Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
Brooding.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay.
Mentioning evening - we may enjoy the lighter evenings, but does our body-clock interpret it that it\'s not time to sleep until it\'s dark/night?
May 14th, 2020 02:20
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay.
Mentioning evening - we may enjoy the lighter evenings, but does our body-clock interpret it that it\'s not time to sleep until it\'s dark/night?
May 14th, 2020 02:20
Brooding.
dusk arising said:
Evening,
sweet evening.
You rich
red blooded
time of day.
Undermining
my demeanor.
Exciting my
desires.
Enhancing
the chasm
you left.
Evening is special as we relax and prepare for bed and the intimacy of closeness when the essence of two is the rawness of initial undaunted love and passion. Impossible to ignore the gaping hole when such is no longer the glue which bonds each day to the next is taken away.
Yes your poem, so well composed cut to the quick this morning. Whilst in empathy my comment was written.
Your pictures are vivid.
May 14th, 2020 01:37
dusk arising said:
Evening,
sweet evening.
You rich
red blooded
time of day.
Undermining
my demeanor.
Exciting my
desires.
Enhancing
the chasm
you left.
Evening is special as we relax and prepare for bed and the intimacy of closeness when the essence of two is the rawness of initial undaunted love and passion. Impossible to ignore the gaping hole when such is no longer the glue which bonds each day to the next is taken away.
Yes your poem, so well composed cut to the quick this morning. Whilst in empathy my comment was written.
Your pictures are vivid.
May 14th, 2020 01:37
Release.
Goldfinch60 said:
Loves complex nature can give all types of emotions within our hearts.
Andy
May 14th, 2020 00:49
Goldfinch60 said:
Loves complex nature can give all types of emotions within our hearts.
Andy
May 14th, 2020 00:49
Release.
dusk arising said:
Yes.. in a word!... and then NO! For, as you well know, love is too complex for rules.
You teaser! This short piece took some reading. I thought you had lost me with this but i read and re-read until ... well ... to mis-quote a phrase overused by a certain MPS writer \'persistence was key\'.
May 13th, 2020 04:32
dusk arising said:
Yes.. in a word!... and then NO! For, as you well know, love is too complex for rules.
You teaser! This short piece took some reading. I thought you had lost me with this but i read and re-read until ... well ... to mis-quote a phrase overused by a certain MPS writer \'persistence was key\'.
May 13th, 2020 04:32
Brief,
myself and me said:
Brief but rich. From start to end, from morning to night, from sun rise to sun set, love begin, love end and love last.
Wonderful.
May 12th, 2020 17:40
myself and me said:
Brief but rich. From start to end, from morning to night, from sun rise to sun set, love begin, love end and love last.
Wonderful.
May 12th, 2020 17:40
Brief,
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening Faith - Brian Here - Thanks for a Lovely Love Poem about the Transience of Love ! Angela & I have only been married six weeks so we are alwys stressing the permenance (at least 50 years - DV) of our Relationaship ! Your POEM mentions some of the factors in TRANSIENT LOVE ! Gazing - Memory - Passig - Quiet Tears - Destiny - Brief Moment - The Stars - Loves Lightning _ AWESOME. You know Men are strange creatures ! Once (when I was between Girl Friends) I fell in LOVE with a GIRL in a Bright Green Coat coming down an Escalator (in a Large Store) when I was going up. Iwas mesmerised and as soon as I reached the top I ran down the escalator to try and Find her but I never did & never will (it was 12 years ago !) However all the feelings you mentioned came into play ~ QUE SERA SERA ! However GOD had other Plans for Me - ANGELA ! Over three years ago I saw a VISION across a crowded Room at a Christmas Dance - I flew to her side - and the rest is History !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love Brian & Angela 💛💛💛
May 12th, 2020 16:00
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening Faith - Brian Here - Thanks for a Lovely Love Poem about the Transience of Love ! Angela & I have only been married six weeks so we are alwys stressing the permenance (at least 50 years - DV) of our Relationaship ! Your POEM mentions some of the factors in TRANSIENT LOVE ! Gazing - Memory - Passig - Quiet Tears - Destiny - Brief Moment - The Stars - Loves Lightning _ AWESOME. You know Men are strange creatures ! Once (when I was between Girl Friends) I fell in LOVE with a GIRL in a Bright Green Coat coming down an Escalator (in a Large Store) when I was going up. Iwas mesmerised and as soon as I reached the top I ran down the escalator to try and Find her but I never did & never will (it was 12 years ago !) However all the feelings you mentioned came into play ~ QUE SERA SERA ! However GOD had other Plans for Me - ANGELA ! Over three years ago I saw a VISION across a crowded Room at a Christmas Dance - I flew to her side - and the rest is History !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love Brian & Angela 💛💛💛
May 12th, 2020 16:00
Brief,
Neville said:
The term beautiful does not quite do these three perfectly formed stanzas the credit they deserve...
Neville
May 12th, 2020 09:37
Neville said:
The term beautiful does not quite do these three perfectly formed stanzas the credit they deserve...
Neville
May 12th, 2020 09:37
Brief,
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
This is a very fine \'free verse\' poem Fay.
Very, very well done.
Ex animo, Alan
May 12th, 2020 06:07
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
This is a very fine \'free verse\' poem Fay.
Very, very well done.
Ex animo, Alan
May 12th, 2020 06:07
Brief,
orchidee said:
A lovely write Fay.
Me watchdog, Fido, comes along and ruins any \'excitement\'. As for \'ardour\', he says \'Certainly not! He\'s a pest. lol.
May 12th, 2020 05:52
orchidee said:
A lovely write Fay.
Me watchdog, Fido, comes along and ruins any \'excitement\'. As for \'ardour\', he says \'Certainly not! He\'s a pest. lol.
May 12th, 2020 05:52
Brief,
dusk arising said:
I mirror the words of Goldfinch. Beautiful words Fay.
Love lost leaves a memory with each sunset. A heartfelt tear, deep longing, a gratitude, and a shrug .... then the walk back into a life without.
May 12th, 2020 03:45
dusk arising said:
I mirror the words of Goldfinch. Beautiful words Fay.
Love lost leaves a memory with each sunset. A heartfelt tear, deep longing, a gratitude, and a shrug .... then the walk back into a life without.
May 12th, 2020 03:45
Birthright.
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true Fay, we must let our words fly in freedom.
Andy
May 11th, 2020 23:58
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true Fay, we must let our words fly in freedom.
Andy
May 11th, 2020 23:58
Birthright.
dusk arising said:
Yahoo (throws cap up into air - hoping to get it back one day) couldn\'t agree more.
I\'m making plans for a fun retirement future after this lots done with.
May 11th, 2020 11:07
dusk arising said:
Yahoo (throws cap up into air - hoping to get it back one day) couldn\'t agree more.
I\'m making plans for a fun retirement future after this lots done with.
May 11th, 2020 11:07
Birthright.
Neville said:
Well said Fay.. a poem of the moment if ever there was...
Neville
May 11th, 2020 06:27
Neville said:
Well said Fay.. a poem of the moment if ever there was...
Neville
May 11th, 2020 06:27
Birthright.
orchidee said:
Godo write Fay. Awww, they distance 50 metres from me singing - health crisis or not! heehee.
May 11th, 2020 06:01
orchidee said:
Godo write Fay. Awww, they distance 50 metres from me singing - health crisis or not! heehee.
May 11th, 2020 06:01
Chasms..
Goldfinch60 said:
It is always the way that those with the money do not want to give it away. Our daughter was dating a man who was a millionaire and she said that he was the meanest man she had ever known.
The caption at the beginning says it all Fay.
Andy
May 9th, 2020 00:23
Goldfinch60 said:
It is always the way that those with the money do not want to give it away. Our daughter was dating a man who was a millionaire and she said that he was the meanest man she had ever known.
The caption at the beginning says it all Fay.
Andy
May 9th, 2020 00:23
Chasms..
germanamericanchurch said:
We are but a bat colony that has gen golden custard hair at the helm - testing himself regularly - for an animal “thing” - he calls Chinese
May 8th, 2020 18:24
germanamericanchurch said:
We are but a bat colony that has gen golden custard hair at the helm - testing himself regularly - for an animal “thing” - he calls Chinese
May 8th, 2020 18:24
Chasms..
orchidee said:
Good write Fay.
I know - we must all support Branson, never mind the poor! Doh!
May 8th, 2020 07:56
orchidee said:
Good write Fay.
I know - we must all support Branson, never mind the poor! Doh!
May 8th, 2020 07:56
Chasms..
dusk arising said:
I was brought-up old fashioned. Using money as a key to class acceptability was frowned upon according to mamma and papa as money could only achieve the status of nouveau riche and the accompanying lack of manners and etiquette was as evident as a claxon in a symphony orchestra.
My own class status finds me financially poor but exceedingly well bred.
Hovis in a Wonderloaf packet one might say.
Love it or hate it \'class\' exists. A minority choose to fight it but to what end i\'m unsure. It is a battle which will not be won by fighting but interbreeding I think.
May 8th, 2020 04:33
dusk arising said:
I was brought-up old fashioned. Using money as a key to class acceptability was frowned upon according to mamma and papa as money could only achieve the status of nouveau riche and the accompanying lack of manners and etiquette was as evident as a claxon in a symphony orchestra.
My own class status finds me financially poor but exceedingly well bred.
Hovis in a Wonderloaf packet one might say.
Love it or hate it \'class\' exists. A minority choose to fight it but to what end i\'m unsure. It is a battle which will not be won by fighting but interbreeding I think.
May 8th, 2020 04:33
Chasms..
Neville said:
this is one of those poems that should be written in to history....
and your capture say\'s it all.. a great write dear Fay...…… Neville
May 8th, 2020 04:07
Neville said:
this is one of those poems that should be written in to history....
and your capture say\'s it all.. a great write dear Fay...…… Neville
May 8th, 2020 04:07
Severed.
Goldfinch60 said:
So much life and history can be seen in the detritus on the beaches and it is totally brought to life in your words Fay.
Andy
May 8th, 2020 00:57
Goldfinch60 said:
So much life and history can be seen in the detritus on the beaches and it is totally brought to life in your words Fay.
Andy
May 8th, 2020 00:57
Severed.
SerenWise said:
Lovely write, how such little things can provide inspiration
May 7th, 2020 20:31
SerenWise said:
Lovely write, how such little things can provide inspiration
May 7th, 2020 20:31
Cream-Plied.
dusk arising said:
Such is life that the frustrations of the day to day are oft vented upon those nearest and dearest.But awaking fresh and rested finds such frustrations distant and more readily the truth of togetherness is the daily ripe fruit upon the vine of life.
May 7th, 2020 18:11
dusk arising said:
Such is life that the frustrations of the day to day are oft vented upon those nearest and dearest.But awaking fresh and rested finds such frustrations distant and more readily the truth of togetherness is the daily ripe fruit upon the vine of life.
May 7th, 2020 18:11
Severed.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
MORTE DU KELP EN CINQ SEPTAINES
Brian here - Good Evening Fay ! Being a Coastal Dweller - Like yourself - I too can enjoy the elegance of KELP with it s roots in the sand - with its noble stem enabling its *leaves* to surface for photosynthesis . Swimming in KELP enables one to appreciate its elegance & form. To see it stranded dead & dying on the shore is a sad sight for sore eyes ! Love the Poem that this tragedy has spawned (V 1.) Alas too often on our Beach Walks we concetrate on other Flosom & Jetsom and ignore the indignity of the stranded SEA KELP ! The scene is graphically described in V 2. Thanks for including the poignant photo of what so moved your MUSE ! V 3. You suggest a dialogue with the disloged KELP - Beautiful ! V 4. You marval @ its struggle. V 5. You lovingly return it to its appropriate resting place - Wicked
Please check *I love Angela because* - THANKS.
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love BRIAN & ANGELA 🧡🤍💙
May 7th, 2020 17:29
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
MORTE DU KELP EN CINQ SEPTAINES
Brian here - Good Evening Fay ! Being a Coastal Dweller - Like yourself - I too can enjoy the elegance of KELP with it s roots in the sand - with its noble stem enabling its *leaves* to surface for photosynthesis . Swimming in KELP enables one to appreciate its elegance & form. To see it stranded dead & dying on the shore is a sad sight for sore eyes ! Love the Poem that this tragedy has spawned (V 1.) Alas too often on our Beach Walks we concetrate on other Flosom & Jetsom and ignore the indignity of the stranded SEA KELP ! The scene is graphically described in V 2. Thanks for including the poignant photo of what so moved your MUSE ! V 3. You suggest a dialogue with the disloged KELP - Beautiful ! V 4. You marval @ its struggle. V 5. You lovingly return it to its appropriate resting place - Wicked
Please check *I love Angela because* - THANKS.
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love BRIAN & ANGELA 🧡🤍💙
May 7th, 2020 17:29
Severed.
dusk arising said:
Touched in the right places and the poetic beauty in you is fired to emotion. Here we see what I and most others see as detritus brought magestically forward for our contemplation.
How perceptive to reach for the soul of this kelp upon the brutal unforgiving shoreline. The place which forever confuses our senses with both tragedy and romance
May 7th, 2020 05:21
dusk arising said:
Touched in the right places and the poetic beauty in you is fired to emotion. Here we see what I and most others see as detritus brought magestically forward for our contemplation.
How perceptive to reach for the soul of this kelp upon the brutal unforgiving shoreline. The place which forever confuses our senses with both tragedy and romance
May 7th, 2020 05:21
Severed.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I\'m not near the coast, but do my snail-saving still. Well, it might take them 2 hours to cross the path!
May 7th, 2020 04:49
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I\'m not near the coast, but do my snail-saving still. Well, it might take them 2 hours to cross the path!
May 7th, 2020 04:49
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