Comments received on poems by arqios
\"before the next breath\"
2781 said:
I\'m not sure- I hope it\'s worth the ping!
August 7th, 2025 06:33
2781 said:
I\'m not sure- I hope it\'s worth the ping!
August 7th, 2025 06:33
\"before the next breath\"
arqios said:
...a third from direct appeal, the jury is still out...
August 7th, 2025 05:50
arqios said:
...a third from direct appeal, the jury is still out...
August 7th, 2025 05:50
\"before the next breath\"
Poetic Licence said:
I prefer the first, Vanish by dawn rather then fleeting gleams, enjoyed the read
August 7th, 2025 05:29
Poetic Licence said:
I prefer the first, Vanish by dawn rather then fleeting gleams, enjoyed the read
August 7th, 2025 05:29
\"before the next breath\"
sorenbarrett said:
It is always difficult to choose in such situations because I am prejudiced by having read one first and that impacts the reading of the second. I have read these over several times each and have preferences from each but overall I believe I like the first rendition best. I like its first line better although I vacillate between the forth line in the first stanza. A difficult choice but I\'ll stick with the first
August 7th, 2025 04:21
sorenbarrett said:
It is always difficult to choose in such situations because I am prejudiced by having read one first and that impacts the reading of the second. I have read these over several times each and have preferences from each but overall I believe I like the first rendition best. I like its first line better although I vacillate between the forth line in the first stanza. A difficult choice but I\'ll stick with the first
August 7th, 2025 04:21
\"before the next breath\"
Cheeky Missy said:
The second, easily, thanks to the more particular choices in words, these seeming to elevate the whole until it nearly floated lightly in the ether. [But I\'m too fatigued, presently, by third shift; it took a couple attempts before I could even ascertain a difference.] Very beautifully rendered with gorgeous imagery and a tantalizing poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
August 7th, 2025 03:45
Cheeky Missy said:
The second, easily, thanks to the more particular choices in words, these seeming to elevate the whole until it nearly floated lightly in the ether. [But I\'m too fatigued, presently, by third shift; it took a couple attempts before I could even ascertain a difference.] Very beautifully rendered with gorgeous imagery and a tantalizing poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
August 7th, 2025 03:45
murmur of whispers
rrodriguez said:
The world is awake, and it isn\'t very comforting... Loved it!
August 6th, 2025 17:31
rrodriguez said:
The world is awake, and it isn\'t very comforting... Loved it!
August 6th, 2025 17:31
“spark of now”
Kevin Hulme said:
This resonates with me. Shh, I can say no more.
Very nice.
August 6th, 2025 12:19
Kevin Hulme said:
This resonates with me. Shh, I can say no more.
Very nice.
August 6th, 2025 12:19
“spark of now”
Bella Shepard said:
I see two hearts meet as one, only to lose each other before that love could ever be fulfilled. Sad, faded memories of what might have been, but never was. A case of two lovers, so right for each other, but time and chance, keeps them apart. Beautifully told!
August 6th, 2025 11:30
Bella Shepard said:
I see two hearts meet as one, only to lose each other before that love could ever be fulfilled. Sad, faded memories of what might have been, but never was. A case of two lovers, so right for each other, but time and chance, keeps them apart. Beautifully told!
August 6th, 2025 11:30
“spark of now”
Neville said:
Reading this felt like a rite of passage .. exquisite ink enjoyed so much .. I\'m so glad I stopped by .. Neville
August 6th, 2025 07:27
Neville said:
Reading this felt like a rite of passage .. exquisite ink enjoyed so much .. I\'m so glad I stopped by .. Neville
August 6th, 2025 07:27
“spark of now”
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, arqios. For me, a delightful look into the world of electronic love. My memories of past loves took place before the advent of electronics. Thanks for the peek.
August 6th, 2025 06:12
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, arqios. For me, a delightful look into the world of electronic love. My memories of past loves took place before the advent of electronics. Thanks for the peek.
August 6th, 2025 06:12
“spark of now”
arqios said:
Is it really a case of what you see is what you get?
August 6th, 2025 06:07
arqios said:
Is it really a case of what you see is what you get?
August 6th, 2025 06:07
“spark of now”
Poetic Licence said:
A write I feel goes two ways the love at first sight which can flicker. I knew someone who kept looking at a photo of a past lover, who could not just forget and delete, enjoyed the read
August 6th, 2025 06:02
Poetic Licence said:
A write I feel goes two ways the love at first sight which can flicker. I knew someone who kept looking at a photo of a past lover, who could not just forget and delete, enjoyed the read
August 6th, 2025 06:02
“spark of now”
sorenbarrett said:
Is this a reference to love at first sight? A write in the now.that is always present but as stated flickers and fades. Loved it
August 6th, 2025 04:15
sorenbarrett said:
Is this a reference to love at first sight? A write in the now.that is always present but as stated flickers and fades. Loved it
August 6th, 2025 04:15
“spark of now”
arqios said:
So this is the more permanent posting that can be filed away for future reference. The photo can be saved as well
August 6th, 2025 03:08
arqios said:
So this is the more permanent posting that can be filed away for future reference. The photo can be saved as well
August 6th, 2025 03:08
unsending love
Friendship said:
Wow, emotional journey of retracting love, reflecting on shared moments, and the transformation of a once-vibrant relationship into silence and absence. It addresses themes of memory, loss, and the fleeting nature of love.
August 5th, 2025 18:16
Friendship said:
Wow, emotional journey of retracting love, reflecting on shared moments, and the transformation of a once-vibrant relationship into silence and absence. It addresses themes of memory, loss, and the fleeting nature of love.
August 5th, 2025 18:16
unsending love
Cheeky Missy said:
Tagore was so exquisite and passionately all about love, love, love romance, I was swept away on those golden wings, intoxicated. Curiously, therein I found a kinship with the loving relationship I thought I had with the LORD of the holy Scriptures. Finding how unbiblical his love was in contrast to the God of the Bible, I saw the error of my ways and repudiated them. It\'s fascinating you reference him, playing off his excellence with this lovely piece in eloquent tribute to divorce. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a painful poignancy. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 5th, 2025 17:35
Cheeky Missy said:
Tagore was so exquisite and passionately all about love, love, love romance, I was swept away on those golden wings, intoxicated. Curiously, therein I found a kinship with the loving relationship I thought I had with the LORD of the holy Scriptures. Finding how unbiblical his love was in contrast to the God of the Bible, I saw the error of my ways and repudiated them. It\'s fascinating you reference him, playing off his excellence with this lovely piece in eloquent tribute to divorce. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a painful poignancy. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 5th, 2025 17:35
unsending love
Poetic Licence said:
Apologies Arqios I thought I had left feedback this, morning. I guess there are some people who might be able to do this and relieve themselves of the pain and hurt, it certainly is a logical and ideal way to deal with lost love. The write is really well thought out and written, enjoyed the read
August 5th, 2025 16:02
Poetic Licence said:
Apologies Arqios I thought I had left feedback this, morning. I guess there are some people who might be able to do this and relieve themselves of the pain and hurt, it certainly is a logical and ideal way to deal with lost love. The write is really well thought out and written, enjoyed the read
August 5th, 2025 16:02
unsending love
arqios said:
It can be reimagined thusly: \"In one fleeting breath I held your name,
Once, just once—no age-old reverie to bind us.
My heart unraveled its songs before they formed,
No necklace of memories, only shards of now.
When I scroll through screens of touch and text,
You blur before me—a spark that flickers, then fades.\"
August 5th, 2025 05:13
arqios said:
It can be reimagined thusly: \"In one fleeting breath I held your name,
Once, just once—no age-old reverie to bind us.
My heart unraveled its songs before they formed,
No necklace of memories, only shards of now.
When I scroll through screens of touch and text,
You blur before me—a spark that flickers, then fades.\"
August 5th, 2025 05:13
unsending love
sorenbarrett said:
A dark and sad poem but maybe not for if love can be unsent then never felt and now not remembered there will be no pain and in that a sun raises on new terrain of a reborn world. Lovely
August 5th, 2025 04:35
sorenbarrett said:
A dark and sad poem but maybe not for if love can be unsent then never felt and now not remembered there will be no pain and in that a sun raises on new terrain of a reborn world. Lovely
August 5th, 2025 04:35
reader, read her
Dan Williams said:
This is what poetry is supposed to be all about. I mean \"the page expands—
a breath between lines, a lull between thoughts\" is classic. Very nice.
August 5th, 2025 01:49
Dan Williams said:
This is what poetry is supposed to be all about. I mean \"the page expands—
a breath between lines, a lull between thoughts\" is classic. Very nice.
August 5th, 2025 01:49
reader, read her
orchidee said:
Oh, I dunno, this is probably too cryptic for me. Summat about some bloke not climbing Everest? I knew I wouldn\'t get the hidden meanings! I must ask Fido, who knows of course. heehee.
August 4th, 2025 10:37
orchidee said:
Oh, I dunno, this is probably too cryptic for me. Summat about some bloke not climbing Everest? I knew I wouldn\'t get the hidden meanings! I must ask Fido, who knows of course. heehee.
August 4th, 2025 10:37
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