Comments received on poems by Neville



Sun Drops
MendedFences27 said:

All Moonshine truly is , is reflected Sunshine, but the folklore it\'s charged with is so much more. From lunacy, to control over, fertility, luck, the wind. illnesses, and business, when all it really controls are tides. Your personifications of both the Sun and Moon bring new light to the changing of the day. - Great One - Phil A.

August 8th, 2020 11:39

Sun Drops
orchidee said:

Is this the same gal you meet, or different gals?! lol.

August 8th, 2020 10:36

Sun Drops
Fay Slimm. said:

Oh for the ability write short-line gems such as this one my friend. Full of engaging personification and loaded with need for the read to last longer I sit amazed at your talent for showing that less is more. Thanking you muchly Nev. for another example from which to learn.

August 8th, 2020 05:11

Something in the Air
Goldfinch60 said:

Very good words Neville, and such a good descrotion of some lives in these Strange Times.

Andy

August 8th, 2020 00:17

Something in the Air
orchidee said:

You got another gal I should possibly meet?! heehee.

August 7th, 2020 13:02

Something in the Air
MendedFences27 said:

Nicely spoken Nev. No matter where you go these days, you see the effects. As for doilies, they serve no useful purpose. They\'re terrible as a coaster, awful as a place mat, and totally dangerous as a pot holder. Well, truly enjoyed your poem. - Phil A.

August 7th, 2020 10:54

Something in the Air
Fay Slimm. said:

You pen a sad picture of today\'s strange state my literary friend. Another piece to ponder on what has overtaken our once fearless race.

August 7th, 2020 04:33

Something in the Air
L. B. Mek said:

the only other poem I recall using the word doilies (or doily to be precise), is a poem by Elizabeth Bishop titled \'Filling Station\':
https://mypoeticside.com/show-classic-poem-2931
that your writing continuously reminds me of some of my favourite poems and Poet\'s, is a testament to the relatable quality and insight you write with

August 7th, 2020 04:30

Now looking Back
L. B. Mek said:

brilliant demonstration of how to instil effortless flow without using the usual poetic tools of form, rhyme etc
this reminds me of a poem by John Brehm, titled \'at the poetry reading\'

August 7th, 2020 03:35

Something in the Air
orchidee said:

Good write Neville.

August 7th, 2020 03:10

Now looking Back
orchidee said:

Was that me? Did I meet her? lol.

August 6th, 2020 05:54

Now looking Back
Goldfinch60 said:

True love either past or present can be so meaningful to us all and more than anything else in our lives.

Andy

August 6th, 2020 04:24

Now looking Back
Fay Slimm. said:

Heart-warming words which recall love once held higher even than poetry has to be given extra respect when coming from your memory laden mind my friend. Another helping of tenderly held thoughts on romance.......... hope all is going to plan for you in that fantastic Greek paradise................x

August 6th, 2020 03:51

Beyond Giving
Neville said:

Thank you for pausing to consider my scribble my friend, much and always appreciated 😎👍

Neville

July 29th, 2020 11:40

Beyond Giving
orchidee said:

I forgot - should I meet her? lol.

July 28th, 2020 06:39

Beyond Giving
orchidee said:

Good write Neville.

July 28th, 2020 06:38

Beyond Giving
dusk arising said:

No, you cannot gift life\'s experiences and the school of hard knocks. Indeed it would be painful to witness.

Such things are for the individual as if life were a clay pot in which they mature at their own pace, some in a sunnier spot than others.

You sure know how to exercise my grey cells which I find thoroughly enjoyable.

July 28th, 2020 04:37

Beyond Giving
Fay Slimm. said:

Yes easing an ego out of the way to find more maturity takes personal effort as this straight reminder shows --- exceptionally perceptive these few lines my friend.

July 28th, 2020 04:23

Two Weeks in July
L. B. Mek said:

really appreciate your nuanced control throughout, unravelling your narrative with subtle lines of choice phrases
immersive, sensitive and layered with poignant imagery

July 28th, 2020 03:35

Two Weeks in July
Goldfinch60 said:

It may only have been two weeks but those memories will stay with you and maybe, just maybe, she will com back for the trowel.

Andy

July 28th, 2020 00:18

Two Weeks in July
MendedFences27 said:

Reminded me of the song, \"We\'ll sing in the Sunshine...........Then I\'ll be on my way.\" Gale Garnett 1964. But only 2 weeks? Yikes, she was a fast mover. And yet still remembered. Love the masonry context that you built throughout, Sometimes people do mean just what they say. Terrific poem. - Phil A.

July 27th, 2020 11:10

Two Weeks in July
FineB said:

Hi Neville,

Great 👍 write ✍.

Some memories are so treasured.

Keep safe and writing ✍ during these challenging times.
FineB

July 27th, 2020 10:50

Two Weeks in July
Neville said:

Well I just can not thank you enough DA and your take on these words of mine is cannily uncanny sir.... 👍😎🍷 All Good Things,

Neville

July 27th, 2020 10:22

Two Weeks in July
dusk arising said:

There is so much in here and plain to see it contains references which are unique the the relationship. Great word play in verse one.
With trowel in hand methinks this was a relationship one would never cement though time would tell if there remained a bond.

Fun and fondness of this reminiscence shine from your post. So good to put a memory into words where it come alive again with every read as we fade into our later years.

Again, reading your work is a pleasure.

July 27th, 2020 08:44

Two Weeks in July
orchidee said:

Good write Neville.
I was somewhat bothered about the timing - would it be the first two weeks of July, or the last two weeks? The latter maybe, as it moves on to August.
Oh I dunno - it\'s a quarter past Summer already this year! lol. Hope I can meet her?!

July 27th, 2020 08:44

Two Weeks in July
Fay Slimm. said:

The painful realization of temporary oneness shoots all through this read when discovered in the last line is the rubble of ill-met abandon. I love the clever usage of \"mortar\" and \"cement\" as understandable slang - - top notch writing again Nev............x

July 27th, 2020 07:48

Old One Eye
jarcher54 said:

Love the flowing short lines, like a clear stream bubbling images as you glide along downstream, literally nervous about coming face to face of a sudden with your saber-toothed leviathan. He may not fear us, but I darned sure fear him!

July 27th, 2020 02:43

Old One Eye
Barry Hodges said:

A nice poem about the famous one-eyed trouser snake.

July 26th, 2020 10:11

Old One Eye
Fay Slimm. said:

A perfectly lyrical piece of poemed excitement lies in local shallows and reeled in with your usual stylish intrigue my friend. - - most fishy tales grow bigger by telling but what an adventure Ol\' One Eye leads those who would catch and de-fame his legendary waiting for toes etc. - - moreover dear Nev. \'tis the last time I paddle in shallows of trout-streams round here............ x

July 26th, 2020 06:22

Old One Eye
orchidee said:

A fine wrtie Neville. There tales of \'The Holy Brook Pike\' near(ish) to us. Maybe someone has caught it by now - and released it back in the brook.

July 26th, 2020 01:46



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