Comments received on poems by Your Girlfriend
The Reflection Stops
sorenbarrett said:
The first stanzas of rhyme are very well done with wonderful meter promoting a flow that carries the reader on. Their wonderful rhyme is masterful. Then you switch to pros and the emotion shows coming through in bursts that break the flow. Rhyme is gone as is the previous feel. It is as if the reader is standing in the room with someone who has broken. This is regained toward the end and finished well in the last lines of the poem.
February 20th, 2025 17:17
sorenbarrett said:
The first stanzas of rhyme are very well done with wonderful meter promoting a flow that carries the reader on. Their wonderful rhyme is masterful. Then you switch to pros and the emotion shows coming through in bursts that break the flow. Rhyme is gone as is the previous feel. It is as if the reader is standing in the room with someone who has broken. This is regained toward the end and finished well in the last lines of the poem.
February 20th, 2025 17:17
The Reflection Stops
Caring dove said:
Mirrors can be difficult to look into sometimes ..
February 20th, 2025 16:14
Caring dove said:
Mirrors can be difficult to look into sometimes ..
February 20th, 2025 16:14
Dangerous
john mead said:
straight cap not that dangerous guys shes capping
February 20th, 2025 13:43
john mead said:
straight cap not that dangerous guys shes capping
February 20th, 2025 13:43
Gotcha day #4
john mead said:
hey hon they banned me again friend me please love you
February 19th, 2025 18:59
john mead said:
hey hon they banned me again friend me please love you
February 19th, 2025 18:59
Just leave me alone
Salvia.S said:
Such a beautiful and relatable expression of the human need for solitude and quiet contemplation. Really amazing! Loved it ❤️.
February 18th, 2025 21:12
Salvia.S said:
Such a beautiful and relatable expression of the human need for solitude and quiet contemplation. Really amazing! Loved it ❤️.
February 18th, 2025 21:12
Just leave me alone
sorenbarrett said:
We all need personal space from time to time. Nicely written
February 18th, 2025 18:28
sorenbarrett said:
We all need personal space from time to time. Nicely written
February 18th, 2025 18:28
Love poems.
sorenbarrett said:
I can hear the anguish in this poem and the pain of separated lovers. Well written
February 16th, 2025 17:27
sorenbarrett said:
I can hear the anguish in this poem and the pain of separated lovers. Well written
February 16th, 2025 17:27
An apology to the one.
sorenbarrett said:
Heartfelt powerful, emotive this reads of turmoil and despair. Emotion so strong that it breeches the floodgates and pours over all below.
February 16th, 2025 04:05
sorenbarrett said:
Heartfelt powerful, emotive this reads of turmoil and despair. Emotion so strong that it breeches the floodgates and pours over all below.
February 16th, 2025 04:05
Would anyone care?
RSM0812 said:
Sounds like a lot of choice. Makes me be thankful for how many fish are in the sea. Lol
February 15th, 2025 10:34
RSM0812 said:
Sounds like a lot of choice. Makes me be thankful for how many fish are in the sea. Lol
February 15th, 2025 10:34
Would anyone care?
Cheeky Missy said:
You\'re both struggling. Just hang in there, please? Excellently rendered with a frightening poignancy and touch of imagery. Thank you for sharing.
February 14th, 2025 11:51
Cheeky Missy said:
You\'re both struggling. Just hang in there, please? Excellently rendered with a frightening poignancy and touch of imagery. Thank you for sharing.
February 14th, 2025 11:51
Would anyone care?
Avi said:
Lily id care if your gone please don’t do anything
February 14th, 2025 06:09
Avi said:
Lily id care if your gone please don’t do anything
February 14th, 2025 06:09
Would anyone care?
sorenbarrett said:
So important what others think. We are more than our social circle. Emotions run deep and fast at a young age. All spoken in this poem. I can feel the urgency
February 14th, 2025 06:09
sorenbarrett said:
So important what others think. We are more than our social circle. Emotions run deep and fast at a young age. All spoken in this poem. I can feel the urgency
February 14th, 2025 06:09
I cant, I don\'t want to.
Poetic Licence said:
A slightly dark read of despair and pain which you feel as read through the write, very well expressed
February 13th, 2025 18:32
Poetic Licence said:
A slightly dark read of despair and pain which you feel as read through the write, very well expressed
February 13th, 2025 18:32
I cant, I don\'t want to.
sorenbarrett said:
Wonderful rhyme and stark images are presented in this poem that ozzes despair and pain. Heart felt and dark it speaks of the author\'s suffering/
February 13th, 2025 17:11
sorenbarrett said:
Wonderful rhyme and stark images are presented in this poem that ozzes despair and pain. Heart felt and dark it speaks of the author\'s suffering/
February 13th, 2025 17:11
Confused, but scared.
sorenbarrett said:
Such beautiful words reflecting so much thought and emotion. Highly existential and self probing it speaks to the heart.
February 12th, 2025 20:01
sorenbarrett said:
Such beautiful words reflecting so much thought and emotion. Highly existential and self probing it speaks to the heart.
February 12th, 2025 20:01
Hurt the ones I love
sorenbarrett said:
A great thought that should be explored with the one you love. Very well written
February 11th, 2025 19:23
sorenbarrett said:
A great thought that should be explored with the one you love. Very well written
February 11th, 2025 19:23
Hurt the ones I love
Cassie58 said:
Oh young love. How it hurts the soul. You remind me of my first sweetheart. I still shed a tear for him now, but I moved on and loved again. I hear you Lil. Heartfelt writing.
February 11th, 2025 19:13
Cassie58 said:
Oh young love. How it hurts the soul. You remind me of my first sweetheart. I still shed a tear for him now, but I moved on and loved again. I hear you Lil. Heartfelt writing.
February 11th, 2025 19:13
Hurt the ones I love
Distant View said:
A heartfelt write! Life can be confusing and frustrating when you are young. Writing helps you to cope with it all! Keep on writing!
February 11th, 2025 16:32
Distant View said:
A heartfelt write! Life can be confusing and frustrating when you are young. Writing helps you to cope with it all! Keep on writing!
February 11th, 2025 16:32
For I am loyal
Poetic Licence said:
You can feel the loss and pain as you read through a very emotional write, trying to come to terms with true heartbreak. Powerful piece
February 10th, 2025 15:58
Poetic Licence said:
You can feel the loss and pain as you read through a very emotional write, trying to come to terms with true heartbreak. Powerful piece
February 10th, 2025 15:58
For I am loyal
sorenbarrett said:
Time is a heavy opponent. I can hear the pain of loss in this poem a sense of deception. Very emotional and powerful
February 10th, 2025 15:18
sorenbarrett said:
Time is a heavy opponent. I can hear the pain of loss in this poem a sense of deception. Very emotional and powerful
February 10th, 2025 15:18
Why cant everyone leave me alone?
Avi said:
Lily hey I’m sorry Ik I didn’t leave you alone yesterday but I’m sorry I didn’t mean to be mean or anything I feel bad about it if you can forgive me I would appreciate it if not it’s fine ig we’ve been friends for awhile
February 10th, 2025 13:15
Avi said:
Lily hey I’m sorry Ik I didn’t leave you alone yesterday but I’m sorry I didn’t mean to be mean or anything I feel bad about it if you can forgive me I would appreciate it if not it’s fine ig we’ve been friends for awhile
February 10th, 2025 13:15
I wanna, but just cant
teardrop said:
Wow, I tru;ly understand your words. I started writing at age 12. It was my only release as far as letting my feelings out. If I didn\'t have pen and paper, I think I would have exploded. Writing actually became my best friend. Hope your writing helps you funnel some of your confusing feelings. Keep writing!
February 10th, 2025 03:24
teardrop said:
Wow, I tru;ly understand your words. I started writing at age 12. It was my only release as far as letting my feelings out. If I didn\'t have pen and paper, I think I would have exploded. Writing actually became my best friend. Hope your writing helps you funnel some of your confusing feelings. Keep writing!
February 10th, 2025 03:24
Why cant everyone leave me alone?
orchidee said:
Cooeee! It\'s me interfering, not leaving you alone! Ooohh, heehee.
February 10th, 2025 03:10
orchidee said:
Cooeee! It\'s me interfering, not leaving you alone! Ooohh, heehee.
February 10th, 2025 03:10
Why cant everyone leave me alone?
David Wakeling said:
This si quite sad and powerful essay asking the question \"Why can\'t they leave me alone\". I remember the late great Audrey Hepburn said she didn\'t want to be alone she wanted to be left alone.\" The poem makes it very clear that someone is stressed.They need a holiday in the Bahamas without the kids.Just sun bake every day and party every night. Very strong emotions going on here
February 9th, 2025 21:53
David Wakeling said:
This si quite sad and powerful essay asking the question \"Why can\'t they leave me alone\". I remember the late great Audrey Hepburn said she didn\'t want to be alone she wanted to be left alone.\" The poem makes it very clear that someone is stressed.They need a holiday in the Bahamas without the kids.Just sun bake every day and party every night. Very strong emotions going on here
February 9th, 2025 21:53
Why cant everyone leave me alone?
Cheeky Missy said:
It takes a while, but if you persist, they\'ll learn and shy away from you. Miserably that\'s how people are. Don\'t ask me how I know. I hate it too. Excellently rendered with a vibrant poignancy and great imagery. Thank you for sharing. Hang in there.
February 9th, 2025 20:40
Cheeky Missy said:
It takes a while, but if you persist, they\'ll learn and shy away from you. Miserably that\'s how people are. Don\'t ask me how I know. I hate it too. Excellently rendered with a vibrant poignancy and great imagery. Thank you for sharing. Hang in there.
February 9th, 2025 20:40
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