Comments received on poems by Neville
Sylvia\'s Mother Said
dusk arising said:
Something for us all waits at the end of the earthly existence we call life. A faith in the hereafter almost negates a good or bad way to pass though we all wish it painless.
A very sad tale from you today. Your poetic patchwork of a life\'s snippets encourages me to thunk it relates to your own experience. It is certainly deep in that i feel drawn in and thoughtful. I cautiously look forward to a response to my words here.
March 4th, 2020 08:42
dusk arising said:
Something for us all waits at the end of the earthly existence we call life. A faith in the hereafter almost negates a good or bad way to pass though we all wish it painless.
A very sad tale from you today. Your poetic patchwork of a life\'s snippets encourages me to thunk it relates to your own experience. It is certainly deep in that i feel drawn in and thoughtful. I cautiously look forward to a response to my words here.
March 4th, 2020 08:42
Global Warning
Fay Slimm. said:
An impressive title which drew me into its powerful body - versed with lots of stings this outcry for listening ears and a warning to read over again Nev - so into my favourite list.
March 3rd, 2020 09:24
Fay Slimm. said:
An impressive title which drew me into its powerful body - versed with lots of stings this outcry for listening ears and a warning to read over again Nev - so into my favourite list.
March 3rd, 2020 09:24
Global Warning
orchidee said:
Warming (in title bar) or warning (title in text)? A fine write Neville.
March 3rd, 2020 09:07
orchidee said:
Warming (in title bar) or warning (title in text)? A fine write Neville.
March 3rd, 2020 09:07
Global Warning
dusk arising said:
Meanwhile several million voices cried out as if in a silence of impotence for worldly leaders were counting cash.
March 3rd, 2020 08:45
dusk arising said:
Meanwhile several million voices cried out as if in a silence of impotence for worldly leaders were counting cash.
March 3rd, 2020 08:45
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Goldfinch60 said:
The words of love can be so simple yet so meaningful.
Andy
March 3rd, 2020 01:14
Goldfinch60 said:
The words of love can be so simple yet so meaningful.
Andy
March 3rd, 2020 01:14
Some Words Are Too Heavy
MendedFences27 said:
It appears to me that \"Cumbersome\" is both heavy\" and \"long\" and capitalized to boot. With it so, the mix of your words becomes more profound. \"To weave\" it through this love song would be a \"heavy\" task.So your proposal becomes self-fulfilling.
One suggestion - For rhythm\'s sake consider dropping the word \"single.\" No \'Love song\" should ever have the word \"single\" in it. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2020 23:33
MendedFences27 said:
It appears to me that \"Cumbersome\" is both heavy\" and \"long\" and capitalized to boot. With it so, the mix of your words becomes more profound. \"To weave\" it through this love song would be a \"heavy\" task.So your proposal becomes self-fulfilling.
One suggestion - For rhythm\'s sake consider dropping the word \"single.\" No \'Love song\" should ever have the word \"single\" in it. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2020 23:33
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Saxon Crow said:
Nicely put Nev. I agree! A love song should be simple and straight forward not undulating with the deepest passions of the inferno of love one feels blah blah blah
March 2nd, 2020 16:03
Saxon Crow said:
Nicely put Nev. I agree! A love song should be simple and straight forward not undulating with the deepest passions of the inferno of love one feels blah blah blah
March 2nd, 2020 16:03
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Clara said:
Oh but we should say them anyway! Always enjoy reading them! Clever poem!
March 2nd, 2020 13:18
Clara said:
Oh but we should say them anyway! Always enjoy reading them! Clever poem!
March 2nd, 2020 13:18
Some Words Are Too Heavy
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
I know - them pesky \'evermore\'\'s\' are too long. have to shorten them to \'e\'ermore\'! lol. Such are poet\'s problems.
March 2nd, 2020 12:10
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
I know - them pesky \'evermore\'\'s\' are too long. have to shorten them to \'e\'ermore\'! lol. Such are poet\'s problems.
March 2nd, 2020 12:10
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Laura🌻 said:
Neville,
So many truths in your wonderful poem!
An enjoyable read indeed!
~Laura~🌻
March 2nd, 2020 11:31
Laura🌻 said:
Neville,
So many truths in your wonderful poem!
An enjoyable read indeed!
~Laura~🌻
March 2nd, 2020 11:31
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes getting a love song just right is the problem - but poets seem to have the knack as this short but sweet verse relates - maybe tis better when words feel too heavy to scribe TWO OR EVEN MORE love songs to your chosen lady Nev..
An impressive bit of poetic weaving.
March 2nd, 2020 10:51
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes getting a love song just right is the problem - but poets seem to have the knack as this short but sweet verse relates - maybe tis better when words feel too heavy to scribe TWO OR EVEN MORE love songs to your chosen lady Nev..
An impressive bit of poetic weaving.
March 2nd, 2020 10:51
Some Words Are Too Heavy
dusk arising said:
Ha! You\'re a poet and dontcha just know it. Words are our tools which we contrive to shape our theme. Honing from the clumsy line into the oft sublime.
March 2nd, 2020 07:30
dusk arising said:
Ha! You\'re a poet and dontcha just know it. Words are our tools which we contrive to shape our theme. Honing from the clumsy line into the oft sublime.
March 2nd, 2020 07:30
Together
Goldfinch60 said:
Entwined for ever as they sail the world for eternity. Great write and tribute.
Andy
February 29th, 2020 01:16
Goldfinch60 said:
Entwined for ever as they sail the world for eternity. Great write and tribute.
Andy
February 29th, 2020 01:16
Together
Fay Slimm. said:
Such a sad challenge this write Nev. An important and emotional place for you now and ever will be for memories of happy times there will mark the spot and remain in the family\'s heart. May they both side by side rest in peace .
February 28th, 2020 09:50
Fay Slimm. said:
Such a sad challenge this write Nev. An important and emotional place for you now and ever will be for memories of happy times there will mark the spot and remain in the family\'s heart. May they both side by side rest in peace .
February 28th, 2020 09:50
Together
dusk arising said:
Without a traditional gravestone or plaque it is fitting to have words which mark an occasion such as you describe. Nobody can instill more feeling or meaning into the chosen words than those who feel the loss most.
Here i read such words which contain ample depth of meaning for this occasion.
Short and powerful.
February 28th, 2020 09:48
dusk arising said:
Without a traditional gravestone or plaque it is fitting to have words which mark an occasion such as you describe. Nobody can instill more feeling or meaning into the chosen words than those who feel the loss most.
Here i read such words which contain ample depth of meaning for this occasion.
Short and powerful.
February 28th, 2020 09:48
Together
Saxon Crow said:
Lovely, happy sad poem Neville. I LOVE Cornwall my friend what a place to rest them both.
February 28th, 2020 09:02
Saxon Crow said:
Lovely, happy sad poem Neville. I LOVE Cornwall my friend what a place to rest them both.
February 28th, 2020 09:02
Disequilibrium
MendedFences27 said:
There\'s truth in what you write (if there is such a thing as truth). Your words have been uttered through the millennia. Seems it\'s always been a bad place.
On another note, it seems the the unequalness is its beauty to some folks.
A downright honest and forthright poem. Strait to the point. - Phil A.
February 26th, 2020 12:03
MendedFences27 said:
There\'s truth in what you write (if there is such a thing as truth). Your words have been uttered through the millennia. Seems it\'s always been a bad place.
On another note, it seems the the unequalness is its beauty to some folks.
A downright honest and forthright poem. Strait to the point. - Phil A.
February 26th, 2020 12:03
Disequilibrium
Fay Slimm. said:
Top drawer descriptions of the disequilibrium this world has achieved Nev. - - another strong gem to put in my faves.
February 26th, 2020 10:53
Fay Slimm. said:
Top drawer descriptions of the disequilibrium this world has achieved Nev. - - another strong gem to put in my faves.
February 26th, 2020 10:53
Disequilibrium
dusk arising said:
Reality shouts from your piece today. For some of us life and living can seem a contradiction to what is supposed to be. And on spins the planet regardless.
First class writing again.
February 26th, 2020 06:23
dusk arising said:
Reality shouts from your piece today. For some of us life and living can seem a contradiction to what is supposed to be. And on spins the planet regardless.
First class writing again.
February 26th, 2020 06:23
Locked Out
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Aw really? Life must be super tough for orphans and you gave a poetic snapshot when the sad thing happened. You wrote it in a touching evocative way. Kudos.
Pls Pleez do read my newest poem too!
February 26th, 2020 01:11
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Aw really? Life must be super tough for orphans and you gave a poetic snapshot when the sad thing happened. You wrote it in a touching evocative way. Kudos.
Pls Pleez do read my newest poem too!
February 26th, 2020 01:11
Locked Out
SureshG said:
Was it a key to the heart?
Once broken, love was orphaned
Nothing was ever the same again -
February 19th, 2020 00:59
SureshG said:
Was it a key to the heart?
Once broken, love was orphaned
Nothing was ever the same again -
February 19th, 2020 00:59
Locked Out
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville - different layers of meaning in this.
I saw a door with no handle even, on the outside! Maybe people can only exit by it, or it is now a \'former door\', boarded up - as good as.
A new loo was ready at a place, but no door handle or lock. Most embarrassing. To risk using it, one had to use sticky tape - or whistle a tune while in there! All fixed now. Phew!
February 16th, 2020 03:30
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville - different layers of meaning in this.
I saw a door with no handle even, on the outside! Maybe people can only exit by it, or it is now a \'former door\', boarded up - as good as.
A new loo was ready at a place, but no door handle or lock. Most embarrassing. To risk using it, one had to use sticky tape - or whistle a tune while in there! All fixed now. Phew!
February 16th, 2020 03:30
Locked Out
Goldfinch60 said:
With the key broken in the lock there are still ways of getting passed that door into new and better life.
Andy
February 16th, 2020 01:04
Goldfinch60 said:
With the key broken in the lock there are still ways of getting passed that door into new and better life.
Andy
February 16th, 2020 01:04
Locked Out
MendedFences27 said:
When any key breaks in any lock it\'s because they are not a match. In a relationship, when they are not a match, it\'s time to go separate way, to be orphans from that hope.
Well, this is written to be open to many ideas of meaning. Most will see it as a love relationship gone bad.A very succinct and poignant poem. A thought provoker.. - Phil A.
February 15th, 2020 23:18
MendedFences27 said:
When any key breaks in any lock it\'s because they are not a match. In a relationship, when they are not a match, it\'s time to go separate way, to be orphans from that hope.
Well, this is written to be open to many ideas of meaning. Most will see it as a love relationship gone bad.A very succinct and poignant poem. A thought provoker.. - Phil A.
February 15th, 2020 23:18
Locked Out
Fay Slimm. said:
And what of the meaning behind this intriguing imagery my eloquent friend - - Well I see a broken key in a locked door barring future access to those we can trust as tantamount to being orphaned and in a suddenly changed environment accepting the need to go it alone
- or am I down the swanee agen ?. Anyway this was a very engaging read.............. x Fay
February 15th, 2020 17:09
Fay Slimm. said:
And what of the meaning behind this intriguing imagery my eloquent friend - - Well I see a broken key in a locked door barring future access to those we can trust as tantamount to being orphaned and in a suddenly changed environment accepting the need to go it alone
- or am I down the swanee agen ?. Anyway this was a very engaging read.............. x Fay
February 15th, 2020 17:09
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