Comments received on poems by Neville
A Cautious Distance
MendedFences27 said:
They say that normal personal space is four feet. I want to know where? Have they not flown economy? Today\'s youth want to know, \"What the hell is a postcard?\" Oh yeah, and they don\'t call, they text. So yeah, these days one must resist nature and remain aloof. Apparently the danger outweighs the reward. Never speak to a stranger, they may be a serial killer, terrorist, pervert, religious fanatic, or even a politician, Probably better to just stay home and not go to cafes unless you are looking for trouble.
Now your poem calls into question a lot of social norms concerning space, intimacy, technology, and the postal system. Frankly, it\'s just too much bother going anywhere these days. At least, you do not have to consider if you should bring your gun. Anyone for ice cream? - Phil A.
May 26th, 2019 14:15
MendedFences27 said:
They say that normal personal space is four feet. I want to know where? Have they not flown economy? Today\'s youth want to know, \"What the hell is a postcard?\" Oh yeah, and they don\'t call, they text. So yeah, these days one must resist nature and remain aloof. Apparently the danger outweighs the reward. Never speak to a stranger, they may be a serial killer, terrorist, pervert, religious fanatic, or even a politician, Probably better to just stay home and not go to cafes unless you are looking for trouble.
Now your poem calls into question a lot of social norms concerning space, intimacy, technology, and the postal system. Frankly, it\'s just too much bother going anywhere these days. At least, you do not have to consider if you should bring your gun. Anyone for ice cream? - Phil A.
May 26th, 2019 14:15
A Cautious Distance
Fay Slimm. said:
A weekend tale of entanglement which threatens order and told with panache........... answer ( but sans the postcard) - - - when in doubt think seriously about that cautious distance and handfuls of promise.
May 26th, 2019 04:51
Fay Slimm. said:
A weekend tale of entanglement which threatens order and told with panache........... answer ( but sans the postcard) - - - when in doubt think seriously about that cautious distance and handfuls of promise.
May 26th, 2019 04:51
A Cautious Distance
dusk arising said:
..postcard text...
Dear poet, saw you in the cafe drooling over a really timid looking lady. I thought to myself.... why doesn\'t he send her a love note with a small gift ...\"Roses are red, violets are blue, the ice cream heres lovely, this ones for you\"
Would you, should you, could you?
May 26th, 2019 04:43
dusk arising said:
..postcard text...
Dear poet, saw you in the cafe drooling over a really timid looking lady. I thought to myself.... why doesn\'t he send her a love note with a small gift ...\"Roses are red, violets are blue, the ice cream heres lovely, this ones for you\"
Would you, should you, could you?
May 26th, 2019 04:43
A Single Breath
Goldfinch60 said:
Those fleeting moments can be so special in both love and despair.
May 26th, 2019 00:18
Goldfinch60 said:
Those fleeting moments can be so special in both love and despair.
May 26th, 2019 00:18
A Single Breath
seeker123 said:
wow a beautiful message so fleeting yet it seems to last forever...
May 25th, 2019 23:00
seeker123 said:
wow a beautiful message so fleeting yet it seems to last forever...
May 25th, 2019 23:00
A Single Breath
Suresh said:
In imagination, there is another world
What is aloof here, is abundant there
Thnx for the gasps and sighs
May 25th, 2019 11:48
Suresh said:
In imagination, there is another world
What is aloof here, is abundant there
Thnx for the gasps and sighs
May 25th, 2019 11:48
A Single Breath
dusk arising said:
Something mesmerising about a single breast, ... the i realised you had written \'single breath\'.
Most definitely theres this other world and its full of the ones that got away...... pretty people but rotters every one of \'em.
May 25th, 2019 10:06
dusk arising said:
Something mesmerising about a single breast, ... the i realised you had written \'single breath\'.
Most definitely theres this other world and its full of the ones that got away...... pretty people but rotters every one of \'em.
May 25th, 2019 10:06
A Single Breath
Fay Slimm. said:
The way to an amicable ending is found in this expressively tender verse - - fondness never begrudges the sight and experience of another world....... good read, nicely put and thank you Nev.
May 25th, 2019 05:24
Fay Slimm. said:
The way to an amicable ending is found in this expressively tender verse - - fondness never begrudges the sight and experience of another world....... good read, nicely put and thank you Nev.
May 25th, 2019 05:24
A Single Breath
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Yes life and sometimes the best bits are fleeting...
Great piece again N
May 25th, 2019 03:55
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Yes life and sometimes the best bits are fleeting...
Great piece again N
May 25th, 2019 03:55
Conch
Goldfinch60 said:
That attachment is so meaningful and must remain secure.
May 24th, 2019 23:49
Goldfinch60 said:
That attachment is so meaningful and must remain secure.
May 24th, 2019 23:49
Conch
dusk arising said:
I most definitely shell have to agree for there was a time when all i could do was clam up.
Now fortunately i am able to reveal the occasional pearl.
As are you with this initially perplexing piece. Now i see it clearly.... i am a bottom dweller... some would say \'an old fart\'.
May 24th, 2019 07:36
dusk arising said:
I most definitely shell have to agree for there was a time when all i could do was clam up.
Now fortunately i am able to reveal the occasional pearl.
As are you with this initially perplexing piece. Now i see it clearly.... i am a bottom dweller... some would say \'an old fart\'.
May 24th, 2019 07:36
Conch
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Great write N
It the toxicity that attracts No?
Excellent AGAIN!
May 24th, 2019 04:31
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Great write N
It the toxicity that attracts No?
Excellent AGAIN!
May 24th, 2019 04:31
Conch
Fay Slimm. said:
Clever comparison here Nev. to the cling of seashells with our lonely need for special togetherness - toxic or not. Another verse full of artful expression and composed with such finesse........... Fay
May 24th, 2019 03:30
Fay Slimm. said:
Clever comparison here Nev. to the cling of seashells with our lonely need for special togetherness - toxic or not. Another verse full of artful expression and composed with such finesse........... Fay
May 24th, 2019 03:30
Conch
orchidee said:
Aww, is you an amoeba - \'pond-life\' in some cases? \'Who you calling pond-life?\' you reply. You with your pseudo-thingy. lol.
But we are specks in the universe, it seems. Man is dust, but important dust.
May 24th, 2019 03:14
orchidee said:
Aww, is you an amoeba - \'pond-life\' in some cases? \'Who you calling pond-life?\' you reply. You with your pseudo-thingy. lol.
But we are specks in the universe, it seems. Man is dust, but important dust.
May 24th, 2019 03:14
Bang On
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write, some have more experience than others.
May 24th, 2019 00:40
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write, some have more experience than others.
May 24th, 2019 00:40
Bang On
Suresh said:
..... so you found my diary. EH! and now the whole world knows.
GEEE THANKS, for now I can openly laugh about it, as too old to be ashamed.
May 23rd, 2019 09:52
Suresh said:
..... so you found my diary. EH! and now the whole world knows.
GEEE THANKS, for now I can openly laugh about it, as too old to be ashamed.
May 23rd, 2019 09:52
Bang On
dusk arising said:
Next time he\'ll not take his socks off and he\'ll use the curtains to towel himself dry.
May 23rd, 2019 04:00
dusk arising said:
Next time he\'ll not take his socks off and he\'ll use the curtains to towel himself dry.
May 23rd, 2019 04:00
Bang On
Fay Slimm. said:
What a sham of a first-time union that was as told in truly bold verse - - -- yet not (I hope) from experience..........
May 23rd, 2019 03:31
Fay Slimm. said:
What a sham of a first-time union that was as told in truly bold verse - - -- yet not (I hope) from experience..........
May 23rd, 2019 03:31
Bang On
Neville said:
that 18 box has an awful lot to answer for .. thanks for pitching in and reminding me of that restraining order..... Cheers... Neville
May 23rd, 2019 03:12
Neville said:
that 18 box has an awful lot to answer for .. thanks for pitching in and reminding me of that restraining order..... Cheers... Neville
May 23rd, 2019 03:12
We the Innocent
Goldfinch60 said:
Powerful write Neville, an horrendous time in our world created by one man - but there are people still out there that can do this, they must be stopped.
May 23rd, 2019 00:11
Goldfinch60 said:
Powerful write Neville, an horrendous time in our world created by one man - but there are people still out there that can do this, they must be stopped.
May 23rd, 2019 00:11
We the Innocent
Michael Edwards said:
Powerfully put in superb prose - great work Neville.
May 22nd, 2019 13:02
Michael Edwards said:
Powerfully put in superb prose - great work Neville.
May 22nd, 2019 13:02
We the Innocent
kevin browne said:
I\'d wish for ww2 to end right now. Us humans have a faith for money making with the evil Hitler and the Jewish people who incidentally receive incomes from the history in which they suffered, experienced and to be a low as life can offer up to the people who were captured tortured and burned in the constant flames of the oven. You have reminded us how death in the millions can come easily.
May 22nd, 2019 11:52
kevin browne said:
I\'d wish for ww2 to end right now. Us humans have a faith for money making with the evil Hitler and the Jewish people who incidentally receive incomes from the history in which they suffered, experienced and to be a low as life can offer up to the people who were captured tortured and burned in the constant flames of the oven. You have reminded us how death in the millions can come easily.
May 22nd, 2019 11:52
We the Innocent
Suresh said:
Six million and oven told me you were referring to Auschwitz. The horrors (though not of the same nature) never stopped, only the players - genocides are going on even today.
So when will we learn, so what is a human worth?????
May 22nd, 2019 11:19
Suresh said:
Six million and oven told me you were referring to Auschwitz. The horrors (though not of the same nature) never stopped, only the players - genocides are going on even today.
So when will we learn, so what is a human worth?????
May 22nd, 2019 11:19
We the Innocent
dusk arising said:
A fitting tribute to the murdering nutter of the twentieth century and his henchmen and women.
May 22nd, 2019 11:12
dusk arising said:
A fitting tribute to the murdering nutter of the twentieth century and his henchmen and women.
May 22nd, 2019 11:12
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