Comments received on poems by arqios
no flowers
orchidee said:
I have formed this into a hymn-poem, thank you. It should appear shortly. I\'ve added a bit, to make up the number of lines needed for each verse, but hopefully only changed things minimally, and stating your permission to adapt it.
December 6th, 2025 12:42
orchidee said:
I have formed this into a hymn-poem, thank you. It should appear shortly. I\'ve added a bit, to make up the number of lines needed for each verse, but hopefully only changed things minimally, and stating your permission to adapt it.
December 6th, 2025 12:42
no flowers
Bella Shepard said:
Death knows no bounds, it is an equal opportunity usurper of the famous, the infamous, the innocent and the guilty, and all that is left is the legacy for better or worse. Brilliant write!
December 6th, 2025 12:15
Bella Shepard said:
Death knows no bounds, it is an equal opportunity usurper of the famous, the infamous, the innocent and the guilty, and all that is left is the legacy for better or worse. Brilliant write!
December 6th, 2025 12:15
no flowers
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, the poem moves with a quiet ache…personal mourning layered over the unmarked graves of history. You carry both truths at once and let them echo. Beautifully done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 6th, 2025 10:59
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, the poem moves with a quiet ache…personal mourning layered over the unmarked graves of history. You carry both truths at once and let them echo. Beautifully done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 6th, 2025 10:59
no flowers
orchidee said:
Good write A. There\'s the cliches maybe - \'God takes the best people to be flowers in his garden\' and \'The good die young\'. But those two sayings are not Biblical; rather \'old wives tales\' as the Bible says. Those sayings don\'t help families of \'innocent\' children or relatives slain.
Meanwhile - I don\'t know if it\'s the wives who are old, or the tales, or both. Eh? lol.
I could sort of set this to a hymn-tune if you wish.
December 6th, 2025 07:55
orchidee said:
Good write A. There\'s the cliches maybe - \'God takes the best people to be flowers in his garden\' and \'The good die young\'. But those two sayings are not Biblical; rather \'old wives tales\' as the Bible says. Those sayings don\'t help families of \'innocent\' children or relatives slain.
Meanwhile - I don\'t know if it\'s the wives who are old, or the tales, or both. Eh? lol.
I could sort of set this to a hymn-tune if you wish.
December 6th, 2025 07:55
no flowers
Friendship said:
The poem deals with the historical context of the Romanov family, particularly the execution of the children, and reflects on the nature of grief, memory, and the consequences of political violence. It brings attention to the often-overlooked victims of history and the moral implications of how society commemorates certain lives while neglecting
December 6th, 2025 07:26
Friendship said:
The poem deals with the historical context of the Romanov family, particularly the execution of the children, and reflects on the nature of grief, memory, and the consequences of political violence. It brings attention to the often-overlooked victims of history and the moral implications of how society commemorates certain lives while neglecting
December 6th, 2025 07:26
no flowers
sorenbarrett said:
What on this earth doth cures is judged the same by the universe. A lovely write Cryptic that is dark and all to true. Don\'t know if this is based on an actual event or if it is meant to be taken as a general application to not only Russia and the Siberian planes but other areas of banishment and genocide. Well done my firend
December 6th, 2025 05:29
sorenbarrett said:
What on this earth doth cures is judged the same by the universe. A lovely write Cryptic that is dark and all to true. Don\'t know if this is based on an actual event or if it is meant to be taken as a general application to not only Russia and the Siberian planes but other areas of banishment and genocide. Well done my firend
December 6th, 2025 05:29
cerulean chasm
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Arqios, you move so smoothly from dismissal to revelation…from seeing the belts as nothing to realizing their history is already sewn into you. The poem opens itself the longer it sits. Well done! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 5th, 2025 11:07
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Arqios, you move so smoothly from dismissal to revelation…from seeing the belts as nothing to realizing their history is already sewn into you. The poem opens itself the longer it sits. Well done! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 5th, 2025 11:07
cerulean chasm
Friendship said:
The poem explores the notion of fashion, specifically the symbolism of a belt, as a metaphor for societal constraints and expectations. It addresses how choices are often made for us, and how those choices carry significant weight in our lives, impacting our sense of individuality and agency.
December 5th, 2025 08:14
Friendship said:
The poem explores the notion of fashion, specifically the symbolism of a belt, as a metaphor for societal constraints and expectations. It addresses how choices are often made for us, and how those choices carry significant weight in our lives, impacting our sense of individuality and agency.
December 5th, 2025 08:14
cerulean chasm
orchidee said:
Well, if Soren and others can\'t guess the cryptic meanings, what chance have I got?! lol.
But I\'m gonna be cryptic and baffle folk, saying \'It\'s a nice cerulean sky today\'. lol.
December 5th, 2025 05:42
orchidee said:
Well, if Soren and others can\'t guess the cryptic meanings, what chance have I got?! lol.
But I\'m gonna be cryptic and baffle folk, saying \'It\'s a nice cerulean sky today\'. lol.
December 5th, 2025 05:42
cerulean chasm
sorenbarrett said:
You got me on this one Criptic I have reviewed this one several times and the belts seem the key yet I can not decide what the belts are. Blue is it the mood, two belts do they tie the two people together? As you say are they the minutia that hold the weight of the world? It all sounds so poetic but I have not found the end to unravel it.
December 5th, 2025 05:33
sorenbarrett said:
You got me on this one Criptic I have reviewed this one several times and the belts seem the key yet I can not decide what the belts are. Blue is it the mood, two belts do they tie the two people together? As you say are they the minutia that hold the weight of the world? It all sounds so poetic but I have not found the end to unravel it.
December 5th, 2025 05:33
running into the mirror
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Rik, as long as we are still running life will be good.
Andy
December 5th, 2025 02:25
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Rik, as long as we are still running life will be good.
Andy
December 5th, 2025 02:25
running into the mirror
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Rik, the chase, the mirror, the night… you weave them into a truth that’s both intimate and universal. The poem holds grit and vulnerability in the same breath. Strong work, dear friend!. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 4th, 2025 18:28
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Rik, the chase, the mirror, the night… you weave them into a truth that’s both intimate and universal. The poem holds grit and vulnerability in the same breath. Strong work, dear friend!. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 4th, 2025 18:28
running into the mirror
orchidee said:
Good write A. Yep, this is probably exi-wotsit (existential) - if I knew what the word meant! lol.
December 4th, 2025 05:47
orchidee said:
Good write A. Yep, this is probably exi-wotsit (existential) - if I knew what the word meant! lol.
December 4th, 2025 05:47
running into the mirror
sorenbarrett said:
This my friend is deeply existential. Each set of lines a thought all unified by a self search.
\"but the ink stains your palms
like unpaid rent.\"
\"dreams are not debit‑free.\"
\"half‑terrified that the finish line
is nothing more than
a folded bill in someone else’s pocket.\"
All great lines pregnant with meaning. And to tie them all together is that need to understand oneself and defeat the rebellion for once know it is useless to fight against oneself. A fave
December 4th, 2025 05:41
sorenbarrett said:
This my friend is deeply existential. Each set of lines a thought all unified by a self search.
\"but the ink stains your palms
like unpaid rent.\"
\"dreams are not debit‑free.\"
\"half‑terrified that the finish line
is nothing more than
a folded bill in someone else’s pocket.\"
All great lines pregnant with meaning. And to tie them all together is that need to understand oneself and defeat the rebellion for once know it is useless to fight against oneself. A fave
December 4th, 2025 05:41
running into the mirror
Katie B. said:
Excellent! Well written! Dynamic and engaging. Nice read, nice write.
December 4th, 2025 05:21
Katie B. said:
Excellent! Well written! Dynamic and engaging. Nice read, nice write.
December 4th, 2025 05:21
call it survival
Goldfinch60 said:
May your toast be buttered every day Rik.
Andy
December 4th, 2025 02:14
Goldfinch60 said:
May your toast be buttered every day Rik.
Andy
December 4th, 2025 02:14
call it survival
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, this piece is soft but piercing…the “small sun” on the knife, that impossible wish to keep what we consume, the quiet laugh at the end. It’s survival written as a tiny daily liturgy…and it works beautifully. Loved this lots! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 3rd, 2025 18:39
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, this piece is soft but piercing…the “small sun” on the knife, that impossible wish to keep what we consume, the quiet laugh at the end. It’s survival written as a tiny daily liturgy…and it works beautifully. Loved this lots! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 3rd, 2025 18:39
call it survival
Friendship said:
Well done, your poem was delightful, and I must say, it\'s quite humorous. This morning, I made toast, which, unfortunately, turned out to be burnt. Despite initial doubts, I decided to butter it and took a carefree approach, thinking what the hell, and went ahead and ate it. Although the taste was absolutely horrible, reading your poem brought back memories of my breakfast.
December 3rd, 2025 17:01
Friendship said:
Well done, your poem was delightful, and I must say, it\'s quite humorous. This morning, I made toast, which, unfortunately, turned out to be burnt. Despite initial doubts, I decided to butter it and took a carefree approach, thinking what the hell, and went ahead and ate it. Although the taste was absolutely horrible, reading your poem brought back memories of my breakfast.
December 3rd, 2025 17:01
call it survival
orchidee said:
Can we have our toast and eat it too? It seems we can\'t have cake and eat it too! lol.
December 3rd, 2025 11:22
orchidee said:
Can we have our toast and eat it too? It seems we can\'t have cake and eat it too! lol.
December 3rd, 2025 11:22
call it survival
sorenbarrett said:
Cryptic this speaks to the very nature of life that requires consuming and yet wanting to maintain. Time itself is consumed, yet we wish it back in our nostalgia and memories. When I eat toast the plate is never left clean there are always a few crumbs left behind and it will need to be washed. A lovely poem my friend
December 3rd, 2025 05:43
sorenbarrett said:
Cryptic this speaks to the very nature of life that requires consuming and yet wanting to maintain. Time itself is consumed, yet we wish it back in our nostalgia and memories. When I eat toast the plate is never left clean there are always a few crumbs left behind and it will need to be washed. A lovely poem my friend
December 3rd, 2025 05:43
benign maleficense
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine meaningful words Rik, we often sign our lives away unknowingly.
Andy
December 3rd, 2025 02:29
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine meaningful words Rik, we often sign our lives away unknowingly.
Andy
December 3rd, 2025 02:29
benign maleficense
Dan Williams said:
This is clever and unique, from \"clerk’s smile at the counter,
forms stamped in triplicate\" all the way to \"the phrase signs your name\", then the killer last line. Bravo.
December 3rd, 2025 01:52
Dan Williams said:
This is clever and unique, from \"clerk’s smile at the counter,
forms stamped in triplicate\" all the way to \"the phrase signs your name\", then the killer last line. Bravo.
December 3rd, 2025 01:52
benign maleficense
Paul Bell said:
It\'s all in the handshake and smile.
You just know you\'re being shafted, and strangely enough, it\'s always professional bodies.
December 2nd, 2025 11:02
Paul Bell said:
It\'s all in the handshake and smile.
You just know you\'re being shafted, and strangely enough, it\'s always professional bodies.
December 2nd, 2025 11:02
benign maleficense
Tristan Robert Lange said:
arqios, I’ve felt this kind of institutional sleight of hand…the polite mask over real damage. You captured that erosion with precision as only a poet could! Well done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 2nd, 2025 10:46
Tristan Robert Lange said:
arqios, I’ve felt this kind of institutional sleight of hand…the polite mask over real damage. You captured that erosion with precision as only a poet could! Well done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
December 2nd, 2025 10:46
benign maleficense
orchidee said:
And what\'s more, I wouldn\'t like that word in a spelling quiz - mall-e-wotsit!
December 2nd, 2025 09:52
orchidee said:
And what\'s more, I wouldn\'t like that word in a spelling quiz - mall-e-wotsit!
December 2nd, 2025 09:52
benign maleficense
orchidee said:
Sounds like some shifty or dodgy goings -on here! lol. Fido asks me: \'Don\'t say you\'ve got the meaning of a cryptic poem. You must have gained an extra brain cell. That\'ll make 4 in total now\' - whereas Fido has 40 billion! lol.
December 2nd, 2025 09:51
orchidee said:
Sounds like some shifty or dodgy goings -on here! lol. Fido asks me: \'Don\'t say you\'ve got the meaning of a cryptic poem. You must have gained an extra brain cell. That\'ll make 4 in total now\' - whereas Fido has 40 billion! lol.
December 2nd, 2025 09:51
benign maleficense
sorenbarrett said:
I hear the indignation in this write Cryptic an outrage in quiet that infuses into the bureaucratic papers of justice. Oversights wiped away with a shrug injustice with an \"I don\'t make the rules\" an injury with the response \"sorry about that\" treated at the counter with the words \"unfortunately\" Better that they be open and just say \"fuck you\" An oversight, laziness padded with indifference and who suffers. As they say \"that\'s the way it goes\" Great write my friend
December 2nd, 2025 06:32
sorenbarrett said:
I hear the indignation in this write Cryptic an outrage in quiet that infuses into the bureaucratic papers of justice. Oversights wiped away with a shrug injustice with an \"I don\'t make the rules\" an injury with the response \"sorry about that\" treated at the counter with the words \"unfortunately\" Better that they be open and just say \"fuck you\" An oversight, laziness padded with indifference and who suffers. As they say \"that\'s the way it goes\" Great write my friend
December 2nd, 2025 06:32
benign maleficense
Friendship said:
Well written, my friend, the poem explores the concept of \"benign malfeasance,\" suggesting that actions intended to be harmless can still lead to damaging or unethical outcomes. It critiques the bureaucratic and societal systems that allow for harm to be masked by politeness, legality, and superficial kindness.
December 2nd, 2025 05:44
Friendship said:
Well written, my friend, the poem explores the concept of \"benign malfeasance,\" suggesting that actions intended to be harmless can still lead to damaging or unethical outcomes. It critiques the bureaucratic and societal systems that allow for harm to be masked by politeness, legality, and superficial kindness.
December 2nd, 2025 05:44
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