
August 3rd, 2023 11:00
jarcher54 said:
Sorry to disagree... when we were kids several of us all agreed to never die! (-:
August 3rd, 2023 11:00
Loaded gun
orchidee said:
A fine write SB.
Doh! I did not play Russian Roulette properly. I left one gun chamber EMPTY and filled the rest. 1 out of 6 chances you will see me again! lol.
Well, KP told me that\'s how it\'s played!
August 3rd, 2023 06:45
orchidee said:
A fine write SB.
Doh! I did not play Russian Roulette properly. I left one gun chamber EMPTY and filled the rest. 1 out of 6 chances you will see me again! lol.
Well, KP told me that\'s how it\'s played!
August 3rd, 2023 06:45
Loaded gun
Doggerel Dave said:
It doesn\'t, and I bow - just want it to be easy and quiet.
Neat write, Soren.
August 3rd, 2023 06:25
Doggerel Dave said:
It doesn\'t, and I bow - just want it to be easy and quiet.
Neat write, Soren.
August 3rd, 2023 06:25
A baited trap of flowers
Bella Shepard said:
Beware of lover\'s bearing roses? This is tantalizingly delicious dear poet!
August 2nd, 2023 16:02
Bella Shepard said:
Beware of lover\'s bearing roses? This is tantalizingly delicious dear poet!
August 2nd, 2023 16:02
Nature\'s servitude (a fable)
L. B. Mek said:
\'Far below the misty wisps of the broken billowing tide,
a slow rolling breaker, spreads its whitewash of light\'
Brilliant!
(astounding poetic ambition, dear Poet
what hard earned skill and patience you showcase
just see for yourself
how your writing favourably compares
to the master himself:)
\'Her azure veins, her alabaster skin,
Her coral lips, her snow-white dimpled chin.
As the grim lion fawneth o’er his prey
Sharp hunger by the conquest satisfied,
So o’er this sleeping soul doth Tarquin stay,
His rage of lust by gazing qualified;
Slacked, not suppressed; for, standing by her side,
His eye, which late this mutiny restrains,
Unto a greater uproar tempts his veins.
And they, like straggling slaves for pillage fighting,
Obdurate vassals fell exploits effecting.
In bloody death and ravishment delighting,
Nor children’s tears nor mothers’ groans respecting,
Swell in their pride, the onset still expecting.
Anon his beating heart, alarum striking,
Gives the hot charge and bids them do their liking.
His drumming heart cheers up his burning eye,
His eye commends the leading to his hand;
His hand, as proud of such a dignity,
Smoking with pride, marched on to make his stand
On her bare breast, the heart of all her land,
Whose ranks of blue veins, as his hand did scale,
Left their round turrets destitute and pale.
They, mustering to the quiet cabinet
Where their dear governess and lady lies,
Do tell her she is dreadfully beset
And fright her with confusion of their cries.
She, much amazed, breaks ope her locked-up eyes,
Who, peeping forth this tumult to behold,
Are by his flaming torch dimmed and controlled.
Imagine her as one in dead of night
From forth dull sleep by dreadful fancy waking,\'
(
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/50474/the-rape-of-lucrece
)
July 31st, 2023 02:55
L. B. Mek said:
\'Far below the misty wisps of the broken billowing tide,
a slow rolling breaker, spreads its whitewash of light\'
Brilliant!
(astounding poetic ambition, dear Poet
what hard earned skill and patience you showcase
just see for yourself
how your writing favourably compares
to the master himself:)
\'Her azure veins, her alabaster skin,
Her coral lips, her snow-white dimpled chin.
As the grim lion fawneth o’er his prey
Sharp hunger by the conquest satisfied,
So o’er this sleeping soul doth Tarquin stay,
His rage of lust by gazing qualified;
Slacked, not suppressed; for, standing by her side,
His eye, which late this mutiny restrains,
Unto a greater uproar tempts his veins.
And they, like straggling slaves for pillage fighting,
Obdurate vassals fell exploits effecting.
In bloody death and ravishment delighting,
Nor children’s tears nor mothers’ groans respecting,
Swell in their pride, the onset still expecting.
Anon his beating heart, alarum striking,
Gives the hot charge and bids them do their liking.
His drumming heart cheers up his burning eye,
His eye commends the leading to his hand;
His hand, as proud of such a dignity,
Smoking with pride, marched on to make his stand
On her bare breast, the heart of all her land,
Whose ranks of blue veins, as his hand did scale,
Left their round turrets destitute and pale.
They, mustering to the quiet cabinet
Where their dear governess and lady lies,
Do tell her she is dreadfully beset
And fright her with confusion of their cries.
She, much amazed, breaks ope her locked-up eyes,
Who, peeping forth this tumult to behold,
Are by his flaming torch dimmed and controlled.
Imagine her as one in dead of night
From forth dull sleep by dreadful fancy waking,\'
(
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/50474/the-rape-of-lucrece
)
July 31st, 2023 02:55
Nature\'s servitude (a fable)
Goldfinch60 said:
That last line says it all soren.
Andy
July 29th, 2023 01:53
Goldfinch60 said:
That last line says it all soren.
Andy
July 29th, 2023 01:53
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