Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
Untying Yes.
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write Fay, Paradise is there for all of us when we slow down and think goo thoughts.
Andy
July 9th, 2020 23:49
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write Fay, Paradise is there for all of us when we slow down and think goo thoughts.
Andy
July 9th, 2020 23:49
Untying Yes.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Angela here - Good Evening FAY. Life is Paradox it creates for us BOTH an Opportunity for Love to Flow but also paradoxically counters it with Obstruction. Patience is the KEY ! To avoid & shun negativity and embrace positivity to fulfil our Dreams ! Love the final paragraph *Together for now & Eternity.
The night I met Brian - It is interesting there was another Mature Man (George 36) at the Dance who was single and worked in Radiography so our paths crossed quite a lot. I knew He liked me and He was easy to talk to but He was a Humanist and had no respect for my Catholic Faith. He was a good Dancer but even in the Waltz there was no rapport between our Hearts. At 28 I wanted to be married and start a Family - but I had to be in Love ! In the Band Interval I was sitting with a group of Ladies (mainly Nurses) some of whom Brian knew through the Diploma in Nursing Course @ the College. They introduced me and my Heart awoke ! The first Dance was a Waltz and he asked Me for a Dance - and the rest is History. *Cometh the Day - Cometh the Man !* AMEN ! George watched us Dancing and knew instinctively that He had met his Match and I had met Mine. The Men were outnumbered 3 to 1 so G did not go Home empty~handed just empty~hearted ! Even after that Brief encounter Brian & I knew we would never have to fall in love ever again ! The Paradox is that for Brian - the fact that I was a Devout Catholic was a very big POSITIVE - Ours really was a Match made in Heaven - AMEN !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love Angela & Brian & Smokey !
July 9th, 2020 16:39
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Angela here - Good Evening FAY. Life is Paradox it creates for us BOTH an Opportunity for Love to Flow but also paradoxically counters it with Obstruction. Patience is the KEY ! To avoid & shun negativity and embrace positivity to fulfil our Dreams ! Love the final paragraph *Together for now & Eternity.
The night I met Brian - It is interesting there was another Mature Man (George 36) at the Dance who was single and worked in Radiography so our paths crossed quite a lot. I knew He liked me and He was easy to talk to but He was a Humanist and had no respect for my Catholic Faith. He was a good Dancer but even in the Waltz there was no rapport between our Hearts. At 28 I wanted to be married and start a Family - but I had to be in Love ! In the Band Interval I was sitting with a group of Ladies (mainly Nurses) some of whom Brian knew through the Diploma in Nursing Course @ the College. They introduced me and my Heart awoke ! The first Dance was a Waltz and he asked Me for a Dance - and the rest is History. *Cometh the Day - Cometh the Man !* AMEN ! George watched us Dancing and knew instinctively that He had met his Match and I had met Mine. The Men were outnumbered 3 to 1 so G did not go Home empty~handed just empty~hearted ! Even after that Brief encounter Brian & I knew we would never have to fall in love ever again ! The Paradox is that for Brian - the fact that I was a Devout Catholic was a very big POSITIVE - Ours really was a Match made in Heaven - AMEN !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love Angela & Brian & Smokey !
July 9th, 2020 16:39
Untying Yes.
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
Do I think that this is a wonderful piece Fay? An untying yes!
Ex animo, Alan
July 9th, 2020 10:12
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
Do I think that this is a wonderful piece Fay? An untying yes!
Ex animo, Alan
July 9th, 2020 10:12
Untying Yes.
orchidee said:
Ccooee, I\'m waiting! (I wish I would shut up. lol). Good write Fay.
July 9th, 2020 05:11
orchidee said:
Ccooee, I\'m waiting! (I wish I would shut up. lol). Good write Fay.
July 9th, 2020 05:11
Treasured.
Goldfinch60 said:
You took me back to those treasured places where love abounded for my wife and I.
Andy
July 8th, 2020 23:50
Goldfinch60 said:
You took me back to those treasured places where love abounded for my wife and I.
Andy
July 8th, 2020 23:50
Treasured.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE - Good Evening Fay - MEMORIES ! As we get older - memories accumulate - some are more poignant & memorable than others ! Brian & I have Walls & Display Cabinets in our new Home and already they are filling up with memories ! Photos - pebbles (with dates & place on) - artifacts etc to remind us of People & High Days & Holidays.
BUT your moving Poem focuses on a Single Day - out of thousands. It is eternally etched in your memory. The sky & sea - The birds & rocks and the PEACE ! Eventually culminating in the UNFORGETABLE TRYST - AMEN. Brian & I have had such moments and trust we will have many more ~ AMEN !
Blessings - Peace & Joy
Love - Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
July 8th, 2020 14:53
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE - Good Evening Fay - MEMORIES ! As we get older - memories accumulate - some are more poignant & memorable than others ! Brian & I have Walls & Display Cabinets in our new Home and already they are filling up with memories ! Photos - pebbles (with dates & place on) - artifacts etc to remind us of People & High Days & Holidays.
BUT your moving Poem focuses on a Single Day - out of thousands. It is eternally etched in your memory. The sky & sea - The birds & rocks and the PEACE ! Eventually culminating in the UNFORGETABLE TRYST - AMEN. Brian & I have had such moments and trust we will have many more ~ AMEN !
Blessings - Peace & Joy
Love - Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
July 8th, 2020 14:53
Treasured.
MendedFences27 said:
I know it is just \"me,\' but your phrasing of the first two stanzas had me thinking of \"The Birds\" - the short story and later the movie.
But then you smacked me straight with the final stanza and those \"memories never so treasured
July 8th, 2020 13:50
MendedFences27 said:
I know it is just \"me,\' but your phrasing of the first two stanzas had me thinking of \"The Birds\" - the short story and later the movie.
But then you smacked me straight with the final stanza and those \"memories never so treasured
July 8th, 2020 13:50
Treasured.
dusk arising said:
Even more treasured now i could easily believe.
I must say your words took me back to sometime, someplace, someone.... a similar scene in my memory which i have to admit i found quite moving.
Words, from the hand of one who\'s life flows through them, can bring so much unexpected joy to savour.
July 8th, 2020 09:41
dusk arising said:
Even more treasured now i could easily believe.
I must say your words took me back to sometime, someplace, someone.... a similar scene in my memory which i have to admit i found quite moving.
Words, from the hand of one who\'s life flows through them, can bring so much unexpected joy to savour.
July 8th, 2020 09:41
Treasured.
PoeticBiscuit said:
Our memories are one of the greatest things we have. Being able to remember days like this helps us move forward In life.
July 8th, 2020 02:47
PoeticBiscuit said:
Our memories are one of the greatest things we have. Being able to remember days like this helps us move forward In life.
July 8th, 2020 02:47
Untenable.
Goldfinch60 said:
Love and lust can be within us all but true love can always overcome lust.
Good though provoking write Fay.
Andy
July 8th, 2020 00:26
Goldfinch60 said:
Love and lust can be within us all but true love can always overcome lust.
Good though provoking write Fay.
Andy
July 8th, 2020 00:26
Untenable.
Suresh said:
Yes, lust can be justly labeled, but only your poetic words can expose a thief as such.
July 7th, 2020 23:50
Suresh said:
Yes, lust can be justly labeled, but only your poetic words can expose a thief as such.
July 7th, 2020 23:50
Untenable.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ Good Evening Fay thanks for a *stimulating* Poem ! ANGELA love Tenable - The Format - The Function & The Frontman ! As a PHYSIO she admires WARREN because He has overcome congenital physical problems ~ but also He is great Host and good role mode for People with Dwarfism ! Love your Mantra *Playing with Words* because it has enabled you to plum verbally & effectively the unfathomable Well of LOVE ! Now that I am well & truly in the *Well* I am out of my acceptable linguistic depth no one warned me it would be this sensuous. What we Are experiencing we would find it impossiblcie to verbalize ~ without eroticism ~ and I would have to resign form the Diaconate ! You have managed this ~ but then you are a LADY. You write like Georgia O*Keefe paints and leave much to the imagination ! Thanks for caring !
Blessings & Joy & Peace
Love Brian & Angela ~ AMEN
July 7th, 2020 16:42
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ Good Evening Fay thanks for a *stimulating* Poem ! ANGELA love Tenable - The Format - The Function & The Frontman ! As a PHYSIO she admires WARREN because He has overcome congenital physical problems ~ but also He is great Host and good role mode for People with Dwarfism ! Love your Mantra *Playing with Words* because it has enabled you to plum verbally & effectively the unfathomable Well of LOVE ! Now that I am well & truly in the *Well* I am out of my acceptable linguistic depth no one warned me it would be this sensuous. What we Are experiencing we would find it impossiblcie to verbalize ~ without eroticism ~ and I would have to resign form the Diaconate ! You have managed this ~ but then you are a LADY. You write like Georgia O*Keefe paints and leave much to the imagination ! Thanks for caring !
Blessings & Joy & Peace
Love Brian & Angela ~ AMEN
July 7th, 2020 16:42
Untenable.
MendedFences27 said:
Love and obsession -They say the greatest sex organ is the brain, so it\'s no wonder the two get muddled. Are we insane when we fall or when we desire? I can only say, \"We\'ll never sort this out.\"
So I don\'t know if I loved your poem or am obsessed by it. But I\'ll fave it anyways. - Phil A.
July 7th, 2020 15:13
MendedFences27 said:
Love and obsession -They say the greatest sex organ is the brain, so it\'s no wonder the two get muddled. Are we insane when we fall or when we desire? I can only say, \"We\'ll never sort this out.\"
So I don\'t know if I loved your poem or am obsessed by it. But I\'ll fave it anyways. - Phil A.
July 7th, 2020 15:13
Untenable.
Neville said:
makes perfect sense to me .. let\'s have another & make mine a double ....
July 7th, 2020 12:36
Neville said:
makes perfect sense to me .. let\'s have another & make mine a double ....
July 7th, 2020 12:36
Untenable.
dusk arising said:
What you have written is fine and true. Love and lust are associated very closely. Lust after all is a part of attraction and certainly pleasureable, love may well result. Reversed, one may fall into loving someone and the lust may well follow. I hope both scenarios are true.
Obsession... is that where one subject takes a superior status to any other in our mind. Well love does that too but i guess obsession includes losing touch with reality and the bounds of reasonableness which can become negative too.
It\'s all a case of balance isn\'t it. And even when the balance is right it needs to be finely tuned for a relationship top last.
Clever writing Fay which gets a mug like me to expose what makes me tick.
July 7th, 2020 12:34
dusk arising said:
What you have written is fine and true. Love and lust are associated very closely. Lust after all is a part of attraction and certainly pleasureable, love may well result. Reversed, one may fall into loving someone and the lust may well follow. I hope both scenarios are true.
Obsession... is that where one subject takes a superior status to any other in our mind. Well love does that too but i guess obsession includes losing touch with reality and the bounds of reasonableness which can become negative too.
It\'s all a case of balance isn\'t it. And even when the balance is right it needs to be finely tuned for a relationship top last.
Clever writing Fay which gets a mug like me to expose what makes me tick.
July 7th, 2020 12:34
Untenable.
Michael Edwards said:
Keep playing - love this although I have an aversion to the word \'tenable\' ever since that awful TV show of the same name started on the box. Anyway it doesn\'t detract from this - keep writing dear Fay.
July 7th, 2020 03:26
Michael Edwards said:
Keep playing - love this although I have an aversion to the word \'tenable\' ever since that awful TV show of the same name started on the box. Anyway it doesn\'t detract from this - keep writing dear Fay.
July 7th, 2020 03:26
Bewildering.
Goldfinch60 said:
Very thought provoking write Fay.
This could have happened to me after my first marriage broke down but the relationship between my first wife and I is still amicable nearly fifty years later and the children are fine with us both.
Andy
July 7th, 2020 00:15
Goldfinch60 said:
Very thought provoking write Fay.
This could have happened to me after my first marriage broke down but the relationship between my first wife and I is still amicable nearly fifty years later and the children are fine with us both.
Andy
July 7th, 2020 00:15
Undisturbed.
MendedFences27 said:
A very unique form of expression. A walk in the woods is becomes \"magical\" itself through your brilliant wording. I loved this one Fay.- Phil A.
July 6th, 2020 17:16
MendedFences27 said:
A very unique form of expression. A walk in the woods is becomes \"magical\" itself through your brilliant wording. I loved this one Fay.- Phil A.
July 6th, 2020 17:16
Bewildering.
Neville said:
now that is something to ponder upon long and hard..... interesting and quite different Fay.. just shows your versatility off so bloomin well ... so it does..
and the picture could very easily be of my daughter.. in fact a double take was necessary...
July 6th, 2020 09:27
Neville said:
now that is something to ponder upon long and hard..... interesting and quite different Fay.. just shows your versatility off so bloomin well ... so it does..
and the picture could very easily be of my daughter.. in fact a double take was necessary...
July 6th, 2020 09:27
Bewildering.
dusk arising said:
You portray this situation of inner grief so well here.I hope it was not situation you lived with.
After my marriage break up i witnessed this at first hand in the children of my partner of the time. I promised never to do this to my kids and to this day me and my ex maintain a good healthy respectful friendship. My son, now forty, complains his mum picks fault in him lol. I just laugh it off.
However, better to be torn in the way you describe than to live in the battlefield of a marriage which has become intolerable.
A heartfelt thought provoking piece today from you covering a subject all too painful regardless of one\'s age.
July 6th, 2020 07:57
dusk arising said:
You portray this situation of inner grief so well here.I hope it was not situation you lived with.
After my marriage break up i witnessed this at first hand in the children of my partner of the time. I promised never to do this to my kids and to this day me and my ex maintain a good healthy respectful friendship. My son, now forty, complains his mum picks fault in him lol. I just laugh it off.
However, better to be torn in the way you describe than to live in the battlefield of a marriage which has become intolerable.
A heartfelt thought provoking piece today from you covering a subject all too painful regardless of one\'s age.
July 6th, 2020 07:57
Bewildering.
peto said:
Very interesting Fay
A lot don\'t get the chance to choose
The decision is made for them.
I\'m not sure which is best
Enjoyed the read on a tricky subject
July 6th, 2020 07:33
peto said:
Very interesting Fay
A lot don\'t get the chance to choose
The decision is made for them.
I\'m not sure which is best
Enjoyed the read on a tricky subject
July 6th, 2020 07:33
Undisturbed.
Goldfinch60 said:
What a wonderful poem once more Fay, I was there in that ancient wood enjoying the pleasures that abound there.
Andy
July 6th, 2020 00:12
Goldfinch60 said:
What a wonderful poem once more Fay, I was there in that ancient wood enjoying the pleasures that abound there.
Andy
July 6th, 2020 00:12
Undisturbed.
Goddess of the Mist said:
Aaaah, forest bathing! Sounds lovely 😊
July 5th, 2020 12:14
Goddess of the Mist said:
Aaaah, forest bathing! Sounds lovely 😊
July 5th, 2020 12:14
Undisturbed.
Neville said:
some things are best left well written and read... this page is a shining example of said tenant ...
July 5th, 2020 08:59
Neville said:
some things are best left well written and read... this page is a shining example of said tenant ...
July 5th, 2020 08:59
Undisturbed.
dusk arising said:
I don\'t know why but reading this i perceived you as a Lark. The bird. And reflecting upon your wonderful descriptions of dawn and early mornings wildlife, a Lark arising.
Again you bring how at one you are with the wilderness and nature around you. It is always quite refreshing to read your nature poetry for it makes me take time out to place myself within the environs you describe... yes refreshing is absolutely the right word. Big thank you for another few moments of tranquil thought.
July 5th, 2020 06:52
dusk arising said:
I don\'t know why but reading this i perceived you as a Lark. The bird. And reflecting upon your wonderful descriptions of dawn and early mornings wildlife, a Lark arising.
Again you bring how at one you are with the wilderness and nature around you. It is always quite refreshing to read your nature poetry for it makes me take time out to place myself within the environs you describe... yes refreshing is absolutely the right word. Big thank you for another few moments of tranquil thought.
July 5th, 2020 06:52
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