Comments received on poems by Doggerel Dave



On Tour.
Neville said:


Epic ... perfectly formed sixteen stanzas .. that is quite some achievement mate .... and, I now know where to steer clear of when I venture up North......... enjoyed from end to end me fine literary friend.............

Neville

December 8th, 2020 03:47

Manifesto or Look Beyond the Name.
Neville said:


I tried to pull something both cerebral and witty out of thin air, but at 04.00 in the morning and freezing cold here.. I gave up and settled for a much more conventional.... I can almost wholly relate to these words Dave .. almost ...

December 5th, 2020 23:17

Manifesto or Look Beyond the Name.
L. B. Mek said:

Brilliant!
when we learn to hear that voice of free thought emanating from ourselves: we need not seek any external validation, no titles to be pigeon-holed and oppressed with,
behold nature\'s intended Liberty: (as your wise words have eloquently distilled - so appetisingly relatable) is a birthright we need only excavate from within - to own: out right!
only then may we finally begin those much needed open dialogues of humanity\'s introspection and find a foothold to a path of undoing our inherited wrongdoing\'s, maybe even - some accidental healing...
have a good rest oh wise Poet, I look forward to your revitalised return,
let me offer you a slightly early season\'s greeting and a happy new year!
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December 4th, 2020 06:58

Manifesto or Look Beyond the Name.
Goldfinch60 said:

Liberation should be there for us all. A very meaningful poem Dave, we are all what we have made ourselves to be and hopefully that person will be good in this world in which we now live.

Andy

December 4th, 2020 01:58

Manifesto or Look Beyond the Name.
Michael Edwards said:

And its a yes from me (loud applause) !!

December 3rd, 2020 13:58

Manifesto or Look Beyond the Name.
Amon said:

You should be my writing mentor.
Execllent


December 3rd, 2020 08:39

Manifesto or Look Beyond the Name.
Fay Slimm. said:

Liberation has first place with all those who refuse to be sheep without backbone - - thanks for these well-chosen few words that birth the benefits of being true to yourself my friend.

December 3rd, 2020 06:39

Suburban Solidarity
orchidee said:

There\'s always one?
Agghh! Not \'Neighbours\'. The grating tune, and wooden acting. What more could one want? Bouncer the dog was the best actor in it, but he sadly went years ago.

November 26th, 2020 02:44

Suburban Solidarity
Goldfinch60 said:

Those trees can be a right nuisance, I had one in our garden for years and there I was every autumn hoovering up leaves every week. I had it cut down early this year and now in autumn it is so strange not to see the autumn leaves all over the garden.

Andy

November 26th, 2020 01:33

Suburban Solidarity
dusk arising said:

If the system is against ya..... chop the bugger down. Or drill a hole in the trunk and inject some poison.

Or better still, threaten to build a big high wall and get Mexico to pay for it. We did that with the romans you know.

November 26th, 2020 00:45

Suburban Solidarity
Dove said:

Awe! I just get Fallen grapefruits! Interesting poem! Them leaves can get messy
Happy Holiday! Mr Vegetarian ! Smiles

November 25th, 2020 23:41

Nature - got to be a winner!?
Neville said:



No shit .......................... or rather too much of it maybe .. in the wrong place at the ................... nice un Dog ... :)


November 23rd, 2020 04:07

Nature - got to be a winner!?
dusk arising said:

(sing to tune of I\'m all shook up)
Affixed to my sole
from out some doggie do\'s hole
let it be heard
I done trod in a turd
my life\'s surrounded by the smell of sh^t
oh my word
now its on my shirt
oh yeah, yeah.
I\'m all messed up
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ok thats enough of the elvis impressions.... back to poetry in its classical style
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I could stroll in that park all day long
but on this occasion there was a terrible pong
and a squelchy feeling beneath my left shoe
yes you\'ve guessed it, i\'d stepped in dog poo

ahead was a spaniel wearing a doggy coat quilt
and in his eye, a distinct look of guilt
so not one to let the moment pass bye
deftly i flipped the turd in his eye
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as can be seen elsewhere on mps, theres some kinds of poetry which instantly get my creative juices flowing (the stains are terrible) and you\'ve scored a bulls-eye with your splendid post today.

November 23rd, 2020 01:41

Nature - got to be a winner!?
ANGELA & BRIAN said:

BRIAN HERE ~ Good Morning Dave (it 6am Monday here) thanks for the *Nature Song* we used t sing it with the Scouts round the camp fire in the Last Century ! As to the POEM ! The GOOD BOOK says we *Should be careful how & where we walk !* AMEN
W T McGonagall was a Irsh Poet ~ A free spirit who obeyed none of the *Rules of Classic Poetry !* He is a good role model for Modern Poets !

Blessings & Peace to YOU & YOURS
Love Angela Brian Smokey Cat ! ! !

November 23rd, 2020 01:35

Nature - got to be a winner!?
Goldfinch60 said:

Good fun write Dave, as I said to Jabberwocky with those clean shoes you must watch where you put your feet.

Andy

November 23rd, 2020 01:29

Nature - got to be a winner!?
Doggerel Dave said:

Grass (no not the stuff you roll up and light) - the horizontal green stuff...that\'s Nature, right?
Stylistically owes much to William Topaz McGonagall – to whom I am in great debt.

When that old Tay bridge came a tumbling down
McGonagall was there for the event.
Now whereas most folks think him a clown
He allows free range for my poetic bent.

Regards Dave



November 23rd, 2020 01:00

Try this for size:
Doggerel Dave said:

Thank all you four (but who\'s counting?) for your support. Its a pity I was asleep when all the Hurrahs and Bravos came through. Didn\'t wake me. I was in a deep antipodean slumber.
Dave

November 17th, 2020 17:24

Try this for size:
dusk arising said:

Somebody stole my dad\'s car with my essay in it whilst i was in the library researching for my halo.

November 17th, 2020 10:01

Try this for size:
Michael Edwards said:

Even the dogs got hiccups seems to have gone out fashion. Great fun write.

November 17th, 2020 09:02

Try this for size:
Goldfinch60 said:

Glad you enjoyed the funeral, will you be seeing your Granny tomorrow. Any excuse to avoid an essay!
Your integration has been accepted by the management Dave so just keep writing.

Andy

November 17th, 2020 01:45

It\'s over then?
Neville said:


interesting and realist dialogue .. for a moment, I thought I was eavesdropping on a neighbour .. an additionally well crafted poem tied everything together nicely ...
... Neville


November 16th, 2020 04:16

It\'s over then?
Dove said:

Thanks for sharing the dialogue, The poem I loved the best! Perfect rhymes; and of course heartfelt words ! Best to you

November 14th, 2020 11:39

It\'s over then?
Doggerel Dave said:

Absolutely Andy.
I had two (serially monogamous) relationships in the
\'80\'s - possibly my most \'mature\' decade. I still correspond with both.
And both contribute in their own special, unique ways to \'W\' in the script.

Take care, Dave

November 14th, 2020 03:16

It\'s over then?
Goldfinch60 said:

As Phil has said it is very realistic but sometime relationships do not work even after many years. It did happen to me, my first wife and I divorced but then I found my Joyce but in all that time I was still friends with my first wife, she and her husband came up and stayed with us occasionally as Joyce and I did with them.
Relationships can be many things, even just remaining friends.

Andy

November 14th, 2020 02:22

It\'s over then?
Doggerel Dave said:

Thanks Phil for your reading. Oh I suppose I\'ll have to blow my cover a little (you will probably wish you had never asked -sorry about that!)
First, M is not me - only bits. Some of W is M and some of M is W. Some pieces imported for the occasion. But I did my best to fit them both together into two coherent wholes.
On the evidence as presented, my sympathies lie largely with W, I have to say.
Women always expected to give up their individuality and move with the man. W\'s arguments there are irrefutable to me, and if I got anything out of this exercise at all, it made me feel a little better about myself for laying it out.

Take care Dave
PS: the actual me has returned to the UK a number of times since leaving in \'87. Can confirm I have, for part of the time, lodged with a lady I knew when in London....

November 14th, 2020 00:47

It\'s over then?
MendedFences27 said:

The dialogue seems realistic. Two people of different mindsets. Your poem details the occurrence. Some people live their lives never having set foot outside of a small perimeter. For such as these it would be devastating to leave. She just did not have the courage to explore new vistas. Question - Did you consider staying?
Never expected the continuation of contact. Surprised by that. But assume you make the trip.
Thought provoking piece. Thanks - Phil A.

November 13th, 2020 22:39

It\'s over then?
Doggerel Dave said:

Noticed one theme common at MPS is Love - found , gained, rejected (or β€˜unrequited’ if you want to be fancy), lost. So here’s my contribution – never to be mentioned again.
Autobiographical? – Well bits, it\'s complicated; certainly by no means all. Which bits? – Not telling. Please give me credit for a little creativity...
Any comments on the two protagonists? Their motivations etc?

PS: To whom it might concern: this is from my archive; note 2014 unaltered, nothing added.



November 13th, 2020 17:44

Inscription Plus...
MendedFences27 said:

Sherman said, \"War is Hell,\" he was right. It is the culmination of all of mankind\'s sins, greed lust, hatred, etc.
Your \"critique\" is spot on. Why is it the playground for the rich and powerful?

November 13th, 2020 11:46

Harry
AuburnScribbler said:

Loved reading this Dave, an excellent bit of storytelling.

I have an affinity with spiders myself, must be because I am a Scorpio thus a fellow arachnid.

Being a half-Scot, I like the fact that your poem has a link to the story of Robert the Bruce; using a spider\'s will to build it\'s web back up again as inspiration to be victorious at Bannockburn.

Again a brilliant write, bless Harry and Harriet, have a good one and please do take care.

November 13th, 2020 03:23

A Relationship
Doggerel Dave said:

Well yeh, but some, like this one, have a certain sense of place, an assertive dignity that I begrudgingly admire; she (yes -she, something Anna knew immediately - go figure) wheedled herself into the household as a stray and in her own interactive way, rules the roost now . Got a smattering of dog in there somewhere...
Dave
PS: I don\'t want a cat like that - won\'t risk it. Took me long enough to graduate as an autonomous human being without being back under the sway of Authority.

November 11th, 2020 03:28



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