Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
Heart or Mind.
Goldfinch60 said:
Both are important in life Tobani, the mind thinks and the heart feels.
Andy
April 19th, 2025 01:39
Goldfinch60 said:
Both are important in life Tobani, the mind thinks and the heart feels.
Andy
April 19th, 2025 01:39
Pleasing Everyone Else
๐ฆเพเฝฒโ๐ช๐๐ต๐ฎ๐ฒ๐ฐ๐ฑ ๐ฆเพเฝฒ said:
This is brilliant! I especially love in the third stanza when you write, \"don\'t be tied go their thoughts like a mental slave\" and, \"you dong always have go sing other people\'s song\"
April 18th, 2025 12:55
๐ฆเพเฝฒโ๐ช๐๐ต๐ฎ๐ฒ๐ฐ๐ฑ ๐ฆเพเฝฒ said:
This is brilliant! I especially love in the third stanza when you write, \"don\'t be tied go their thoughts like a mental slave\" and, \"you dong always have go sing other people\'s song\"
April 18th, 2025 12:55
Heart or Mind.
Cheeky Missy said:
Since \"...the heart is deceitful above all things and desperately wicked, who can know it?\" (Jeremiah 17:9 [see also verse 10]), the mind seems initially preferable. Yet I cannot help but think the mind is controlled by said heart, until this conundrum leaves me floundering. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
April 18th, 2025 10:57
Cheeky Missy said:
Since \"...the heart is deceitful above all things and desperately wicked, who can know it?\" (Jeremiah 17:9 [see also verse 10]), the mind seems initially preferable. Yet I cannot help but think the mind is controlled by said heart, until this conundrum leaves me floundering. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
April 18th, 2025 10:57
I Got Burned.
Cheeky Missy said:
You\'re not allowed to cull laughter with such a macabre and gristly rendition, yet you invariably do, somehow, until I\'m left here at its conclusion, trying to stifle smirks and giggles. How capably rendered with gorgeous imagery and a ghastly, haunting poignancy, yet a very lively sense of humor.
April 18th, 2025 10:52
Cheeky Missy said:
You\'re not allowed to cull laughter with such a macabre and gristly rendition, yet you invariably do, somehow, until I\'m left here at its conclusion, trying to stifle smirks and giggles. How capably rendered with gorgeous imagery and a ghastly, haunting poignancy, yet a very lively sense of humor.
April 18th, 2025 10:52
Heart or Mind.
sorenbarrett said:
I love question poems because it leaves it up to the reader and thereby decreases resistance. The question frees the mind to think and choose. Here the question between heart and mind is the age old split between logic and emotion, male and female in traditional thought and as has been thought in old myth the perfect god is a hermaphrodite that shares both qualities. One without the other is hard to imagine Even Star Trek\'s Spock had a little feeling. Very nicely written this poem dichotomized into two three line stanzas
April 18th, 2025 03:36
sorenbarrett said:
I love question poems because it leaves it up to the reader and thereby decreases resistance. The question frees the mind to think and choose. Here the question between heart and mind is the age old split between logic and emotion, male and female in traditional thought and as has been thought in old myth the perfect god is a hermaphrodite that shares both qualities. One without the other is hard to imagine Even Star Trek\'s Spock had a little feeling. Very nicely written this poem dichotomized into two three line stanzas
April 18th, 2025 03:36
Heart or Mind.
David Wakeling said:
Thats a tough question.I think they are both important.Great poem.Made me think
April 18th, 2025 03:01
David Wakeling said:
Thats a tough question.I think they are both important.Great poem.Made me think
April 18th, 2025 03:01
I Got Burned.
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing words Tobani, the innocent do often get punished.
Andy
April 18th, 2025 01:51
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing words Tobani, the innocent do often get punished.
Andy
April 18th, 2025 01:51
I Got Burned.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
I am not fan of the death penalty. It gives the power to kill/murder to the government, and it brings no justice. It just creates more victims as I see it. This poem reminds me of that because it is exposes how easy it is for a terrible accident, in essence, can wind up getting blown up into something it was not. Scary, but happens all the time. Well done, my friend. ๐น๐
April 17th, 2025 08:31
Tristan Robert Lange said:
I am not fan of the death penalty. It gives the power to kill/murder to the government, and it brings no justice. It just creates more victims as I see it. This poem reminds me of that because it is exposes how easy it is for a terrible accident, in essence, can wind up getting blown up into something it was not. Scary, but happens all the time. Well done, my friend. ๐น๐
April 17th, 2025 08:31
Tick Tock.
MinaH said:
I love the story told in this simple poem. So many written similar have a bland feel but this really hits home. Thanks for sharing
April 17th, 2025 07:10
MinaH said:
I love the story told in this simple poem. So many written similar have a bland feel but this really hits home. Thanks for sharing
April 17th, 2025 07:10
I Got Burned.
MDStone said:
A sad but true tale. In the court of public opinion we can be falsely accused and even sentenced without the facts. Worse yet, we can be burned more than once. Nicely done, Tobani.
April 17th, 2025 05:02
MDStone said:
A sad but true tale. In the court of public opinion we can be falsely accused and even sentenced without the facts. Worse yet, we can be burned more than once. Nicely done, Tobani.
April 17th, 2025 05:02
I Got Burned.
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of injustice in an unjust world where little makes sense but all things lead to death. In a random world coincidence happens. No one wants to believe that it is random and everyone wants to think it should be fair. A good story Tobani. Nicely done
April 17th, 2025 04:14
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of injustice in an unjust world where little makes sense but all things lead to death. In a random world coincidence happens. No one wants to believe that it is random and everyone wants to think it should be fair. A good story Tobani. Nicely done
April 17th, 2025 04:14
I Got Burned.
arqios said:
Oh dear! That was quite a horrifying thing to live through and die for. Should we just take our coffee burn and get stepped all over?๐๐ป๐๏ธ
April 17th, 2025 03:04
arqios said:
Oh dear! That was quite a horrifying thing to live through and die for. Should we just take our coffee burn and get stepped all over?๐๐ป๐๏ธ
April 17th, 2025 03:04
Tick Tock.
Goldfinch60 said:
Heartfelt write Tobani, but toi stop the clock that way is not the way to go.
Andy
April 17th, 2025 01:44
Goldfinch60 said:
Heartfelt write Tobani, but toi stop the clock that way is not the way to go.
Andy
April 17th, 2025 01:44
Tick Tock.
Cheeky Missy said:
Yikes. I don\'t like the damning finality of this. Please say you\'re alright. [Oops, now I am sounding exactly like my best friend hours ago as I drove home from work very aggrievedly.] How beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a lively, yet frightening poignancy. What I love is the progression, that is, until it seems to conclude with death. Thank you for sharing.
April 16th, 2025 14:48
Cheeky Missy said:
Yikes. I don\'t like the damning finality of this. Please say you\'re alright. [Oops, now I am sounding exactly like my best friend hours ago as I drove home from work very aggrievedly.] How beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a lively, yet frightening poignancy. What I love is the progression, that is, until it seems to conclude with death. Thank you for sharing.
April 16th, 2025 14:48
Pleasing Everyone Else
GenXer Shamrocker โ๏ธ said:
A much needed write for so many. Your work really reaches those who sometimes tend to slip back.
April 16th, 2025 13:02
GenXer Shamrocker โ๏ธ said:
A much needed write for so many. Your work really reaches those who sometimes tend to slip back.
April 16th, 2025 13:02
Tick Tock.
Tony Grannell said:
I love a thin poem. Anger, hate, love and sanity beautifully expressed in this sometimes hard hitting poem. Perfectly composed with an array of poetic devices. A complete joy to read.
Kind regards,
Tony.
April 16th, 2025 12:17
Tony Grannell said:
I love a thin poem. Anger, hate, love and sanity beautifully expressed in this sometimes hard hitting poem. Perfectly composed with an array of poetic devices. A complete joy to read.
Kind regards,
Tony.
April 16th, 2025 12:17
Tick Tock.
Cirawrites01 said:
Omg this poem hit me deep, according to me it resembles a faint sense of living now as you feel tired from everything and its all boring and you just want to be out of this world, sometimes resorting to pain feels nice like you\'re free again... it hurts but feels like you\'e in control, still sinking in a place you dont desire to live, its honestly depressing and I love how you captured this beauty in words described so beautifully dude omg I relate to this poem frr, also if u ever wanna talk I\'m gunna be heor existing ik im like 16 and like really young but if u ever wanna be heard... I\'m here, these words are not fake okie
April 16th, 2025 11:13
Cirawrites01 said:
Omg this poem hit me deep, according to me it resembles a faint sense of living now as you feel tired from everything and its all boring and you just want to be out of this world, sometimes resorting to pain feels nice like you\'re free again... it hurts but feels like you\'e in control, still sinking in a place you dont desire to live, its honestly depressing and I love how you captured this beauty in words described so beautifully dude omg I relate to this poem frr, also if u ever wanna talk I\'m gunna be heor existing ik im like 16 and like really young but if u ever wanna be heard... I\'m here, these words are not fake okie
April 16th, 2025 11:13
Tick Tock.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Great write, dear poet and friend. This one resonated deeply. Tick tock indeed. A reality for some of us, and an urgent message with a very memorable form and flow. Brilliant. ๐๐น
April 16th, 2025 07:17
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Great write, dear poet and friend. This one resonated deeply. Tick tock indeed. A reality for some of us, and an urgent message with a very memorable form and flow. Brilliant. ๐๐น
April 16th, 2025 07:17
Tick Tock.
David Wakeling said:
This is very clever.It captures the concept of time both in text and structure. Very enjoyable read
April 16th, 2025 05:26
David Wakeling said:
This is very clever.It captures the concept of time both in text and structure. Very enjoyable read
April 16th, 2025 05:26
Tick Tock.
sorenbarrett said:
The power of this write comes in its format and meter. The use of two words in each line echoes the ticking of the clock which is further noted in the last lines of the stanzas. There is a feeling of time winding down. With its passage there are many dark things remembered until the last stanza where it is released and freedom attained as the clock stops, time is up. Very nicely done Tobani
April 16th, 2025 04:36
sorenbarrett said:
The power of this write comes in its format and meter. The use of two words in each line echoes the ticking of the clock which is further noted in the last lines of the stanzas. There is a feeling of time winding down. With its passage there are many dark things remembered until the last stanza where it is released and freedom attained as the clock stops, time is up. Very nicely done Tobani
April 16th, 2025 04:36
Tick Tock.
arqios said:
Time is like a steed in some ways on our life journey ๐๐ป๐๏ธ
April 16th, 2025 03:02
arqios said:
Time is like a steed in some ways on our life journey ๐๐ป๐๏ธ
April 16th, 2025 03:02
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