Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
Eyeing.
L. B. Mek said:
really liked the structure of each verse, almost an outline of a fish
and especially liked your first lines of each verse, it felt like I was diving in and out from one verse to the next: \'A fish, A gill, A skin, A fin, A flip\'
with an immersive title and a poignant accompanying picture to bind it all together
really well thought out, appreciated the layered imagery as well
nature is so engaging, abundant and accessible,
but the grey sandwich: of potholed gravel, grim - skyscraper horizons and gloomy skies drown it out, of most peoples sight
July 24th, 2020 03:01
L. B. Mek said:
really liked the structure of each verse, almost an outline of a fish
and especially liked your first lines of each verse, it felt like I was diving in and out from one verse to the next: \'A fish, A gill, A skin, A fin, A flip\'
with an immersive title and a poignant accompanying picture to bind it all together
really well thought out, appreciated the layered imagery as well
nature is so engaging, abundant and accessible,
but the grey sandwich: of potholed gravel, grim - skyscraper horizons and gloomy skies drown it out, of most peoples sight
July 24th, 2020 03:01
Eyeing.
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Fay, that communication with Nature is always so wonderful.
Andy
July 24th, 2020 00:02
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Fay, that communication with Nature is always so wonderful.
Andy
July 24th, 2020 00:02
Eyeing.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA here - Good Evening FAY - Just feeding our KOI and your Poem struck a CHORD ! When we bought our home it had a neglected Pond. Brian has renovated it and installed a Waterfall for aeration. We bought three small KOI & other fish etc.
Thanks for your *Ode to a Fish* it covers all the vital attributes which make a FISH a FISH. The Colour which makes each species distinctive - the Skin which is waterproof and almost transparent - the Fin which allows it to manoevre & its Flip which allows it to move gracefully in its 3D aquatic environment ! Delightful ! Thanks for composing (A Fave) and sharing !
Would you rather be a FISH ? Sometimes I wish !
Blessings & Peace & Joy & Love
Angela & Brian & Smokey Cat !
Please check our Fusion on *Dream Jobs* Ta A & B !
July 23rd, 2020 14:04
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA here - Good Evening FAY - Just feeding our KOI and your Poem struck a CHORD ! When we bought our home it had a neglected Pond. Brian has renovated it and installed a Waterfall for aeration. We bought three small KOI & other fish etc.
Thanks for your *Ode to a Fish* it covers all the vital attributes which make a FISH a FISH. The Colour which makes each species distinctive - the Skin which is waterproof and almost transparent - the Fin which allows it to manoevre & its Flip which allows it to move gracefully in its 3D aquatic environment ! Delightful ! Thanks for composing (A Fave) and sharing !
Would you rather be a FISH ? Sometimes I wish !
Blessings & Peace & Joy & Love
Angela & Brian & Smokey Cat !
Please check our Fusion on *Dream Jobs* Ta A & B !
July 23rd, 2020 14:04
Eyeing.
Suresh said:
a definition within a definition- but a definition was never so poetically expressed, such as only you can.
July 23rd, 2020 09:46
Suresh said:
a definition within a definition- but a definition was never so poetically expressed, such as only you can.
July 23rd, 2020 09:46
Eyeing.
dusk arising said:
A failed trout tickling? No, Fay wouldn\'t do that....
Though yes you would, without the final intent for supper..... re-reading...
Yes there it is... a beautiful description of truly communing with nature and the touch of a sleek wild fish.... I love the way you build this piece.... I have to ask, did you do it?
What mind does a fish possess, eyeing you?
Yep, immersed again in your words i bathed in this one. Keeping it as a fav.
July 23rd, 2020 05:09
dusk arising said:
A failed trout tickling? No, Fay wouldn\'t do that....
Though yes you would, without the final intent for supper..... re-reading...
Yes there it is... a beautiful description of truly communing with nature and the touch of a sleek wild fish.... I love the way you build this piece.... I have to ask, did you do it?
What mind does a fish possess, eyeing you?
Yep, immersed again in your words i bathed in this one. Keeping it as a fav.
July 23rd, 2020 05:09
Non-Sound.
Goldfinch60 said:
The flames of that love will be forever with you Fay.
Andy
July 23rd, 2020 00:25
Goldfinch60 said:
The flames of that love will be forever with you Fay.
Andy
July 23rd, 2020 00:25
Non-Sound.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE ~ Good Evening Fay ~ Thanks for an inspiring Poem on the Roller Coaster that is Love ! We have been married four months an we are still *Best Friends* ! We trust when we celebrate our Golden Wedding in March 2070 ~ We will still be able to say *IT WORKED ~ AMEN !* Please check *The Guitar Weeps* Thanks
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love Angela & Brian XOX
July 22nd, 2020 17:52
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE ~ Good Evening Fay ~ Thanks for an inspiring Poem on the Roller Coaster that is Love ! We have been married four months an we are still *Best Friends* ! We trust when we celebrate our Golden Wedding in March 2070 ~ We will still be able to say *IT WORKED ~ AMEN !* Please check *The Guitar Weeps* Thanks
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love Angela & Brian XOX
July 22nd, 2020 17:52
Non-Sound.
Neville said:
a flying visit I\'m afraid, but tis truly wonderful our Fay..
July 22nd, 2020 12:28
Neville said:
a flying visit I\'m afraid, but tis truly wonderful our Fay..
July 22nd, 2020 12:28
Non-Sound.
MendedFences27 said:
Fay, what a very poignant write. The trials and tribulation of love and romance over many years , and a successful outcome. Loved this insightful depiction of life\'s realities. And a happy ending. Well done - Phil A.
July 22nd, 2020 11:59
MendedFences27 said:
Fay, what a very poignant write. The trials and tribulation of love and romance over many years , and a successful outcome. Loved this insightful depiction of life\'s realities. And a happy ending. Well done - Phil A.
July 22nd, 2020 11:59
Non-Sound.
dusk arising said:
Seems to me you are describing that perfect relationship which lasts and sees through the test of time.
To edgy a personality to have seen it through i fell by marriage\'s wayside. Regrets are plentiful but given those times again.....
Well you certainly got me thinking with this post
July 22nd, 2020 03:29
dusk arising said:
Seems to me you are describing that perfect relationship which lasts and sees through the test of time.
To edgy a personality to have seen it through i fell by marriage\'s wayside. Regrets are plentiful but given those times again.....
Well you certainly got me thinking with this post
July 22nd, 2020 03:29
Captured.
Goldfinch60 said:
That wind in our world can be so helpful and so destructive but its power can be used to do so much good.
Andy
July 21st, 2020 23:58
Goldfinch60 said:
That wind in our world can be so helpful and so destructive but its power can be used to do so much good.
Andy
July 21st, 2020 23:58
Captured.
MendedFences27 said:
This is a fine take on one of Nature\'s great forces. We try to harness its power in sails and mills, but only meekly succeed. Unleashed it becomes wild and destructive.
You have \"Captured\" it many iterations with such great wording, that your poem must become a favorite. - Phil A.
July 21st, 2020 13:07
MendedFences27 said:
This is a fine take on one of Nature\'s great forces. We try to harness its power in sails and mills, but only meekly succeed. Unleashed it becomes wild and destructive.
You have \"Captured\" it many iterations with such great wording, that your poem must become a favorite. - Phil A.
July 21st, 2020 13:07
Captured.
Michael Edwards said:
Your work is so annoyingly consistent in quality - how do you do it?
I\'m jealous !!
July 21st, 2020 12:40
Michael Edwards said:
Your work is so annoyingly consistent in quality - how do you do it?
I\'m jealous !!
July 21st, 2020 12:40
Captured.
dusk arising said:
Your mention of slavery opened up a whole new reading of this piece for me today.
It is as if mankind\'s power is akin too the power of the wind. Yes great physical strength to achieve such wonders as the pyramids and great mental strength to achieve freedom, aid, charity and justice where it is needed.
Perhaps not a perfect interpretation of your intent but it\'s an imperfect world in which we strive.
July 21st, 2020 12:25
dusk arising said:
Your mention of slavery opened up a whole new reading of this piece for me today.
It is as if mankind\'s power is akin too the power of the wind. Yes great physical strength to achieve such wonders as the pyramids and great mental strength to achieve freedom, aid, charity and justice where it is needed.
Perhaps not a perfect interpretation of your intent but it\'s an imperfect world in which we strive.
July 21st, 2020 12:25
Captured.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. Erm, not quite a life on the ocean wave for me. More of a paddle in the pond at the back of the Co-op! lol.
July 21st, 2020 06:06
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. Erm, not quite a life on the ocean wave for me. More of a paddle in the pond at the back of the Co-op! lol.
July 21st, 2020 06:06
Undressed.
Goldfinch60 said:
They are mysterious things are shells and they could tell so many tales.
Andy
July 21st, 2020 00:12
Goldfinch60 said:
They are mysterious things are shells and they could tell so many tales.
Andy
July 21st, 2020 00:12
Undressed.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA here - Good Evening Fay ! All SEA SHELLS are masterpieces of Creation such a anug fit for each Sea Creature tht inhabits them ! 99% of those one finds on the shore are *vacant possession* and oft a refuge for homeless creatures ! B rian & I love to go to MEXICO and find Conch Shells and othe exotics and bring them Home for *authentic* pressents ! When we were Kids we used to love to collect shells on the Beach at New Brighton. Lovely Poem ad a lovely tribute - It has the shape of the two halves of an *Open Shell*. We have a new Fusion on ECO POEMS please check ~ Thanks
Blessings & Love & Peace & Joy
Angela - Brian & Snokie 💛💛💛
July 20th, 2020 17:07
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA here - Good Evening Fay ! All SEA SHELLS are masterpieces of Creation such a anug fit for each Sea Creature tht inhabits them ! 99% of those one finds on the shore are *vacant possession* and oft a refuge for homeless creatures ! B rian & I love to go to MEXICO and find Conch Shells and othe exotics and bring them Home for *authentic* pressents ! When we were Kids we used to love to collect shells on the Beach at New Brighton. Lovely Poem ad a lovely tribute - It has the shape of the two halves of an *Open Shell*. We have a new Fusion on ECO POEMS please check ~ Thanks
Blessings & Love & Peace & Joy
Angela - Brian & Snokie 💛💛💛
July 20th, 2020 17:07
Undressed.
dusk arising said:
Mysterious and quite, quite beautiful each and every one. Something my siblings and me used to collect whenever we were fortunate enough to visit the coast.
One of natures marvels or Gods wonderful creations if you wish. I really know little about them other than hermit crabs find them an essential to exist. A snails shell too is a similar ting of wonder.
Love the way you romanced the dance of the empty shell as it laid to rest wherever the cruel and mighty ocean chooses....
If I\'m lucky, I may get to see the beaches in the outer hebrides which consist of nothing but shells and shell fragments. I\'m sure to be inspired if I\'m so fortunate.
July 20th, 2020 13:33
dusk arising said:
Mysterious and quite, quite beautiful each and every one. Something my siblings and me used to collect whenever we were fortunate enough to visit the coast.
One of natures marvels or Gods wonderful creations if you wish. I really know little about them other than hermit crabs find them an essential to exist. A snails shell too is a similar ting of wonder.
Love the way you romanced the dance of the empty shell as it laid to rest wherever the cruel and mighty ocean chooses....
If I\'m lucky, I may get to see the beaches in the outer hebrides which consist of nothing but shells and shell fragments. I\'m sure to be inspired if I\'m so fortunate.
July 20th, 2020 13:33
Undressed.
Michael Edwards said:
Saw the title and thought \'I must read this\' - anyway not dissapopinted but then I never am with your superb work.
July 20th, 2020 10:38
Michael Edwards said:
Saw the title and thought \'I must read this\' - anyway not dissapopinted but then I never am with your superb work.
July 20th, 2020 10:38
Kindred.
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful wise words Fay, if only we could make it happen - if only.
Andy
July 18th, 2020 01:26
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful wise words Fay, if only we could make it happen - if only.
Andy
July 18th, 2020 01:26
Kindred.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening FAY - Angela here still catching up on MPS after a hard Day in the Clinic ! It is true FAY ~ we allow ourelves to be divided by Class - Country - Colour & Creed ! And yet in essesnce GENETICALLY we are ONE HUMANKIND ! Any fertile MALE (X Y) can mate & procreate with any fertile FEMALE (X X) and produce ofspring BOYS (XX) & Girls (XY) ~ AMEN ! So in essence *intermally* we are all the SAME, The same is true of the things which unite us Visual Humour & Music ! Love & Empathy are also big unifying factors ! *Lets get together an* we*ll be Alright !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love ~ Angela - Brian & Smokey !
July 17th, 2020 17:05
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening FAY - Angela here still catching up on MPS after a hard Day in the Clinic ! It is true FAY ~ we allow ourelves to be divided by Class - Country - Colour & Creed ! And yet in essesnce GENETICALLY we are ONE HUMANKIND ! Any fertile MALE (X Y) can mate & procreate with any fertile FEMALE (X X) and produce ofspring BOYS (XX) & Girls (XY) ~ AMEN ! So in essence *intermally* we are all the SAME, The same is true of the things which unite us Visual Humour & Music ! Love & Empathy are also big unifying factors ! *Lets get together an* we*ll be Alright !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love ~ Angela - Brian & Smokey !
July 17th, 2020 17:05
Kindred.
TWENTY3 said:
The image says it all and your words bring it right home to our front door. Very well written.
July 17th, 2020 06:14
TWENTY3 said:
The image says it all and your words bring it right home to our front door. Very well written.
July 17th, 2020 06:14
Kindred.
L. B. Mek said:
appreciate how loyal you kept to the natural beat of the poem,
displaying some wonderful empathetic insight,
thought provoking and sincere
July 17th, 2020 06:03
L. B. Mek said:
appreciate how loyal you kept to the natural beat of the poem,
displaying some wonderful empathetic insight,
thought provoking and sincere
July 17th, 2020 06:03
Kindred.
DianeKey6 said:
i really like this one. i feel we are just one huge beating heart and loving energy placed in various outfits of colour and race. Inside we are one soul.your poem reflects how the world could be if we just realised the same blood flows in our veins whatever we look like outside. Diane
July 17th, 2020 04:10
DianeKey6 said:
i really like this one. i feel we are just one huge beating heart and loving energy placed in various outfits of colour and race. Inside we are one soul.your poem reflects how the world could be if we just realised the same blood flows in our veins whatever we look like outside. Diane
July 17th, 2020 04:10
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