Comments received on poems by sorenbarrett
A baited trap of flowers
L. B. Mek said:
\'When I offered a bed of roses
I didn\'t mention the thorns\'
these words hit home, dear Poet
(I bought gardening gloves
for my heart, but still
it never seems to be enough
to keep the shrapnel
of belated regret from clustering
my mind and stifling
my lungs, capacity to hope...)
whatever side of blame we seat
we\'re each left contemplating
our what if\'s..
August 4th, 2023 03:29
L. B. Mek said:
\'When I offered a bed of roses
I didn\'t mention the thorns\'
these words hit home, dear Poet
(I bought gardening gloves
for my heart, but still
it never seems to be enough
to keep the shrapnel
of belated regret from clustering
my mind and stifling
my lungs, capacity to hope...)
whatever side of blame we seat
we\'re each left contemplating
our what if\'s..
August 4th, 2023 03:29
Cave in
L. B. Mek said:
ill-fated nightmares as reality
past mistakes repeatedly casually
justice ears deaf to our pleas
with lungs stunted by fear, we dare
to seek a reasoning, a grasp
asking why that we chose to intrust
with our cave\'s of hope
seems to be incapable of staying
by our side, without setting off
those land mines
we keep hidden, deep
within those singed corridors
of our heart..
(a great write dear Poet
forgive me
I couldn\'t help but try
and scribble a little poetic reply)
August 4th, 2023 03:20
L. B. Mek said:
ill-fated nightmares as reality
past mistakes repeatedly casually
justice ears deaf to our pleas
with lungs stunted by fear, we dare
to seek a reasoning, a grasp
asking why that we chose to intrust
with our cave\'s of hope
seems to be incapable of staying
by our side, without setting off
those land mines
we keep hidden, deep
within those singed corridors
of our heart..
(a great write dear Poet
forgive me
I couldn\'t help but try
and scribble a little poetic reply)
August 4th, 2023 03:20
Loaded gun
Goldfinch60 said:
BUT NOT YET SOREN!
I still have too many people to upset. LOL
ANDY
August 4th, 2023 00:37
Goldfinch60 said:
BUT NOT YET SOREN!
I still have too many people to upset. LOL
ANDY
August 4th, 2023 00:37
Loaded gun
jarcher54 said:
Sorry to disagree... when we were kids several of us all agreed to never die! (-:
August 3rd, 2023 11:00
jarcher54 said:
Sorry to disagree... when we were kids several of us all agreed to never die! (-:
August 3rd, 2023 11:00
Loaded gun
orchidee said:
A fine write SB.
Doh! I did not play Russian Roulette properly. I left one gun chamber EMPTY and filled the rest. 1 out of 6 chances you will see me again! lol.
Well, KP told me that\'s how it\'s played!
August 3rd, 2023 06:45
orchidee said:
A fine write SB.
Doh! I did not play Russian Roulette properly. I left one gun chamber EMPTY and filled the rest. 1 out of 6 chances you will see me again! lol.
Well, KP told me that\'s how it\'s played!
August 3rd, 2023 06:45
Loaded gun
Doggerel Dave said:
It doesn\'t, and I bow - just want it to be easy and quiet.
Neat write, Soren.
August 3rd, 2023 06:25
Doggerel Dave said:
It doesn\'t, and I bow - just want it to be easy and quiet.
Neat write, Soren.
August 3rd, 2023 06:25
A baited trap of flowers
Bella Shepard said:
Beware of lover\'s bearing roses? This is tantalizingly delicious dear poet!
August 2nd, 2023 16:02
Bella Shepard said:
Beware of lover\'s bearing roses? This is tantalizingly delicious dear poet!
August 2nd, 2023 16:02
Nature\'s servitude (a fable)
L. B. Mek said:
\'Far below the misty wisps of the broken billowing tide,
a slow rolling breaker, spreads its whitewash of light\'
Brilliant!
(astounding poetic ambition, dear Poet
what hard earned skill and patience you showcase
just see for yourself
how your writing favourably compares
to the master himself:)
\'Her azure veins, her alabaster skin,
Her coral lips, her snow-white dimpled chin.
As the grim lion fawneth o’er his prey
Sharp hunger by the conquest satisfied,
So o’er this sleeping soul doth Tarquin stay,
His rage of lust by gazing qualified;
Slacked, not suppressed; for, standing by her side,
His eye, which late this mutiny restrains,
Unto a greater uproar tempts his veins.
And they, like straggling slaves for pillage fighting,
Obdurate vassals fell exploits effecting.
In bloody death and ravishment delighting,
Nor children’s tears nor mothers’ groans respecting,
Swell in their pride, the onset still expecting.
Anon his beating heart, alarum striking,
Gives the hot charge and bids them do their liking.
His drumming heart cheers up his burning eye,
His eye commends the leading to his hand;
His hand, as proud of such a dignity,
Smoking with pride, marched on to make his stand
On her bare breast, the heart of all her land,
Whose ranks of blue veins, as his hand did scale,
Left their round turrets destitute and pale.
They, mustering to the quiet cabinet
Where their dear governess and lady lies,
Do tell her she is dreadfully beset
And fright her with confusion of their cries.
She, much amazed, breaks ope her locked-up eyes,
Who, peeping forth this tumult to behold,
Are by his flaming torch dimmed and controlled.
Imagine her as one in dead of night
From forth dull sleep by dreadful fancy waking,\'
(
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/50474/the-rape-of-lucrece
)
July 31st, 2023 02:55
L. B. Mek said:
\'Far below the misty wisps of the broken billowing tide,
a slow rolling breaker, spreads its whitewash of light\'
Brilliant!
(astounding poetic ambition, dear Poet
what hard earned skill and patience you showcase
just see for yourself
how your writing favourably compares
to the master himself:)
\'Her azure veins, her alabaster skin,
Her coral lips, her snow-white dimpled chin.
As the grim lion fawneth o’er his prey
Sharp hunger by the conquest satisfied,
So o’er this sleeping soul doth Tarquin stay,
His rage of lust by gazing qualified;
Slacked, not suppressed; for, standing by her side,
His eye, which late this mutiny restrains,
Unto a greater uproar tempts his veins.
And they, like straggling slaves for pillage fighting,
Obdurate vassals fell exploits effecting.
In bloody death and ravishment delighting,
Nor children’s tears nor mothers’ groans respecting,
Swell in their pride, the onset still expecting.
Anon his beating heart, alarum striking,
Gives the hot charge and bids them do their liking.
His drumming heart cheers up his burning eye,
His eye commends the leading to his hand;
His hand, as proud of such a dignity,
Smoking with pride, marched on to make his stand
On her bare breast, the heart of all her land,
Whose ranks of blue veins, as his hand did scale,
Left their round turrets destitute and pale.
They, mustering to the quiet cabinet
Where their dear governess and lady lies,
Do tell her she is dreadfully beset
And fright her with confusion of their cries.
She, much amazed, breaks ope her locked-up eyes,
Who, peeping forth this tumult to behold,
Are by his flaming torch dimmed and controlled.
Imagine her as one in dead of night
From forth dull sleep by dreadful fancy waking,\'
(
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/50474/the-rape-of-lucrece
)
July 31st, 2023 02:55
Nature\'s servitude (a fable)
Goldfinch60 said:
That last line says it all soren.
Andy
July 29th, 2023 01:53
Goldfinch60 said:
That last line says it all soren.
Andy
July 29th, 2023 01:53
Nature\'s servitude (a fable)
Bobby O said:
Resurrected sun
Misty wisps
Thirsty byway.
I’m jealous but glad to be friends w such a talent. I can’t yet tap into that part of my brain or thought process. The part you freaking nail is my goal to understand and use. You’re a monster.
July 28th, 2023 16:37
Bobby O said:
Resurrected sun
Misty wisps
Thirsty byway.
I’m jealous but glad to be friends w such a talent. I can’t yet tap into that part of my brain or thought process. The part you freaking nail is my goal to understand and use. You’re a monster.
July 28th, 2023 16:37
Parting Wish
Bella Shepard said:
This is such a beautiful love poem dear friend, and the script serves to enhance every line. You have me swooning, just thinking to being loved in such a way. Romance is very much alive and well!
July 28th, 2023 13:11
Bella Shepard said:
This is such a beautiful love poem dear friend, and the script serves to enhance every line. You have me swooning, just thinking to being loved in such a way. Romance is very much alive and well!
July 28th, 2023 13:11
Parting Wish
L. B. Mek said:
(I relate, i hurt, i hurry to forget
repress, till that scab
is unknowingly, picked at again...)
I hope the right one finds you
dear cherished friend
till then, I hope you find comfort
in knowing
i too share in a similar pain..
July 28th, 2023 03:51
L. B. Mek said:
(I relate, i hurt, i hurry to forget
repress, till that scab
is unknowingly, picked at again...)
I hope the right one finds you
dear cherished friend
till then, I hope you find comfort
in knowing
i too share in a similar pain..
July 28th, 2023 03:51
Parting Wish
Neville said:
not only an impressive poem and plea but also significantly enjoyed .. Neville
July 25th, 2023 13:09
Neville said:
not only an impressive poem and plea but also significantly enjoyed .. Neville
July 25th, 2023 13:09
Parting Wish
orchidee said:
Good write SB.
It brought on a swoon, but it\'s me sheltered life! lol.
July 25th, 2023 08:27
orchidee said:
Good write SB.
It brought on a swoon, but it\'s me sheltered life! lol.
July 25th, 2023 08:27
Sewer of the soul
L. B. Mek said:
\'To the silver tongue do not rush\'
(each lie
we sale to ourselves, become
a corrosive taint on our souls)
Brilliant imagery, dear Poet
thank you!
July 24th, 2023 02:25
L. B. Mek said:
\'To the silver tongue do not rush\'
(each lie
we sale to ourselves, become
a corrosive taint on our souls)
Brilliant imagery, dear Poet
thank you!
July 24th, 2023 02:25
Nothing more
L. B. Mek said:
a fitting tribute to those
who invested their crimson ink
to inspire, generations..
(loved reading this my friend
your bring out
that poet geek in me) lol
July 24th, 2023 02:22
L. B. Mek said:
a fitting tribute to those
who invested their crimson ink
to inspire, generations..
(loved reading this my friend
your bring out
that poet geek in me) lol
July 24th, 2023 02:22
Sewer of the soul
orchidee said:
And - in olden days they chucked it out of their windows to the street below. Poor people who were passing by just then! Yuk!
July 24th, 2023 01:46
orchidee said:
And - in olden days they chucked it out of their windows to the street below. Poor people who were passing by just then! Yuk!
July 24th, 2023 01:46
Sewer of the soul
Goldfinch60 said:
Clever write soren but my sewer was emptied a long time ago.
Andy
July 24th, 2023 00:51
Goldfinch60 said:
Clever write soren but my sewer was emptied a long time ago.
Andy
July 24th, 2023 00:51
Nothing more
Bella Shepard said:
So eloquently written dear friend, in effortless, flowing rhyme from line to line. I love the way you have addressed each beloved poet in terms of such endearment, and humility. Your modesty does you justice, but your talent can\'t help but shine forth. This is truly a fav!
July 22nd, 2023 13:32
Bella Shepard said:
So eloquently written dear friend, in effortless, flowing rhyme from line to line. I love the way you have addressed each beloved poet in terms of such endearment, and humility. Your modesty does you justice, but your talent can\'t help but shine forth. This is truly a fav!
July 22nd, 2023 13:32
Lost on a mobius strip
sorenbarrett said:
L.B your comments stimulate more thought than the poem or writing it. Thank you so much for your poignant thoughts friend.
July 22nd, 2023 10:10
sorenbarrett said:
L.B your comments stimulate more thought than the poem or writing it. Thank you so much for your poignant thoughts friend.
July 22nd, 2023 10:10
Killing a Ladybug
L. B. Mek said:
well, science
in its purest form
is (like philosophy)
a, most humble
aspect of our species,
where we readily admit
we know nothing at all
and unchain our innate
inquisitive traits
(well then
if we\'re admitting
we don\'t know, what is
or what works, best
why not make a chain necklace
with a four leaf clover
and offer it to our lover
and then maybe we tattoo
a few rabbit foots
and horse shoes
all over us, you know
just in case, something
work to our favour..)
lol
a deeply meaningful concept
you\'ve introduced for our
contemplation treat, thank you!
oh wise Poet
a fun read as well, cheers 🍻
July 21st, 2023 03:35
L. B. Mek said:
well, science
in its purest form
is (like philosophy)
a, most humble
aspect of our species,
where we readily admit
we know nothing at all
and unchain our innate
inquisitive traits
(well then
if we\'re admitting
we don\'t know, what is
or what works, best
why not make a chain necklace
with a four leaf clover
and offer it to our lover
and then maybe we tattoo
a few rabbit foots
and horse shoes
all over us, you know
just in case, something
work to our favour..)
lol
a deeply meaningful concept
you\'ve introduced for our
contemplation treat, thank you!
oh wise Poet
a fun read as well, cheers 🍻
July 21st, 2023 03:35
Lost on a mobius strip
L. B. Mek said:
\'should one resist or go with the flow?
Truth a ghostly, unfathomable game\'
\'A single dimension, the rest an illusion\'
\'intuition evaporated into the turmoil of one\'s mind\'
(this searching poem, attesting
to that innate, fallible dichotomy
in selfhood\'s, mirages
we, who curate what to identify
as truth
believing our eyes, asserting dominance
on existence
while witnessing a millennium old spec of light
as the stars we\'re afforded in life)
Brilliant!
July 21st, 2023 03:25
L. B. Mek said:
\'should one resist or go with the flow?
Truth a ghostly, unfathomable game\'
\'A single dimension, the rest an illusion\'
\'intuition evaporated into the turmoil of one\'s mind\'
(this searching poem, attesting
to that innate, fallible dichotomy
in selfhood\'s, mirages
we, who curate what to identify
as truth
believing our eyes, asserting dominance
on existence
while witnessing a millennium old spec of light
as the stars we\'re afforded in life)
Brilliant!
July 21st, 2023 03:25
Two sides
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'I love the beauty in this world
all that is still clean
all the people that are kind
the new growth that is green\'
(who needs coffee or a red bull
when your words, gift us
wings,
recycling the ugly in our lives
to curate words of beauty
what an inspirational endeavour)
I read and learn my wise friend
July 21st, 2023 03:18
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'I love the beauty in this world
all that is still clean
all the people that are kind
the new growth that is green\'
(who needs coffee or a red bull
when your words, gift us
wings,
recycling the ugly in our lives
to curate words of beauty
what an inspirational endeavour)
I read and learn my wise friend
July 21st, 2023 03:18
Killing a Ladybug
Goldfinch60 said:
I am not that superstitious soren. My daughter was born 13th January, one of the houses that Joyce and I lived in was Number 13. Fine words though as there are many that are superstitious.
Andy
July 21st, 2023 00:39
Goldfinch60 said:
I am not that superstitious soren. My daughter was born 13th January, one of the houses that Joyce and I lived in was Number 13. Fine words though as there are many that are superstitious.
Andy
July 21st, 2023 00:39
Killing a Ladybug
orchidee said:
Now, nope, never carried a rabbit\'s foot. Not seen any 3-legged rabbits about, thankfully!
July 20th, 2023 11:42
orchidee said:
Now, nope, never carried a rabbit\'s foot. Not seen any 3-legged rabbits about, thankfully!
July 20th, 2023 11:42
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