Comments received on poems by Michael Edwards
A FEW COUPLETS (3)
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks MICHAEL ~ LOVE CYMING RHOUPLETS ~ FOR ME THE ULTIMATE ~ Frugal Poetic Form ~ One Liners (nomally) are non~rhyming. To make COUPLET ONE into Rhyming Couplet (you did not say they rhymed !) I would suggest revision to:
In LIFE he never knew her name
In DEATH she Marble Cast became !
Now polished and with outstretched hand
She acts as an Umbrella Stand
(This couplet is optional ~ of course !)
Yours BRIAN the FUSSY !
August 7th, 2017 02:12
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks MICHAEL ~ LOVE CYMING RHOUPLETS ~ FOR ME THE ULTIMATE ~ Frugal Poetic Form ~ One Liners (nomally) are non~rhyming. To make COUPLET ONE into Rhyming Couplet (you did not say they rhymed !) I would suggest revision to:
In LIFE he never knew her name
In DEATH she Marble Cast became !
Now polished and with outstretched hand
She acts as an Umbrella Stand
(This couplet is optional ~ of course !)
Yours BRIAN the FUSSY !
August 7th, 2017 02:12
A FEW COUPLETS (3)
orchidee said:
Good writes and pic Michael. Yep, first UK poet of the day again!
August 7th, 2017 01:37
orchidee said:
Good writes and pic Michael. Yep, first UK poet of the day again!
August 7th, 2017 01:37
A FEW COUPLETS (3)
FredPeyer said:
Michael, all three are good. Like the first one best.
August 7th, 2017 01:31
FredPeyer said:
Michael, all three are good. Like the first one best.
August 7th, 2017 01:31
A FEW COUPLETS (3)
Heather T said:
Well done, Michael. Sad three couplets! The middle is my favorite. But surely even if youth is gone, there\'s still room for new hopes and dreams!
August 7th, 2017 00:22
Heather T said:
Well done, Michael. Sad three couplets! The middle is my favorite. But surely even if youth is gone, there\'s still room for new hopes and dreams!
August 7th, 2017 00:22
LIMERICK No40
FredPeyer said:
I just love limericks, one of these days I guess I will have to try my hands on one of these. Love your writing!
August 6th, 2017 14:39
FredPeyer said:
I just love limericks, one of these days I guess I will have to try my hands on one of these. Love your writing!
August 6th, 2017 14:39
LIMERICK No40
Louis Gibbs said:
An interesting observation of myself ... the picture is quite disturbing to me? Creates strong inner anxiety. But then we all knew I was a little strange. Have you seen such a reaction to some of your work before, Michael? Curious. Love the cute limerick!
August 6th, 2017 07:44
Louis Gibbs said:
An interesting observation of myself ... the picture is quite disturbing to me? Creates strong inner anxiety. But then we all knew I was a little strange. Have you seen such a reaction to some of your work before, Michael? Curious. Love the cute limerick!
August 6th, 2017 07:44
LIMERICK No40
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks MICHAEL out on a limb again
Polished and with outstreched hand
The Man from Tashkent
With his back slightly bent
Now acts as an Umbrella Stand
Love the picture of an exploding Bag of Cement ~
Falling off the back of a Lorry ~ in LIVERPOOL !
Your BRIAN
August 6th, 2017 02:19
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks MICHAEL out on a limb again
Polished and with outstreched hand
The Man from Tashkent
With his back slightly bent
Now acts as an Umbrella Stand
Love the picture of an exploding Bag of Cement ~
Falling off the back of a Lorry ~ in LIVERPOOL !
Your BRIAN
August 6th, 2017 02:19
LIMERICK No40
Goldfinch60 said:
Great limerick.
As for the painting I would have thought of nothing less than it creating its own way as the brush put the paint on the \'canvas\'. Abstract painting like many poems have a life of their own and the ideas do change of their own free will as the words or paint flow.
I can see another poem coming about this topic.
August 6th, 2017 02:11
Goldfinch60 said:
Great limerick.
As for the painting I would have thought of nothing less than it creating its own way as the brush put the paint on the \'canvas\'. Abstract painting like many poems have a life of their own and the ideas do change of their own free will as the words or paint flow.
I can see another poem coming about this topic.
August 6th, 2017 02:11
LIMERICK No40
burning-embers said:
To beat that first post of Edwards
Fred set off early bedwards
but although his rhyme
was somewhat sublime
two minutes too late is what Fred was.
ha ha ha dontcha just love a limerick.
August 6th, 2017 01:42
burning-embers said:
To beat that first post of Edwards
Fred set off early bedwards
but although his rhyme
was somewhat sublime
two minutes too late is what Fred was.
ha ha ha dontcha just love a limerick.
August 6th, 2017 01:42
LIMERICK No40
orchidee said:
Oops, pressed the button twice - I said, I pressed.... I best not delete it, or it seems to delete your reply comments as well.
August 6th, 2017 01:38
orchidee said:
Oops, pressed the button twice - I said, I pressed.... I best not delete it, or it seems to delete your reply comments as well.
August 6th, 2017 01:38
LIMERICK No40
orchidee said:
Ohh heeheee M. Cooeee, first UK poet-poster of the day! I won\'t attempt to be the first UK person here each day.
August 6th, 2017 01:34
orchidee said:
Ohh heeheee M. Cooeee, first UK poet-poster of the day! I won\'t attempt to be the first UK person here each day.
August 6th, 2017 01:34
LIMERICK No40
orchidee said:
Ohh heeheee M. Cooeee, first UK poet-poster of the day! I won\'t attempt to be the first UK person here each day.
August 6th, 2017 01:34
orchidee said:
Ohh heeheee M. Cooeee, first UK poet-poster of the day! I won\'t attempt to be the first UK person here each day.
August 6th, 2017 01:34
SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Gone but not forgotten ! loved the Poem and the complementary Picture. I like QUATRAINS and a KIRIELLE way to present them ! Also like Rhyming Couplets so I like your choice of rhyme pattern aabB ccbB ddbB eebB ! You have made each line 4 the same hence B ~ it can vary. For instance you could vary word four (RESTFUL) in each line etc. Thanks for daring & sharing ~ BRIAN
August 5th, 2017 09:26
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Gone but not forgotten ! loved the Poem and the complementary Picture. I like QUATRAINS and a KIRIELLE way to present them ! Also like Rhyming Couplets so I like your choice of rhyme pattern aabB ccbB ddbB eebB ! You have made each line 4 the same hence B ~ it can vary. For instance you could vary word four (RESTFUL) in each line etc. Thanks for daring & sharing ~ BRIAN
August 5th, 2017 09:26
SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
malubotelho said:
I have a weeping heart after reading this. So beautiful. So romantic. When is he coming back? I hope before she wakes up
August 5th, 2017 08:30
malubotelho said:
I have a weeping heart after reading this. So beautiful. So romantic. When is he coming back? I hope before she wakes up
August 5th, 2017 08:30
SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
Louis Gibbs said:
A beauty, this one, Michael! The repeating last line is very effective, and the closing phrase ties it up with a punch.
August 5th, 2017 08:19
Louis Gibbs said:
A beauty, this one, Michael! The repeating last line is very effective, and the closing phrase ties it up with a punch.
August 5th, 2017 08:19
SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
FredPeyer said:
Michael this is a beautiful poem, you succeeded admirably. And the watercolor \'ain\'t bad either\'!
And btw, the \'he\'d taken flight\' fits perfectly as far as I am concerned.
August 5th, 2017 02:54
FredPeyer said:
Michael this is a beautiful poem, you succeeded admirably. And the watercolor \'ain\'t bad either\'!
And btw, the \'he\'d taken flight\' fits perfectly as far as I am concerned.
August 5th, 2017 02:54
SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
orchidee said:
Cooeee M - first UK poet of the day - or nearly every day?!
August 5th, 2017 01:57
orchidee said:
Cooeee M - first UK poet of the day - or nearly every day?!
August 5th, 2017 01:57
SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M. I\'m sure that sometime a pic of yours may inspire me to write a poem.
August 5th, 2017 01:56
orchidee said:
Good write and pic M. I\'m sure that sometime a pic of yours may inspire me to write a poem.
August 5th, 2017 01:56
SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
Goldfinch60 said:
Well you succeeded. Good write and a good painting.
August 5th, 2017 00:55
Goldfinch60 said:
Well you succeeded. Good write and a good painting.
August 5th, 2017 00:55
DROWNED IN SORROW
rrodriguez said:
Abstract indeed with a message of intrigue. Super!
August 4th, 2017 14:30
rrodriguez said:
Abstract indeed with a message of intrigue. Super!
August 4th, 2017 14:30
DROWNED IN SORROW
Alf W said:
Beautiful flow and emitting deep thoughts and feelings... thank you.
August 4th, 2017 09:38
Alf W said:
Beautiful flow and emitting deep thoughts and feelings... thank you.
August 4th, 2017 09:38
DROWNED IN SORROW
ShannonXx said:
This was wonderful to read, really enjoyed it
August 4th, 2017 09:35
ShannonXx said:
This was wonderful to read, really enjoyed it
August 4th, 2017 09:35
DROWNED IN SORROW
WriteBeLight said:
Two whoop, whoops, Michael! Very deep, no pun intended! Perfect painting for the feeling of this!
August 4th, 2017 08:31
WriteBeLight said:
Two whoop, whoops, Michael! Very deep, no pun intended! Perfect painting for the feeling of this!
August 4th, 2017 08:31
DROWNED IN SORROW
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write Michael plus another good abstract.
August 4th, 2017 08:02
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write Michael plus another good abstract.
August 4th, 2017 08:02
DROWNED IN SORROW
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
LOVE THE PICTURE OF TOM DALEY UNDERWATER ~ after his Gold Medal Dive ! Drowned in JOY ! Love the Poem it has a touch of Glass ! Sets the tone for us lesser Wordsmiths ~ thanks for raising the board ~ Your BRIAN
August 4th, 2017 03:23
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
LOVE THE PICTURE OF TOM DALEY UNDERWATER ~ after his Gold Medal Dive ! Drowned in JOY ! Love the Poem it has a touch of Glass ! Sets the tone for us lesser Wordsmiths ~ thanks for raising the board ~ Your BRIAN
August 4th, 2017 03:23
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