Comments received on poems by sorenbarrett
Just old
Soman Ragavan said:
As we get older, we become more contemplative, more philosophical. We ponder on the life gone through. The poem describes the body’s journey through life. In the final years, things start falling apart, for such is the ageing process.
The final line : “a rotting body bed ferried, to its waiting grave.”
Thus the body was rotting while still alive. The grave is waiting to gobble up.
“Since the day of my birth, my death began its walk. It is walking toward me, without hurrying.” – Jean Cocteau (1889-1963)
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May 28th, 2025 04:26
Soman Ragavan said:
As we get older, we become more contemplative, more philosophical. We ponder on the life gone through. The poem describes the body’s journey through life. In the final years, things start falling apart, for such is the ageing process.
The final line : “a rotting body bed ferried, to its waiting grave.”
Thus the body was rotting while still alive. The grave is waiting to gobble up.
“Since the day of my birth, my death began its walk. It is walking toward me, without hurrying.” – Jean Cocteau (1889-1963)
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May 28th, 2025 04:26
Just old
David Wakeling said:
This is amazing. I love the use of \"adjectives\" , It is so more pleasant to read a poem with adjectives.Rolling ripples and sagging flesh captures old age perfectly.Not really a perfect time of life.It can be hard work.A wonderful poemWell done.I enjoyed reading and had a laugh as well
May 28th, 2025 04:13
David Wakeling said:
This is amazing. I love the use of \"adjectives\" , It is so more pleasant to read a poem with adjectives.Rolling ripples and sagging flesh captures old age perfectly.Not really a perfect time of life.It can be hard work.A wonderful poemWell done.I enjoyed reading and had a laugh as well
May 28th, 2025 04:13
Just old
teardrop said:
Getting old (I\'m gonna say, \"getting older\" sure isn\'t as I was told. There is no gold in those golden years. You have penned this so perfectly!
May 28th, 2025 03:19
teardrop said:
Getting old (I\'m gonna say, \"getting older\" sure isn\'t as I was told. There is no gold in those golden years. You have penned this so perfectly!
May 28th, 2025 03:19
Gone
Goldfinch60 said:
So much to be seen in these words soren but we must realise that even from death life arises.
Andy
May 28th, 2025 01:53
Goldfinch60 said:
So much to be seen in these words soren but we must realise that even from death life arises.
Andy
May 28th, 2025 01:53
Demise of a poem
NafisaSB said:
i have lots of scribblings which either die a natural death, when left incomplete for lack of inspiration - just thoughts jotted down on pieces i could write on. so i can empathize fully with you - but don\'t give up hope - try again, and if it seems impossible, delete it and move on to your next poem -
as it is - you are one of the most prolific poets on this site
so don\'t lose hope - but keep composing, and sharing as and when the muse strikes
May 28th, 2025 01:27
NafisaSB said:
i have lots of scribblings which either die a natural death, when left incomplete for lack of inspiration - just thoughts jotted down on pieces i could write on. so i can empathize fully with you - but don\'t give up hope - try again, and if it seems impossible, delete it and move on to your next poem -
as it is - you are one of the most prolific poets on this site
so don\'t lose hope - but keep composing, and sharing as and when the muse strikes
May 28th, 2025 01:27
Redemption in deception
sunshine777 said:
Perhaps this is where against the grain grew in. Great write once again!
May 27th, 2025 20:55
sunshine777 said:
Perhaps this is where against the grain grew in. Great write once again!
May 27th, 2025 20:55
Gone
Eugene S. said:
Reminds me that though the individual (tree) died, it hosted how many birds, how many bromeliads, how many insects? Did the micorrhizae underground connect its roots to another tree so that hormonal \"tree talk\" could take place. How much carbon did the tree sequester out of our air? How much oxygen did it give us in return? It lives on through its gifts that made this world continue on. Not bad for a tree that is no more! Love the poem!!
May 27th, 2025 15:25
Eugene S. said:
Reminds me that though the individual (tree) died, it hosted how many birds, how many bromeliads, how many insects? Did the micorrhizae underground connect its roots to another tree so that hormonal \"tree talk\" could take place. How much carbon did the tree sequester out of our air? How much oxygen did it give us in return? It lives on through its gifts that made this world continue on. Not bad for a tree that is no more! Love the poem!!
May 27th, 2025 15:25
Gone
MendedFences27 said:
This reminded me of the Dutch Elm Disease that wiped out all the chestnut trees in the U.S. They died from the inside out, became a hollowed-out trunk and nothing else. Can we try to save our natural environment?
- Phil A.
May 27th, 2025 14:28
MendedFences27 said:
This reminded me of the Dutch Elm Disease that wiped out all the chestnut trees in the U.S. They died from the inside out, became a hollowed-out trunk and nothing else. Can we try to save our natural environment?
- Phil A.
May 27th, 2025 14:28
Gone
orchidee said:
Good write SB. I see some trees with rot or leaning over. Must have strong roots so as not to come crashing down.
A joke now (argh): What is brown and green, and if it fell on you out of a tree, would kill you? Nope, not a branch - but a snooker table! heehee.
May 27th, 2025 07:56
orchidee said:
Good write SB. I see some trees with rot or leaning over. Must have strong roots so as not to come crashing down.
A joke now (argh): What is brown and green, and if it fell on you out of a tree, would kill you? Nope, not a branch - but a snooker table! heehee.
May 27th, 2025 07:56
Gone
Poetic Licence said:
To be free we have to discard all the rot around us and the debris of our life\'s, a very positive message, may take a bit of time!!!, enjoyed the read
May 27th, 2025 06:43
Poetic Licence said:
To be free we have to discard all the rot around us and the debris of our life\'s, a very positive message, may take a bit of time!!!, enjoyed the read
May 27th, 2025 06:43
Floral memories
GenXer Shamrocker ☘️ said:
Lilacs have always been my favorite! A touching poem of seasons and changes.
May 27th, 2025 05:23
GenXer Shamrocker ☘️ said:
Lilacs have always been my favorite! A touching poem of seasons and changes.
May 27th, 2025 05:23
Gone
Salvia.S said:
A powerful metaphor about decay and the need to let go of what clings to us - quietly thought-provoking and beautifully written.
May 27th, 2025 04:40
Salvia.S said:
A powerful metaphor about decay and the need to let go of what clings to us - quietly thought-provoking and beautifully written.
May 27th, 2025 04:40
Gone
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
Your words weave nature’s truth with haunting grace—
a stark reminder to shed what decays, leaving no trace.
May 27th, 2025 04:24
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
Your words weave nature’s truth with haunting grace—
a stark reminder to shed what decays, leaving no trace.
May 27th, 2025 04:24
Gone
David Wakeling said:
This is a wonderfully constructrd piece.There is a great metaphor in the fallen tree.I see the secret to freedom is get rid of \"debris\" or things we don\'t need, An enjoyable clever poem.Well done
May 27th, 2025 04:09
David Wakeling said:
This is a wonderfully constructrd piece.There is a great metaphor in the fallen tree.I see the secret to freedom is get rid of \"debris\" or things we don\'t need, An enjoyable clever poem.Well done
May 27th, 2025 04:09
Gone
Teddy.15 said:
I see two very important meanings to this poem, I see the soul of a person and a soul of a tree. Wonderful 🌹
May 27th, 2025 04:02
Teddy.15 said:
I see two very important meanings to this poem, I see the soul of a person and a soul of a tree. Wonderful 🌹
May 27th, 2025 04:02
Pebbles
Salvia.S said:
A beautifully evocative poem - fleeting, elemental and ephemeral.
May 27th, 2025 03:13
Salvia.S said:
A beautifully evocative poem - fleeting, elemental and ephemeral.
May 27th, 2025 03:13
Pebbles
Goldfinch60 said:
THos ripples can turn into waves soren but then they can turn back into ripples.
Andy
May 27th, 2025 01:24
Goldfinch60 said:
THos ripples can turn into waves soren but then they can turn back into ripples.
Andy
May 27th, 2025 01:24
Pebbles
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love the metaphor, pebbles creating ripples, and have used it myself; never in a poem though. Well done, Soren. 🌹👏
May 26th, 2025 15:21
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love the metaphor, pebbles creating ripples, and have used it myself; never in a poem though. Well done, Soren. 🌹👏
May 26th, 2025 15:21
Good taste
Maryel said:
Poor neighbour. Just when he thought it was safe to go in the water! Darkly amusing.
May 26th, 2025 14:31
Maryel said:
Poor neighbour. Just when he thought it was safe to go in the water! Darkly amusing.
May 26th, 2025 14:31
Redemption in deception
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Indeed. Nothing...and I mean nothing...is BLACK & WHITE. That\'s just faux security for the insecure. Well done on this poetic musing, my friend. 🌹👏
May 26th, 2025 08:48
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Indeed. Nothing...and I mean nothing...is BLACK & WHITE. That\'s just faux security for the insecure. Well done on this poetic musing, my friend. 🌹👏
May 26th, 2025 08:48
Pebbles
Poetic Licence said:
In my turbulent mind these words do feel like a ripple in the pond, enjoyed the read
May 26th, 2025 04:45
Poetic Licence said:
In my turbulent mind these words do feel like a ripple in the pond, enjoyed the read
May 26th, 2025 04:45
Pebbles
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
Your words ripple through time,
each verse a pebble in the mind’s pond—
beauty fleeting, impact eternal.
May 26th, 2025 04:38
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
Your words ripple through time,
each verse a pebble in the mind’s pond—
beauty fleeting, impact eternal.
May 26th, 2025 04:38
Pebbles
David Wakeling said:
I read here that creatvity in the form of a Poem, a sand castle or a song sung cause ripples in the world but nothing lasts and their impact can actually disturb the balance.Quite a lot in a small space,Well done
May 26th, 2025 04:22
David Wakeling said:
I read here that creatvity in the form of a Poem, a sand castle or a song sung cause ripples in the world but nothing lasts and their impact can actually disturb the balance.Quite a lot in a small space,Well done
May 26th, 2025 04:22
Pebbles
Teddy.15 said:
Having read this many times each time the visions are more powerful, a wonderful title and how I could see those ripples. Superb as ever dear sorrenbarret 🌹
May 26th, 2025 03:57
Teddy.15 said:
Having read this many times each time the visions are more powerful, a wonderful title and how I could see those ripples. Superb as ever dear sorrenbarret 🌹
May 26th, 2025 03:57
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