Comments received on poems by sorenbarrett
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L. B. Mek said:
an ant\'s strength, putting us to shame
yet we parade like our foot size
means we can stomp over all other
life;
abuse our cows, keep them impregnated
their whole miserable life
just so we can
make milkshakes from their
misery n strife;
I laugh at people\'s, brazen
assumptions of what evil is
while cracking an egg, every morning
and trying to dictate, who
gets the right to define, if
an embryo is a fetus or a life
to be protected
while loudly proclaiming
\'I\'ll take mine sunny side up\'
...
what word defines a person
better than, the ultimate:
\'hypocrite\'
June 30th, 2023 04:44
L. B. Mek said:
an ant\'s strength, putting us to shame
yet we parade like our foot size
means we can stomp over all other
life;
abuse our cows, keep them impregnated
their whole miserable life
just so we can
make milkshakes from their
misery n strife;
I laugh at people\'s, brazen
assumptions of what evil is
while cracking an egg, every morning
and trying to dictate, who
gets the right to define, if
an embryo is a fetus or a life
to be protected
while loudly proclaiming
\'I\'ll take mine sunny side up\'
...
what word defines a person
better than, the ultimate:
\'hypocrite\'
June 30th, 2023 04:44
Wash it down
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(sleek, sweat drenched and sick
we swallow lies as facts of surreal
wash it down
with that blue and red pill, Hollywood
spider\'s in our horizons
cobwebs rooting our steps
swimming to fly
running to find a peaceful sleep
straining to relax serene
we progress with each blink of regress
and smile, those surgical white teeth
while inside
our heart\'s are rotting gangrene
still, a new dawning
and our clown masks appear
bright and eager
daring to dream, daring to believe
in a better, once promised
to our great, great, great, great, great
kin
yeah, we wait! knowing
one way or another, death
will deliver
mercy to those kids on deathbeds
worldwide
gifting hope, in each brave smile
with eyes shut tight
baring a pain, they\'ll never comprehend..)
June 26th, 2023 03:15
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(sleek, sweat drenched and sick
we swallow lies as facts of surreal
wash it down
with that blue and red pill, Hollywood
spider\'s in our horizons
cobwebs rooting our steps
swimming to fly
running to find a peaceful sleep
straining to relax serene
we progress with each blink of regress
and smile, those surgical white teeth
while inside
our heart\'s are rotting gangrene
still, a new dawning
and our clown masks appear
bright and eager
daring to dream, daring to believe
in a better, once promised
to our great, great, great, great, great
kin
yeah, we wait! knowing
one way or another, death
will deliver
mercy to those kids on deathbeds
worldwide
gifting hope, in each brave smile
with eyes shut tight
baring a pain, they\'ll never comprehend..)
June 26th, 2023 03:15
Progress
L. B. Mek said:
we traversed from the plague
to coronavirus
yet, all those generations
never noticed a difference
just more ammunition
to our woe n laments
...
(insightful word, dear Poet
good to see history hasn\'t been \'cancelled\'
for all of us)
June 26th, 2023 03:06
L. B. Mek said:
we traversed from the plague
to coronavirus
yet, all those generations
never noticed a difference
just more ammunition
to our woe n laments
...
(insightful word, dear Poet
good to see history hasn\'t been \'cancelled\'
for all of us)
June 26th, 2023 03:06
No words
L. B. Mek said:
\'\'Verba volant, scripta manent\'\'
that\'s why we ink, endure
one more scribbled syllable
to stain existence with our worth
validate, this amalgamation
of breath, laughter, tears, pain, love
and so much more
as a life, lived
with all we had to give!
onwards, \'and miles to go before we sleep\'
till that bell toll lets us know
we\'ve done enough, time to rest...
onwards, my kind friend
stay strong!
June 23rd, 2023 02:24
L. B. Mek said:
\'\'Verba volant, scripta manent\'\'
that\'s why we ink, endure
one more scribbled syllable
to stain existence with our worth
validate, this amalgamation
of breath, laughter, tears, pain, love
and so much more
as a life, lived
with all we had to give!
onwards, \'and miles to go before we sleep\'
till that bell toll lets us know
we\'ve done enough, time to rest...
onwards, my kind friend
stay strong!
June 23rd, 2023 02:24
Listen
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(forgive me my friend
but see how impressively
your words compare, to arguably
the best lines of one of Poesy\'s
great\'s)
“There is a pleasure in the pathless woods,
There is a rapture on the lonely shore,
There is society, where none intrudes,
By the deep Sea, and music in its roar:
I love not Man the less, but Nature more,
From these our interviews, in which I steal
From all I may be, or have been before,
To mingle with the Universe, and feel
What I can ne’er express, yet cannot all conceal.”
― Lord Byron, from Childe Harold\'s Pilgrimage
June 19th, 2023 01:59
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(forgive me my friend
but see how impressively
your words compare, to arguably
the best lines of one of Poesy\'s
great\'s)
“There is a pleasure in the pathless woods,
There is a rapture on the lonely shore,
There is society, where none intrudes,
By the deep Sea, and music in its roar:
I love not Man the less, but Nature more,
From these our interviews, in which I steal
From all I may be, or have been before,
To mingle with the Universe, and feel
What I can ne’er express, yet cannot all conceal.”
― Lord Byron, from Childe Harold\'s Pilgrimage
June 19th, 2023 01:59
Over
L. B. Mek said:
\'And when done, you\'re told what you lack, and to punt\'
that systemic, \'lack of belief\'
in our capabilities, we each
have to overcome, everyone
assuming our offense
can\'t get it done, at crunch time
when deep inside us, a flame
blazes, yearning
to scream our defiance, ignore
\'team\' orders and shout to the world,
\'give me a chance, to shut you up!\'
and I\'ll rip your fckin throats out
just watch
my best is yet to come!
(inspirational words wise Poet, love it
thank you!)
June 19th, 2023 01:54
L. B. Mek said:
\'And when done, you\'re told what you lack, and to punt\'
that systemic, \'lack of belief\'
in our capabilities, we each
have to overcome, everyone
assuming our offense
can\'t get it done, at crunch time
when deep inside us, a flame
blazes, yearning
to scream our defiance, ignore
\'team\' orders and shout to the world,
\'give me a chance, to shut you up!\'
and I\'ll rip your fckin throats out
just watch
my best is yet to come!
(inspirational words wise Poet, love it
thank you!)
June 19th, 2023 01:54
Over
Goldfinch60 said:
You will always move forward soren, that place of joy is waiting for you.
Andy
June 17th, 2023 01:44
Goldfinch60 said:
You will always move forward soren, that place of joy is waiting for you.
Andy
June 17th, 2023 01:44
Mists of Melville
L. B. Mek said:
one of my favourite books/writers ever!
(even accounting for the unsavoury
romanticising of animal cruelty)
\'Starbuck\' still one of my favourite characters
that unfaltering loyalty, becoming
even more of an archaic trait
sadly
(a great write! dear Poet)
\'haunt me
like growlers, cast off a forgotten glacial dream
frozen echo\'s of past falling flakes and drops
driven by hidden collective currents
that would drown me in its black fathomless depths\'
June 16th, 2023 02:16
L. B. Mek said:
one of my favourite books/writers ever!
(even accounting for the unsavoury
romanticising of animal cruelty)
\'Starbuck\' still one of my favourite characters
that unfaltering loyalty, becoming
even more of an archaic trait
sadly
(a great write! dear Poet)
\'haunt me
like growlers, cast off a forgotten glacial dream
frozen echo\'s of past falling flakes and drops
driven by hidden collective currents
that would drown me in its black fathomless depths\'
June 16th, 2023 02:16
Naive
L. B. Mek said:
so fcking deep!
\'Saying: “Please don\'t choose to me abuse
naive, to the right advances I\'m blind”
\'We\'re drawn in by unrealistic expectations, until revelations
strip truth naked and it goes to pieces as hope expires”
(it would take a whole dissertation to unfurl
the wide ranging socio-relationship
aspects of modern \'romance\'
your words offer acute insights
upon)
great execution of such a sensitive
and divisively complex subject
a privilege to read
testimony to your wordsmith skills
thank you!
June 16th, 2023 02:09
L. B. Mek said:
so fcking deep!
\'Saying: “Please don\'t choose to me abuse
naive, to the right advances I\'m blind”
\'We\'re drawn in by unrealistic expectations, until revelations
strip truth naked and it goes to pieces as hope expires”
(it would take a whole dissertation to unfurl
the wide ranging socio-relationship
aspects of modern \'romance\'
your words offer acute insights
upon)
great execution of such a sensitive
and divisively complex subject
a privilege to read
testimony to your wordsmith skills
thank you!
June 16th, 2023 02:09
Naive
arqios said:
Both sad and truthful. Realism should in fact heighten and not dishearten our \'attraction.\' If I read this right, we have become enslaved by ideals that do not match reality which makes us really naive as demonstrated in this poem.
June 12th, 2023 23:47
arqios said:
Both sad and truthful. Realism should in fact heighten and not dishearten our \'attraction.\' If I read this right, we have become enslaved by ideals that do not match reality which makes us really naive as demonstrated in this poem.
June 12th, 2023 23:47
Fate
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(a young heart\'s red string
or that life scorched, ashen black
as one, we all seek
our existential thread
to unveil fate\'s machinations
free us of that blank future\'s
dread
flip a choice, ink our worth
with our laments and endeavours
of pulsing need to belong, to mark
our lives in posterity\'s sights)
June 12th, 2023 02:13
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(a young heart\'s red string
or that life scorched, ashen black
as one, we all seek
our existential thread
to unveil fate\'s machinations
free us of that blank future\'s
dread
flip a choice, ink our worth
with our laments and endeavours
of pulsing need to belong, to mark
our lives in posterity\'s sights)
June 12th, 2023 02:13
Deja vu dreams
sorenbarrett said:
Thanks so much L.B. your poetic words reflect as much wisdom as beauty. I so appreciate the review.
June 9th, 2023 05:57
sorenbarrett said:
Thanks so much L.B. your poetic words reflect as much wisdom as beauty. I so appreciate the review.
June 9th, 2023 05:57
Homeless
sorenbarrett said:
Thanks so much L.B. having lived in over 25 different locations through my life it just seemed natural to pick this topic.
June 9th, 2023 05:51
sorenbarrett said:
Thanks so much L.B. having lived in over 25 different locations through my life it just seemed natural to pick this topic.
June 9th, 2023 05:51
Homeless
L. B. Mek said:
that\'s why those \'homecoming\' scenes
tattoo their mark on us, I think
(it seems we\'re in-sync as usual my friend)
a searching
thought provoking read, thank you!
wise Poet
June 9th, 2023 02:29
L. B. Mek said:
that\'s why those \'homecoming\' scenes
tattoo their mark on us, I think
(it seems we\'re in-sync as usual my friend)
a searching
thought provoking read, thank you!
wise Poet
June 9th, 2023 02:29
Deja vu dreams
L. B. Mek said:
\'A proxy verisimilitude
more real than any daylight hours
with visions and emotions more vivid
than *my eye-prickling reality*\'
indeed, wise Poet
I so relate!
(dreamscape\'s where, our dreams
aspire to afford us an escape
from existence\'s, endless barrage
of bleak horizons and plaguing
shadowless memories, as ghost\'s
of hollowed out regret\'s
footprint trails, legacy of a life
draped in those ashes
of once, blindingly inflamed
hope
still, while we can breathe
we can blink
hoping for a new vista of life
to arrive
and on.. dreamscape\'s
to reality escapades, we strive
to survive
one nightmare, at a time)
June 9th, 2023 02:25
L. B. Mek said:
\'A proxy verisimilitude
more real than any daylight hours
with visions and emotions more vivid
than *my eye-prickling reality*\'
indeed, wise Poet
I so relate!
(dreamscape\'s where, our dreams
aspire to afford us an escape
from existence\'s, endless barrage
of bleak horizons and plaguing
shadowless memories, as ghost\'s
of hollowed out regret\'s
footprint trails, legacy of a life
draped in those ashes
of once, blindingly inflamed
hope
still, while we can breathe
we can blink
hoping for a new vista of life
to arrive
and on.. dreamscape\'s
to reality escapades, we strive
to survive
one nightmare, at a time)
June 9th, 2023 02:25
Deja vu dreams
Goldfinch60 said:
Each dream can bring us wonder and love soren. Dream on.
Andy
June 7th, 2023 01:16
Goldfinch60 said:
Each dream can bring us wonder and love soren. Dream on.
Andy
June 7th, 2023 01:16
Standing in line
Bella Shepard said:
Another wonderful, thought provoking poem my friend. I find that at my late age of life I begin to understand so many things that eluded me in my youth. I used to be part of the insanity of humanity, but now I\'m able to stand back and analize it, no longer feeling the need to passively accept, and conform because of fear or ignorance. Outstanding write dear poet!
June 6th, 2023 14:44
Bella Shepard said:
Another wonderful, thought provoking poem my friend. I find that at my late age of life I begin to understand so many things that eluded me in my youth. I used to be part of the insanity of humanity, but now I\'m able to stand back and analize it, no longer feeling the need to passively accept, and conform because of fear or ignorance. Outstanding write dear poet!
June 6th, 2023 14:44
Standing in line
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'Palpitations screaming “doom lives here”
Magnetic levitation of my hair
A freezing response, a deja vu souvenir\'
(A moment\'s unchecked rage, spiralling
to a consequence, stain
on our name, legacy, our very worth)
this is when, we need that mirror
in our mind
to stare back at us and remind us
we\'re all capable of mistakes
just like we can trip with every step
we take in life, what truly matters
what cements the legacy of that stain
on our name
is what we do, after
“Why do we fall ?
So that we can learn
to pick ourselves up.”
June 5th, 2023 01:41
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'Palpitations screaming “doom lives here”
Magnetic levitation of my hair
A freezing response, a deja vu souvenir\'
(A moment\'s unchecked rage, spiralling
to a consequence, stain
on our name, legacy, our very worth)
this is when, we need that mirror
in our mind
to stare back at us and remind us
we\'re all capable of mistakes
just like we can trip with every step
we take in life, what truly matters
what cements the legacy of that stain
on our name
is what we do, after
“Why do we fall ?
So that we can learn
to pick ourselves up.”
June 5th, 2023 01:41
AI
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!!!
\'no sense of what or who is real
no tender touch do we feel
Our lives seem so complex
Cut short, conversations by text
Any social intercourse now vexed
Schedules, our time now controlled
to a keyboard our soul is sold\'
June 5th, 2023 01:33
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!!!
\'no sense of what or who is real
no tender touch do we feel
Our lives seem so complex
Cut short, conversations by text
Any social intercourse now vexed
Schedules, our time now controlled
to a keyboard our soul is sold\'
June 5th, 2023 01:33
AI
rhmn_7 said:
I work with AI for a living, but there are no \"rules & ethics\" guiding the development, so it really is a bit scary.
June 4th, 2023 09:33
rhmn_7 said:
I work with AI for a living, but there are no \"rules & ethics\" guiding the development, so it really is a bit scary.
June 4th, 2023 09:33
AI
Bella Shepard said:
Dear friend the picture you paint is frightening, disturbing and all too real. We have over time created more and more ways to to ease the burdens of life, making tasks easier; communication instantaneous, transportatation conquering the sky and space, every imaginable device to lessen household work. Are we now to find respite from the burden of thinking? Perhaps we will pass on to future generations fewer and fewer brain cells, and if you don\'t use it you lose it. I may have grown up in the time of dial phones, 3 TV channels that went off air at midnight, and mom & pop corner stores, but I really wouldn\'t trade wouldn\'t trade it for all the convenience of today. We shared so much in our multigenerational family that cannot be gotten today. God bless, dear poet, you really hit the mark here, thank you!
June 3rd, 2023 13:09
Bella Shepard said:
Dear friend the picture you paint is frightening, disturbing and all too real. We have over time created more and more ways to to ease the burdens of life, making tasks easier; communication instantaneous, transportatation conquering the sky and space, every imaginable device to lessen household work. Are we now to find respite from the burden of thinking? Perhaps we will pass on to future generations fewer and fewer brain cells, and if you don\'t use it you lose it. I may have grown up in the time of dial phones, 3 TV channels that went off air at midnight, and mom & pop corner stores, but I really wouldn\'t trade wouldn\'t trade it for all the convenience of today. We shared so much in our multigenerational family that cannot be gotten today. God bless, dear poet, you really hit the mark here, thank you!
June 3rd, 2023 13:09
AI
Firefall said:
Your poem really captures the concerns with AI. Hopefully, it can be used for good and creative purposes.
June 2nd, 2023 19:03
Firefall said:
Your poem really captures the concerns with AI. Hopefully, it can be used for good and creative purposes.
June 2nd, 2023 19:03
Gestalt
sorenbarrett said:
Mesmerized by the words of your review that are more poetic than the poem being commented on. Thank you my friend.
June 2nd, 2023 05:43
sorenbarrett said:
Mesmerized by the words of your review that are more poetic than the poem being commented on. Thank you my friend.
June 2nd, 2023 05:43
Grace
sorenbarrett said:
Thank you L.B. I hope you are feeling better and I appreciate your review and kind words
June 2nd, 2023 05:32
sorenbarrett said:
Thank you L.B. I hope you are feeling better and I appreciate your review and kind words
June 2nd, 2023 05:32
Grace
L. B. Mek said:
These words read to me
like a more refined mirror reflection
of my own humble post today
as once more we\'re in-sync, my kind friend
indeed
\'there is yet grace
in our fallible humanity\'
(thank you! a rejuvenating read
after what\'s been a sickly week for me)
June 2nd, 2023 02:09
L. B. Mek said:
These words read to me
like a more refined mirror reflection
of my own humble post today
as once more we\'re in-sync, my kind friend
indeed
\'there is yet grace
in our fallible humanity\'
(thank you! a rejuvenating read
after what\'s been a sickly week for me)
June 2nd, 2023 02:09
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